The Ancient Ones: Age of Nothingness(Multiverse Xover)OOC-2

by **Gurori** » Wed May 17, 2017 6:46 am

Kaidou wrote:
Gurori wrote:
I don't see it.

It's the positioning of the hips and the creases in the shirt. At a quick glance, one gets the impression of something protruding forward.

I still don't see it.

What I do see is potential for Pruss to draw anime-esque characters, all you'd need to do is make the faces look more (insert weebish here).

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 6:48 am

Gurori wrote:
Kaidou wrote:
It's the positioning of the hips and the creases in the shirt. At a quick glance, one gets the impression of something protruding forward.

I still don't see it.

What I do see is potential for Pruss to draw anime-esque characters, all you'd need to do is make the faces look more (insert weebish here).

~~くそウィーアブー~~

by **Gurori** » Wed May 17, 2017 6:53 am

Kaidou wrote:
Gurori wrote:
I still don't see it.

What I do see is potential for Pruss to draw anime-esque characters, all you'd need to do is make the faces look more (insert weebish here).

~~くそウィーアブー~~

Weebish = Botched Japanese

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 6:56 am

Gurori wrote:
Kaidou wrote:
~~くそウィーアブー~~

Weebish = Botched Japanese

Anata is a very kawaii otoko. Kawaii sugoi rasengan oishii Hatsune Miku chan oniisama baka desu desu sushi kitsune madoka magica.

by **Gurori** » Wed May 17, 2017 7:13 am

Kaidou wrote:
Gurori wrote:
Weebish = Botched Japanese

Anata is a very kawaii otoko. Kawaii sugoi rasengan oishii Hatsune Miku chan oniisama baka desu desu sushi kitsune madoka magica.

Hai kawaii desu chan.

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 7:19 am

Gurori wrote:
Kaidou wrote:
Anata is a very kawaii otoko. Kawaii sugoi rasengan oishii Hatsune Miku chan oniisama baka desu desu sushi kitsune madoka magica.

Hai kawaii desu chan.

しかし、それは偽物の日本語、だから日本人は意味がわかない。我々の意味を分かりますために、偽日本語から本日本語を徹底的に翻訳が必要です。

by **Gurori** » Wed May 17, 2017 7:22 am

Fun Fact: The Sun is a "Deadly Lazer" (Earrape Warning)

by **The Imperial Warglorian Empire** » Wed May 17, 2017 7:24 am

tag

Can someone tell me the plot or something, I have no idea what this RP is about and what it's doing

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 7:29 am

The Imperial Warglorian Empire wrote:tag

Can someone tell me the plot or something, I have no idea what this RP is about and what it's doing

There are lots of different subplots happening simultaneously. Mine is a huge mess of faction politics which I can explain to you in greater detail if you're interested.

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 7:29 am

Gurori wrote:Fun Fact: The Sun is a "Deadly Lazer" (Earrape Warning)

by **Wheatley Laboratories** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:18 am

Kaidou wrote:
The Imperial Warglorian Empire wrote:tag

Can someone tell me the plot or something, I have no idea what this RP is about and what it's doing

There are lots of different subplots happening simultaneously. Mine is a huge mess of faction politics which I can explain to you in greater detail if you're interested.

*tries to hand Warglorian a stack of 500 A4 pages with tiny writing on*
Here ya go....

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 2:37 pm

Wheatley Laboratories wrote:
Kaidou wrote:
There are lots of different subplots happening simultaneously. Mine is a huge mess of faction politics which I can explain to you in greater detail if you're interested.

*tries to hand Warglorian a stack of 500 A4 pages with tiny writing on*
Here ya go....

Is my subplot really that complicated? :unsure:

by **The Dark Brotherhood of Deros** » Wed May 17, 2017 3:12 pm

Just waiting on IRE.

by **The Intergalactic Russian Empire** » Wed May 17, 2017 3:14 pm

The Dark Brotherhood of Deros wrote:Just waiting on IRE.

