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[PASSED] Commend Northrop-Grumman

Postby Westinor » Mon Jun 05, 2023 8:56 pm

Hello! I hope you're all doing well today - I'd like to present my attempt at a draft of Commend Northrop-Grumman! While past attempts have revolved a lot around their creation of Dark theme (or implicit references to it), I feel like they really did so at the expense of NG's particularly great work in RP. NG is unique in their style of RP in that they really focus on interpersonal/character RP, choosing to worldbuild through the stories of the characters and the development of their backgrounds/experiences while focusing a large part of the narrative on the development of a unique and multifaceted character. As such, I decided to take the approach Ara did with Condemn Gholgoth, except expanding on it a bit to incorporate little nods to NG's RP style and specifically centering the commendation around the growth and character development of the centerpiece characters of NG's RPs over twenty years - the O'Neill Family. While this is an incredibly abridged version, I hope it does NG's work justice - please give any comments, feedback, etc.!! I'd also like to thanks Magecastle for their help in developing the draft ^-^
Article 1: Introducing Northrop-Grumman

The story of Northrop-Grumman is one of unparalleled persistence and tenacity in the face of adversity. The legends and endeavors of its people have carved an enduring mark into the faces of their home planets and the halls of history.

Originally a corporate entity founded in the city of Hawthorne in the United States, Northrop-Grumman would go on to declare independence from its home nation in 2003, and eventually sought to branch out into the final frontier. Their ships would journey to neighboring worlds — the red planet of Mars, populated by Grummians living in the shining towers and blue waters of cityship Valacirca, and the sunburnt planet of Mercury, home of the research colony-turned hardy home of New Sonne.

Northrop-Grumman eventually took to the stars, their fledgling interstellar empire spanning a few host worlds and several species. The Grummians have since welcomed refugees of disasters from several nations, most notably several species of elves, many of whom now run the nation as detailed in the astonishingly precise and exhaustive records of the O’Neill family.

Article 2: A Tale for the Ages

Within the archives of Northrop-Grumman are the stories of the O’Neill family, which includes incredibly detailed relationships and interpersonal conflicts between the O’Neills and those around them as they face the growing challenges of leadership and adversity at the head of numerous misadventures and tragedies. These unbelievably nuanced records are organized into a few simplified dossiers below.

Jack O’Neill is the former chairman of Northrop-Grumman, having led it through countless conflicts and endeavors in the Grummian space age. He would come to serve as an empathetic and determined leader, and married the elf now known as Siri O’Neill. The couple adopted the drow elf Alakantar O’Neill, and Jack would peacefully pass away at the old age of 109, his death mourned and respectfully recognized across the galaxy as the melancholy passing of a titan in his own right.

Siri O’Neill is the serving chairwoman of Northrop-Grumman, an elf that has suffered immense tragedy throughout her life at the hands of her family’s enemies. Siri carved herself into a battleworn warrior and obdurate leader across the centuries, relentlessly pursuing and hunting down her enemies. However, as she steps into the chairwoman role, she has learned that she can not have everything her way — and in the face of certain hardships, retribution is not a worthwhile or possible option. From the passing of her beloved husband to her relationship with her own estranged son and his fiancee, Siri O’Neill has learned to balance her ice-cold efficacy with understanding and grace, quietly but assuredly molding herself into a leader of our time.

Alakantar O’Neill is the governor of Northrop-Grumman’s Martian colony, a compassionate yet conflicted young drow elf. He has grown into his position as a leader, but his place as one of the last of his species and the adopted son of Siri O’Neill among other things has left him with no shortage of challenges and tragedies — he has faced off against, dueled, and slain the heir to the Roanian throne, Calavyr, and most recently endured the loss of his beloved fiancee Arielle in a terrorist attack on Valacirca that dismembered Alakantar himself, the aftermath of which saw the incredible mobilization of a search and rescue effort from friends and rivals alike. Even as he falls every time, Alakantar’s ability to overcome incredible pain and continued growth despite this serves as a beacon of hope to all who struggle.

These excerpts offer but a glimpse into the stories of a cast that have worked to create a nation of repute. In a heart wrenching and moving tale of the country’s most well-known individuals, Northrop-Grumman’s stories serve as an ode to the beauty and complexity of the sentient spirit, faltering yet growing still with each step they take into the pits of hell.

