The Alice in Wondeland wrote:Zarkenis Ultima wrote:
...Physics? Oh man!. Then again, woohoo, I don't have to do it myself! Also, I'm not sure if I should submit a biography too? It seems it's only for the veterans, but I'm not sure. I guess that'll come along later, though...
Lastly, if the first power seems like too much, know that at least I was honest.
Application
Character Name: Milus (Mih-loos). (Last name unknown)
Age: 22
Height: 1.76
Weight: 78 Kg
Eye Color: Left: Olive Green. Right: Light Brown. (Heterochromia)
Hair Color: Black
Powers: An advanced form of Telekinesis, "Soul Bullet".
Description of Powers:
First Power: In adittion to the usual "Push and pull and move around objects", Milus can use kinetic force to add pressure to an object by directing multiple kinetic force vectors towards the same object from several directions. He can also "Influence something that's inside another thing". This means he can, for example, move around an object that's inside a box, or something similar. This power, if used correctly, can be highly lethal, as it could, for instance, tear appart a man's heart. Milus, however, does not know this and would not use it unless absolutely necessary if he did.
Second Power: The "Soul Bullet" is a special power. It basically rips off a part of the user's soul and concentrates it in a deadly projectile that is then hurled at a bullet's speed towards the target. Said projectile is ethereal, so it defies all laws of physics. However, it is also lethal since it aims to completely shatter the foe's soul, although this COULD be avoided. Basically, a last-resort power, since parting with even one small part of one's soul can be very dangerous.
Abilities: Milus doesn't have any specific abilities, besides pheraps his great, yet still human, intelligence.
Weaknesses: Milus can't tolerate extreme temperatures, and he isn't exactly in the best physical condition. Additionally, he hasn't fully mastered his telekinetic powers yet, so, despite being highly unlikely, Milus could fail to use his powers, or worse yet, have them go out of control, even if only for a very short time.
Short Biography: Milus' mother died when he was born, leaving him as an orphan due to the fact that his father died while fighting on WWIII. He was taken in by his father's friend, a relatively wealthy businessman, who treated him as his own child. Milus had a good education. Eventually, Milus fell in love with his father's friend's daughter, who was his sister. Milus supressed this feeling for as long as he could, but one day, he just couldn't take it anymore. He was determined to tell her, but she was at a concert. On her way back, she suffered a car accident and died. This devastated Milus, who became very distant with his own father and the world in general. Eventually, his father died, leaving Milus as the sole heir to his vast fortune.
Role-play Example: Milus was calmly walking through the streets. It was another fine day, the sun was shining high in the sky, which was crystal-clear. Milus, however, did not care about these things, being the distant and somewhat indifferent person he was. Thus, he simply walked forward with the only thing in his mind being his wish to wrap up his business once and for all.
However, just then, he saw a robber broke into a jewelry store, threatening the clerk and running off with a huge stash, leaving the glass shattered on the ground. Milus considered the idea of taking advantage of this for a second, but he dismissed it quickly. He had enough wealth to maintain him well, he didn't need to do such unreasonable and deplorable acts.
Then, Milus considered other options. Calling the police would be useless. The robber was already getting away, and the police were, well, very good at slacking off. Walking off seemed like a reasonable enough thing, but it was rather mean, and the robber could have noticed him and make an attempt on his life in order to get rid of all witnesses.
Finally, he came to his last option. To pursue him. Milus wasn't exactly in the best physical condition, but he could easily run, and aid himself with his powers if he needed to. Besides, there was always the possibility that the jewelry store's clerk was a rather... Influential person, one way or another.
Thus, Milus began to run after the culprit, slowly catching up with him. When the time was right, he threw a trash can on the ground next to the robber, making him trip and fall to the ground. Milus used this oportunity to deliver a punch to the man's face, backed up by a strong kinetic impulse, which knocked the man down. He then picked up the jewels and walked back to the man's store.
Milus gave the jewels back to the store's clerk. The clerk thanked him, but Milus stated that it was his pleasure to help a fellow human being. Milus then asked the man's name, and after receiving it, walked away. "Mr. Roberts, huh? He could prove useful." Milus thought to himself as he walked towards his appointment. "I hope I'm not late."
it seems to me,like this character is too powerful.What defines a critical moment?In the heat of a battle with a vicious government,every moment is dire.It also seems unrealistic that powers can be utilized depending on danger level.Ethereal isn't soul,it's celestial.I like the idea of the telekinetic power bolts put behind punches and kicks.Also something to consider,the "Soul Bullet" could be a compacted kinetic bolt,or a kinetic bolt laced with a very trace amount of ethereal .Still harmful,just no vital danger,letting you use it more,and still be a "Step up" ability from telekinesis.
His powers are fine. In lieu of the soul bullet, how about a psionic blast that knocks people out and that takes away 2 months of your life. That is why it is only used under duress.
