[DRAFT] On EmbassyRegionia

[Cyberstrom]

This is a semi-serious Declaration draft, I don't actually intend to submit this to the SC unless people want this to go through, it's more me just wanting to attempt/practice writing an SC Proposal and using the events in EmbassyRegionia as the reference.

If people have feedback, that'd be great as well.
Likewise, I think Moderation needs to give a ruling on this as well because I'm referring to ER's DEAT'ed founder and their new main nation in the proposal.

The Security Council,

Observing the recent events in EmbassyRegionia,

Noting that the founding nation of the region recently fell into anarchy,

Acknowledging that EmbassyRegionia having recently been restored to native control, continues to experience geopolitical turmoil,

Witnessing Embassies4Breakfast, a successor state to the defunct founding nation, within the hallowed halls of the World Assembly espouse an opinion and policy statement contradictory to the current political sentiment held by the natives of EmbassyRegionia,

Further acknowledging threats made towards the leadership of EmbassyRegionia to smuggle a puppet nation through the regional borders,

Wary of future uncertainty surrounding EmbassyRegionia,

Hereby declares the following:

• that EmbassyRegionia should remain under Security Council observation until such geopolitical turmoil has subsided.
• that EmbassyRegionia should endeavor to prevent ideologies such as fascism from taking root within their embassy network in future.
• that the diplomatic community at large, should continue to provide support to any fledgling regions wishing to establish themselves without fear of an hostile takeover of their Delegacy.

[Minskiev]

Against, on principle. This occupation does not need any declaration, neither do most.

[Thousand Branches]

Against. This is not an opinion, it is a recap. This kind of declaration is why everybody hates declarations.

[Outer Sparta]

Why do we need a declaration on a region that was raided? Besides, it's up to the natives of the region to decide if they want the founder back and the SC doesn't have any enforcement in that regard.

[Bhang Bhang Duc]

Against. A totally unnecessary Declaration.

Also probably illegal - the SC has no powers of observation, therefore this Declaration cannot require the SC to observe the region. Does more than a Declaration can do - R1(e).

[Cyberstrom]

Against, on principle. This occupation does not need any declaration, neither do most.

Yeah, I figured that would be the general consensus for this.

Against. This is not an opinion, it is a recap. This kind of declaration is why everybody hates declarations.

I agree with your criticism here, this was my first time attempting to write a Proposal, so I figured I might as well put myself publicly on blast for this.
But yeah, I understand the frustration as to how this is more of a recap rather an a proper opinion.

Against. A totally unnecessary Declaration.

Also probably illegal - the SC has no powers of observation, therefore this Declaration cannot reference them.

Thanks for the feedback, in my OP, I did say this was mainly me just wanting to practice an attempt at writing a Proposal. No intentions to actually submit.
But generally speaking, in this case the first line after the hereby declares would be removed then?

[Fachumonn]

Against. This is not an opinion, it is a recap. This kind of declaration is why everybody hates declarations.

So true, and why I still can't take Andusre's resolutions seriously.

[Bhang Bhang Duc]

Against. A totally unnecessary Declaration.

Also probably illegal - the SC has no powers of observation, therefore this Declaration cannot reference them.

Thanks for the feedback, in my OP, I did say this was mainly me just wanting to practice an attempt at writing a Proposal. No intentions to actually submit.
But generally speaking, in this case the first line after the hereby declares would be removed then?

Yes, that would remove that possible illegality. Also you are free to mention that the founding nation no longer exists - there are various conventions used in SC proposals to write about this without transgressing the rules. Likewise mentioning the founder’s new nation in the way that you have is legal.

[Minskiev]

Against. This is not an opinion, it is a recap. This kind of declaration is why everybody hates declarations.

So true, and why I still can't take Andusre's resolutions seriously.

At least he has resolutions...

[Zukchiva]

I'm aware this is practice, but as others have I said am opposed as occupations don't really merit declarations. However, there are a couple of good declaration ideas in the SC ideas thread (in particular, Ara just posted a lot of good ones within the last page or so) that you could try writing up once you feel confident.

But to give feedback:

The Security Council,

Observing the recent events in EmbassyRegionia,

If you're going to note something in a declaration, I would suggest making it more elaborative - you have the characters, so there's no point in not fluffing it up a little. Directly mention it was invaded by the Brotherhood of Malice and other raiders, I'd say. You could go more into depth beyond that by mentioning that, even, if you wanted too.

Noting that the founding nation of the region recently fell into anarchy,

I would be more elaborative here as well, mentioning how the founder CTEing left the unprepared region unprotected from any threats. This should also be above the "observing" clause, and you can then reword the observing clause to be more in flow with an updated Nothing clause

Ig smth like "Noting that the founding nation of EmbassyRegionia recently fell into anarchy, leaving the region unprepared and without protection against a multitude of invasive threats,

Observing that EmbassyRegionia was subsequently invaded by the Brotherhood of Malice and other invader organizations, who would shut down the regions' extensive embassy network and silence internal communications"

Acknowledging that EmbassyRegionia having has recently been restored to native control, yet it continues to experience geopolitical turmoil,

"having" to "has"

Witnessing Embassies4Breakfast, a successor state to the defunct founding nation of Embassy Regionia, within the hallowed halls of the World Assemblyespouse an opinion and policy statement contradictory to the current political sentiment held by the natives of EmbassyRegionia,

I do like fluff, but inc ases like this where it can make the sentence read weird, it is better not to have it.

I'd also specify why witnessing this is notable - why does what the founder's "successor"'s statements being so matter to this declaration/situation? You don't clarify that later, but it should be said somewhere.

Further acknowledging a threat threatsmade by Embassies4Breakfast towards the leadership of EmbassyRegionia, wherein it promised to smuggle a puppet nation through theregional borders, with an aim to to subvert the region's leadership,

Being specific is better.

Wary of future uncertainty surrounding EmbassyRegionia,

could add "and believing action must be taken to dispel such uncertainty"

Hereby declares the following:
[list][*]that EmbassyRegionia should remain under Security Council observation until such geopolitical turmoil has subsided.

As others have said, this doesn't really make much sense for the SC to declare a region be kept under observation - it also dates this declaration and opens it for repeal, which may or may not matter to you if you did plan to submit this full-seriously, but just a note.

[*]that the diplomatic community at large, should continue to provide support to any fledgling regions wishing to establish themselves without fear of an hostile takeover of their Delegacy.

I think a more relevant thing here would be to say "the diplomatic community at large should continue to persuade regions collocating large embassy networks to not form relationships with fascist regions in any circumstance"