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The Security Council Herby Condemns Oneid

1.Oneid does many horrible things in the history of Nation States.
Some things they do are make fake terrorist story’s and glorify them in the rmb. They are also ranked Number 1 as most fascist and have the fascist tag.

2.History. Oneid has existed for 2.years and 9 months. Over this time period they have gained more than 300 members.

3.lyes Oneid states in there factbook that they accept all embassies. Within there existence they have declined multiple and withdrew from other embassy’s.
b.1 if Oneid has a tag call founderless while this is false as the original founder ceased to exist they made a new nation who is currently the new founder.

Good Idea, wrong way. The grammar is horrible.

Nominicia wrote:The Security Council Herby Condemns Oneid

1.Oneid does many horrible things in the history of Nation States.
Some things they do are make fake terrorist story’s and glorify them in the rmb. They are also ranked Number 1 as most fascist and have the fascist tag.

2.History. Oneid has existed for 2.years and 9 months. Over this time period they have gained more than 300 members.

3.lyes Oneid states in there factbook that they accept all embassies. Within there existence they have declined multiple and withdrew from other embassy’s.
b.1 if Oneid has a tag call founderless while this is false as the original founder ceased to exist they made a new nation who is currently the new founder.

The grammar is total dogwater and it is not written properly.

XKV-YU Foundation wrote:Good Idea, wrong way. The grammar is horrible.

Can you help me Right it with better grammar I will put you as a co-author

Communist Beijing Must be China wrote:

Nominicia wrote:The Security Council Herby Condemns Oneid

1.Oneid does many horrible things in the history of Nation States.
Some things they do are make fake terrorist story’s and glorify them in the rmb. They are also ranked Number 1 as most fascist and have the fascist tag.

2.History. Oneid has existed for 2.years and 9 months. Over this time period they have gained more than 300 members.

3.lyes Oneid states in there factbook that they accept all embassies. Within there existence they have declined multiple and withdrew from other embassy’s.
b.1 if Oneid has a tag call founderless while this is false as the original founder ceased to exist they made a new nation who is currently the new founder.

The grammar is total dogwater and it is not written properly.

Then help please. I will add you also as a co author

Nominicia wrote:

Communist Beijing Must be China wrote:
The grammar is total dogwater and it is not written properly.

Then help please. I will add you also as a co author

You don't need to add me as one. I'll fix it.

Nominicia wrote:The Security Council Herbyhereby Condemns Oneid

This goes at the end.

Nominicia wrote:1.* Horrified at the fact Oneid doeshas done many horrible things in the history of Nation Statesthe multiverse.
Some things they do are make fake terrorist story’sstories and glorify them in the rmb*. They are also ranked Number 1 as most fascist and have the fascist tag.**

*Numbers are unnecessary.
**This is metagaming. Metagaming is prohibited in resolutions.
***Unnecessary. Also metagaming. e.g. "have the fascist tag", "ranked Number 1 as most fascist***"
**** Don't think there even is a rank for most fascist.

Nominicia wrote:2.History.*Oneid has existed for 2.years and 9 months. Over this time period they have gained more than 300 members.**

*Unnecessary, once more.
**Metagaming.

Nominicia wrote:3.lyesOneid states in theretheir factbook that they accept all embassies.* Within there existence they have declined multiple and withdrew from other embassy’sembassies.**
b.1 if Oneid has a tag call founderless while this is false as the original founder ceased to exist they made a new nation who is currently the new founder.***

*The entire line is metagaming.
**Metagaming.
***<etagaming.

No such thing as meta-gaming in the SC. Meta-gaming is purely a GA rule. I suggest you have a read of the SC rules as you are only partly right in your attempt at correcting this mess.

That said this is a particularly awful draft, barely comprehensible. And as far as the nominee is concerned one must ask the question, who?

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:No such thing as meta-gaming in the SC. Meta-gaming is purely a GA rule. I suggest you have a read of the SC rules as you are only partly right in your attempt at correcting this mess.

That said this is a particularly awful draft, barely comprehensible. And as far as the nominee is concerned one must ask the question, who?

I might have confused GA rules with SC rules, sorry. I have actually read the SC rules before.

Terrible written in both meanings. Also, arent communists a bigger threat? They even got one in that "fascist" region. They destroy much more than some people who are first seen by many on thsi thread.

Communist Beijing Must be China wrote:

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:No such thing as meta-gaming in the SC. Meta-gaming is purely a GA rule. I suggest you have a read of the SC rules as you are only partly right in your attempt at correcting this mess.

That said this is a particularly awful draft, barely comprehensible. And as far as the nominee is concerned one must ask the question, who?

I might have confused GA rules with SC rules, sorry. I have actually read the SC rules before.

I have a specifically said I needed help with the grammar

Terribly-written. Next time, get some help drafting instead of submitting something that's scribbled up in one minute and pass it off as good. Begging for help won't help you either as it'll put off people trying to give constructive feedback.

Nominicia wrote:

Communist Beijing Must be China wrote:
I might have confused GA rules with SC rules, sorry. I have actually read the SC rules before.

I have a specifically said I needed help with the grammar

I'm gonna say you submitted it too early.

Outer Sparta wrote:Terribly-written. Next time, get some help drafting instead of submitting something that's scribbled up in one minute and pass it off as good. Begging for help won't help you either as it'll put off people trying to give constructive feedback.

I heavily agree on this.

