While the app idea is cool, and I'm glad you're showing interest in the RP (welcome!) there are a couple things that need to be fixed.
1. He's a Mary Sue. Young attractive popular Harvard-grad millionaire/billionaire who is governor of an important state. I'd like you to add way more weaknesses (56% popularity is not measley, and dropping to that number is not a weakness)
2. He can't create his own stock exchange
3. He needs an actual facelaim, because this RP is a high-quality post RP and photos are heavily encouraged.
4. I'd like much more bio, please.
5. The scandal would annihilate a career, and that actually is embezzlement. He would be in jail.
6. "Michael" is usually spelled with an "a" and then an "e" unless you want to be creative/give your poor child a hard time in school, it might just be a typo
7. I think he's too young for that whole very long and detailed and impactful record.[/quote]
1. Will work on that. Drop it to 39.
2. If I may, why? No disrespect, but from a quick look, biggies like Microsoft there. If it’s for ooc reasons like plot, that's fine.
3. I added a photo at the top, that's what’s in the spoiler.
4. Will do.
5. He didn’t do it, and I'm not a lawyer, but it just seems shady to do it, not illegal if there’s a paper trail and everything was legal and there’s proof that the governors intervention didn't do it (which he didn’t, btw)
6. Grammarly should’ve done better, will fix.
7. Okay, will boost by 10 years.