World On Fire: Shadow Ops [OPEN] (OOC/Fantasy WW2)

[Wolfenium]

You forgot the Stiff Upper Lip Briton.

Which one would that be, then?

Ariel

[Reverend Norv]

Which one would that be, then?

Ariel

I thought so. Fixed!

[Monfrox]

I will post tomorrow. Gotta get back into the swing of things.

[Wolfenium]

Ariel

I thought so. Fixed!

Thank you. :3

[Korhal IVV]

Player Character App (Shadow Ops Operative)

Name:Konstantin Mikhailovich Simonov
Константи́н Миха́йлович Си́монов

Gender: M
Age: 35
D.O.B.: 03/07/1907
Physical Description and/or Picture: HEHE
Species (if Human, specify if Mundane, Mage, Witch, Minuteman or Esper): Esper
Nationality: Russia
Ethnicity: Russian
Religion (if any): Eastern Orthodox
Powers/Magical Specializations (Only if Mage, Witch or Esper): Mind reading, feed-back, psionic blast, and psionic storm.
Bio: Konstantin Simonov was born as the eldest son of the general Vasily Simonov and Theodora Simonov. He had a sister, named Mata. They were seen as loyal Communists before and after Konstantin and Mata joined the Young Prioneers, but in reality they are secret Orthodox Christians. They didn't keep a Bible in the house, because they wouldn't risk prison, or death(they kept one at the tree in their yard). They often bonded together in the nearby woods near their cozy home in Murmansk, never thinking about the troubles of the rest of the world, until the time when news reached them that Stalin was about to begin a purge, and their father had fled to Finland, leaving their mother with them.

Their mother was their sole acting parent since 1920(when Vasily fled). Vasily would send letters, saying that "I miss you, but I fear for my life." Theodora would answer back, saying, "We will never be broken." Those letters, however, spelled her demise- she was suspected of treason(because one time she sent a letter saying "Just wait till the dictator dies"), and she was exiled to Siberia in 1930, leaving Konstantin and Mata alone. Still, Konstantin and Mata would never talk about it, perhaps to avoid the same fate of being sent to the cold wilderness. They both remained "faithful" members if the Young Pioneers, acting as if nothing happened, never showing their true emotions to the outside world.

That was, until the Nazis invaded the Soviet Union. In the routine screenings, he was found out to have psionic powers, and he was significantly more powerful than most of the Espers in the Young Pioneers.

He then started training to be worthy of the Shadow Ops, because even he is powerful, if he couldn't control his powers properly, then these powers are an epic fail. Finally, after 7 months of training, he went off the Shadow Ops.
Psychological Profile: Sane. Very sane.
Why do you fight?: For the Soviet Union and defend the people.
Defining Quote: "These idiots spend years in a military academy just to learn how to hold a knife and a fork. I'd rather try making a 200 milimeter gun on a BT-5 rather talk with these incompetent fools."
RP Sample:

Heil.

This also - viewtopic.php?f=31&t=369625&hilit=Hitlers

[Wolfenium]

Player Character App (Shadow Ops Operative)

Name:Konstantin Mikhailovich Simonov
Константи́н Миха́йлович Си́монов

Gender: M
Age: 35
D.O.B.: 03/07/1907
Physical Description and/or Picture: HEHE
Species (if Human, specify if Mundane, Mage, Witch, Minuteman or Esper): Esper
Nationality: Russia
Ethnicity: Slav
Religion (if any): Secret Eastern Orthodox
Powers/Magical Specializations (Only if Mage, Witch or Esper): Mind reading, feed-back, psionic blast
Bio: Konstantin Simonov was born as the eldest son of the general Chuikov Simonov and Theodora Simonov. He had a sister, named Mata. They were seen as loyal Communists before and after Konstantin and Mata joined the Young Prioneers, but in reality they are secret Orthodox Christians. They didn't keep a Bible in the house, because they wouldn't risk prison, or death(they kept one at the tree in their yard). They often bonded together in the nearby woods near their cozy home in Murmansk, never thinking about the troubles of the rest of the world, until the time when news reached them that Stalin is about to begin a purge, and their father has fled to Finland, leaving their mother with them.

