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[The Black Plains]

Someone visited the town? gotta read this

Yeah, Bearon wanted Simon taken away? So I just fabricated some priests for him so that he could be taken to the Citadel.

[Nekronia]

Okay, I'm all caught up on the IC. *pant pant* Man, stinkin' novel on the first page! The priests' reading of sins gives me a dark, amusing idea. "Vile one, you have been accused of many crimes against the state. How do you plead?" "MY LUTE IS CONSUMED BY THE MOUNTAINS OF OLD" "... ... Clearly you are possessed by the darkness you serve. Mauro, shine your light and let us see into his mind what the crimes of the accused are. I see that- AUAUUUUGGHH IT BURNS" "MAAHAHAH YOU SHOULD HAVE LISTENED TO YOUR MMMOTHER"

[Great Empire of Gamilus]

Someone visited the town? gotta read this

Yeah, Bearon wanted Simon taken away? So I just fabricated some priests for him so that he could be taken to the Citadel.

While a good read what was your IC post I murdered everyone cept Simon.

[The Black Plains]

Yeah, Bearon wanted Simon taken away? So I just fabricated some priests for him so that he could be taken to the Citadel.

While a good read what was your IC post I murdered everyone cept Simon.

You... said in the post that people retreated into the keep. I assumed you did not take the keep because, if you did, you doubtless would have suffered much higher casualties than... What, four guys? This assumption was bolstered by the fact that you didn't write about storming the Keep. You wrote about killing everyone, but that seemed systematic and leisurely, which taking a Keep would not be. I'm confused, sorry.

[Great Empire of Gamilus]

While a good read what was your IC post I murdered everyone cept Simon.

You... said in the post that people retreated into the keep. I assumed you did not take the keep because, if you did, you doubtless would have suffered much higher casualties than... What, four guys? This assumption was bolstered by the fact that you didn't write about storming the Keep. You wrote about killing everyone, but that seemed systematic and leisurely, which taking a Keep would not be. I'm confused, sorry.

The Dark Champion cleared it out himself, even then I murdered 80% of the guards outside in the city, and a mere 20% of them would be no match for a single brute of a man who could of killed them all given enough time, For Klast does not care for those whom are below his efforts as long as they are dead.

[The Black Plains]

You... said in the post that people retreated into the keep. I assumed you did not take the keep because, if you did, you doubtless would have suffered much higher casualties than... What, four guys? This assumption was bolstered by the fact that you didn't write about storming the Keep. You wrote about killing everyone, but that seemed systematic and leisurely, which taking a Keep would not be. I'm confused, sorry.

The Dark Champion cleared it out himself, even then I murdered 80% of the guards outside in the city, and a mere 20% of them would be no match for a single brute of a man who could of killed them all given enough time, For Klast does not care for those whom are below his efforts as long as they are dead.

But it's still a Keep... with stone and wood and ramparts. It's really not important. I don't care about rescuing anyone. It's just that now my post will have to change dramatically.

[Great Empire of Gamilus]

The Dark Champion cleared it out himself, even then I murdered 80% of the guards outside in the city, and a mere 20% of them would be no match for a single brute of a man who could of killed them all given enough time, For Klast does not care for those whom are below his efforts as long as they are dead.

But it's still a Keep... with stone and wood and ramparts. It's really not important. I don't care about rescuing anyone. It's just that now my post will have to change dramatically.

Sorry, just had to point out that little mistake. but overall it was very well written. maybe I should go back and edit it so some survive?

[The Black Plains]

But it's still a Keep... with stone and wood and ramparts. It's really not important. I don't care about rescuing anyone. It's just that now my post will have to change dramatically.

Sorry, just had to point out that little mistake. but overall it was very well written. maybe I should go back and edit it so some survive?

No. Just do me a favor and edit it so it's more clear that you stormed the keep.

[The Batorys]

So, as mentioned, some of the gods Felurin has are "Elder Gods," older than the main gods, and largely forgotten. Probably the only one that's still widely worshiped is the Elder God of the Sea, though probably few call him/her "Elder God," as most probably just think of him/her as being the sea god.

