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Scotatrova
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Postby Scotatrova » Tue Jul 14, 2015 12:52 am

Anowa wrote:>Be me
>writing massive amounts of exposition for the Senator.
>Playing XCom at the same time.
>meanwhile Landlord's fucking with shit downstairs.
>a few paragraphs in, coming out brilliantly, with many a cliche.
>MFW power goes out for a moment.
>MFW it happens 3 more times in the next minute and a half.
>MFW my landlord is my uncle.

How did that last one happen?
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Postby Anowa » Tue Jul 14, 2015 1:32 am

Scotatrova wrote:
Anowa wrote:>Be me
>writing massive amounts of exposition for the Senator.
>Playing XCom at the same time.
>meanwhile Landlord's fucking with shit downstairs.
>a few paragraphs in, coming out brilliantly, with many a cliche.
>MFW power goes out for a moment.
>MFW it happens 3 more times in the next minute and a half.
>MFW my landlord is my uncle.

How did that last one happen?

Family moved, aunt and uncle rented the place to us. Apparently to them this means they don't need 24 hours notice and can fuck around with circuitry without letting us know. So much BS.
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Postby Scotatrova » Tue Jul 14, 2015 2:13 am

Anowa wrote:
Scotatrova wrote:How did that last one happen?

Family moved, aunt and uncle rented the place to us. Apparently to them this means they don't need 24 hours notice and can fuck around with circuitry without letting us know. So much BS.

That must suck....also curious on the status of my app.....
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Postby Anowa » Tue Jul 14, 2015 12:12 pm

Scotatrova wrote:Super Identity: The Darach
Real Identity: Mary Cortez
Is the true identity public knowledge or private? Private
Hero, Villain, or Neutral? Neutral
Age: 438
Gender: Female
Appearance:



Group Affiliation: None
Legal Sanctions: None
D&D Alignment: Neutral
Powers:
Intangibility
Energy Manipulation
Extrasensory Perception
Malleable Anatomy
Longevity
Spirit Physiology
Equipment: Garrote
Power Origin: Magic
Weaknesses: If the Darach is immobilized or disoriented she can be taken down
Personality: Dark
Background: Mary was born in Spain in the late 1500s. She grew up a pretty normal life and her family ventured to the new world when she was about 9 years old. After settling in the colony of New Spain and began to become more adventurous. At the age of 25, she discovered that one of her closest friends was in some cult. She ultimately was forced into it but kept it hidden from her family. One day as the cult was performing a ritual, they called upon the sacrifice of 4 women. Mary, her friend and 2 others were chosen for this sacrifice. She tried her best to escape but watched as her friends and the others were killed. Shortly after, she was killed in the sacrifice. The ritual lasted 4 days, and over those 4 days, each girl would be brought back by the spirit of one killed long ago. When it was Mary's turn, she was accidentally brought back to life. She had strange magical powers, which she used and killed the rest of the cult in revenge. She lived out the rest of her life in Alta California and watched as it switched in the hands of Spain, Mexico and then the United States over 400 years. She now resides in secrecy and uses her powers against those who would cause harm to others. She normally doesn't align herself as good or evil.

423 this is to make tracking easier

Accepted, but please format your IC posts better.
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Confederation of imperial states
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Postby Confederation of imperial states » Tue Jul 14, 2015 1:08 pm

Yes, hello I'm back. My spelling isn't crap all this time around, if you believe my narrative writing is, well, too bad I guess.

Super Identity:The Red Hood
Real Identity: Travis Mitchell
Is the true identity public knowledge or private? Private
Hero, Villain, or Neutral? Neutral
Age: 31
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Normal: http://img09.deviantart.net/67f9/i/2013 ... 5zebm0.jpg
Costume: http://cdn.fansided.com/wp-content/blog ... ood-12.jpg

