The Dark Times (Star Wars RP) OOC/sign ups

[Marchland]

can someone check my charater pls its two up from this post

[Darlingtown]

I'll ll make my next stop to Nar Shaddah if you want to join Jaks crew

Sure thing, thanks!

Parcia or Turducken might be best to directly ask.

So...is my app accepted?

[Imperialisium]

I'll ll make my next stop to Nar Shaddah if you want to join Jaks crew

Sure thing, thanks!

Parcia or Turducken might be best to directly ask.

So...is my app accepted?

Yes

[Marchland]

what about mine?

[Imperialisium]

what about mine?

No.

[Marchland]

what about mine?

No.

well can you accept it or at least tell me what is wrong with it so I can fix it?

[Imperialisium]

No.

well can you accept it or at least tell me what is wrong with it so I can fix it?

It is not of sufficient quality for me to accept. I would recommend looking at some of the other applications to see how theirs are written.

[Marchland]

well can you accept it or at least tell me what is wrong with it so I can fix it?

It is not of sufficient quality for me to accept. I would recommend looking at some of the other applications to see how theirs are written.

\thank you i will do that

[Civia Welephilostopia]

Name: Bilu Catarphas
Age: 32
Species/Race: Human
Physical Appearance: (image or description) a man with a beard and unassuming blue eyes which hides a smart and attentive mind.
Homeworld: Nabboo
Alignment: Imperial
Role: (their job/occupation/rank in a hierarchy etc) General (I think it's called commander)
Force Sensitive?: no
Personality: (snapshot of your character's mannerisms?) Calm to the point of coldness and highly tactical.
Skills: (what are you good at? This should segue into your biography) Leadership, Tactics, Communication

Biography: Born on Naboo in 51BBY he grew up in a well off household and the military was not on his mind until he turned 19, the same year he turned 19 the Trade Federation blockaded his home planet and he experienced life both under the blockade and under Federation control. When the Federation was defeated he vowed to never let something like this happen again to Nabboo and went to the Republic Naval Academy to study the art of war.

Clone Wars:
Bilu was a lower ranking officer in the Republic Fleet when the clonewars began, he did not take part in the battle of geonosis instead being sent to Christphsis to help the Planetary government stave off seperatist forces, it was after this battle that Bilu was promoted to Sergant and put in charge of a larger force, his next assaignemnt would be at the battle of Malestare however after the capture of Eeth Koth and the preluding search his forces were reasigned to Kamino, a seemingly thankless and boring job if not for the seperatist attack on Kamino some time later where Bilu would show exemplary service and command and would be promoted yet again, he would continue engaging in battle with periodic rests of guarding safe republic worlds and systems until his forces would be reassinged to engage with republic forces in the battle of Ringo Vinda, his service there would also be extra ordinary and because of that he would be one of the key components to the next campaign of Anaxes where he would again be commended. He would later participate in the Outerim seiges where he would be promoted after the victory on Felucia and beginning of a new order.

Cleaning up seperatists:
Bilu now a commander would spend many years afterwards cleaning up seperatist holdouts and managing some small inserections, he would realise that he had come a long way and hoped that now peace could be assured across the glaxy.

[Imperialisium]

Name: Bilu Catarphas
Age: 32
Species/Race: Human
Physical Appearance: (image or description) a man with a beard and unassuming blue eyes which hides a smart and attentive mind.
Homeworld: Nabboo
Alignment: Imperial
Role: (their job/occupation/rank in a hierarchy etc) General (I think it's called commander)
Force Sensitive?: no
Personality: (snapshot of your character's mannerisms?) Calm to the point of coldness and highly tactical.
Skills: (what are you good at? This should segue into your biography) Leadership, Tactics, Communication

Biography: Born on Naboo in 51BBY he grew up in a well off household and the military was not on his mind until he turned 19, the same year he turned 19 the Trade Federation blockaded his home planet and he experienced life both under the blockade and under Federation control. When the Federation was defeated he vowed to never let something like this happen again to Nabboo and went to the Republic Naval Academy to study the art of war.

Clone Wars:
Bilu was a lower ranking officer in the Republic Fleet when the clonewars began, he did not take part in the battle of geonosis instead being sent to Christphsis to help the Planetary government stave off seperatist forces, it was after this battle that Bilu was promoted to Sergant and put in charge of a larger force, his next assaignemnt would be at the battle of Malestare however after the capture of Eeth Koth and the preluding search his forces were reasigned to Kamino, a seemingly thankless and boring job if not for the seperatist attack on Kamino some time later where Bilu would show exemplary service and command and would be promoted yet again, he would continue engaging in battle with periodic rests of guarding safe republic worlds and systems until his forces would be reassinged to engage with republic forces in the battle of Ringo Vinda, his service there would also be extra ordinary and because of that he would be one of the key components to the next campaign of Anaxes where he would again be commended. He would later participate in the Outerim seiges where he would be promoted after the victory on Felucia and beginning of a new order.