Oros: Aspected to the sea. Obviously, not really dark or light, or good or evil. Just the sea. Sometimes helpful, sometimes dangerous. Possibly irritates Vidia due to said arbitrariness, but likely gets along just fine with Gora. Probably sometimes annoys Gandolo, but largely gets along with him due to Oros' unpredictability just being a form of cheating. Likely not very well liked by Mauro, cause magic. Still widely worshiped, probably.

Levish Tezat: Elder god of time. Probably forgotten, because of fading into myth, and perhaps in some ways being replaced by various newer gods.

Yaneth: Elder Goddess of darkness, fertility, nature, life and death, balance. Patron goddess of House Vaiel in Felurin, largely forgotten elsewhere. Precursor to Gora, Vidia, and perhaps also Cerin.

I'm also thinking of perhaps a forgotten winter/cold elder god/goddess, somewhat similar to Oros. But that'll require more thought.

[Great Empire of Gamilus]

My unit cannon

Hellhounds: Dog Demons of the deep underworld, these creatures came into existence roughly several dozen centuries ago, presumably created by the Dark God Harvorth, God of hunting and the wild, Created from the spirits of the great northern Wolves, intelligent creatures the size of fully grown horses whom were slaughtered by a King long forgotten they were given a chance to stalk the realms once again as they were close to ruthless Harvoth hearts...
First appearing in their homeland of old these beasts lay death to the kingdom that murdered them and swore allegiance to Evil. the previous Keepers grand father recruited them with a blood pact which survives to this very day.

Spyderlings: half breed-Women from the far of forests of Velarian, their coming into being is somewhat unknown but what is known was the fact it involved witchcraft of an unknown order of female mages, these ladies are a truely twisted image of humanity mixed with the cunning and gile of a spider, they string up webs in dark tunnels and rarely go above ground during the day, when they do raid, it is indeed a terrifying thing to behold as all men, regardless of age are never seen again. rumours persist of them being forced to breed with the halfbreeds and eaten afterwards. being recruited several decades ago these women have enjoyed the Company of other creatures of evil, and have even stopped eating their comrades after the first.

Dark Elves: Elves are fickle creatures catering to their wants and desires with a magical flick of the wrist... unfortunately those whom are born without are cast out of Elvish society, given little to survive these maidens often turn to evil, using their fast reflexes and sharp eyes these women take up the crossbow with a guilty pleasure, Crossbows are something new to Elven society and truely is a rebel act to use one over the finer arts of archery.

Trolls: Unlike normal trolls the Deeping Trolls are a breed who evolved to be industrious and proficient with a hammer, these beings can build a catapult or full set of armour within half a dozen hours if assisted by Imps, stalwart and brave when in the workshop they will defend their workplace until death, outside of the workshop though, they will run and leave fighting to better creatures.

Imps: Creatures conjoured from Magic by the very first Keeper, these being are magical by nature and creed, able to build massive structures and dig caverns in a single hour, they also share a similarity with ants, in that being they can carry several times their own weight an then some!

Skeletons: The corpses of prisoners and enemies whom were worthy of fighting honourably, their remains are gathered and stripped of all flesh and organ, leaving their pristine skeleton behind alongside a soul,this soul is bound back to their skeleton and given magical tendons and muscles of air to which they can move their limbs once again, though this time they fight for the other side...

The Possessed Armours of the Dark Champions:

Klast (http://th01.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2 ... 4swrj5.jpg)
Klast was an honourable Paladin whom served Mauro faithfully for several decades, becoming lord of a grand city he lead several forces into the lands of his foes, slaughtering them alongside his knight core, however for since they had been crusading for a decade the men had grown tired and hateful of their leader who kept pressing on, in secret they plotted against him and a band of knights still very much loyal to their liege, and upon the battlefield facing off against a rival lord of another city his soldiers turned on him, the battle was a long and tiresome one as Klast and his loyalists slaughtered the traitors and enemy alike.