Group Affiliation: [None]
Legal Sanctions: Vigilantism, arscany, murder
D&D Alignment: Chaotic Good
Powers:
- Enhanced Dexterity: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Enhanced_Dexterity
- Enhanced Marksmanship: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Enhanced_Gunmanship
- Explosives proficency: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Expl ... roficiency
Equipment:
- 44. Glock Pistol 2x
- 50. Sniper Rifle
- toothed Combat Knife
- compact light rocket launcher
- FN FAL Rifle
Power Origin: M
Intensive training
Weaknesses:
- Dark Justice; Red Hood has a more darker version of what he thinks justice is, he sees the criminals and the "scum" fo earth as parasites and thinks killing them is more preferable. this leads him to become wanted as a dangerous Vigilante
- Wanted: Red Hood is wanted by the Assassin's guild for Defecting, he will be pursued by Assassin's who will attempt to kill him.
Personality: Smartass, Saracastic, Serious, Stern, Brutal
Background:
Travis hand't known much about his childhood life, all he knew is he was born as a bastard child to his Mother who was a prostitute. Travis Grew up abandoned alone, and on the brink of death. Travios was saved by a man called "hood", the leader of a master assassin's Guild who saw potential in Travis. Travis grew up with the Assassin's Guild until one day, he was sent on an operation, th eOperation had him kill a target in CHicago, but when he arrived at the scene, he learend the Target was a child. Travis refused to assassinate the child and defected from the guild, many assassins were sent after him, but Travis cut them all down. Travis then took up a vigilante Title as "Red Hood" and decided to track down his brith father in an attempt to try and reconcile. travis found out his father and mother were dead, and he also learned he had a Brother. Travis is now on a hellbent mission to Find his brother, whilst still being targetted by the Assassin's guild.

Theme song: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hSb2UJqrtd4
RP experience:
423 this is to make tracking easier


Super Identity: None
Real Identity: John Brakenbrook
Is the true identity public knowledge or private? Public
Hero, Villain, or Neutral? Hero
Age: 40
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Normal: http://cowleatherjackets.com/image/cach ... 80x975.jpg
Costume: None

Group Affiliation: Los Santana Police Force (Sheriff)
Legal Sanctions: None
D&D Alignment: Neutral Good
Powers:
- Enhanced Investigation: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Enha ... estigation
- Old Prime: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Old_Prime
Equipment:
- 44. Magnum Revolver
- Lockpicks
- Sheriff's badge
Power Origin: Police academy
Weaknesses: No Notable weaknesses due to no real superhuman ability
Personality: Stern, Kind, Mercious
Background:
John BrakenBrook's early life was nothing of Notability, he was a kid who grew up in Los Santana during the Rise In Metahumans, though still far from when Guardian showed up. However when John was 12, his parents were killed when armed robbers burst into the Bank they were visiting and shot them both, killing them. John was traumatized, seeing both his beloved parents gunned down before him. the Killer of John's parents was found by a Police Sheriff named Marius Jackson, though after the depression had settled in. John continued on with his life, being cared for by his uncle and aunt, workign twoards one goal, Joining the LSPD Force. John eventually graduated High School and immediatley set off for the Police Academy, John showed great apptitude in many of the Police crafts, Investigation, shootouts, filing reports, basic and advanced work, John suceeded. when John graduated the Academy, he worked his way up the ranks, eventually reaching the title of Sheriff.

John's methods however are questioned by many in the police force, John works with VIgilantes, metahumans, people the police normally wouldn't trust. John knows the usefulness of Meta Humans, being he fought alongside Black Hand at the Battle for Los Santana against Dark Lord. John brakenbrook has been known to work alongside many Vigilantes, most notably, one named "Red Hood".

Theme song:

RP experience:
423 this is to make tracking easier

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Postby Syrixces » Tue Jul 14, 2015 1:31 pm

Can I still apply?

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Postby Dyelli Beybi » Tue Jul 14, 2015 1:32 pm

Syrixces wrote:Can I still apply?


Absolutely! But only on the condition you join the RP :D

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Postby Dyelli Beybi » Tue Jul 14, 2015 1:33 pm

I wrote a reply. My computer ate it. I will wait a bit then try again.