Cleaning up seperatists:
Bilu now a commander would spend many years afterwards cleaning up seperatist holdouts and managing some small inserections, he would realise that he had come a long way and hoped that now peace could be assured across the glaxy.

Accepted

[Marchland]

Name: Count Xavier Dooku
Age: 36
Species: Human
Appearance: dark black hair down to shoulders. Thin but muscular. A terrible mustache. Wears a white shirt, tan pants, A belt with a blaster holster. Black boots
Home world: serenno
Alignment. neutral
Role: pirate/ bounty hunter
Force sensitive? Yes.
Personality. Charming and a Smooth talker. Transports that surrender to his pirate captain often Talk about the Kind pirate Referring to Xavier. His kindness is matched by his rage when insulted. Cares about honor, craves revenge against revenge for the killing of his uncle count Dooku.
Skills. Include: master of Makashi Form II, and decent at Forms 1, 4, of saber combat, Novice force usage. Can fly most craft. Decent sabbaca player.


Bio. Born to jenza serenno, and her Lover. the child grew up hearing stories of Count Dooku his uncle. Admiring him as much as his mother had, he trained with a stick then A durasteel blade, training and getting mentored by his uncle when he left the order. Once he was 18 though he felt the urge of adventure. He explored the galaxy doing odd jobs here and there he has served with hondo, cad bane, and worked for jabba the hutt a time or 2. One day he was robbing a freighter when one of the passengers had informed him that count dooku had dies. Stricken with grief he attended the funeral and vowed to get revenge for his uncles’ death. Taking his uncles name as his last he left serreno and after saving credits through bribery pirating thieving and bounty hunting, He was able buy his uncles lightsaber from the black market. Spending 2 months training he now returns to bounty hunting and pirating and awaiting the day that he will meet the man that killed his uncle. He is currently unemployed but can usually be found in a canteen on Tatooine.

[North American Commonwealth of Nations]

Name: Raati Null, AKA Ravi Nikel

Age: 68

Species: Nautolan

Gender: Female

Homeworld: Glee Anselm

Allegiance paid to: The Jedi Order

Rank: Jedi Master, Former High Councilor, member of the AgriCorps Council

Alignment: Unaligned, but searching for the rebellion.

Appearance:
https://pbs.twimg.com/media/FN0oV4xXIAo ... =4096x4096 (NS wont let me post the img, apparently im too new)

Personality: Raati is a reserved, somewhat melancholic woman who radiates a sense of sad serenity. She has somewhat motherly tendencies that are most often turned towards those she considers to be in her care. Her manner is gentle, and her tone usually calm and understanding. She is slow to anger, and prefers to disarm her opponents through words rather than might.

Force Sensitive: Y

Skills/Powers:

Lightsaber Combat:

Form III Soresu- A defensive form of saber combat that lacks almost any offensive capabilities, focusing instead on the redirection of energy and disbursement of force. Raati is above average with this form of saber combat, though she only uses it as a last resort.

Force Abilities:
The Jedi Order classified abilities with the Force according to three themes: Control, Sense, and Alter. Master Raati Null is considered a master of all three themes, with a particular skill in the Alter branch of the tree. Particularly her ability to Alter the Environment, as she is capable of causing plant life to grow, pockets of space to heat or cool to intense degrees, increase and decrease air pressure, as well as manipulate ionization and electrical currents. Her skill in the Living Force was second to none within the order, though her abilities in the Cosmic Force tended to suffer as a result of her devotion to the Living Force. She does not possess precognizance to any significant degree, and her ability to sense danger was underdeveloped prior to the fall of the republic and the birth of the empire.

Weaponry: Lightsaber (Green)

Biography:
Jedi Master Raati Null was born in the year 78 BBY to two agricultural workers on Glee Anselm, and shortly after was discovered by a visiting Jedi and brought to the temple on Courascant. She was raised in the Bear clan creche, and quickly displayed an aptitude in the force that outshone her peers. She had a calm, mature disposition even at a young age, and often Her aptitude for lightsaber combat was sadly lacking, and after long hours of practice she would often sit herself down in the temple gardens and submerge herself in the Living Force, allowing the life force of all the plants and animals to suffuse her and heal her aching bones almost instinctually. It was this ability that first caught the attention of Master Yaddle, who found the Nautolan out past curfew more than once while taking midnight strolls. Yaddle took a special intrest in the youngling, and selected her to be her padawan when Raati was 10 standard years old.

