Tinhampton wrote:What's the difference between this and Draft 4? (sorry - superbusy right now)
From a glance, reference to the invasion of England was removed, and Reflections of 2021 was added.
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by Honeydewistania » Thu May 12, 2022 5:17 pm
Tinhampton wrote:What's the difference between this and Draft 4? (sorry - superbusy right now)
Alger wrote:if you have egoquotes in your signature, touch grass
by Maowi » Fri May 13, 2022 10:34 am
by Nova Vandalia » Fri May 13, 2022 11:12 am
by Hulldom » Fri May 13, 2022 11:15 am
Convinced that Andusre has determinedly been a force for positive change in NationStates via the extensive work they have put into creating, developing, and fostering the lively community and interregional presence of Thaecia;
Praising Andusre’s co-founding of Thaecia in January 2019, where they established a thriving population with a unique regional identity characterised by its sophisticated executive government, bicameral legislature, and highly social atmosphere;
Celebrating Andusre’s conception of the body known as the Electoral Commission (EC) in Thaecia’s first ever Legislative Resolution; despite the resolution’s later repeal, the EC continues to run regional elections and plays an integral role in Thaecian politics, generating an extremely exciting atmosphere at every election;
Applauding Andusre’s two terms as the region’s first Prime Minister, during which they paved the way for all future administrations by:
- creating and solidifying the framework of ministries that underpins Thaecia’s executive to this day;
- organising regular cultural activities, such as contests and game nights, that strengthened the charisma and outreach of the community, routinely attracting foreign nations to participate and even to join the region;
- cultivating high-quality activity on Thaecia’s Regional Message Board (RMB), which provided a unique level of accessibility for all nations and sustained the region's model of official legislative and judicial business taking place on satellite regions’ RMBs;
Recognising that Andusre has become synonymous with Thaecia’s foreign affairs, their personal and effective style of diplomacy forging strong bonds between Thaecia and a wide range of regions and communities, exemplified by:
- their negotiation of embassies with 10000 Islands (XKI) and The Rejected Realms (TRR) as Foreign Affairs Minister, both of which remain very close to Thaecia;
- their organisation of a musical watch party event involving Thaecia, XKI, and TRR in 2021 that drew high attendance from all three regions and was repeated on a larger scale in 2022, as well as the foreign affairs side of Thaecia’s similarly successful Late Nite Festival II, which brought in dozens of foreign participants from several other regions;
- their key role in drafting or negotiating all of Thaecia’s current treaties, i.e. those with The East Pacific (TEP), Europeia, The League, and Balder, through their many terms as a Senior Diplomat, spreading harmony throughout the multiverse;
Acclaiming Andusre’s influence in the construction of Thaecia’s military, elevating it to become one of NationStates’ largest forces through the development and articulation of Thaecia’s military ideology, and bringing awareness to the prosperity that an unaligned military can bring to a region both by fostering internal activity and as a crucial means of strengthening ties with influential regions all over the military spectrum;
Further appreciating Andusre’s contributions to the vigour of NationStates’ military scene through their frequent spearheading of joint operations with Thaecia’s allies;
Revelling in the considerable growth Andusre has fostered in regional World Assembly (WA) participation, supporting new Thaecian authors and promoting WA relevancy; their work in the WA culminated in their role as president, where:
- they dedicated themselves to reforming the region’s WA program, causing its activity to skyrocket and heavily increasing WA literacy and awareness among Thaecians;
- they acted as a key advisor to the Prime Minister on executive policy and served as Commander in Chief of Thaecia’s military, making important calls on military operations;
Appreciative of Andusre’s efforts as an author of four Security Council resolutions including [resolution=SC#349]SC 349: Commend Marrabuk[/resolution], in which they highlighted the legacy of a key figure in TEP’s internal and foreign affairs, and [resolution=SC#379]SC #379: Reflections On 2021[/resolution], in which they thoughtfully catalogued the major events of that year;
Wishing to enshrine a record of Andusre’s impact on NationStates in the history books as a shining example for future trailblazers to draw inspiration from;
Hereby Commends Andusre.