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Postby Anowa » Tue Jul 14, 2015 1:41 pm

Confederation of imperial states wrote:Yes, hello I'm back. My spelling isn't crap all this time around, if you believe my narrative writing is, well, too bad I guess.

Super Identity:The Red Hood
Real Identity: Travis Mitchell
Is the true identity public knowledge or private? Private
Hero, Villain, or Neutral? Neutral
Age: 31
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Normal: http://img09.deviantart.net/67f9/i/2013 ... 5zebm0.jpg
Costume: http://cdn.fansided.com/wp-content/blog ... ood-12.jpg

Group Affiliation: [None]
Legal Sanctions: Vigilantism, arscany, murder
D&D Alignment: Chaotic Good
Powers:
- Enhanced Dexterity: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Enhanced_Dexterity
- Enhanced Marksmanship: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Enhanced_Gunmanship
- Explosives proficency: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Expl ... roficiency
Equipment:
- 44. Glock Pistol 2x
- 50. Sniper Rifle
- toothed Combat Knife
- compact light rocket launcher
- FN FAL Rifle
Power Origin: M
Intensive training
Weaknesses:
- Dark Justice; Red Hood has a more darker version of what he thinks justice is, he sees the criminals and the "scum" fo earth as parasites and thinks killing them is more preferable. this leads him to become wanted as a dangerous Vigilante
- Wanted: Red Hood is wanted by the Assassin's guild for Defecting, he will be pursued by Assassin's who will attempt to kill him.
Personality: Smartass, Saracastic, Serious, Stern, Brutal
Background:
Travis hand't known much about his childhood life, all he knew is he was born as a bastard child to his Mother who was a prostitute. Travis Grew up abandoned alone, and on the brink of death. Travios was saved by a man called "hood", the leader of a master assassin's Guild who saw potential in Travis. Travis grew up with the Assassin's Guild until one day, he was sent on an operation, th eOperation had him kill a target in CHicago, but when he arrived at the scene, he learend the Target was a child. Travis refused to assassinate the child and defected from the guild, many assassins were sent after him, but Travis cut them all down. Travis then took up a vigilante Title as "Red Hood" and decided to track down his brith father in an attempt to try and reconcile. travis found out his father and mother were dead, and he also learned he had a Brother. Travis is now on a hellbent mission to Find his brother, whilst still being targetted by the Assassin's guild.

Theme song: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hSb2UJqrtd4
RP experience:
423 this is to make tracking easier


Super Identity: None
Real Identity: John Brakenbrook
Is the true identity public knowledge or private? Public
Hero, Villain, or Neutral? Hero
Age: 40
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Normal: http://cowleatherjackets.com/image/cach ... 80x975.jpg
Costume: None

Group Affiliation: Los Santana Police Force (Sheriff)
Legal Sanctions: None
D&D Alignment: Neutral Good
Powers:
- Enhanced Investigation: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Enha ... estigation
- Old Prime: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Old_Prime
Equipment:
- 44. Magnum Revolver
- Lockpicks
- Sheriff's badge
Power Origin: Police academy
Weaknesses: No Notable weaknesses due to no real superhuman ability
Personality: Stern, Kind, Mercious
Background:
John Brakenbrook's early life was nothing of Notability, he was a kid who grew up in Los Santana during the Rise In Meta-humans, though still far from when Guardian showed up. However when John was 12, his parents were killed when armed robbers burst into the Bank they were visiting and shot them both, killing them. John was traumatized, seeing both his beloved parents gunned down before him. the Killer of John's parents was found by a Police Sheriff named Marius Jackson, though after the depression had settled in. John continued on with his life, being cared for by his uncle and aunt, working towards one goal, Joining the LSPD Force. John eventually graduated High School and immediately set off for the Police Academy, John showed great aptitude in many of the Police crafts, Investigation, shootouts, filing reports, basic and advanced work, John succeeded. when John graduated the Academy, he worked his way up the ranks, eventually reaching the title of Sheriff.

John's methods however are questioned by many in the police force, John works with Vigilantes, Meta-humans, people the police normally wouldn't trust. John knows the usefulness of Meta Humans, being he fought alongside Black Hand at the Battle for Los Santana against Dark Lord. John Brakenbrook has been known to work alongside many Vigilantes, most notably, one named "Red Hood".

