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[PASSED] Commend Zarkenis Ultima

Postby Thousand Branches » Mon Feb 21, 2022 7:49 am

Good morning to the Security Council!! I’ve got another new proposal for the wonderful folks here, Commend Zarkenis Ultima! Zark is one of the oldest and most prolific members of P2TM and fully deserves recognition for their incredible work in shaping RP there. Couple notes to pls read first:

  • The commendation is formatted in the light of collaborative artwork, but all RPs here are former or current P2TM RPs. If you have questions or anything, I can do my best to answer within my limited knowledge.
  • I do have permission from Zark themself and actually communicated with them throughout the entire drafting process for research and details.
  • I’ve avoided including any sort of OOC contributions from RP mentoring both because I don’t have room (we’re at like 4988 characters or smth) and because I don’t want to try to weave the legality of all that.
Comments always welcome!!

The Security Council,

Lauding the rich culture and remarkable history of Zarkenis Ultima, a nation whose people have achieved a mastery of narrative arts seldom seen across the wide realm of NationStates;

Wishing to highlight Zarkenis Ultima’s finesse in the many forms and genres of artistic collaboration, working with dozens of artists, writers, and actors from nations across the multiverse to produce astonishing works;

Yearning for the return of Elfen High, an epic and fantastical TV show that featured an expanse of Zarkenian characters, episodes, and cinematography - especially during the show's unforgettable finale - including:
  • Alastor, a lowly demon who came to be known as the Demon Lord, cleverly conquering and modernizing Hell and going on to provide an unforgettable impact in the legendary final battle against Oberon, King of the fae;
  • One of the wildest twists of the show and a jumpstart to the final standoff, where Lyra Longshire, one of Zarkenis Ultima’s longest running characters, unleashed the power of a nuclear missile onto the moon, effectively stopping Oberon in his tracks and destroying a key component of the faelord's plan to remake the universe;
  • Two of the show's best epilogues, wherein Alastor and Lyra were visited in their old age and finally given the happy endings they both deserved, an incredibly emotional moment for not just those characters but the show’s entire fanbase;
Endlessly impressed with Zarkenis Ultima's incredible knack for comics, being one of the main contributors in two of the world's most famous comic book runs:
  1. Infinite Justice: Beyond, the third (and arguably most successful) iteration in the Infinite Justice saga, a comic series dedicated to international comic crossover, mixing characters and series on an unimaginable scale and allowing for some of the most legendary and interesting moments in comic history, including those contributed by Zarkenis Ultima such as:
    • Their first published comic in the series about a young alien from a faraway world who found themselves unceremoniously transported to Earth, where they had to learn to be more human than their alien nature might allow, a demonstration of their ability to write interesting comics without relying on suspense or violence;
    • The emergence of The World-Dragon, an ancient and angry deity, from the center of the planet Hadrimmelis, where it destroyed an entire fleet of spaceships upon creation and left comic readers everywhere speechless;
  2. Young Bloods, a currently-running series co-created by Zarkenis Ultima that centers around a group of young heroes and their trials and tribulations through both superheroism and teenage life. The lively characters and their unforgettable adventures have become a cult hit throughout the entire multiverse;
Astonished at the continued success of Elementals, a nearly decade old collaborative fantasy series, whose success is in large part due to Zarkenis Ultima’s contributions which include:
  • The character of Tristan Frost, an ice magician who learned to overcome his fear of adventure to become one of the strongest and bravest heroes in the multiverse, once defeating a demon-lord in combat to save his wife;
  • The series’ organization, writing, and story-building during two long periods of Elementals’ creation when the original authors were not able to continue writing, including during the finale of the second volume;
  • Their undeniable contributions to the battle aboard the Devil’s Luck, one of the most climactic and exciting scenes of the series and an excellent show of literary collaboration between several different authors and their subsequent characters and ideas;
Fascinated by the rich folklore and ancient mythos of the Zarkenian people, especially the tale of the Children of Infinity, a story of a future race shaping and building their universe around all the magic and craziness around them; while the tale has been popularized and altered throughout many nations, it was the Zarkenian people who truly created what would grow into such a universally loved mythology, including the original recorded tellings of:
  • The Phantom Blade, the fable of Lady Sylvalladine, a young magician whose adventures across the universe ended in a fierce battle and an unforgettable legend;
  • The first stories of The Silver Hand Academy, which came to be the core of the tale of the Children of Infinity and grew into a flourishing and detailed world rivaled by few;
  • The duels at the first Academy welcoming ceremony, including that between Elsis and Arogisl, a fight scene that single handedly introduced much of the early magic and combat and inspired incredible creativity for many years to come;

Awed by the magic that Zarkenis Ultima is able to imbue into their great nation's many writings, and confident that such talents should not go unrecognized;

Hereby commends Zarkenis Ultima.
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Postby Hulldom » Mon Feb 21, 2022 9:03 am

I can't exactly speak to the veracity of the content, but this is quite well done. Bonus points for the creativity too--this will certainly be unique in the SC's annals. Support.