However he was abandon by Mauro and his priests whom had crusaded with him, with all hope shattered he fell in battle, alongside all but two of his knights... However after the battle they had dragged their lords corpse to the Keeper, begging to bring him back and pledging loyalty and honour to him and his blood line. With an agreement set in blood Klast was bought back and turned away from the path of all that was good and holy, becoming an avatar of darkness...



Janic (http://img17.imageshack.us/img17/1879/vkwip2.jpg)

Janic grew up in a great land of volcanic rock and magic, where a high council of magii ruled over the people with a core of Magma Knights, being clad in armour of semi molten rock and wielding weapons of great power, Janic rose through the ranks when he came of age, gradually and with time, on the sixteenth year of his service as a Knight captain he fouled a plot by Magii whom plotted to take over the realm, however his efforts went unfavoured and questioned, the Magii was a swindler and favourite of the others thus explaining his popularity... With his title in ruins and a small band of Knights Janic left the realm, anger seething and temper flared, he and his knight core then instigated a civil war, the final battle of which saw Janic's death and dispersion, where which his minions and Knights cast curses and spells upon themselves to live forever, undying by natural means. However Janic's soul was bound to the molten armour that would become his body.

Vorbuch (http://oi62.tinypic.com/2zqu06o.jpg)

Vorbuch grew up in the far northlands over the oceans, a giant of a man whom defended his tribe with sheer might from Orcs and Snow Elves, of course his descent into darkness is the least tragic, with the passing of spring, one of two seasons this far north, Winter came once again enshrouding the land in heavy snow and ice, during these periods the snow Elves came out to hunt near constantly, the tribe retreated into a series of caves and caverns while under siege from elven hordes to the deep dark of the Earth...

Down in the dark the tribe became trapped, cornered into a room that served as an alter to a god of forgotten times, whispers and voices began to enter his mind, telling him to pick up the giant war axe on the alter, moving forward he did as the voice asked and claimed it as his own, god and man entwined in a bargain of worship and blessings, Slaughtering the Elves the tribe began worshipping the now dubbed
"Forgotten God" or "She of the cold winds" and built a civilization under the mountain. Shortly after Vorbuch was blessed with the armour he currently wore and over the period of several hundred years faded to dust in his armour, but soul and metal bonded as one even as his people faded around him... found centuries later by the twenty third Keeper, and eschewed into service for eternity.

Baltarc (http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/ ... 5gk1kp.jpg)

Baltarc is a true tyrant, lording over an ancient land that even he has forgotten the name of when alive he was an all powerful lord, his tale is a fairly tragic one. When on a campaign of conquest he came across a small conclave of Elven mages whom apparently could read the future, he inquired forth to practise their skills on his fate and fortune. None of them would accept him, all but one. An older Elven maiden whom took a liking to the tyrant, seeing good in his soul.

She went to his personal tent guarded by the absolute most loyal soldiers and read what would transpire, revealing he was to be killed by one whom would love him and he love her in return... however while this happened several dozen soldiers raided the elven encampment, slaughtering them all for defying their lord, unaware of this the two beings in that tent shared playful words which soon turned to something else...
When morning came they were shocked to find the encampment burning, all evidence pointed to Baltarcs enemy which was set up by the soldiers.

He continued his campaign with this Elven maiden by his side, falling ever deeper for each other as her skills helped him continue on this long war. a year later they were wed and the kingdom became less opressive, cheerful and free! everyone loved their former tyrant king as one of pure gold and the seer who turned stone to love. However the Maiden looked into spells of looking into the past, and saw what his soldiers committed to her people! seething with rage she took his longsword and pierced him though the chest with it and pinned him to the bed, before he fadded into death he felt her tear out his heart with her bare hands, a look of questioning on his features.

He awoke buried in a crypt,his armour being the cold skin he now wore, his soul bound to it in anger and by rituals of a personality cult, slaughtering them he used their souls to bring forth a pact with several demons, a burning quest to find out, what had he done wrong?


What does everyone think of my unit cannon so far?