Theme song:

RP experience:
423 this is to make tracking easier

Both accepted, welcome back.
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Tie Winner: Most Involved in P2TM, 2016
Winner: Best Crime RP, 2016

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Scotatrova
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Postby Scotatrova » Tue Jul 14, 2015 2:16 pm

Anowa wrote:
Scotatrova wrote:Super Identity: The Darach
Real Identity: Mary Cortez
Is the true identity public knowledge or private? Private
Hero, Villain, or Neutral? Neutral
Age: 438
Gender: Female
Appearance:



Group Affiliation: None
Legal Sanctions: None
D&D Alignment: Neutral
Powers:
Intangibility
Energy Manipulation
Extrasensory Perception
Malleable Anatomy
Longevity
Spirit Physiology
Equipment: Garrote
Power Origin: Magic
Weaknesses: If the Darach is immobilized or disoriented she can be taken down
Personality: Dark
Background: Mary was born in Spain in the late 1500s. She grew up a pretty normal life and her family ventured to the new world when she was about 9 years old. After settling in the colony of New Spain and began to become more adventurous. At the age of 25, she discovered that one of her closest friends was in some cult. She ultimately was forced into it but kept it hidden from her family. One day as the cult was performing a ritual, they called upon the sacrifice of 4 women. Mary, her friend and 2 others were chosen for this sacrifice. She tried her best to escape but watched as her friends and the others were killed. Shortly after, she was killed in the sacrifice. The ritual lasted 4 days, and over those 4 days, each girl would be brought back by the spirit of one killed long ago. When it was Mary's turn, she was accidentally brought back to life. She had strange magical powers, which she used and killed the rest of the cult in revenge. She lived out the rest of her life in Alta California and watched as it switched in the hands of Spain, Mexico and then the United States over 400 years. She now resides in secrecy and uses her powers against those who would cause harm to others. She normally doesn't align herself as good or evil.

423 this is to make tracking easier

Accepted, but please format your IC posts better.

What's the problem? From what I've seen other posts are the same. If it's the color dialogue then I can work on that.
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Postby Dyelli Beybi » Tue Jul 14, 2015 2:45 pm

Scotatrova wrote:
Anowa wrote:Accepted, but please format your IC posts better.

What's the problem? From what I've seen other posts are the same. If it's the color dialogue then I can work on that.


Urg... I apologize in advance for allowing the grammar Nazi out. I used to mark essays while writing my Masters Thesis and yes, I know I can be prone to the odd grammatical error as well. Here is what I picked up though...
Mary was born in Spain in the late 1500s. She grew up had a pretty normal life growing up and her family ventured (consider 'emigrated to') to the new worldNew World when she was about (is this word necessary?) 9 nine years old.
New Paragraph
After settling in the colony of New Spain and began to become more adventurous. At the age of 25 twenty-five,she discovered that one of her closest friends was in some a cult. She ultimately was ultimately forced into it but kept it hidden from her family. One day, as the cult was performing a ritual, they called upon for the sacrifice of 4 four women. Mary, her friend and 2 two others were chosen for this sacrifice. She tried her best to escape but watched as her friends and the others were killed. Shortly after, she was killed in the sacrifice sacrificed. The ritual lasted4 four days,. and oOver those 4 four days,each girl would be was brought back by the spirit of one killed long ago. When it was Mary's turn (for what?), she was accidentally brought back to life. She had strange magical powers, which she used and killed the rest of the cult in revenge.
New Paragraph
She lived out the rest of her ('rest' implies a finite length of time... i.e. that she is dead) life in Alta California and watched as it switched in the hands between of Spain, Mexico and then the United States over the course of 400 years. She now resides in secrecy and uses her powers against those who would cause harm to others. She normally doesn't align herself as with good or evil (but the last sentence implies she's 'good').

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Postby Confederation of imperial states » Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:12 pm

Dyelli Beybi wrote:
Scotatrova wrote:What's the problem? From what I've seen other posts are the same. If it's the color dialogue then I can work on that.