Raati's years as a Padawan were spent mostly on diplomatic and humanitarian missions, all the while learning how to control and manipulate her prodigious strength in the force. Yaddle helped her padawan obtain mastery over the Living Force, teaching her how to draw on the strength of the Force around her rather than her own, and fine tuned her ability to Alter the environment to a degree that would, eventually, outstrip her own achievements.

After going through the Trials and obtaining her knighthood at 20 years of age, Raati spent several years wandering the galaxy on a series of humanitarian missions. While she enjoyed the work and eagerly helped any sentient that she could, she felt lost and directionless. That is, until the council called her back to Coruscant and insisted that she train a Padawan, one by the name of Hal Mikatis. Though the role was unexpected, Raati threw herself into it with vigor and soon began taking Hal on expeditions across the galaxy. She found that teaching the young man was very rewarding, and before she knew it another ten years had passed and Hal was ready for a trial of his own--though the form would be surprising. An archeological team that they had been sent to check on had accidentally unleashed ancient Sith spirits contained within a holocron inside of a crumbling ruin on Dantooine, and they had to force the spirits back into and destroy the holocron that prevented the spirits from becoming one with the force.

After this, Hal gained his Knighthood and Raati was given the rank of Master, as well as a seat on the High Council. Raati served on that august body for a year before stepping down and requesting transfer to the AgriCorps Council. Raati had grown tired of the stagnation and arrogance that the high council displayed, and wished to place herself somewhere that she could do some actual good. She spent the next years breathing life into desolate planets, encouraging plant growth and healing corrupted soil in industrial wastelands in the outer rim.

Even after the battle of Geonosis, Raati refused to become involved in a war that, as far as she could tell, was utterly pointless. She was content to help those most afflicted to breathe life into battlefields long abandoned in the outer rim. And that is exactly where she was when it happened.

Order 66. The light of every Jedi in the galaxy snuffed out, one by one, all in an instant that lasted an eternity. The event left Master Raati gripping her chest, wailing in agony and despair as she felt the Dark Side roar in satisfaction. It drove her to her knees when the Force wailed in agony, and as soon as it happened, it was done. A gaping wound in the force which had once been thrumming with light, and a Jedi Master in despair as darkness fell upon the galaxy.

And now she wanders, keeping herself to herself, as she searches for any remaining Jedi left. Hoping to rebuild the order from the ashes left in the Empire's wake.

[Imperialisium]

Name: Raati Null, AKA Ravi Nikel

Age: 68

Species: Nautolan

Gender: Female

Homeworld: Glee Anselm

Allegiance paid to: The Jedi Order

Rank: Jedi Master, Former High Councilor, member of the AgriCorps Council

Alignment: Unaligned, but searching for the rebellion.

Appearance:
https://pbs.twimg.com/media/FN0oV4xXIAo ... =4096x4096 (NS wont let me post the img, apparently im too new)

Personality: Raati is a reserved, somewhat melancholic woman who radiates a sense of sad serenity. She has somewhat motherly tendencies that are most often turned towards those she considers to be in her care. Her manner is gentle, and her tone usually calm and understanding. She is slow to anger, and prefers to disarm her opponents through words rather than might.

Force Sensitive: Y

Skills/Powers:

Lightsaber Combat:

Form III Soresu- A defensive form of saber combat that lacks almost any offensive capabilities, focusing instead on the redirection of energy and disbursement of force. Raati is above average with this form of saber combat, though she only uses it as a last resort.

Force Abilities:
The Jedi Order classified abilities with the Force according to three themes: Control, Sense, and Alter. Master Raati Null is considered a master of all three themes, with a particular skill in the Alter branch of the tree. Particularly her ability to Alter the Environment, as she is capable of causing plant life to grow, pockets of space to heat or cool to intense degrees, increase and decrease air pressure, as well as manipulate ionization and electrical currents. Her skill in the Living Force was second to none within the order, though her abilities in the Cosmic Force tended to suffer as a result of her devotion to the Living Force. She does not possess precognizance to any significant degree, and her ability to sense danger was underdeveloped prior to the fall of the republic and the birth of the empire.

Weaponry: Lightsaber (Green)

Biography:
Jedi Master Raati Null was born in the year 78 BBY to two agricultural workers on Glee Anselm, and shortly after was discovered by a visiting Jedi and brought to the temple on Courascant. She was raised in the Bear clan creche, and quickly displayed an aptitude in the force that outshone her peers. She had a calm, mature disposition even at a young age, and often Her aptitude for lightsaber combat was sadly lacking, and after long hours of practice she would often sit herself down in the temple gardens and submerge herself in the Living Force, allowing the life force of all the plants and animals to suffuse her and heal her aching bones almost instinctually. It was this ability that first caught the attention of Master Yaddle, who found the Nautolan out past curfew more than once while taking midnight strolls. Yaddle took a special intrest in the youngling, and selected her to be her padawan when Raati was 10 standard years old.

