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Giovenith
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Postby Giovenith » Wed Jan 18, 2017 9:13 pm

Highfort wrote:
Cerillium wrote:...but I thought Agy was my Valentine this year.


Please, please, there's enough owl for everybody! :lol2:


He's a one-man Hooters!
⟡ and in time, and in time, we will all be stars ⟡
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Postby Granis » Wed Jan 18, 2017 9:22 pm

Cerillium wrote:
Granis wrote:Would drawing extremely complicated runes to channel magic as a substitute for actually using it myself be under skill, or magic?

It depends. At first blush, I'd say the craft (drawing them) is the skill. The product (what each resulting rune does) is the magic.


Ok, thanks.

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Postby Northwest Slobovia » Wed Jan 18, 2017 10:13 pm

I've been informed that Cer won't be able to post a timeskip tonight. So, carry on with what you're doing IC.
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Postby Tiltjuice » Wed Jan 18, 2017 11:25 pm

#PLAPP
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PERSONIFICATION LIFE
CHARACTER APPLICATION 2.0


PLAYER INFORMATION
NS nation nickname: Tilt

Skill Level (beginner, intermediate, advanced): Advanced

How often can you post? Once or twice a day at most



CHARACTER PERSONAL CHARACTERISTICS
Character Name: Calani Marliten

Character Gender: Is it not obvious?

Species (nation personification, human, alien, etc): Human; but does it matter what I am in the dark?

Age: 28

Appearance: Look down. I do not mind.

URL to Character Picture, if any: Here I am.

Character Occupation: High-class escort and entertainer


Character's biggest strength: An uncanny ability to play a person's conscience...or bring out their better side. Nocturnal activities not required.


Character's worst flaw: An unwavering belief that everyone can be redeemed, or otherwise turned to good.


OBJECTIVES AND GOALS
Primary Objectives are what drive's your character's actions and their part of the plot. When not engaged in stories, these are what occupy your character's thoughts or keep them busy. Examples include: acting on a desire to become a powerful and respected leader; attempting to overcome some horrible thing in the past which hinders the character on a day-to-day basis; seeking to break out their shell by overcoming profound shyness (getting involved with stories); comping to terms with a major flaw that inhibits the character from reaching full potential; etc.

Minor Goals. These should be an undercurrent for your character when they are engaged in stories or on their free time. They are what your character does to aid them in achieving their Primary Objectives. Examples include: acquiring weapons and becoming proficient with each one; improving sundered relations with a companion; improving their reading comprehension; mastering news spells; researching a cure for a plague; etc.

Objectives such as "making friends" or "finding love" are NOT acceptable. Please put much though into your character's objectives - they are what flesh out your character and one of the most important aspects necessary to portray the character as 3D.

Primary Objective: Establish an outlet of the Consorts' Lodge on Galli.

Minor Goals: Make connections with the movers and shakers on Galli.


MUNDANE SKILLS
These do NOT require points. These are the average, daily things your character can do. Examples are "drive a car", "speak one Foreign Language", "play a guitar", "write poetry". Some mundane skills come from your bio and are freebie. A soldier has gone through Basic training. However, Medic, martial arts or sniper would be a Specialized Skill or Talent.

List Mundane skills here
  • Fashion
  • Arts
  • Music
  • Massage
  • Empathy
  • Refined conversation


SPECIALIZED SKILLS AND TALENTS
These are specialized skills that set you apart from the average person. You have 7 points to spend here. Examples are swordsmanship, sniper, coercion, medic, spellcraft, piloting helicopter, manipulate water, etc.

  • Ability 1 and Points Spent: Amatory arts, 4
  • Ability 2 and Points Spent: Negotiation, 3


OPTIONAL SUPERNATURAL CHARACTERISTICS
You have 7 points to spend here on supernatural skills or abilities. Sonic Scream, Levitation, Spell Casting, Shape Shifting etc. Superman MUST have his kryptonite thus weaknesses are things which inhibit the ability. Restrictions are what can't they do with their power or what balances it. They can only use it when they genuinely need it? They can't use it for more then five minutes without serious side-effects? Some things are allowed without points. A pegasus has wings thus it can fly. A raptor is fast thus no points are spent in speed. These "natural" abilities should be listed here, however. What isn't allowed: teleportation beyond a few feet; the ability to alter or go back/forward in time. IMPORTANT: You might need a knowledge in Specialized Skills and Talents in order to work these abilities. Example: you'll need "manipulate water" to do just that, and this section is where you record what water manipulation abilities the character has.

