Brusia wrote:The Imperial Warglorian Empire wrote:Apologies if this isn't the best of quality, but I ran out of inspiration
Alright, after discussing things with Monte, we have a few concerns: firstly, we'd like to see more detail about how he was able to survive Order 66. As Monte pointed out, just no longer being a member of the Order should not be enough to write him off Palpatine's proscription list as evidenced by Ahsoka's still being targeted by her clone troopers despite having already left the Order. (I might suggest having him at least change his name and appearance after hearing that Jedi were being targeted). We'd also like to see more detail about how he was able to maintain any sort of decency or kindness while serving in a military as cutthroat and ruthless as the Empire, and particularly while studying directly under Darth Vader (who isn't likely to approve of anything short of total ruthlessness).
As to the faction app, I'd like you to swap out the Alpha-class Xg-1 Star Wings for the appropriate Sentinel-class landing craft (as per the wiki), and I'd suggest adding a few Theta-class barges to get your AT-ATs on the ground. Finally, we found your statement that "The crew themselves were of a much, much higher quality then the crew of the average Star Destroyer" to be somewhat concerning. Having a competent crew is fine, but your Stormtroopers shouldn't be at the level of Death Troopers or anything if that's what you mean. Other than that though, the rest of the app looks fine, so once those corrections are made I'll accept it.
I've edited my app, and i'd like to tell you that much much better was a bit of an exaggeration, because many of the stormtroopers were pretty crappy because of conscription and low morale, so i'm just saying that my troops are actually to a good standard, and were actually good soldiers instead of, well.....
Srsly! There are things called iron sights and scopes, WHICH YOU HAVE ON YOUR BLASTERS!
And how the hell does a farmer boy (even if he does have the force) have better accuracy then the supposed "Elite Shock Troops of the Empire"
Anyways, included in the edit is that Kellic changed his name, face, and even changed how old he looked via surgery and got forged papers (his original name was Elax Kun), so that fixes Order 66 survival.
I also removed the humanitarian aid and added that Kellic had to occasionally do some pretty dark things so to avoid suspicion from Vader. How dark? When they wanted to try and find the droids, Kellic and his stormtroopers were the ones they sent to Aunt Beru and Uncle Owen's farm. So yeah, that dark.



). Though I suppose that would kind of be expected in light of the Tarkin doctrine, and given the fact that Stormtroopers were originally intended for more of a policing roll than to be soldiers in a galaxy spanning war. That they're able to function as well as they do despite that limitation suggests they've got to be pretty skilled.


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