Outer Sparta wrote:Terribly-written. Next time, get some help drafting instead of submitting something that's scribbled up in one minute and pass it off as good. Begging for help won't help you either as it'll put off people trying to give constructive feedback.

I only submitted a few min ago. That’s the original version I got help and posted the better one when I submitted it. So yeah read the whole topic if that’s how you wanna go.

Communist Beijing Must be China wrote:

Nominicia wrote:
I have a specifically said I needed help with the grammar

I'm gonna say you submitted it too early.

Outer Sparta wrote:Terribly-written. Next time, get some help drafting instead of submitting something that's scribbled up in one minute and pass it off as good. Begging for help won't help you either as it'll put off people trying to give constructive feedback.

I heavily agree on this.

Ur the one who said you would fix it and that was all I needed once u fixed it.

Nominicia wrote:

Communist Beijing Must be China wrote:
I'm gonna say you submitted it too early.



I heavily agree on this.

Ur the one who said you would fix it and that was all I needed once u fixed it.

I'd say it's still too short. If you look at passed SCRs, they're longer, much longer.

Nominicia wrote:

Outer Sparta wrote:Terribly-written. Next time, get some help drafting instead of submitting something that's scribbled up in one minute and pass it off as good. Begging for help won't help you either as it'll put off people trying to give constructive feedback.

I only submitted a few min ago. That’s the original version I got help and posted the better one when I submitted it. So yeah read the whole topic if that’s how you wanna go.

If that's how you want to go, then don't submit drafts like this. Read the rules and guidelines. You're not going to get anywhere by ignoring feedback and ignoring the rules.

Nominicia wrote:

Outer Sparta wrote:Terribly-written. Next time, get some help drafting instead of submitting something that's scribbled up in one minute and pass it off as good. Begging for help won't help you either as it'll put off people trying to give constructive feedback.

I only submitted a few min ago. That’s the original version I got help and posted the better one when I submitted it. So yeah read the whole topic if that’s how you wanna go.

Yeah, well your crappy submission will sink without a trace. It’s so badly written, zero research done and just lazy.

By the way Communist Beijing did you agree to being a co-author to this travesty? If not you have the right and the power to pull it.

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:

Nominicia wrote:
I only submitted a few min ago. That’s the original version I got help and posted the better one when I submitted it. So yeah read the whole topic if that’s how you wanna go.

Yeah, well your crappy submission will sink without a trace. It’s so badly written, zero research done and just lazy.

By the way Communist Beijing did you agree to being a co-author to this travesty? If not you have the right and the power to pull it.

No, he added me as a co-author because I helped him with the grammar mistakes.

Thanks for the rights, I am going to pull it now.

Nominicia wrote:The Security Council Herby Condemns Oneid

1.Oneid does many horrible things in the history of Nation States.
Some things they do are make fake terrorist story’s and glorify them in the rmb. They are also ranked Number 1 as most fascist and have the fascist tag.

2.History. Oneid has existed for 2.years and 9 months. Over this time period they have gained more than 300 members.

3.lyes Oneid states in there factbook that they accept all embassies. Within there existence they have declined multiple and withdrew from other embassy’s.
b.1 if Oneid has a tag call founderless while this is false as the original founder ceased to exist they made a new nation who is currently the new founder.

“Ambassador, the correct format for one clause of an SC proposal is a perambulatory clause (OOC: https://www.wichita.edu/academics/fairm ... riting.php) followed by your argument. Second, I think that the general statistics of the target region are irrelevant to your argument.

Third, I would suggest changing your argument from ‘they are fascist’ to something else. I have had this complaint towards two other ambassadors who have tried to draft SC proposals against a region known as The Communist Bloc. The reason why ideology is not a strong argument is that any region or nation can easily get away with having a fascist or communist government without being formally punished by the WA whatsoever. Furthermore, claiming that capitalism is the only correct ideology that other nations should have is a completely aggressive and subjective idea that hardly anyone in this facility tries to express nowadays. So I suggest to do more research into your target region to find a different argument.”
-Ms. Charlotte Schafer, WA Ambassador for the Clevesian Empire

Communist Beijing Must be China wrote:

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:Yeah, well your crappy submission will sink without a trace. It’s so badly written, zero research done and just lazy.

By the way Communist Beijing did you agree to being a co-author to this travesty? If not you have the right and the power to pull it.

No, he added me as a co-author because I helped him with the grammar mistakes.

Thanks for the rights, I am going to pull it now.

Huh you deleted it

This region, Onied, looks nothing like a puppet dump to me. So not condemnable at all in the first place.

Maybe Chicken Overlords can take that spot I dunno.

Nominicia wrote:

Communist Beijing Must be China wrote:
No, he added me as a co-author because I helped him with the grammar mistakes.

Thanks for the rights, I am going to pull it now.

Huh you deleted it

You have to ask a nation’s permission before you can name them as a co-author. Not having done that they were within their rights to pull it.

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:

Nominicia wrote:

Huh you deleted it

You have to ask a nation’s permission before you can name them as a co-author. Not having done that they were within their rights to pull it.

They said I could

Nominicia wrote:

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:You have to ask a nation’s permission before you can name them as a co-author. Not having done that they were within their rights to pull it.

They said I could

And you still are going to go with your crap proposal? Not even a condemnable region and you don't seem to care about how to write a properly-written resolution.

Nominicia wrote:

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:You have to ask a nation’s permission before you can name them as a co-author. Not having done that they were within their rights to pull it.

They said I could

Good grief that sounds so petulant. All we’re missing is the foot stamping.