  • N/A


MAGICAL OR SPECIAL ITEMS
If it's not on this list, your character doesn't have it. Magical items are rare and hard to come by. Please list what they can/can't do - treat them like a supernatural thing. Items not allowed: anything that can alter time; anything that allows a character to teleport beyond a few feet.

List:
  • N/A

EQUIPMENT
This is what your character has on their person at the very moment when they are pulled from their home dimension. Laptop? Firearm? Cigarettes and matches? Don't abuse this. They won't be clutching an entire bunker.

List:
  • Cabin trunk containing the below items
  • Earrings, pendant, and pair of bracelets
  • Makeup, perfumes and oil
  • Customer registry
  • Condoms
  • Safety razor
  • Journal
  • A few sachets of tea


BACKGROUND
Be detailed please. You must explain how your character acquired their skills, talents, abilities, and special items. Wrap your primary objectives and goals into it.

Education or Training: Consorts' Lodge, PostApocalyptia

Character Background/Biography: Things were fortunate for me. My family was well off, I could do what I wanted and felt was right. My sister went off to be the scientist of the family; I decided to go into the arts. There's hardly a better place for that anywhere on Postpoc than the Consorts' Lodge, even if being an artist in the usual sense of the word isn't what they teach you to do. I make a good living, and not all of it is from lying on my back. I couldn't look the head of the Lodge in the face if it were; and Devine would probably throw me out for taking up the room all the time.

Certainly they teach you more than how to call up a person's hindbrain and hold it in place for a while. Flexibility, music, acting - whatever you're best at, they build and build on it and wrap it all up in a cloak of refinement and culture.


OTHER GAME MECHANICS
URL to Apartment Picture: (What's the inside of their apartment look like) Roomies with Devine. Plenty of knickknacks and personal touches and items spread throughout. Now where did I put my mascara?

Link to RP examples: (this MUST be a DIRECT LINK to your IC post in an RP, NOT a link to the RP thread itself. If you don't have examples, make your biography good.)


IMPORTANT FINAL STEP:
One paragraph that sums up your character. This paragraph is what we'll use on your player tab on the first page of the thread. This MUST be brief. Your tab will contain a link to your application so people will have full details.
The nickname you go by on NS: Tilt
Character Name: Calani Marliten
Image Link: Calani
Brief Description for Bio: Idealistic escort with equally killer fashion.

Please direct questions to the OP or the CoOPs. Thanks for applying. Bear in mind that it can take several days for applications to be approved; check back often.
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Postby Mincaldenteans » Wed Jan 18, 2017 11:57 pm

Cerillium wrote:...but I thought Agy was my Valentine this year.


Omg! Tilt and Swith, be my sancho(s)? :hug: :kiss:

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Postby Granis » Thu Jan 19, 2017 12:03 am

Ok, so here's my character app. I feel like I'll get a little lost at this point though, so where and how should I introduce myself if I'm accepted.

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#PLAPP
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PERSONIFICATION LIFE
CHARACTER APPLICATION


PLAYER INFORMATION
NS nation nickname: Granis

Skill Level (beginner, intermediate, advanced): intermediate

How often can you post? So often it might actually be kind of sad. I don't really have much of a life right now.



CHARACTER PERSONAL CHARACTERISTICS
Character Name: Jack Evans

Character Gender: Male

Species (nation personification, human, alien, etc): Human

Age: 24

Appearance:

URL to Character Picture, if any:
http://static.zerochan.net/Doujima.Ryou ... 044660.jpg

Character Occupation: Part time monster hunter, Occasional chef and butcher

Character's biggest strength:
He is decently talented in multiple forms of hand to hand and knife combat, is very skilled with firearms, and is at a near master level in runic enchantment. This is only possible because he poured almost everything he had into this training, knowing that the alternative was near certain death.

[b]Character's biggest weakness:
If it isn't to do with magic, cooking, or combat, he probably has a year eighters level of knowledge with it, having stopped taking notice of most mundane subjects when he started needing to learn magic to survive. He is also fairly shy.