Edit: I'll have some suggestions later though, mostly to maybe help some of the clunky reading things noted by Malphe II below.
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Postby Malphe II » Mon Feb 21, 2022 9:22 am

This is very dense & has a few clunky reading sentences, but otherwise reads well.
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Postby Thousand Branches » Mon Feb 21, 2022 9:25 am

Malphe II wrote:This is very dense & has a few clunky reading sentences, but otherwise reads well.

That’s… somewhat unsurprising :p Sometimes RP can be a lot to chew through in one clause while retaining details. Do let me know if there’s specific things that you think could be improved :)
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Postby Unibot III » Mon Feb 21, 2022 12:36 pm

OOC: A wonderful candidate! :) Full support.

IC: Vice Ambassador Percy Winslow, an open Zarkenian nerd, rose to signal his approval of the draft resolution. "As a long time fan of their stories, I can barely contain my excitement that our august body may one day commend their creative contributions," said Percy, adding that he was fond of the draft's structure and the careful way it balanced promoting Zarkenis Ultima's role in the creation of these works without running afoul of the rules, or attributing authorship to the country itself.

His speech was interrupted by a text from his assistant, Chiara alerting to him to the sudden death of their lead ambassador:

Are you sure??? What kind of a bird??

YEAH like dead dead
An albatross!!
https://www.odessachronicle.uni/news/wager-freeman-dead-at-61-after-fall-3.712
How did this happen?

She needed wifi . they never installed ethernet in the new office :?
Was there any camera footage? Do we know how it happened?

She was LIVE. In-session. The GA saw it all
I'll take the monorail back ASAP

No!! Media already here. Press in lobby. Swarming Topid Stn too
Run a statement by corporate & me

Do I list you as vice or interim ?
interim, pls

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Percy put his phone aside and bowed to the chamber. "My apologies to the body, but I will have to yield the floor as of this time, except to remark one last time just how pleased my delegation is that writers and creatives are finally being recognized for their contributions by our institution and what a well-rounded first draft this truly is. Indeed, we wonder if it may be appropriate if the preamble connected this proposal to the WASC's determination in SC#378. Thank you," said Percy.
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Postby Hulldom » Mon Feb 21, 2022 1:04 pm

Alright, here's some more detailed comments. These are honestly more syntactical and structural. Can't speak to the content and of course, knocking it out of the park grammar-wise.

The Security Council,

Lauding the rich culture and remarkable history of Zarkenis Ultima, a nation whose people have achieved a mastery of narrative arts seldom seen across the wide realm of NationStates;

Wishing to highlight Zarkenis Ultima’s finesse in the many forms and genres of artistic collaboration, working with dozens of artists, writers, and actors from nations across the multiverse to produce astonishing works;

Yearning for the return of Elfen High, a fantastical and epic TV show that featured an expanse of Zarkenian characters, episodes, and cinematography - especially during the show's unforgettable finale - including:

Would re-word this to be "...epic and fantastical...", just reads better for me. Additionally, would drop the mention of the finale unless you intend to describe it in one of your points (if you have the characters I would consider it!).

  • Alastor, a lowly demon who came to be known as the Demon Lord, cleverly conquering and modernizing Hell and going on to provide an unforgettable impact in the legendary final battle against Oberon, King of the fae;
  • One of the wildest twists of the whole show where Lyra Longshire, one of Zarkenis Ultima’s longest running characters, unleashed the power of a nuclear missile onto the moon during the final standoff - effectively stopping Oberon in his tracks and destroying a key component of the faelord's plan to remake the universe;

In the Lyra Longshire clause, introduce her first. Something like "Lyra Longshire, one of Zarkenis Ultima's longest running characters who, in one of the wildest twists of whole show, unleashed...".

