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by Infected Mushroom » Sat Sep 14, 2019 5:56 pm
by Krvava Koupel » Sat Sep 14, 2019 6:07 pm
Infected Mushroom wrote:Okay Koupel/Cyv a couple of things (please edit):
Cyv starts at the top of Warehouse 46. I will allow it this time (it makes sense that he was infiltrated in to the roof perhaps) but next time, tell me about it first just to confirm.
1. Include an internal monologue before the first paragraph explaining to the audience (for their benefit) how he had joined the AT force. You were saying he was hired by Kalden right? Just mention it very briefly. Otherwise the readers have no idea where this character came from or which side he is on.
2. What does Cyv look like? I know you possibly included a description in the App but in the IC when a PC character first appears, best to give even just a brief description. For example; Is he wearing a mask? What does the costume look like?
3. What does the "Object" that he created look like? Please include a description so that when I RP the NPC Mafia goons turning around, I can describe it in text.
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I'm looking forward to what happens next. Good job on introducing the character. Please make the edits.
by Infected Mushroom » Sat Sep 14, 2019 6:26 pm
Krvava Koupel wrote:Infected Mushroom wrote:Okay Koupel/Cyv a couple of things (please edit):
Cyv starts at the top of Warehouse 46. I will allow it this time (it makes sense that he was infiltrated in to the roof perhaps) but next time, tell me about it first just to confirm.
1. Include an internal monologue before the first paragraph explaining to the audience (for their benefit) how he had joined the AT force. You were saying he was hired by Kalden right? Just mention it very briefly. Otherwise the readers have no idea where this character came from or which side he is on.
2. What does Cyv look like? I know you possibly included a description in the App but in the IC when a PC character first appears, best to give even just a brief description. For example; Is he wearing a mask? What does the costume look like?
3. What does the "Object" that he created look like? Please include a description so that when I RP the NPC Mafia goons turning around, I can describe it in text.
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I'm looking forward to what happens next. Good job on introducing the character. Please make the edits.
Just remember only one of the goons can hear it. Makes him seem delusional a tad
by Polish Prussian Commonwealth » Sat Sep 14, 2019 7:01 pm
by Infected Mushroom » Sat Sep 14, 2019 7:08 pm
by Infected Mushroom » Sat Sep 14, 2019 7:28 pm
by Krvava Koupel » Sun Sep 15, 2019 2:32 pm
by Infected Mushroom » Sun Sep 15, 2019 5:38 pm
Krvava Koupel wrote:Infected Mushroom wrote:
so you're saying one of the guards at the front of the warehouse right now is a mirror image of Cyv's?
I'm confused by the reference to the mirror image
Mirror Image allows Cyv to look through a "mirror." It's like a 2 way mirror, but Cyv can form one anywhere and have a way to look in
by Krvava Koupel » Mon Sep 16, 2019 2:07 pm
Infected Mushroom wrote:Yaruqo wrote:They're just putting in a post so that they can refer back to the thread. Some folks do it if they're too busy at the moment and want to go back and write up an app in those threads that require one.
Ah I see.
This is getting into some seriously crazy/goofed up territory...
I can't even not laugh as I'm typing this stuff up...
by Shadowwell » Mon Sep 16, 2019 5:33 pm
by Sperio » Mon Sep 16, 2019 8:44 pm
by Infected Mushroom » Mon Sep 16, 2019 8:54 pm
Shadowwell wrote:Gonna have to bow out of this, my internet situation currently makes participating in rps and such rather difficult.
by Infected Mushroom » Mon Sep 16, 2019 8:55 pm
Sperio wrote:Application Format:
Name: Jason Grandant
Age: 34
Skillset: Acrobatics, Knowledge of the streets, marksmanship
Personality: Cold, Standoffish, hates mafia with a vengeance
Weaknesses/Fears: Snakes. Murderous
Likes: the city
Dislikes: The Mafia
Motivation for joining Antihero/Mafia team: Mafia Killed his wife and child
by Shastasla » Mon Sep 16, 2019 10:28 pm
by Infected Mushroom » Mon Sep 16, 2019 11:16 pm
Shastasla wrote:Application Format:
Name: Charlie Seely
Age: 27
Appearance: A 6'5 man. In general, a big guy that easily weighs somewhere between 205lbs and 220 lbs. He also carries false hazel eyes that sit in a slanted position, his complexion is darker (he's a White man) and his hair is dark but not quite black. He also has several tattoos, mostly anything related to luck. Also has a shaved bald head, twirly moustache and a somewhat forked goatee.