OBJECTIVES
[b]Primary Objectives
are your character's main goals. This should be the thing that drives their part of the plot. When not engaged in stories, these are what occupy your character's thoughts or keep them busy. Examples include: acting on a desire to become a powerful and respected leader; attempting to overcome some horrible thing in the past which hinders the character on a day-to-day basis; seeking to break out their shell by overcoming profound shyness (getting involved with stories); comping to terms with a major flaw that inhibits the character from reaching full potential; etc.

Secondary Objectives are minor goals. These should be an undercurrent for your character when they are engaged in stories or on their free time. Examples include: acquiring weapons and becoming proficient with each one; improving sundered relations with a companion; improving their reading comprehension; mastering news spells; researching a cure for a plague; etc.

Objectives such as "making friends" or "finding love" are NOT acceptable. Please put much though into your character's objectives - they are what flesh out your character and one of the most important aspects necessary to portray the character as 3D.

Primary Objective: Two years ago, Jacks best friend, Hannah Melville, was dragged through a portal to god knows where while sacrificing herself to prevent a particularly powerful demonic entity from altering the world any further, having already watched their world being combined with the one the demon came from, an act which forever warped it.
While no one in their world had any knowledge of the omniverse, Jack figured that they had to have gone somewhere, and used a massive runic array he made to essentially force himself through space and time. Now he wishes to search the multiverse in order to find Hannah.

Secondary Objectives: While Jack isn't hunting demons, gods, monsters, and dangerous magic users, he takes the time to enjoy cooking, having owned a small stand he made street food at in his spare time back home. Now he has decided to try and amass recipes from all the different worlds, and maybe even becoming the best chef in the entire omniverse, should he find the effort. He also wishes to collect more unique runes he can use, as well as new and interesting firearms.


MUNDANE SKILLS
These do NOT require points. These are the average, daily things your character can do. Examples are "drive a car", "speak one Foreign Language", "play a guitar", "write poetry". Some mundane skills come from your bio and are freebie. A soldier has gone through Basic training. However, Medic, martial arts or sniper would be a Specialized Skill or Talent.

List Mundane skills here
Can play the drums fairly well
Is an excellent cook
Is a quick reader
Is very good at drawing
An encyclopaedic knowledge of most anime


SPECIALIZED SKILLS AND TALENTS
These are specialized skills that set you apart from the average person. You have 7 points to spend here. Examples are swordsmanship, sniper, coercion, medic, wizarding, piloting etc.

  • Ability 1 and Points Spent: Extensive firearms training, 4
  • Ability 2 and Points Spent: Extensive close combat training, 3
  • Ability 3 and Points Spent:
  • Ability 4 and Points Spent:


OPTIONAL SUPERNATURAL CHARACTERISTICS
You have 7 points to spend here on supernatural skills or abilities. Sonic Scream, Levitation, Spell Casting, Shape Shifting etc. Superman MUST have his kryptonite thus weaknesses are things which inhibit the ability. Restrictions are what can't they do with their power or what balances it. They can only use it when they genuinely need it? They can't use it for more then five minutes without serious side-effects? Some things are allowed without points. A pegasus has wings thus it can fly. A raptor is fast thus no points are spent in speed. These "natural" abilities should be listed here, however. What isn't allowed: teleportation beyond a few feet; the ability to alter or go back/forward in time.

  • Ability 1: Runic Array enchantment
    Power Level: 5
    Strengths: Can be used to turn enchant mundane objects with magical power, the effects of which are dependent on the runes used in the array, and are near endless.
    Weaknesses: Must be drawn extremely well, otherwise it can backfire, making it extremely dangerous. This means that, unless the drawer is well defended enough to ensure their safety, runic arrays cannot be drawn in combat, perhaps excluding a few of the most simple ones. Drawing runes on living things, while technically possible, is incredibly dangerous, causing extreme amounts of damage with prolonged use.
    Restrictions: Objects must be large enough to draw the runic array on. This means that, unless the drawer is insanely talented, more complicated runes can only be drawn on large objects.
    Runic arrays generally cannot be activated remotely, unless there are extensive complicated modifications to the array itself, or there is a second array with the singular purpose being to activate the first array remotely, meaning most arrays need to be in contact with the users body to be activated.
    Runic Arrays must also be drawn with a specific, blood-based ink, to ensure that the array stays permanent. If the user wishes to ensure that others cannot activate their arrays, this ink is further limited to being made from the users own blood.