Their mother was their sole acting parent since 1920(when Chuikov fled). Chuikov would send letters, saying that "I miss you, but I fear for my life." Theodora would answer back, saying, "We will never be broken." Those letters, however, spelled her demise- she was suspected of treason, and she was exiled to Siberia in 1930, leaving Konstantin and Mata alone. Still, Konstantin and Mata would never talk about it, perhaps to avoid the same fate in the cold wilderness. They both remained "faithful" members if the Young Pioneers, acting as if nothing happened, never showing their true emotions to the outside world.

That was, until the Nazis invaded the Soviet Union. In the routine screenings, he was found out to have psionic powers, and he was significantly more powerful than most of the Espers in the Young Pioneers.

He then started training to be worthy of the Shadow Corp, because even he is powerful, if he couldn't control his powers properly, then thise powers are an epic fail. Finally, after 7 months of training, he went off the Shadow Corps.
Psychological Profile: Sane. Very sane.
Why do you fight?: For the Soveit Union. To defend the people.
Defining Quote: "These idiots spend years in a military academy just to learn how to hold a knife and a fork. I'd rather try making a 200 milimeter gun on a BT-5 rather talk with these incompetent fools."
RP Sample:

The Priest declared him to be Christian, and then handed the Khan a BIble, smaller than the one he owns but is newer. "Study it, and you shall know all the answers to the questions pertaining Christianity."

The Khan was baptized the same day, and he was given the responsibility to make his people. Missionaries will be sent to convert the Mongols to Christianity.

[b]Southern Japan

As the 8 clans conquered Japan, they first took central Japan and defeated the Mori clan, afterwards they look upon southern Japan. The seperatist Chokosabe and the pacifist neutralistic Otomo clans were all that stood in the way.

Nagasaki
The Chokosabe fort of Nagasaki stood in the distance in a field that has been turned to a white snow blanket by the cold winter. The 8 armies stood marshalled 900 meters away, setting camp and resting through the night before beginning the assault in the morning.

Eight hours later...
After the cold night passed, the entire allied force rose from their sleep and prepared for war. After 4 hours they finally stood in the field, fully armed and armored.

After several minutes, the brass cannons started blasting the walls of Nagasaki. The Chokosabe have been demoralized by the 3 day long siege;they have been constantly bombarded by cannons in the day and flaming arrows in the night. The walls crumbled as cannon balls wore it down. Half of the allied army charged through the gap while the rest destroyed the gates with cannons and charged through the way, eradicating resistance but sparing civilians and surrendering soldiers. After 2 hours of battle the armies finally reached the keep, where the Chokosabe general, Yamahori Naga resided. The general of the Chokosabe taunted the Ashikaga general, Yoshimitsu, to a duel. The Chokosabe was killed by an arrow shot by one of the Ashikaga elite archers, as the Chokosabe never considered that the Ashikaga are not honorbound and will break honor laws just to achieve victory. Southern Japan now stood ripe for conquest, as the Otomo, who are pacifist, were simply given autonomy, never resisted.

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You ran headlong for a field of landmines and dived in. I'm debating whether I should even try to correct the problems in your application.

[Korhal IVV]

[Wolfenium]

:blink:

-_-

Do you want to know why I'm rejecting this? Then read below. Be warned. It's very blunt.

• Formatting - You bolded everything. The first thing RPers will think when they see your app is an amateur who doesn't know how to format properly. Also, it looks like you're reading the app aloud at full volume. It's annoying.
• Tenses - Please, please, please, please, please watch the tenses. Try sticking to past tense. Rule of thumb: use present tense when you're in dialogue.
  
  

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  • Original: "...until the time when news reached them that Stalin is about to begin a purge, and their father has fled to Finland, leaving their mother with them."
  • Corrected: "...until the time when news reached them that Stalin was about to begin a purge, and their father had fled to Finland, leaving their mother with them."