Raati's years as a Padawan were spent mostly on diplomatic and humanitarian missions, all the while learning how to control and manipulate her prodigious strength in the force. Yaddle helped her padawan obtain mastery over the Living Force, teaching her how to draw on the strength of the Force around her rather than her own, and fine tuned her ability to Alter the environment to a degree that would, eventually, outstrip her own achievements.

After going through the Trials and obtaining her knighthood at 20 years of age, Raati spent several years wandering the galaxy on a series of humanitarian missions. While she enjoyed the work and eagerly helped any sentient that she could, she felt lost and directionless. That is, until the council called her back to Coruscant and insisted that she train a Padawan, one by the name of Hal Mikatis. Though the role was unexpected, Raati threw herself into it with vigor and soon began taking Hal on expeditions across the galaxy. She found that teaching the young man was very rewarding, and before she knew it another ten years had passed and Hal was ready for a trial of his own--though the form would be surprising. An archeological team that they had been sent to check on had accidentally unleashed ancient Sith spirits contained within a holocron inside of a crumbling ruin on Dantooine, and they had to force the spirits back into and destroy the holocron that prevented the spirits from becoming one with the force.

After this, Hal gained his Knighthood and Raati was given the rank of Master, as well as a seat on the High Council. Raati served on that august body for a year before stepping down and requesting transfer to the AgriCorps Council. Raati had grown tired of the stagnation and arrogance that the high council displayed, and wished to place herself somewhere that she could do some actual good. She spent the next years breathing life into desolate planets, encouraging plant growth and healing corrupted soil in industrial wastelands in the outer rim.

Even after the battle of Geonosis, Raati refused to become involved in a war that, as far as she could tell, was utterly pointless. She was content to help those most afflicted to breathe life into battlefields long abandoned in the outer rim. And that is exactly where she was when it happened.

Order 66. The light of every Jedi in the galaxy snuffed out, one by one, all in an instant that lasted an eternity. The event left Master Raati gripping her chest, wailing in agony and despair as she felt the Dark Side roar in satisfaction. It drove her to her knees when the Force wailed in agony, and as soon as it happened, it was done. A gaping wound in the force which had once been thrumming with light, and a Jedi Master in despair as darkness fell upon the galaxy.

And now she wanders, keeping herself to herself, as she searches for any remaining Jedi left. Hoping to rebuild the order from the ashes left in the Empire's wake.

Accepted

[Marchland]

Name: Count Xavier Dooku
Age: 36
Species: Human
Appearance: dark black hair down to shoulders. Thin but muscular. A terrible mustache. Wears a white shirt, tan pants, A belt with a blaster holster. Black boots
Home world: serenno
Alignment. neutral
Role: pirate/ bounty hunter
Force sensitive? Yes.
Personality. Charming and a Smooth talker. Transports that surrender to his pirate captain often Talk about the Kind pirate Referring to Xavier. His kindness is matched by his rage when insulted. Cares about honor, craves revenge against revenge for the killing of his uncle count Dooku.
Skills. Include: master of Makashi Form II, and decent at Forms 1, 4, of saber combat, Novice force usage. Can fly most craft. Decent sabbaca player.


Bio. Born to jenza serenno, and her Lover. the child grew up hearing stories of Count Dooku his uncle. Admiring him as much as his mother had, he trained with a stick then A durasteel blade, training and getting mentored by his uncle when he left the order. Once he was 18 though he felt the urge of adventure. He explored the galaxy doing odd jobs here and there he has served with hondo, cad bane, and worked for jabba the hutt a time or 2. One day he was robbing a freighter when one of the passengers had informed him that count dooku had dies. Stricken with grief he attended the funeral and vowed to get revenge for his uncles’ death. Taking his uncles name as his last he left serreno and after saving credits through bribery pirating thieving and bounty hunting, He was able buy his uncles lightsaber from the black market. Spending 2 months training he now returns to bounty hunting and pirating and awaiting the day that he will meet the man that killed his uncle. He is currently unemployed but can usually be found in a canteen on Tatooine.

bre... you guys are wanting his whole life story, aren't you?

[Parcia]

Yeaa.

Yea some more detail would do ya well. The over all idea would do with some more development if your hell bent on being related to a major cannon character.

Could also do a once over or two in the Grammer and sentence structure.

Just some constructive criticism m8

[Marchland]

Yeaa.

Yea some more detail would do ya well. The over all idea would do with some more development if your hell bent on being related to a major cannon character.

Could also do a once over or two in the Grammer and sentence structure.

Just some constructive criticism m8

I appreceate it... ill look over grammer and right his entire life story... ok give me about 5- 10 days