Urg... I apologize in advance for allowing the grammar Nazi out. I used to mark essays while writing my Masters Thesis and yes, I know I can be prone to the odd grammatical error as well. Here is what I picked up though...
Mary was born in Spain in the late 1500s. She grew up had a pretty normal life growing up and her family ventured (consider 'emigrated to') to the new worldNew World when she was about (is this word necessary?) 9 nine years old.
New Paragraph
After settling in the colony of New Spain and began to become more adventurous. At the age of 25 twenty-five,she discovered that one of her closest friends was in some a cult. She ultimately was ultimately forced into it but kept it hidden from her family. One day, as the cult was performing a ritual, they called upon for the sacrifice of 4 four women. Mary, her friend and 2 two others were chosen for this sacrifice. She tried her best to escape but watched as her friends and the others were killed. Shortly after, she was killed in the sacrifice sacrificed. The ritual lasted4 four days,. and oOver those 4 four days,each girl would be was brought back by the spirit of one killed long ago. When it was Mary's turn (for what?), she was accidentally brought back to life. She had strange magical powers, which she used and killed the rest of the cult in revenge.
New Paragraph
She lived out the rest of her ('rest' implies a finite length of time... i.e. that she is dead) life in Alta California and watched as it switched in the hands between of Spain, Mexico and then the United States over the course of 400 years. She now resides in secrecy and uses her powers against those who would cause harm to others. She normally doesn't align herself as with good or evil (but the last sentence implies she's 'good').


Oh......

Now i know why My posts were described as "sh*t".
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Postby Scotatrova » Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:23 pm

Dyelli Beybi wrote:
Scotatrova wrote:What's the problem? From what I've seen other posts are the same. If it's the color dialogue then I can work on that.


Urg... I apologize in advance for allowing the grammar Nazi out. I used to mark essays while writing my Masters Thesis and yes, I know I can be prone to the odd grammatical error as well. Here is what I picked up though...
Mary was born in Spain in the late 1500s. She grew up had a pretty normal life growing up and her family ventured (consider 'emigrated to') to the new worldNew World when she was about (is this word necessary?) 9 nine years old.
New Paragraph
After settling in the colony of New Spain and began to become more adventurous. At the age of 25 twenty-five,she discovered that one of her closest friends was in some a cult. She ultimately was ultimately forced into it but kept it hidden from her family. One day, as the cult was performing a ritual, they called upon for the sacrifice of 4 four women. Mary, her friend and 2 two others were chosen for this sacrifice. She tried her best to escape but watched as her friends and the others were killed. Shortly after, she was killed in the sacrifice sacrificed. The ritual lasted4 four days,. and oOver those 4 four days,each girl would be was brought back by the spirit of one killed long ago. When it was Mary's turn (for what?), she was accidentally brought back to life. She had strange magical powers, which she used and killed the rest of the cult in revenge.
New Paragraph
She lived out the rest of her ('rest' implies a finite length of time... i.e. that she is dead) life in Alta California and watched as it switched in the hands between of Spain, Mexico and then the United States over the course of 400 years. She now resides in secrecy and uses her powers against those who would cause harm to others. She normally doesn't align herself as with good or evil (but the last sentence implies she's 'good').

I didn't know our apps and IC posts were supposed to be essay like....so excuse me for the mistakes and....all those mistakes....
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Postby Serah » Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:28 pm