• Spelling - Soviet. It's not that hard.
• Other forms of Grammar - sentence structure is awkward. I dunno. The whole bio and example sounds odd no matter how many times I read it.
• Information - 'Slav' is not an ethnicity. It's a group of ethnicities. Also, there is no such thing as 'Shadow Corp'. I know it's difficult to read the OP, but read, please. And then his father's name... That's not a proper Russian name. That's a Russian surname.
• Example - I don't like it. It's... boring. Sounds like a list of board game commands than an RP post.

[Korhal IVV]

Player Character App (Shadow Ops Operative)

Name:Konstantin Mikhailovich Simonov
Константи́н Миха́йлович Си́монов

Gender: M
Age: 35
D.O.B.: 03/07/1907
Physical Description and/or Picture: HEHE
Species (if Human, specify if Mundane, Mage, Witch, Minuteman or Esper): Esper
Nationality: Russia
Ethnicity: Russian
Religion (if any): Secret Eastern Orthodox
Powers/Magical Specializations (Only if Mage, Witch or Esper): Mind reading, feed-back, psionic blast, and psionic storm.
Bio: Konstantin Simonov was born as the eldest son of the general Vasily Simonov and Theodora Simonov. He had a sister, named Mata. They were seen as loyal Communists before and after Konstantin and Mata joined the Young Prioneers, but in reality they are secret Orthodox Christians. They didn't keep a Bible in the house, because they wouldn't risk prison, or death(they kept one at the tree in their yard). They often bonded together in the nearby woods near their cozy home in Murmansk, never thinking about the troubles of the rest of the world, until the time when news reached them that Stalin was about to begin a purge, and their father had fled to Finland, leaving their mother with them.

Their mother was their sole acting parent since 1920(when Vasily fled). Vasily would send letters, saying that "I miss you, but I fear for my life." Theodora would answer back, saying, "We will never be broken." Those letters, however, spelled her demise- she was suspected of treason(because one time she sent a letter saying "Just wait till the dictator dies"), and she was exiled to Siberia in 1930, leaving Konstantin and Mata alone. Still, Konstantin and Mata would never talk about it, perhaps to avoid the same fate of being sent to the cold wilderness. They both remained "faithful" members if the Young Pioneers, acting as if nothing happened, never showing their true emotions to the outside world.

That was, until the Nazis invaded the Soviet Union. In the routine screenings, he was found out to have psionic powers, and he was significantly more powerful than most of the Espers in the Young Pioneers.

He then started training to be worthy of the Shadow Ops, because even he is powerful, if he couldn't control his powers properly, then these powers are an epic fail. Finally, after 7 months of training, he went off the Shadow Ops.
Psychological Profile: Sane. Very sane.
Why do you fight?: For the Soviet Union and defend the people.
Defining Quote: "These idiots spend years in a military academy just to learn how to hold a knife and a fork. I'd rather try making a 200 milimeter gun on a BT-5 rather talk with these incompetent fools."
RP Sample:

Heil.

FEGELEIN! FEGELECTED! CORRECTED!

[Wolfenium]

Player Character App (Shadow Ops Operative)

Name:Konstantin Mikhailovich Simonov
Константи́н Миха́йлович Си́монов

Gender: M
Age: 35
D.O.B.: 03/07/1907
Physical Description and/or Picture: HEHE
Species (if Human, specify if Mundane, Mage, Witch, Minuteman or Esper): Esper
Nationality: Russia
Ethnicity: Russian
Religion (if any): Secret Eastern Orthodox (Co-OP note: No such thing as 'secret' Eastern Orthodox. You can simply state the part about keeping their religion a secrecy in the bio.)
Powers/Magical Specializations (Only if Mage, Witch or Esper): Mind reading, feed-back, psionic blast, and psionic storm.
Bio: Konstantin Simonov was born as the eldest son of the general Vasily Simonov and Theodora Simonov. He had a sister, named Mata. They were seen as loyal Communists before and after Konstantin and Mata joined the Young Prioneers, but in reality they are secret Orthodox Christians. They didn't keep a Bible in the house, because they wouldn't risk prison, or death(they kept one at the tree in their yard). They often bonded together in the nearby woods near their cozy home in Murmansk, never thinking about the troubles of the rest of the world, until the time when news reached them that Stalin was about to begin a purge, and their father had fled to Finland, leaving their mother with them.

