Age of Shinobi (Always Open, Naruto, OOC)

[Imperial--japan]

Ameyuri Ringo is best swordsman.

[Mavorpen]

Landen could you put more detail in your posts? There are things that I feel are being glossed over which would help your posts be better.

[Landenburg]

Landen could you put more detail in your posts? There are things that I feel are being glossed over which would help your posts be better.

I know I know, I won't have my computer until tomorrow and there's only so much I can do off a phone without cramping my hand.

I'll try a bit harder to get more detail in.

[Mavorpen]

Landen could you put more detail in your posts? There are things that I feel are being glossed over which would help your posts be better.

I know I know, I won't have my computer until tomorrow and there's only so much I can do off a phone without cramping my hand.

I'll try a bit harder to get more detail in.

I would personally suggest you take all the time you need. Quality>quantity IMO

[Shadowwell]

Ok i posted, I can add more details if need be

[Landenburg]

I know I know, I won't have my computer until tomorrow and there's only so much I can do off a phone without cramping my hand.

I'll try a bit harder to get more detail in.

I would personally suggest you take all the time you need. Quality>quantity IMO

Read this post and tell me what I need to do to further increase my RP skills. I'm trying to get better at roleplaying.

[Shadowwell]

I would personally suggest you take all the time you need. Quality>quantity IMO

Read this post and tell me what I need to do to further increase my RP skills. I'm trying to get better at roleplaying.

Hmmm i have to think of what to post in response. I could use wind jutsu to perform a wide spread attack, to try to find Hide, but i dont know.

[Imperial--japan]

I mention Ringo being the bae, and someone in IC shits on her swords.

Well played.

[Sindrya]

I mention Ringo being the bae, and someone in IC shits on her swords.

Well played.

My IC post doesn't have anything to do with your OOC post, though. It's a concept I had in mind the first time I want to create a kenjutsu-mastering character.

[Shadowwell]

Well, i posted, and Pennywise is still creepy as shit.

[Landenburg]

Well, i posted, and Pennywise is still creepy as shit.

Yoshiro would have to be throwing randomly, as Hideyori would be completely silent and hidden.

[Shadowwell]

Well, i posted, and Pennywise is still creepy as shit.

Yoshiro would have to be throwing randomly, as Hideyori would be completely silent and hidden.

Yes, but the wind blew away some of the mist for a moment, revealing Hideyoris location at the time. I did since i can't exactly think of what else to put, right now, without my guy seeming to be OP.
I believe one of us will be injured, or somethign then Imperials chracter shows up?

[Landenburg]

Yoshiro would have to be throwing randomly, as Hideyori would be completely silent and hidden.

Yes, but the wind blew away some of the mist for a moment, revealing Hideyoris location at the time. I did since i can't exactly think of what else to put, right now, without my guy seeming to be OP.
I believe one of us will be injured, or somethign then Imperials chracter shows up?

It would probably be best that we come to a draw. I certainly refuse to have Hideyori lose to a Kirigakure ninja who cannot perform the Hiding in Mist Technique!

[Shadowwell]

Yes, but the wind blew away some of the mist for a moment, revealing Hideyoris location at the time. I did since i can't exactly think of what else to put, right now, without my guy seeming to be OP.
I believe one of us will be injured, or somethign then Imperials chracter shows up?

It would probably be best that we come to a draw. I certainly refuse to have Hideyori lose to a Kirigakure ninja who cannot perform the Hiding in Mist Technique!

Hey, he can use a version of it, btu it Is kind of forbidden at the moment, since it would requires use of His Kekkei Genkai.
Ok so Maybe Imperials Charactyer shows up and doe s Genjutsu or something to get us to stop. Imop said to TG them when we were ready for their presence IC.

[Sindrya]

Yes, but the wind blew away some of the mist for a moment, revealing Hideyoris location at the time. I did since i can't exactly think of what else to put, right now, without my guy seeming to be OP.
I believe one of us will be injured, or somethign then Imperials chracter shows up?

It would probably be best that we come to a draw. I certainly refuse to have Hideyori lose to a Kirigakure ninja who cannot perform the Hiding in Mist Technique!

You cannot see through the Hiding in Mist + Silent Killing combo without a Byakugan. Even Sharingan and Rinnegan doesn't work against them.

[Shadowwell]

It would probably be best that we come to a draw. I certainly refuse to have Hideyori lose to a Kirigakure ninja who cannot perform the Hiding in Mist Technique!

You cannot see through the Hiding in Mist + Silent Killing combo without a Byakugan. Even Sharingan and Rinnegan doesn't work against them.

my guy can sense positions through chakra and Blood, the Jutsu would only muffle that.