Article 3: The Lists Go On

Northrop-Grumman has worked to establish and maintain comprehensive lists of national capitals and leaders in their trademark love for labyrinthine, herculean efforts. These lists cover hundreds upon hundreds of nations, maintained regularly and tirelessly for nearly a decade and a half. Naturally, such dedication has inspired other works, including a similar compilation of national sports, and has served both as a mainstay resource across galaxies as well as a monument to what we can build if we try.

Article 4: The Presentation of Commendation

In the shadow of the countless marvels gracing our world many oft go unseen. With this commendation this council hopes to illuminate one nation for who they truly are, a diamond in the rough waves of time.

Hoping that this may serve as an ode to the pioneers as they journey into the black and an attestation to the wonders one can create through blazing sun and starry night,

The Security Council hereby Commends Northrop-Grumman.

Co-Author: Magecastle Embassy Building A5

Sources:
viewtopic.php?f=4&t=288379 Mercy does not go unpunished (Valacirca terrorist attack)
viewtopic.php?f=4&t=5245 TWBC 2 - Cleaning your plate off (literally an extended therapy session for Alakantar with a supermachine - omitted from the final draft since IC this is actually a secret but it's an incredible nod to how NG can expand a world from a small isolated interaction
viewtopic.php?f=4&t=278940 Till Death Do Us Apart (Recounts Siri (and Alak’s) reactions to Jack’s death, as well as other nations’ condolences\
viewtopic.php?f=4&t=135262 Changes Abound 1
viewtopic.php?f=4&t=92 Into the Pits of Hell we Walk once More
https://www.nationstates.net/nation=nor ... /id=427017 RP Context - Individuals of Note

search.php?author_id=82&sf=firstpost&sr=topics Various older sources from old Jolt forums for stories about Jack and Siri

Lists:
viewtopic.php?f=23&t=96 List of Leaders
viewtopic.php?f=23&t=191905 List of National Capitals
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Postby Ostrovskiy » Mon Jun 05, 2023 9:11 pm

:o

West has another amazingly written SC resolution for a based nominee in a based format with based coauthors? The sky must be falling! Oh, wait. Full support!
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Postby Tinhampton » Tue Jun 06, 2023 6:12 am

To be perfectly clear, this proposal should not even be necessary. The South Pacific closed their internal vote, which was tied, three minutes before somebody cast an internal FOR vote on the original by Makdon. Had TSP voted FOR, the static margin would have been 6,333-6,398 and it's extremely likely that the resulting momentum from TSP and lemming voters would have gotten it over the line.

I can support this regardless. I'm confident that similar or more suspicious circumstances won't conspire against this proposal (this being a Bestinor production) and more so I won't overreact if they do like I did last time (although I've recanted that particular incident and consider myself on reasonably good terms with Sanct).
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Postby Eternal Algerstonia » Tue Jun 06, 2023 5:23 pm

Ostrovskiy wrote::o

West has another amazingly written SC resolution for a based nominee in a based format with based coauthors? The sky must be falling! Oh, wait. Full support!

not based enough because i'm not listed as a co-author. oppose

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Postby Improper Classifications » Tue Jun 06, 2023 7:04 pm

Eternal Algerstonia wrote:
Ostrovskiy wrote::o

West has another amazingly written SC resolution for a based nominee in a based format with based coauthors? The sky must be falling! Oh, wait. Full support!

not based enough because i'm not listed as a co-author. oppose

Did you assist in writing the proposal in any way?
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Postby Eternal Algerstonia » Tue Jun 06, 2023 7:37 pm

Improper Classifications wrote:
Eternal Algerstonia wrote:not based enough because i'm not listed as a co-author. oppose

Did you assist in writing the proposal in any way?

yes. i played a decisive role in writing this proposal. if i never joined ns or quit ns a while ago, westinor would never have wrote this proposal because this game would be way worse without me

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Postby Westinor » Wed Jun 14, 2023 5:23 pm

Still looking for comments, feedback etc. on this draft!!
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Postby Westinor » Thu Jun 22, 2023 7:46 pm