I was waiting for Aetern, who posted earlier. Right now I'm a bit busy with homework (school ends next week, though)

by **The Dark Brotherhood of Deros** » Wed May 17, 2017 3:19 pm

The Intergalactic Russian Empire wrote:
The Dark Brotherhood of Deros wrote:Just waiting on IRE.

I was waiting for Aetern, who posted earlier. Right now I'm a bit busy with homework (school ends next week, though)

Okay. To be honest, I don't know what to write right now anyway.

by **Naval Monte** » Wed May 17, 2017 8:03 pm

Hey Tai and Wheatley me post for you two is finally done after so many days of delays.

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 8:59 pm

Shit's gonna hit the fan. Thero and the Aquila's crew are gonna fight all out soon.

by **Prusselanden** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:04 pm

Kaidou wrote:Shit's gonna hit the fan. Thero and the Aquila's crew are gonna fight all out soon.

NOOOO YOU CAN'T KILL OF JAN-CI YOU CAN'T

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:07 pm

Prusselanden wrote:
Kaidou wrote:Shit's gonna hit the fan. Thero and the Aquila's crew are gonna fight all out soon.

NOOOO YOU CAN'T KILL OF JAN-CI YOU CAN'T

That depends on how long the Aquila takes to get to her. I'll not reveal her fate just yet. :roll:

by **Prusselanden** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:09 pm

Kaidou wrote:
Prusselanden wrote:NOOOO YOU CAN'T KILL OF JAN-CI YOU CAN'T

That depends on how long the Aquila takes to get to her. I'll not reveal her fate just yet.

Oh
oh
oh
If they manage to save her
Can Ackerman tear a juggernaut's throat out
With xer bare teeth?
Humans actually have a super strong bite force

on the other hand
You are so good at making feels, Kaidou! You should really be a writer!

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:16 pm

Prusselanden wrote:
Kaidou wrote:
That depends on how long the Aquila takes to get to her. I'll not reveal her fate just yet.

Oh
oh
oh
If they manage to save her
Can Ackerman tear a juggernaut's throat out
With xer bare teeth?
Humans actually have a super strong bite force

on the other hand
You are so good at making feels, Kaidou! You should really be a writer!

Thanks

We shall see what happens in time to come.

by **Prusselanden** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:20 pm

Kaidou wrote:
Prusselanden wrote:Oh
oh
oh
If they manage to save her
Can Ackerman tear a juggernaut's throat out
With xer bare teeth?
Humans actually have a super strong bite force

on the other hand
You are so good at making feels, Kaidou! You should really be a writer!

Thanks

We shall see what happens in time to come.

Pls don't make me feel no more
Finals re coming

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:24 pm

Prusselanden wrote:
Kaidou wrote:
Thanks

We shall see what happens in time to come.

Pls don't make me feel no more
Finals re coming

I'm sorry. I'm afraid I cannot grant your request.

We're coming to the twilight of my whole saga soon; in fact, I already have the end planned out. Almost all of the remaining journey will be a buildup to the final feels train.

by **Prusselanden** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:29 pm

Kaidou wrote:
Prusselanden wrote:Pls don't make me feel no more
Finals re coming

I'm sorry. I'm afraid I cannot grant your request.

We're coming to the twilight of my whole saga soon; in fact, I already have the end planned out. Almost all of the remaining journey will be a buildup to the final feels train.

No NO NO NOOOOOOOO
Don't worry, I will too.

Quick question/question for advice.
Did you have any feels from any of my writing? Be honest. How can I improve it?

by **Kaidou** » Wed May 17, 2017 9:34 pm

Prusselanden wrote:
Kaidou wrote:
I'm sorry. I'm afraid I cannot grant your request.

We're coming to the twilight of my whole saga soon; in fact, I already have the end planned out. Almost all of the remaining journey will be a buildup to the final feels train.

No NO NO NOOOOOOOO
Don't worry, I will too.

Quick question/question for advice.
Did you have any feels from any of my writing? Be honest. How can I improve it?

They certainly have the potential for feels. All that's missing is a little bit more description; instead of simply describing actions, include descriptions of facial expressions (especially nuanced expressions like blinking, half-smiles, and so on), as well as internal monologues.

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