[The Batorys]

I kinda see Orcs as practicing some sort of really basic animist type religion, or ancestor worship. I mean, Orcs may be Orcs, but they still have lives and shit. I don't see why an Orc would want their flesh rent any more than an elf would.

Everyone must praise Metallos; Worldshaper! What, did you want the world to come out pear shaped?

Lots of Felurinites, including Eluthryn Vaiel, the Margravine, likely believe that Yaneth, the Elder Goddess of Darkness, gave birth to the world. In the usual manner of giving birth.

[Great Empire of Gamilus]

Sorry, just had to point out that little mistake. but overall it was very well written. maybe I should go back and edit it so some survive?

No. Just do me a favor and edit it so it's more clear that you stormed the keep.

Okay, will go back and make a minor edit.

So, as mentioned, some of the gods Felurin has are "Elder Gods," older than the main gods, and largely forgotten. Probably the only one that's still widely worshiped is the Elder God of the Sea, though probably few call him/her "Elder God," as most probably just think of him/her as being the sea god.

Oros: Aspected to the sea. Obviously, not really dark or light, or good or evil. Just the sea. Sometimes helpful, sometimes dangerous. Possibly irritates Vidia due to said arbitrariness, but likely gets along just fine with Gora. Probably sometimes annoys Gandolo, but largely gets along with him due to Oros' unpredictability just being a form of cheating. Likely not very well liked by Mauro, cause magic. Still widely worshiped, probably.

Levish Tezat: Elder god of time. Probably forgotten, because of fading into myth, and perhaps in some ways being replaced by various newer gods.

Yaneth: Elder Goddess of darkness, fertility, nature, life and death, balance. Patron goddess of House Vaiel in Felurin, largely forgotten elsewhere. Precursor to Gora, Vidia, and perhaps also Cerin.

I'm also thinking of perhaps a forgotten winter/cold elder god/goddess, somewhat similar to Oros. But that'll require more thought.

I think I can cover the Forgotten winter god...

[The Black Plains]

Everyone must praise Metallos; Worldshaper! What, did you want the world to come out pear shaped?

Lots of Felurinites, including Eluthryn Vaiel, the Margravine, likely believe that Yaneth, the Elder Goddess of Darkness, gave birth to the world. In the usual manner of giving birth.

... Eww.

[The Batorys]

Being the crazy fanatics that they are he could believe that they were cleansing heathens?

I honestly don't know how he could reasonably be made to believe that. Killing innocents really isn't in their modus operandi, but even more so they would never transgress against the local temporal authorities, given their devotion to the authority of the state as followers of Mauro. It would be like blaming Nature priests for burning down a forest. It just doesn't make sense, no matter how griefstricken you are. And, honestly, if he joins forces with Balor what are the odds that he's not going to find out it was his minions? Certainly, word would get around, right? I think there are a few too many holes in this bucket. He should presume his son dead and then maybe go into a spiral because of that.

And there's other problems with it. Mauro despises magic and human sacrifice, which were both clearly at play here. And a Priest of Mauro was killed. And there are dead cultists and hellhounds and no dead Guardsmen of Mauro.

In fact, if anything, he should hate cultists if he presumes his son dead. So he should presume his son missing.

Yeah... Mauro priests are likely obnoxious, overly pious, and often condescending, but slaughtering villagers and killing a random kid wouldn't fit with their version of morality. They'd probably want to ensure the kid was instructed in the ways of Mauro, the bringer of light and all that good godly stuff. Certainly they probably irritate the crap out of people in this universe, but I doubt anyone thinks that they're really evil.

[Bearon]

BP it's a big part of my story so just going to say The Lich sensed the presence of the holy rituals you guys did to cleanse the area and assumed the servants of Mauro destroyed the town.

[Delmonte]

BP it's a big part of my story. I'm just going to say The Lich sensed the presence of the holy rituals you guys did to cleanse the area and assumed the servants of Mauro cleansed the town.

And... when he finds out that servants of Balor did it? Which he, like, inevitably has to. Given that he'll be joining their army. Here's what I suggest:

Your son is missing or killed or whatever. And he just thinks that joining Balor might bring him back.