  • Two of the show's best epilogues, wherein Alastor and Lyra were visited in their old age and finally given the happy endings they both deserved, an incredibly emotional moment for not just those characters but the show’s entire fanbase;

Endlessly impressed with Zarkenis Ultima's incredible knack for comics, being one of the main contributors in two of the world's most famous comic book runs:
  1. Infinite Justice: Beyond, the third (and arguably most successful) iteration in the Infinite Justice saga, a comic series dedicated to international comic crossover, mixing characters and series on an unimaginable scale and allowing for some of the most legendary and interesting moments in comic history, including those contributed by Zarkenis Ultima such as:
    • Their first published comic in the series about a young alien from a faraway world who found themselves unceremoniously transported to Earth, where they had to learn to be more human than their alien nature might allow;
    • The emergence of The World-Dragon, an ancient and angry deity, from the center of the planet Hadrimmelis, where it destroyed an entire fleet of spaceships upon creation and left the world speechless;
  2. Young Bloods, a currently-running series co-created by Zarkenis Ultima that centers around a group of young heroes and their trials and tribulations through both superheroism and teenage life. The characters and their adventures with everything from vampire drug-trafficking rings to immortal witches to the living dead have become a cult hit throughout the entire multiverse;

Would drop "with everything from vampire drug-trafficking rings to immortal witches to the living dead" in the Young Bloods clause. If you feel this is necessary, that's fine, but consider re-wording this clause. It feels clunky.

Astonished at the continued success of Elementals, a nearly decade old collaborative fantasy series, whose success is in large part due to Zarkenis Ultima’s contributions which include:
  • The character of Tristan Frost, an ice magician who learned to overcome his fear of adventure to become one of the strongest and bravest heroes in the multiverse, once defeating a demon-lord in combat to save his wife;
  • The series’ organization, writing, and story-building during two long periods of Elementals’ creation when the original authors were not able to continue writing, including during the finale of the second volume;
  • Undeniable contributions to the battle aboard the Devil’s Luck, one of the most climactic and exciting scenes of the series and an excellent show of literary collaboration between several different authors and their subsequent characters and ideas;

This is good. Only thing I have as a note is add "Their" in front of "undeniable contributions", just feels kind of awkward to me at the moment.

Fascinated by the rich folklore and ancient mythos of the Zarkenian people, especially the tale of the Children of Infinity, a story of a future race shaping and building their universe around all the magic and craziness around them; while the tale has been popularized and altered throughout many nations, it was the Zarkenian people who truly created what would grow into such a universally loved mythology, including the original recorded tellings of:
  • The Phantom Blade, the fable of Lady Sylvalladine, a young magician whose adventures across the universe ended in a fierce battle and an unforgettable legend;
  • The first stories of The Silver Hand Academy, which came to be the core of the tale of the Children of Infinity and grew into a flourishing and detailed world rivaled by few;
  • The duels at the first Academy welcoming ceremony, including that between Elsis and Arogisl, a fight scene that single handedly introduced much of the early magic and combat and inspired incredible creativity for many years to come;

Awed by the magic that Zarkenis Ultima is able to imbue into their great nation's many writings, and confident that such talents should not go unrecognized;

Hereby commends Zarkenis Ultima.

This is good.

As a general note, especially in full clauses where your sub-clauses are not complete sentences, consider adding "and" before your last sub-clause.

Finally, just want to re-iterate my support for this. This is very, very well done and I think we should always consider more RPers!
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Postby Thousand Branches » Mon Feb 21, 2022 1:46 pm

Hulldom wrote:-snip for brevity-

Most of these have been taken in mind save for the comments about the finale of Elfen High - given that all three of those clauses mention more about the finale than anything else and also the use of “and” because ehhh I’ve just never been a huge fan personally
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Postby Economa Incorporated » Mon Feb 21, 2022 10:43 pm

As you said, the legality of Mentoring actions is still pretty no bueno - "Roleplay Mentors - While the scheme has now been disbanded, mentoring carried out while an individual was on the Mentor staff cannot be cited." So good call there.

Zark definitely deserves this! Somewhat of an unusual SC Res, but I am always glad to see new things.

If it weren't so dense already, I'd mention his involvement in Madhouse, but I do think you're probably already over-dense on more notable things.

Critically, your clauses are at their best when they're describing the benefit of those characters and stories to others (as an example, as inspiration, etc), and at their weakest when just describing them as they are, or as good. Some will question the relevance to the SC and the world without the "benefit" parts.
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Postby Thousand Branches » Mon Feb 21, 2022 10:50 pm

Economa Incorporated wrote:As you said, the legality of Mentoring actions is still pretty no bueno - "Roleplay Mentors - While the scheme has now been disbanded, mentoring carried out while an individual was on the Mentor staff cannot be cited." So good call there.