Their mother was their sole acting parent since 1920(when Vasily fled). Vasily would send letters, saying that "I miss you, but I fear for my life." Theodora would answer back, saying, "We will never be broken." Those letters, however, spelled her demise- she was suspected of treason(because one time she sent a letter saying "Just wait till the dictator dies"), and she was exiled to Siberia in 1930, leaving Konstantin and Mata alone. Still, Konstantin and Mata would never talk about it, perhaps to avoid the same fate of being sent to the cold wilderness. They both remained "faithful" members if the Young Pioneers, acting as if nothing happened, never showing their true emotions to the outside world.

That was, until the Nazis invaded the Soviet Union. In the routine screenings, he was found out to have psionic powers, and he was significantly more powerful than most of the Espers in the Young Pioneers.

He then started training to be worthy of the Shadow Ops, because even he is powerful, if he couldn't control his powers properly, then these powers are an epic fail. Finally, after 7 months of training, he went off the Shadow Ops.
Psychological Profile: Sane. Very sane.
Why do you fight?: For the Soviet Union and defend the people.
Defining Quote: "These idiots spend years in a military academy just to learn how to hold a knife and a fork. I'd rather try making a 200 milimeter gun on a BT-5 rather talk with these incompetent fools."
RP Sample:

Heil.

FEGELEIN! FEGELECTED! CORRECTED!

I'm sorry, but the answer is still no. Firstly, if I had to be that detailed in correcting those errors like your grade school teacher, I'm genuinely worried how you're going to post in the IC thread, because I will get mad doing the same for your IC posts. Secondly, I have no way of knowing that new IC sample is yours. Thirdly, it's just that painful for me to read. I would suggest trying an RP elsewhere, or ask the OP to give you a chance.

And no, it's not because I have something against Protoss templars.Praise Amon. :V

[Korhal IVV]

Actually, I threw in another example in the original post...

[Wolfenium]

Actually, I threw in another example in the original post...

That wasn't any better. Ask OP.

[Korhal IVV]

Actually, I threw in another example in the original post...

That wasn't any better. Ask OP.

*rants*

[Wolfenium]

That wasn't any better. Ask OP.

*rants*

I will discuss with the OP and Co-OPs regarding this. *convenes sekret council*

[Korhal IVV]

*rants*

I will discuss with the OP and Co-OPs regarding this. *convenes sekret council*

Ok

This RP is beautiful...

[Lunas Legion]

So, I see this is back. Excellent. I'll get up a Robert post ASAP. I miss writing him.

[Rupudska]

Well, since there is still much interest as I see, and given that frankly the RP stalled simply due to me, I'm posting again back today.

This hiatus ends now.

That would shock me so much I may die of it.

[Kassaran]

Well, since there is still much interest as I see, and given that frankly the RP stalled simply due to me, I'm posting again back today.

This hiatus ends now.

That would shock me so much I may die of it.

There was a hiatus?

No, but seriously?! DANG IT!

Anyways, my app still stands and I still want to know if you want my write up of my character's abilities now or not Agri.

[Agritum]

I'll post up in the IC then check the new apps.

[Rupudska]

I'll post up in the IC then check the new apps.

Pls do so.

[Rygondria]

Would a Norwegian werewolf be acceptable ?

[Agritum]

Would a Norwegian werewolf be acceptable ?

They certainly are.

Anyways, Axis defectors are fair game too.

[Republic of the Cristo]

I changed it so that I was recruited by Geier. What year is it in IC?

[Agritum]

I changed it so that I was recruited by Geier. What year is it in IC?

1942. Mind, Wolf's spinoff IC is set a few months before.

[Republic of the Cristo]

I changed it so that I was recruited by Geier. What year is it in IC?

1942. Mind, Wolf's spinoff IC is set a few months before.

So, I am to assume that I am accepted then? Are you not OP?