Skillset: Strength, Speed, Endurance all fits well with folk fighting.
Personality: An extrovert that tends to be decisive and independent but as well violent, short-tempered, and vengeful.
Weaknesses/Fears: Clouded Judgement & Fears
Likes: Pervy things, Brotherhood, Fire.
Dislikes: Loudness, Medicine, and People accidentally matching his movements.
Motivation for joining Antihero/Mafia team: He moved in with his brotherly cousin in New York, helping him pay the rent with flipping burgers and occasionally beating the money out of people for the Mob. After being caught by his cousin he stopped, which pissed a few too many people off. In the end the cousin was cremated and those responsible went unpunished.
Though he isn't particularly aligned with the Antiheroes, he's practically a Mafiaman himself.
by Shastasla » Tue Sep 17, 2019 12:08 pm
Infected Mushroom wrote:Shastasla wrote:Application Format:
Name: Charlie Seely
Age: 27
Appearance: A 6'5 man. In general, a big guy that easily weighs somewhere between 205lbs and 220 lbs. He also carries false hazel eyes that sit in a slanted position, his complexion is darker (he's a White man) and his hair is dark but not quite black. He also has several tattoos, mostly anything related to luck. Also has a shaved bald head, twirly moustache and a somewhat forked goatee.
Skillset: Strength, Speed, Endurance all fits well with folk fighting.
Personality: An extrovert that tends to be decisive and independent but as well violent, short-tempered, and vengeful.
Weaknesses/Fears: Clouded Judgement & Fears
Likes: Pervy things, Brotherhood, Fire.
Dislikes: Loudness, Medicine, and People accidentally matching his movements.
Motivation for joining Antihero/Mafia team: He moved in with his brotherly cousin in New York, helping him pay the rent with flipping burgers and occasionally beating the money out of people for the Mob. After being caught by his cousin he stopped, which pissed a few too many people off. In the end the cousin was cremated and those responsible went unpunished.
Though he isn't particularly aligned with the Antiheroes, he's practically a Mafiaman himself.
So which side does he fight for?
by Infected Mushroom » Tue Sep 17, 2019 3:38 pm
by Infected Mushroom » Thu Sep 19, 2019 8:59 am
by Infected Mushroom » Fri Sep 20, 2019 11:22 pm
by Infected Mushroom » Tue Sep 24, 2019 8:50 am
by Xeng He » Tue Sep 24, 2019 8:56 am
Blazedtown wrote:[an ism is] A term used by people who won't admit their true beliefs, or don't have any.
by Infected Mushroom » Wed Sep 25, 2019 6:44 pm
by Christian Confederation » Fri Sep 27, 2019 5:53 pm
by Christian Confederation » Fri Sep 27, 2019 5:56 pm
Christian Confederation wrote:Name: Captian Dixie
Age: 25
Appearance: Tall 6ft 6in, muscular White man, with blue eyes and brown hair. He where's thick body armor and has a helmet kinda like captian America, sometimes he has a Cape that looks like the Rebal battle flag.
Skillset: Sharpshooter, Ex Navy seal
Personality: kind, intelligent, Religious, love for the south and America.
Weaknesses/Fears: fears America loseing the last od it's identity.
Likes: Freedom, old fashioned way of things, America as a superpower
Dislikes: Corruption, Communism, unjustified war
Motivation for joining Antihero team: As a boy he hated seeing the death of the American morals and values, his father had hope the south would stand firm against this perversion of America, but Dixie too fell to Corruption. He will fight to bring America back to it's roots of Truth and justice.
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