  • Ability 2:
    Power Level:
    Strengths:
    Weaknesses:
    Restrictions:

  • Ability 3:
    Power Level:
    Strengths:
    Weaknesses:
    Restrictions:

  • Ability 4:
    Power Level:
    Strengths:
    Weaknesses:
    Restrictions:
MAGICAL OR SPECIAL ITEMS
If it's not on this list, your character doesn't have it. Magical items are rare and hard to come by. Please list what they can/can't do - treat them like a supernatural thing. Items not allowed: anything that can alter time; anything that allows a character to teleport beyond a few feet.

List:
Enchanted Barrett M82A1M:
An already powerful American sniper rifle, with a reputation for being an exceptional anti-materiel rifle. On top of its normal attributes, Jack has placed two runic enchantments on it, a remote activation array for his bullets, and an array that lessens the effects of gravity on the gun.

Two Enchanted Colt M1911s:
Two secondary pistols Jack keeps on him, both with remote activation arrays on them.

Enchanted M-9 Bayonet:
An enchanted combat knife that Hannah gave Jack when she first dragged him into the business of hunting demons and monsters. It currently has three arrays on it;
one that causes a strong electrical current to run through the blade when charged, one that makes it far more durable, and one that super heats the blade enough for it to cut through most materials easily, with the only reason the blade itself doesn't melt being the array that increases durability.

Enchanted jacket:
Just a normal jacket Jack enchanted, giving it resistances to stabs and slashes, as well as fire. He is still working on inventing an array that allows fabric to be resistant to blunt forces, while still keeping its flexibility.

Multiple cases of enchanted bullets:
Bullets that Jack has drawn arrays on. These can allow them to have elemental effects, or increased their kinetic force, or decrease air resistance, allowing them to fly further..

EQUIPMENT
This is what your character has on their person at the very moment when they are pulled from their home dimension. Don't abuse this. They won't be clutching an entire bunker.

List:
A large duffle bag full of cooking equipment, most of which are enchanted. These include pots, pans, and a set of knives. There are also a number of thick guidebooks on different runic arrays, so he can keep learning new techniques.

A smaller bag, enchanted to remain 'refrigerated', which contains meat, vegetables, dairy products, and spices.

He also has a number of pockets attached to the inside of his jacket, containing tubes of homemade enchanting ink.


BACKGROUND
Be detailed please. You must explain how your character aquired their skills, talents, abilities, and special items. Wrap your primary and secondary objectives into it.

Education or Training:
Extensive magical training, specifically in the area of runic enchantment. However, this has caused him to become lax in almost every other area. Took cooking classes, as neither his teacher nor his friend knew how to cook. Also trained extensively with both firearms and close ranged combat.


Character Background/Biography:
Up until the age of fourteen, Jack was a relatively normal kid, knowing nothing more about the occult than any other normal kid. That all changed a few days after his fourteenth birthday, when his eccentric, horrifying and inhumanly strong best friend Hannah Melville accidentally summoned a relatively powerful, young infernal entity, and coerced him into helping her get rid of it. Ever since that day, Jack had been dragged along to fight demons and monsters with Hannah, begrudgingly at first, but slowly coming to accept it as his life.

For the next ten years, he studied magic with Hannah and her legal guardian Marie Lindall, who was a friend of Hannah's father before he died and a powerful mage, known throughout the magical community as 'Lindall the Bomber' after her signature spell, 'Magic Minefield'. While most normal forms of magic proved to be extremely difficult for him, he quickly learned that he had an incredible talent for drawing runic arrays. This coupled with (forced) training with firearms under Marie's tutelage to make up for his lack of spell casting ability has led to him being given the moniker 'The Bullet Mage'. While never particularly well known thanks to efforts to remain out of the larger magic community, those who did know of him respected his skill, particularly mages who worked in the area of runic enchantment themselves.

Unfortunately , when Jack and Hannah were twenty two, a group of cultists summoned a powerful demon, which proceeded to start fusing the world of spirits with the normal human world. However, before irreversible damage could be done, Hannah forced a portal for an entirely different world to open, and sacrificed herself to drag the demon to the other side with her.

For the last two years, Jack has been experimenting on increasingly complicated runic arrays that would allow him to reach the multiverse, and finally succeeded merely two days ago.