Would like to bump this up again :D as there are surprisingly few comments and I am worried that non-Dark mode users are unable to see this
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Postby The Ambis » Sat Jul 08, 2023 3:49 pm

Aha! Just found this!
It looks very good west! I’m loving the role play commends from you recently! Always masterfully written.
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Postby Improper Classifications » Sat Jul 08, 2023 6:14 pm

hail northrop, saver of eyes
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Postby Westinor » Sun Jul 09, 2023 2:27 pm

Pushing this up to last call! Would love more comments if possible :D
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Postby The Ambis » Sun Jul 09, 2023 3:29 pm

Alright. I threw it into paperrater.com, and this is what it told me:

Grammar:
However, as she steps into the chairwoman role, she has learned that she can not have everything her way — and in the face of certain hard ships hardships, retribution is not a worthwhile or possible option.

These excerpts offer but a glimpse into the stories of a cast that have has worked to create a nation of repute.


Bad Phrase Score (Lower is Better): 1.09 "Outstanding use of quality phrases! Your score is significantly above average."

Transitional Word Score: 78 "Great job! Your usage of transitional phrases is well above average!"

Sentence Info:
Total Sentences: 27
Avg. Length: 29.3 words
Short Sentences (< 17 words): 4 (15%)
Long Sentences (> 35 words): 9 (33%)
Sentence Variation: 17.1 words (std deviation)
"Your average sentence length is within an acceptable range, but consider that effective use of sentence length cannot be easily measured."

Passive Voice Sentences: 3.7

Simple Sentence Starters: 22%

Vocabulary Score: 426.25 "Nice work! Your writing showcases great proficiency in vocabulary words."
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Postby Chipoli » Tue Jul 11, 2023 8:28 am

Very creative! I love how you included your sources as well.
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Postby Westinor » Sun Jul 16, 2023 8:40 pm

This has been submitted and can be viewed here! https://www.nationstates.net/page=UN_vi ... 1689559398
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Postby Improper Classifications » Sun Jul 16, 2023 8:52 pm

Happy to be the first to add my approval to this. Without NG my eyes would actively be burning.
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Postby Anagonia » Thu Jul 27, 2023 10:13 am

I'd like to state that, on behalf of Northrop-Grummans character as a person, that they are a fantastic friend and absolutely wonderful mentor. Anagonia stands for this commendation because on both a personal and professional level, NG has helped me improve as a person and writer. Thank you my friend, I sincerely hope this passes to credit your incalculable contributions to the NS community.
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Postby Obeliae » Fri Jul 28, 2023 5:03 pm

Commend Northrop-Grumman was passed 9,560 votes to 1,766. (84.41% support)


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WORLD ASSEMBLY VOTING RECOMMENDATION

Security Council: Commend Northrop-Grumman (nation), by Westinor with Magecastle Embassy Building A5

Recommendation: FOR

Rationale: Commendations and Condemnations alike need a preponderance of evidence to be considered merited. Commendations specifically need to include gameplay or nation-oriented achievements.

Northrop-Grumman is a nation that has prevailed during hard times. They have hold a key role in space exploration, journing to neighbouring worlds in their ships, and has welcomed with open arms many refugees from other nations that were left devastated during numerous disasters.

We must mention Jack O'Neill, who led his nation on innumerable occasions during the Grumman space era, showing qualities befitting a leader, marrying Siri O'Neill, who, after the loss of her husband, proved herself capable of guiding her nation through those difficult times while maintaining a balance between leadership and her private life. Mention must also be made of their son, Alakantar O'Neill, who has stood tall as governor even during the darkest moments of his life.

All things considered, as the last article of this very own resolution, we support this commendation for Northrop-Grumman has shown to be a diamond in the rough waves of time.

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This recommendation was written by Obeliae, the Minister of WA Affairs of the Empire of Great Britain. Sophia concurs. If you liked this, check out our recommendation dispatch here!

This resolution will be at vote between the minor updates of July 24th 2023 and July 28th 2023.

This recommendation was jointly issued between Sophia and Empire of Great Britain. This does not mean that the President's opinion of this resolution was influenced by what Empire of Great Britain believes. Under the Constitution, the President must always cast their vote in line with the interests of Sophia, not some other region; this recommendation reflects the sincere beliefs of all regions involved.


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