Confederation of imperial states wrote:
Dyelli Beybi wrote:
Urg... I apologize in advance for allowing the grammar Nazi out. I used to mark essays while writing my Masters Thesis and yes, I know I can be prone to the odd grammatical error as well. Here is what I picked up though...
Mary was born in Spain in the late 1500s. She grew up had a pretty normal life growing up and her family ventured (consider 'emigrated to') to the new worldNew World when she was about (is this word necessary?) 9 nine years old.
New Paragraph
After settling in the colony of New Spain and began to become more adventurous. At the age of 25 twenty-five,she discovered that one of her closest friends was in some a cult. She ultimately was ultimately forced into it but kept it hidden from her family. One day, as the cult was performing a ritual, they called upon for the sacrifice of 4 four women. Mary, her friend and 2 two others were chosen for this sacrifice. She tried her best to escape but watched as her friends and the others were killed. Shortly after, she was killed in the sacrifice sacrificed. The ritual lasted4 four days,. and oOver those 4 four days,each girl would be was brought back by the spirit of one killed long ago. When it was Mary's turn (for what?), she was accidentally brought back to life. She had strange magical powers, which she used and killed the rest of the cult in revenge.
New Paragraph
She lived out the rest of her ('rest' implies a finite length of time... i.e. that she is dead) life in Alta California and watched as it switched in the hands between of Spain, Mexico and then the United States over the course of 400 years. She now resides in secrecy and uses her powers against those who would cause harm to others. She normally doesn't align herself as with good or evil (but the last sentence implies she's 'good').


Oh......

Now i know why My posts were described as "sh*t".


They were at least readable and made actually some genuine sense, even if it just felt like you were just dropping a brick without making aesthetic.

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Postby Confederation of imperial states » Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:35 pm

Serah wrote:
Confederation of imperial states wrote:
Oh......

Now i know why My posts were described as "sh*t".


They were at least readable and made actually some genuine sense, even if it just felt like you were just dropping a brick without making aesthetic.


Well apperantly everyone thought my writing (both spelling and my story telling) was complete "sh*t". knowing this really set me off, and i Left the RP

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Postby Dyelli Beybi » Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:43 pm

I never complained about your posts... well maybe I once, politely, implied that paragraphs are a good idea.

Anyway I can't help it, it used to, quite literally, be my job to pick people's grammar to pieces. I did it nicely of course - all constructive feedback.

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Postby Anowa » Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:58 pm

Scotatrova wrote:
Anowa wrote:Accepted, but please format your IC posts better.

What's the problem? From what I've seen other posts are the same. If it's the color dialogue then I can work on that.


I don't mind the color, It's just everyone speaks in the same paragraph, a new one should be formed everytime someone else speaks. Other than that nit pick its fine.
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Postby Anowa » Tue Jul 14, 2015 4:00 pm

Confederation of imperial states wrote:
Serah wrote:
They were at least readable and made actually some genuine sense, even if it just felt like you were just dropping a brick without making aesthetic.


Well apperantly everyone thought my writing (both spelling and my story telling) was complete "sh*t". knowing this really set me off, and I left the RP

I got a few TGs saying so, not naming any names, I found them readable but others didn't so I informed you. Either way you're back and your writing has improved.
*Removes belt*
Now start having fun.
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Postby Confederation of imperial states » Tue Jul 14, 2015 4:03 pm

Dyelli Beybi wrote:I never complained about your posts... well maybe I once, politely, implied that paragraphs are a good idea.

Anyway I can't help it, it used to, quite literally, be my job to pick people's grammar to pieces. I did it nicely of course - all constructive feedback.


I was told everyone hated my Posts with a passion and thought they were "you know what", It cost me alot.

In anycase, not every posts has to be formed perfectly like an essay, with perfect paragraphs, sentences, and such. soem times people word thigns diffrently due to Narrative story telling, or maybe thats just how their wiritng style is (scot's app Bio can be used as an example).

Anowa wrote:
Confederation of imperial states wrote:
Well apperantly everyone thought my writing (both spelling and my story telling) was complete "sh*t". knowing this really set me off, and I left the RP

I got a few TGs saying so, not naming any names, I found them readable but others didn't so I informed you. Either way you're back and your writing has improved.
*Removes belt*
Now start having fun.


Fun, eh?

*grabs Anowa's Iron Bark table and heaves it out the 10 story window*

THATS FOR BUYING OVEREXPENSIVE FURNITURE
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Postby Confederation of imperial states » Tue Jul 14, 2015 4:15 pm

Posted!

I ran it through spell checker

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Postby Anowa » Tue Jul 14, 2015 4:16 pm

Confederation of imperial states wrote:
Dyelli Beybi wrote:I never complained about your posts... well maybe I once, politely, implied that paragraphs are a good idea.