OTHER GAME MECHANICS
URL to Apartment Picture: (What's the inside of their apartment look like)
http://kiwi-international-hotel.aucklan ... 12537.JPEG
A small, sparse one room apartment with a decent kitchen, a decent bed and very little else. The painting is something he did himself, as part of the training for creating runes.

Link to RP examples: (this MUST be a DIRECT LINK to your IC post in an RP, NOT a link to the RP thread itself. If you don't have examples, make your biography good.)
Joseph could already see smoke beginning to rise as he neared the city, the telltale sounds of massive guns firing at each other confirming something he already expected.

The battle had already begun.

He could still see dropships flying over the city, knights from both sides dropping in, some shot from the sky before they could reach the ground.

"Damn it!" He shouted. "Salem, change of plans! We're not going to have time to make our presence known as non-combatants! We're going to have to go straight in if we want to find any survivors!"

"But sir, both factions will assume we're enemi-"

"I know, damn it!" He shouted, cutting off the AI. "But if we don't get in there as fast as possible, more people are going to die!"

"Yes sir. Understood."

Almost screaming in frustration, he sped along the road.

The city was walled to keep some of the more dangerous animals of Eden out, so the only ways in were either being dropped in by aircraft, or going through the official entrances.

Official entrances that were almost definitely going to be heavily guarded.

Sure, the battlefield was on the other side of the city, so most of the frontiersmen would probably be on the other side of the city, but still, only idiots wouldn't leave at least one knight there to prevent enemies from catching them from behind.

And, sure enough, there were two frontiersmen knights, directly ahead of him.

And, as expected, they had noticed him.

What a day for Salems communication network to be broken, huh?

He knew they were trying to raise him on their comms because, you know, they hadn't shot at him yet. This quickly changed when he didn't respond, and they were already raising their weapons to fire.

"Salem! Try and shoot their guns!"

"Yes sir."

As he sped towards the entrance, he felt the vibrations of that stupidly powerful machine gun beginning to fire, and watched in satisfaction as the first knights gun was blasted from its hand, the seconds hand being completely blown from the arm.

Before they could regain their balance, Joseph drove Salem between the two knights and into the city.

And no, he didn't care if he had just left the back gate almost completely undefended for the UEC to get in. Maybe then the battle would be over faster.

No, the only thing he cared about right now was getting into the city, finding civilians, and getting them out.

It was all any of these pilots should be thinking about.





IMPORTANT FINAL STEP:
One paragraph that sums up your character. This paragraph is what we'll use on your player tab on the first page of the thread. This MUST be brief. Your tab will contain a link to your application so people will have full details.
The nickname you go by on NS: Granis
Character Name: Jack Evans
Image Link: http://static.zerochan.net/Doujima.Ryou ... 044660.jpg
Brief Description for Bio: A magic gunman who loves cooking and runic enchantment, and is searching the omniverse for his best friend.

Please direct questions to the OP or the CoOPs. Thanks for applying. Bear in mind that it can take several days for applications to be approved; check back often.
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Postby Tiltjuice » Thu Jan 19, 2017 12:54 am

Mincaldenteans wrote:
Cerillium wrote:...but I thought Agy was my Valentine this year.


Omg! Tilt and Swith, be my sancho(s)? :hug: :kiss:


(nod) :D

Granis wrote:Ok, so here's my character app. I feel like I'll get a little lost at this point though, so where and how should I introduce myself if I'm accepted.-snip-


No sweat! One of us co-OPs (or Gio or Slobo) usually sends a char to make introductions, get new chars settled.

And goodnight, PLeeps. *leaves penguins*
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At fifteen, I set my heart on learning. At thirty, I was firmly established. At forty, I had no more doubts. At fifty, I knew the will of heaven. At sixty, I was ready to listen to it. At seventy, I could follow my heart's desire without transgressing what was right. ~Analects, 2:4
I wear teal, blue, pink, and red for Swith.
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Postby Fvaarniimar » Thu Jan 19, 2017 2:21 am

@Granis
Tl ;dr: Nice app, in my opinion, but you'd better clarify what's meant by "spirit world."
This bit: okay. Also, cool.
having already watched their world being combined with the one the demon came from, an act which forever warped it.