Co-author: Thousand Branches
by West Barack and East Obama » Sat May 14, 2022 12:20 am
Additionally, as one big stylistic part, instead of repeating “Andusre” over and over, you can use the nickname of Andy. This is common practice and will help the resolution not feel too repetitive.
by Fachumonn » Sat May 14, 2022 3:48 am
West Barack and East Obama wrote:Additionally, as one big stylistic part, instead of repeating “Andusre” over and over, you can use the nickname of Andy. This is common practice and will help the resolution not feel too repetitive.
Dr Justin Obama, Deputy Minister of Foreign Affairs: How? Then it’d just be repetitive saying the word ‘Andy’ instead. And considering that ‘Andy’ is not ‘Andusre’, this may cause confusion.
by Fachumonn » Sat May 14, 2022 8:16 am
Hulldom wrote:And to wit, what I meant was to alternate the two anyways.
by Hulldom » Sat May 14, 2022 8:56 am
by Maowi » Sun May 15, 2022 9:38 am
Nova Vandalia wrote:MAOWI! Hi! Well wrtiten so far.
The only critisism I have of this draft is since you got rid of specific mentions of operations I'm not sure this
"Further appreciating Andusre’s contributions to the vigour of NationStates’ military scene through their frequent spearheading of joint operations with Thaecia’s allies;"
is strong enough to be included. Without the specific operations if just feel to nebulous and open to critism and judgement, because it doesn't tell it what type of operations, what level of frequency, no the success of the operations. I also feel like you cover the vim and vigour Andurse has added to the R/D in the previous clause pretty well.
So I'm wondering if the previous clause doesn't cover the specific contributions and energy Andruse has developed well enough that this clause isn't needed, and that this might be a slight detriment to the strength of the proposal over all.
I may be off base here though as drafting and writing really isn't my forte.
Hulldom wrote:Right, well, I would be remiss if I didn’t offer some feedback.
Applauding Andusre’s two terms as the region’s first Prime Minister, during which they paved the way for all future administrations by:
- creating and solidifying the framework of ministries that underpins Thaecia’s executive to this day;
[...] This is a problem of specificity, how did Andy do the first? Merely stating he did it isn’t doing much.
Additionally, as one big stylistic part, instead of repeating “Andusre” over and over, you can use the nickname of Andy. This is common practice and will help the resolution not feel too repetitive.
by Maowi » Sat May 21, 2022 8:39 am
by Maowi » Sun May 29, 2022 9:37 am
by Apatosaurus » Mon May 30, 2022 5:45 pm
by Honeydewistania » Mon May 30, 2022 6:00 pm
Alger wrote:if you have egoquotes in your signature, touch grass
by Maowi » Tue May 31, 2022 12:38 am
by Guess and Check » Wed Jun 01, 2022 6:35 am
by Fachumonn » Wed Jun 01, 2022 7:46 am
by Fachumonn » Tue Jun 07, 2022 4:20 am
by Santa Byzantina » Tue Jun 07, 2022 11:56 pm
by Outer Sparta » Wed Jun 08, 2022 5:33 am
Santa Byzantina wrote:Religious worship is prohibited in Andusre? AGAINST without further ado!
Santa Byzantina is never going to endorse ignorance that exceeds human comprehension, and it is never going to endorse human worship - because if people don't show humility and reverence for the divine, then they will worship themselves (or their nation, or their ruling party) in their own megalomania.
That's just a reality check from the actual world.
by Saint Tomas and the Northern Ice Islands » Wed Jun 08, 2022 9:02 am
The Security Council resolution Commend Andusre was passed 11,165 votes to 3,640.
by Andusre » Wed Jun 08, 2022 10:36 am
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by Vorhollah » Wed Jun 08, 2022 10:48 am
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