Anyway I can't help it, it used to, quite literally, be my job to pick people's grammar to pieces. I did it nicely of course - all constructive feedback.


I was told everyone hated my Posts with a passion and thought they were "you know what", It cost me alot.

In anycase, not every posts has to be formed perfectly like an essay, with perfect paragraphs, sentences, and such. soem times people word thigns diffrently due to Narrative story telling, or maybe thats just how their wiritng style is (scot's app Bio can be used as an example).

Anowa wrote:I got a few TGs saying so, not naming any names, I found them readable but others didn't so I informed you. Either way you're back and your writing has improved.
*Removes belt*
Now start having fun.


Fun, eh?

*grabs Anowa's Iron Bark table and heaves it out the 10 story window*

THATS FOR BUYING OVEREXPENSIVE FURNITURE


R'whean lis awwagain tous lis noro gos teem.

*Cthulhu rises from the ocean and stomps on CIS*


it seems like CIS...

*I put on sunglasses*

entered someones old stomping grounds..

*YEEEEEAAAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!*<

That was terrible.
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Postby Confederation of imperial states » Tue Jul 14, 2015 4:18 pm

Anowa wrote:
Confederation of imperial states wrote:
I was told everyone hated my Posts with a passion and thought they were "you know what", It cost me alot.

In anycase, not every posts has to be formed perfectly like an essay, with perfect paragraphs, sentences, and such. soem times people word thigns diffrently due to Narrative story telling, or maybe thats just how their wiritng style is (scot's app Bio can be used as an example).



Fun, eh?

*grabs Anowa's Iron Bark table and heaves it out the 10 story window*

THATS FOR BUYING OVEREXPENSIVE FURNITURE


R'whean lis awwagain tous lis noro gos teem.

*Cthulhu rises from the ocean and stomps on CIS*


it seems like CIS...

*I put on sunglasses*

entered someones old stomping grounds..

*YEEEEEAAAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!*<

That was terrible.


*looks out the skyscraper window as Cuthulu raises his foot*

fuck me-

*half the building is crushed as Cuthulu stomps**

*anowa makes a really bad pun*

*sticks head out from under pile*

That.......was......abismole

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Founded: Jul 29, 2014
Left-wing Utopia

Postby Anowa » Tue Jul 14, 2015 4:22 pm

Now introducing the fabulous new...

Hemingway Writing Crutch Assistance!!!

Now with only a few crippling bugs!!

Write like someone who has a braincell!!!

Ward off Grammar Nazis!!!

Make it seem like you passed your English exam!!!

Buy Pirate Torrent Get yours, today!!!
just click the fucking link...
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Winner: Best Crime RP, 2016

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Postby Serah » Tue Jul 14, 2015 4:23 pm

Confederation of imperial states wrote:
Anowa wrote:
R'whean lis awwagain tous lis noro gos teem.

*Cthulhu rises from the ocean and stomps on CIS*


it seems like CIS...

*I put on sunglasses*

entered someones old stomping grounds..

*YEEEEEAAAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!*<

That was terrible.


*looks out the skyscraper window as Cuthulu raises his foot*

fuck me-

*half the building is crushed as Cuthulu stomps**

*anowa makes a really bad pun*

*sticks head out from under pile*

That.......was......abismole


*Very loud and sarcastic slow clap*

Congrats! You've made everyone insane.

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Postby Confederation of imperial states » Tue Jul 14, 2015 4:24 pm

Anowa wrote:Now introducing the fabulous new...

Hemingway Writing Crutch Assistance!!!

Now with only a few crippling bugs!!

Write like someone who has a braincell!!!

Ward off Grammar Nazis!!!

Make it seem like you passed your English exam!!!

Buy Pirate Torrent Get yours, today!!!
just click the fucking link...


*Pulls himself from under Cuthulu's foot*

Oooooooow.....

*drags himself over to Anowa, grabs onto Anowa's leg*

haaaaalp meeee, plllllllssssss

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