This bit, on the other hand, could be a problem depending on the nature of the "world of spirits." Is it a world full of fairly-traditional ghosts, a world of unsettling creatures...or is it an afterlife? While I'm not sure about hells, heavens for the purposes of this RP are worlds/dimensions formed by extremely powerful beings, under the purview of said beings, and accessible only with their permission. If the "world of spirits" is an afterlife, then it is not unlikely that "fusing" would require the creator of said afterlife to be actively involved...and very few players can run these Greater Beings, even as antagonists.
which proceeded to start fusing the world of spirits with the normal human world.
Come to the light side.  We have teamwork, waffles, popcorn, grape juice, and way too much ramen.

Unless one is a genealogist, therapist, geneticist, or FBI agent - who is acting within the scope of their job - to claim that anyone is wrong about their own identity is not merely absurd but also extremely rude.

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Postby Granis » Thu Jan 19, 2017 2:45 am

Fvaarniimar wrote:@Granis
Tl ;dr: Nice app, in my opinion, but you'd better clarify what's meant by "spirit world."
This bit: okay. Also, cool.
having already watched their world being combined with the one the demon came from, an act which forever warped it.


This bit, on the other hand, could be a problem depending on the nature of the "world of spirits." Is it a world full of fairly-traditional ghosts, a world of unsettling creatures...or is it an afterlife? While I'm not sure about hells, heavens for the purposes of this RP are worlds/dimensions formed by extremely powerful beings, under the purview of said beings, and accessible only with their permission. If the "world of spirits" is an afterlife, then it is not unlikely that "fusing" would require the creator of said afterlife to be actively involved...and very few players can run these Greater Beings, even as antagonists.
which proceeded to start fusing the world of spirits with the normal human world.


Well, its a little complicated, and a lot of it will probably be explained in character, but essentially its not so much an afterlife or anything like that as much as it is just another world in the multiverse, which was inherently linked to Jack and Hannah's world, and was home to a number of species that would regularly find their way through the link and become the inspiration for the spirits, demons, and monsters of our legends.

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Postby Mincaldenteans » Thu Jan 19, 2017 9:02 am

Granis and UEA, your apps will be reviewed by Cer sometime this week. Thank you for your patience.

That said, Granis, upon looking at your app, this guy is a one man walking army and needs toning down. A master of "all forms of combat" at age 24 is not realistic, however you have his points at 4 which makes him exceptionally trained - not a master of all. His rune array enchantment ability needs some serious details. At 7, this needs a serious weakness (runing an organic is easily avoidable, that is not a weakness), and restriction (objects must be large enough to draw and cannot be remote activated is not a restiction; avoidable in IC). It needs to be explained what all it can and cannot do, it needs limits. I'm conformable seeing this lowered a notch or three to level 4 or 5.

The listed equipment needs to be listed completely. Vague effects will not do as Cer will not take random things in IC that comes from your character (The jacket protects from what, exactly? Runed weapons, knife and bullets can do what, precisely? What are their restrictions?). If it's not in the app, or worked and established in IC, the char doesn't have it and/or can't do it.

You character ability is a good one, we just don't need a one man army. He's young, he can learn and harness his ability while among the Residents to its full potential rather than being already there, which gives no room for developing that aspect and runs risk of your char falling flat, or worse, IC issues.

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Postby Tiltjuice » Thu Jan 19, 2017 9:13 am

Keep in mind, too, the risk of Paradox. 6- or 7-point abilities will have unintended effects if used; this isn't a game where characters are prepared for a lot of situations. Just like life, there can be surprises.

@UEA, responding to surroundings while asleep doesn't sound very mundane to me :P Also, what are the points you're giving for archery, reflexes and mental calculation? Also, we're not on Earth, so conquering the Pacific Ocean is a bit of a stretch.

And while I'd argue that large appetite is a skill after spending the winter holidays with family, it doesn't seem applicable to the app.

Also, you guys may want to use the version 2.0 of the app code :P
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At fifteen, I set my heart on learning. At thirty, I was firmly established. At forty, I had no more doubts. At fifty, I knew the will of heaven. At sixty, I was ready to listen to it. At seventy, I could follow my heart's desire without transgressing what was right. ~Analects, 2:4
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Postby Torsiedelle » Thu Jan 19, 2017 1:06 pm

Why conquer the Pacific when you can conquer Asia?