[Great Empire of Gamilus]

BP it's a big part of my story. I'm just going to say The Lich sensed the presence of the holy rituals you guys did to cleanse the area and assumed the servants of Mauro cleansed the town.

Well I played my part in it, now to continue my story, Also what does everyone think of my unit cannon and my Champions history? I still have one to go.

[Bearon]

BP it's a big part of my story. I'm just going to say The Lich sensed the presence of the holy rituals you guys did to cleanse the area and assumed the servants of Mauro cleansed the town.

And... when he finds out that servants of Balor did it? Which he, like, inevitably has to. Given that he'll be joining their army.

Then he'll destroy those responsible and retrieve his son. It's actually kind of what I wanted and it gives me a good tie in to reunite with my son.

[Bearon]

BP it's a big part of my story. I'm just going to say The Lich sensed the presence of the holy rituals you guys did to cleanse the area and assumed the servants of Mauro cleansed the town.

And... when he finds out that servants of Balor did it? Which he, like, inevitably has to. Given that he'll be joining their army. Here's what I suggest:

Your son is missing or killed or whatever. And he just thinks that joining Balor might bring him back.

Nah. I want my son and The Lich to meet on the battle field The Lich recognizing him but Simon not. It'll be a great dramatic scene.

[The Batorys]

No. Just do me a favor and edit it so it's more clear that you stormed the keep.

Okay, will go back and make a minor edit.

So, as mentioned, some of the gods Felurin has are "Elder Gods," older than the main gods, and largely forgotten. Probably the only one that's still widely worshiped is the Elder God of the Sea, though probably few call him/her "Elder God," as most probably just think of him/her as being the sea god.

Oros: Aspected to the sea. Obviously, not really dark or light, or good or evil. Just the sea. Sometimes helpful, sometimes dangerous. Possibly irritates Vidia due to said arbitrariness, but likely gets along just fine with Gora. Probably sometimes annoys Gandolo, but largely gets along with him due to Oros' unpredictability just being a form of cheating. Likely not very well liked by Mauro, cause magic. Still widely worshiped, probably.

Levish Tezat: Elder god of time. Probably forgotten, because of fading into myth, and perhaps in some ways being replaced by various newer gods.

Yaneth: Elder Goddess of darkness, fertility, nature, life and death, balance. Patron goddess of House Vaiel in Felurin, largely forgotten elsewhere. Precursor to Gora, Vidia, and perhaps also Cerin.

I'm also thinking of perhaps a forgotten winter/cold elder god/goddess, somewhat similar to Oros. But that'll require more thought.

I think I can cover the Forgotten winter god...

I was thinking a goddess, actually, since I think Oros and Levish Tezat are both sorta male.

And, again, dark, but not really evil. Because winter isn't evil any more than the sea (Oros) is evil. Winter can be harsh, but it isn't always. It's a time of contraction, of sleep, of stories by the fire. Of beautiful night sky.

[The Batorys]

Lots of Felurinites, including Eluthryn Vaiel, the Margravine, likely believe that Yaneth, the Elder Goddess of Darkness, gave birth to the world. In the usual manner of giving birth.

... Eww.

Polytheist creation myths should be a bit gross, dammit. I stand by my people believing that Yaneth popped the world out her birth canal.

[The Batorys]

BP it's a big part of my story so just going to say The Lich sensed the presence of the holy rituals you guys did to cleanse the area and assumed the servants of Mauro destroyed the town.

Yeah, I agree with Delmonte on this.

Your character could just be grief stricken at losing his son, and willing to join anyone he thinks might be able to bring him back. It's simpler and doesn't require such a stretch as your character thinking that the Mauro-ites did something totally out of character for them.

[Delmonte]

BP it's a big part of my story. I'm just going to say The Lich sensed the presence of the holy rituals you guys did to cleanse the area and assumed the servants of Mauro cleansed the town.

Well I played my part in it, now to continue my story, Also what does everyone think of my unit cannon and my Champions history? I still have one to go.

Glad you asked.