[Mavorpen]

I would personally suggest you take all the time you need. Quality>quantity IMO

Read this post and tell me what I need to do to further increase my RP skills. I'm trying to get better at roleplaying.

First thing's first: ask yourself whether you've addressed everything in the post toure responding to. Truthfully you only reacted to one part of Atlannia's post: Nanaki making the illusion screens. You didn't address Nanaki using the screens to release a blinding light and explain how Sachi dealt with it. Nor did you address her attacks themselves, just saying he moved away as though they never happened.

Second, add fluff. Once you've addressed the core stuff, describe your character as they perform their actions. Go through their thought processes as they react to things being said and done. You started that at the end but you could have fleshed that out a lot more, and it would have helped if you had addressed everything in the post in the first place.

Those are generally what I try to keep in mind when responding to posts, because if I'm not detailed or thorough enough, it's going to hinder the person I'm responding too because they don't have much to work with.

[Imperial--japan]

I mention Ringo being the bae, and someone in IC shits on her swords.

Well played.

My IC post doesn't have anything to do with your OOC post, though. It's a concept I had in mind the first time I want to create a kenjutsu-mastering character.

More like, fuck that movie.

[Shadowwell]

Well Imp, i think we are ready or almost for your chracter to Show up. But might want to wait for Landen to make a response next.

[Landenburg]

Read this post and tell me what I need to do to further increase my RP skills. I'm trying to get better at roleplaying.

First thing's first: ask yourself whether you've addressed everything in the post toure responding to. Truthfully you only reacted to one part of Atlannia's post: Nanaki making the illusion screens. You didn't address Nanaki using the screens to release a blinding light and explain how Sachi dealt with it. Nor did you address her attacks themselves, just saying he moved away as though they never happened.

Second, add fluff. Once you've addressed the core stuff, describe your character as they perform their actions. Go through their thought processes as they react to things being said and done. You started that at the end but you could have fleshed that out a lot more, and it would have helped if you had addressed everything in the post in the first place.

Those are generally what I try to keep in mind when responding to posts, because if I'm not detailed or thorough enough, it's going to hinder the person I'm responding too because they don't have much to work with.

Ah, I can definitely see tje problem now. I missed a huge chunk of what was actually happening there.

[Landenburg]

You cannot see through the Hiding in Mist + Silent Killing combo without a Byakugan. Even Sharingan and Rinnegan doesn't work against them.

my guy can sense positions through chakra and Blood, the Jutsu would only muffle that.

You can't sense chakra through the Mist, as the Mist is in itself chakra. Otherwise, Hiding in the Mist would only be used to take out civilians.

[Shadowwell]

my guy can sense positions through chakra and Blood, the Jutsu would only muffle that.

You can't sense chakra through the Mist, as the Mist is in itself chakra. Otherwise, Hiding in the Mist would only be used to take out civilians.

YEs but he can still slightly sense, the presence of blood within Hide, but only if he cn clear the overwhelming Chakra, that muffles his senses. thus the Windcutting technique. He is blind but sees through sensing blood and to a lesser extent Chakra.

[Mavorpen]

First thing's first: ask yourself whether you've addressed everything in the post toure responding to. Truthfully you only reacted to one part of Atlannia's post: Nanaki making the illusion screens. You didn't address Nanaki using the screens to release a blinding light and explain how Sachi dealt with it. Nor did you address her attacks themselves, just saying he moved away as though they never happened.

Second, add fluff. Once you've addressed the core stuff, describe your character as they perform their actions. Go through their thought processes as they react to things being said and done. You started that at the end but you could have fleshed that out a lot more, and it would have helped if you had addressed everything in the post in the first place.

Those are generally what I try to keep in mind when responding to posts, because if I'm not detailed or thorough enough, it's going to hinder the person I'm responding too because they don't have much to work with.

Ah, I can definitely see tje problem now. I missed a huge chunk of what was actually happening there.

Glad to help.

[The Rebel Alliances]

Name: Atticus Wolfgard

Age: 22

Rank: Knight (3rd Prince)

Gender: Male

Native Land/Village: Olsia

Current Village of Residence: Konohagakure

Appearance: Knight of Olsia

Personality: Atticus is kind and idealistic. Naive some would say as well, he lives by the Knight's code of honor and chivalry. That being said, Atticus can come off as, unintentionally arrogant, as a result of his high birth and station. Atticus is not used to dealing with those 'beneath' him, and his royal upbringing comes out very easily when addressing others. But, he has a pure heart and desires to bring peace to his kingdom, neigh, the whole continent.