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Postby Torrocca » Thu Jan 19, 2017 1:11 pm

Sorry for taking so long to post, school and some personal stuff's kept me a bit busy! I should be able to post more regularly soon, though.
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Postby Granis » Thu Jan 19, 2017 1:20 pm

Mincaldenteans wrote:Granis and UEA, your apps will be reviewed by Cer sometime this week. Thank you for your patience.

That said, Granis, upon looking at your app, this guy is a one man walking army and needs toning down. A master of "all forms of combat" at age 24 is not realistic, however you have his points at 4 which makes him exceptionally trained - not a master of all. His rune array enchantment ability needs some serious details. At 7, this needs a serious weakness (runing an organic is easily avoidable, that is not a weakness), and restriction (objects must be large enough to draw and cannot be remote activated is not a restiction; avoidable in IC). It needs to be explained what all it can and cannot do, it needs limits. I'm conformable seeing this lowered a notch or three to level 4 or 5.

The listed equipment needs to be listed completely. Vague effects will not do as Cer will not take random things in IC that comes from your character (The jacket protects from what, exactly? Runed weapons, knife and bullets can do what, precisely? What are their restrictions?). If it's not in the app, or worked and established in IC, the char doesn't have it and/or can't do it.

You character ability is a good one, we just don't need a one man army. He's young, he can learn and harness his ability while among the Residents to its full potential rather than being already there, which gives no room for developing that aspect and runs risk of your char falling flat, or worse, IC issues.


Wait, did I say he was a master at all forms of combat?! I can assure you right now that that was definitely a mistake. I'll edit the rest of it now.

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Postby Granis » Thu Jan 19, 2017 2:01 pm

Alright, I've edited my app a bit. I'm still not entirely sure whether I did it right though, as I am currently extremely tired. Let me know if there's anything I forgot.

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Postby Giovenith » Thu Jan 19, 2017 2:33 pm

Torsiedelle wrote:Why conquer the Pacific when you can conquer Asia?

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Why make trillions when we could make... billions?
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Postby Torsiedelle » Thu Jan 19, 2017 3:21 pm

Well, from what little feedback I did get, looks like I'm sticking with Katya and Wellington.

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Postby Cerillium » Thu Jan 19, 2017 3:25 pm

Giovenith wrote:
Highfort wrote:
Please, please, there's enough owl for everybody! :lol2:


He's a one-man Hooters!

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Will get to app reviews shortly.
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Postby Mincaldenteans » Thu Jan 19, 2017 4:44 pm

Cer, not sure if you needed a list, but here it is anyway. If anyone's missing, please post link.

Ched
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Ex-Nation

Postby The BranRiech » Thu Jan 19, 2017 4:56 pm

I feel my app may have been missed.

In hindsight, shouldn't have put it in a spoiler. ;)

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Postby Cerillium » Thu Jan 19, 2017 6:41 pm

Mincaldenteans wrote:Cer, not sure if you needed a list, but here it is anyway. If anyone's missing, please post link.

Ched
Granis
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Min
Prim
Tilt
Torsi
UAE:

Lifesaving Civet! Those are next on my list. Bran, I'll get yours, too.



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Ched, wait to post for Romy. I'm working up a collab.
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Postby Holy Lykos » Thu Jan 19, 2017 6:43 pm

erm, cer, Romulus is still on the mission with Venla?

Real Romulus I mean. Unless this is paper Romy.
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Postby Northwest Slobovia » Thu Jan 19, 2017 6:44 pm

Holy Lykos wrote:erm, cer, Romulus is still on the mission with Venla?

Real Romulus I mean. Unless this is paper Romy.

Second-generation xeroxed Romy. :P
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Postby Holy Lykos » Thu Jan 19, 2017 6:52 pm

also, which characters do we bring to this meeting? All of them, even the ones we'll be dropping? Or just the ones we are for sure keeping around?

Just a bit confused and needing clarification.
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Postby The BranRiech » Thu Jan 19, 2017 6:56 pm

It sucks that Char!Bran won't get to see PL through, considering I'm dropping him. But I think it's for the better that I have Yuna and Drova. They work better I think, as I made them when I was a bit more advanced at RP'ing. I can retire Bran knowing he's had a hell of a good run, and I'll have to write up an appropriate sendoff for him. He has a family back home he needs to raise. :p

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