My unit cannon

Hellhounds: Dog Demons of the deep underworld, these creatures came into existence roughly several dozen centuries ago, presumably created by the Dark God Harvorth, God of hunting and the wild, Created from the spirits of the great northern Wolves, intelligent creatures the size of fully grown horses whom were slaughtered by a King long forgotten they were given a chance to stalk the realms once again as they were close to ruthless Harvoth hearts...
First appearing in their homeland of old these beasts lay death to the kingdom that murdered them and swore allegiance to Evil. the previous Keepers grand father recruited them with a blood pact which survives to this very day.

Absolutely fine.

Spyderlings: half breed-Women from the far of forests of Velarian, their coming into being is somewhat unknown but what is known was the fact it involved witchcraft of an unknown order of female mages, these ladies are a truely twisted image of humanity mixed with the cunning and gile of a spider, they string up webs in dark tunnels and rarely go above ground during the day, when they do raid, it is indeed a terrifying thing to behold as all men, regardless of age are never seen again. rumours persist of them being forced to breed with the halfbreeds and eaten afterwards. being recruited several decades ago these women have enjoyed the Company of other creatures of evil, and have even stopped eating their comrades after the first.

Fine, on the caveat that they either be weak to Mauro's workings or fire. Your choice. Nice touch on the end, there.

Dark Elves: Elves are fickle creatures catering to their wants and desires with a magical flick of the wrist... unfortunately those whom are born without are cast out of Elvish society, given little to survive these maidens often turn to evil, using their fast reflexes and sharp eyes these women take up the crossbow with a guilty pleasure, Crossbows are something new to Elven society and truely is a rebel act to use one over the finer arts of archery.

No problem here.

Trolls: Unlike normal trolls the Deeping Trolls are a breed who evolved to be industrious and proficient with a hammer, these beings can build a catapult or full set of armour within half a dozen hours if assisted by Imps, stalwart and brave when in the workshop they will defend their workplace until death, outside of the workshop though, they will run and leave fighting to better creatures.

Ah... Here, I have an issue. Modern manufacturing can't build a catapult in a half hour. And a full set of armor takes literally days to make no matter HOW fast you are because the laws of physics regarding melting and heat change for no-one.

Imps: Creatures conjoured from Magic by the very first Keeper, these being are magical by nature and creed, able to build massive structures and dig caverns in a single hour, they also share a similarity with ants, in that being they can carry several times their own weight an then some!

Again... Digging caverns in an hour? Kind of OP. I get that they're magical creatures so they can be easily more productive than the average man, but not more productive than an entire civilization.

Skeletons: The corpses of prisoners and enemies whom were worthy of fighting honourably, their remains are gathered and stripped of all flesh and organ, leaving their pristine skeleton behind alongside a soul,this soul is bound back to their skeleton and given magical tendons and muscles of air to which they can move their limbs once again, though this time they fight for the other side...

Seems reasonable, the caveat being that they will be susceptible to Mauro's powers.

[Delmonte]

And... when he finds out that servants of Balor did it? Which he, like, inevitably has to. Given that he'll be joining their army. Here's what I suggest:

Your son is missing or killed or whatever. And he just thinks that joining Balor might bring him back.

Nah. I want my son and The Lich to meet on the battle field The Lich recognizing him but Simon not. It'll be a great dramatic scene.

That's totally not mutually exclusive with what I proposed. Look, we want you to be able to have that scene. We just want it to happen without having enormous holes in our plot that we somehow have to work around. Like how he would, somehow, not learn that it was Balor's allies who conducted the raid after joining him.

[Bearon]

BP it's a big part of my story so just going to say The Lich sensed the presence of the holy rituals you guys did to cleanse the area and assumed the servants of Mauro destroyed the town.

Yeah, I agree with Delmonte on this.

Your character could just be grief stricken at losing his son, and willing to join anyone he thinks might be able to bring him back. It's simpler and doesn't require such a stretch as your character thinking that the Mauro-ites did something totally out of character for them.

A big part of my character is that he hates Mauro and think that those who follow him are corrupt. Also what would I do when Big Baddie Balor can't raise my son?