Biography: Born as the fourth child and third Prince of the Olsian Royal Family. Atticus is very close to the line of secession, and he grew up knowing that one day, he could very well be king of his kingdom, or the highest military adviser to one of this brothers. Perhaps even a royal diplomat to his sister should she become Queen. Atticus was raised in the lap of luxury, while his peaple, unknown to him starved, suffered and died of plague, drought and war. Being instructed in mannerisms, combat, sciences and will manipulation(Chakra), Atticus was groomed for the role of possibly one day leading the Kingdom, as his older brothers were soiled by the blood of war to understand how to bring peace. So, his father turned to making Atticus a new kind of King, one who would forsake war, and finally lead their kingdom out of the 'Night Age' and into a new 'Light Age'.

One day, when Atticus was fifteen, his mother took him outside the castle, to see firsthand what their Kingdom was truly like. The sights almost broke the kind boy, as he saw the dead being dragged off in the streets and burned among piles. The starving begging for any semblance of food, and the weak being stepped on by those who were strong. The smells of the dead and suffering would linger with him for life, as his sheltered world view was shattered before him. His mother had told him that for more than a century the entire continent had been like this, ravaged by war, plague and drought the suffering spread from kingdom to kingdom. And as long as one Kingdom felt it needed the resources of the next to feed its own people, then the conflicts would continue.

But he was also told of another land, far away, where the cultures and people were vastly different. Where rumors of a hero had brought peace to all of his lands, for more than one hundred years. And that somehow, the answer that hero had found, eluded the Western Kingdoms. She then told him, that with his brothers molded by war, and his sister falling ill, that he was the last hope for Olsia. Just minutes after that however, a desperate man attacked them, eager to have the food that was in his mother's pouch. Killing his mother in front of the boy's eyes, the beggar turned murderer ran. Never to be seen again.

After that incident, Atticus became a Knight, determined to find the strength and knowledge that will set his people free from suffering. When he was away from the Kingdom on a mission, his Uncle arranged the death of his father in the castle, and of his brothers on the battlefield. And then, arranged a wedding between his sister and a young King of a rival nation, which had for generations been trying to conquer Olsia. The marriage sealed the alliance, and despite the protests of Atticus, Olsia was absorbed by the rival power, and his sister manipulated into a forced marriage.

But not knowing the manipulations of his uncle, he was convinced by his uncle that this was for the best. And that the assassinations were carried out by criminals, and tat this was the best way to keep the kingdom safe. Only partially appeased though, Atticus swore to find another way, and this Uncle suggested that he travel to that far away land, and seek answers there. Following the supposed sage advice of his uncle, Atticus traveled to that distance land, not knowing that he was supposed to never return.

Goals: To find the answer and strength to bring peace to his kingdom, that the Shinobi nations had accomplished thoough Naruto and the 'Long Peace'.

Strengths:
-Atticus possesses 'Will of Flames' or 'Fire Nature' Chakra naturally. But not known to him, he also commands 'Will of Thunder' or 'Lightning Nature' Chakra. Atticus is able to channel the Fire Nature Chakra through his weapons and armor, vastly increasing his damage output and causing wide area of affect damage

-Kenjutsu or Swordsmanship, Atticus is very skilled in sword combat, but his style is foreign to anything that is known in the Shinobi world, that creates an advantage as many dont know how to combat it. Rather than rely on speed or precision he uses his armor to ward off ninjutsu and taijutsu in order to get in close and use his overbearing sword and shield to their full potential.

-Full Armor, this offers protection that is capable of warding off any low level jutsu and resistant to higher level ones. Making him difficult to harm in battle.

Weaknesses:
-Genjutsu, that does not rely on eye sight(Helmet protects him from ocular Genjutsu) is a foreign tactic to him, and akin to magic.

-Knowledge of Chakra in his Kingdom is far behind that of the Shinobi Nations, so he does not know how to properly harness its potential and properties. Using them to enhance his equipment is all he knows how to do.

-Slow Speed, because of his armor, he is a slow target, unless mounted on his trusty steed Mara.

Specialty Jutsu(s): N/A

Kekkei Genkai: N/A

[Landenburg]

You can't sense chakra through the Mist, as the Mist is in itself chakra. Otherwise, Hiding in the Mist would only be used to take out civilians.

YEs but he can still slightly sense, the presence of blood within Hide, but only if he cn clear the overwhelming Chakra, that muffles his senses. thus the Windcutting technique. He is blind but sees through sensing blood and to a lesser extent Chakra.

Which means that if I throw kunai at you, you wouldn't know they were coming through the mist.