Horacellum wrote:Endem wrote:
Righto, so, the power, to put it simply, is overpowered, but you came very close to not having it be overpowered, I just need you to add two things to the things he cannot do with it "he cannot control, alter, or predispose the mind of any person for any purpose" or some other way of wording that mind control is strictly banned, secondly you must make sure that there is a line about not being able to force any object into someone, or force someone into an object, for example, if he where to write, "A can spawns in the lungs of bad guy A" then said bad guy is dead, or will be dead as his lung is pierced, another example is in your app alredy, he escaped by forcing his kidnappers into chains, that, to put it simply cannot happen, as it is also a instant fight ender.
Secondly, time on the platter power is not a power, it's a weakness, and a debilitating one, with cells not being replaced he'd die a painful death in a couple of weeks or months, that needs to be dropped, or altered quite extensively.
Thirdly, please limit mind writing to writing on non-living things.
Thank you for your time.
Alright, thanks for he review.
However, should I alter it on the original app or should I make a new one?
Editing is alright.