Zark definitely deserves this! Somewhat of an unusual SC Res, but I am always glad to see new things.

If it weren't so dense already, I'd mention his involvement in Madhouse, but I do think you're probably already over-dense on more notable things.

Critically, your clauses are at their best when they're describing the benefit of those characters and stories to others (as an example, as inspiration, etc), and at their weakest when just describing them as they are, or as good. Some will question the relevance to the SC and the world without the "benefit" parts.

I’m sorry, I’m not 100% certain what you mean by the “benefit” parts, but other than that, those are all fair comments. I do believe that as a part of the NationStates community, P2TM is absolutely relevant to this council, but I suppose that is an individual prerogative. I know a lot of people view the council as much more gameplay-centric, that simply isn’t my style.

Additionally, I absolutely agree on the points of just describing things as generally good, if I’m being totally honest, that was almost fully done for the sake of brevity because I had to fit five pretty dense rps into one resolution :p
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Postby Economa Incorporated » Mon Feb 21, 2022 11:02 pm

Thousand Branches wrote:
Economa Incorporated wrote:As you said, the legality of Mentoring actions is still pretty no bueno - "Roleplay Mentors - While the scheme has now been disbanded, mentoring carried out while an individual was on the Mentor staff cannot be cited." So good call there.

Zark definitely deserves this! Somewhat of an unusual SC Res, but I am always glad to see new things.

If it weren't so dense already, I'd mention his involvement in Madhouse, but I do think you're probably already over-dense on more notable things.

Critically, your clauses are at their best when they're describing the benefit of those characters and stories to others (as an example, as inspiration, etc), and at their weakest when just describing them as they are, or as good. Some will question the relevance to the SC and the world without the "benefit" parts.

I’m sorry, I’m not 100% certain what you mean by the “benefit” parts, but other than that, those are all fair comments. I do believe that as a part of the NationStates community, P2TM is absolutely relevant to this council, but I suppose that is an individual prerogative. I know a lot of people view the council as much more gameplay-centric, that simply isn’t my style.

Additionally, I absolutely agree on the points of just describing things as generally good, if I’m being totally honest, that was almost fully done for the sake of brevity because I had to fit five pretty dense rps into one resolution :p


Oh, sorry, I mean the parts the describe a clear benefit. For example:

> Two of the show's best epilogues, wherein Alastor and Lyra were visited in their old age and finally given the happy endings they both deserved, an incredibly emotional moment for not just those characters but the show’s entire fanbase;

This one describes the impact on a fanbase for the thread.

> The lively characters and their unforgettable adventures have become a cult hit throughout the entire multiverse;

As does this one.

> Their undeniable contributions to the battle aboard the Devil’s Luck, one of the most climactic and exciting scenes of the series and an excellent show of literary collaboration between several different authors and their subsequent characters and ideas;

Even this described a purportedly fairly unique and exemplary thread, with reasons why it is such.

On the other hand,

> Their first published comic in the series about a young alien from a faraway world who found themselves unceremoniously transported to Earth, where they had to learn to be more human than their alien nature might allow;
> Lyra Longshire, one of Zarkenis Ultima’s longest running characters, who kicked off the final standoff with one of the wildest twists of the show, unleashing the power of a nuclear missile onto the moon and effectively stopping Oberon in his tracks by destroying a key component of the faelord's plan to remake the universe;

These pretty purely just describe the plot/char and their importance to the story/thread, rather than the community.

Granted, those are in the contexts of the paragraphs above those lists, which apply a little more meta-level oomph, but...probably not enough?

While I agree, that P2TM work is valid cause for Commendation, you're going to be going up against the question "why should we care?" You can either beat that by meta politicking and getting WALL on your side and rendering questions moot, and/or have a good answer ready. I think the answer you're working towards here is, well, along these lines of:

> achieved a mastery of narrative arts seldom seen across the wide realm of NationStates;
> universally loved mythology
> single handedly introduced much of the early magic and combat and inspired incredible creativity for many years to come;
> The lively characters and their unforgettable adventures have become a cult hit throughout the entire multiverse;
> The series’ organization, writing, and story-building during two long periods of Elementals’ creation when the original authors were not able to continue writing, including during the finale of the second volume;

Or in other words, "you should care because their works have made a positive impact on the community and inspired others; he as a player has been instrumental in some of the best examples of P2TM writing and threadrunning. These stories have impacted many, and his leadership has lifted the works of many others up."

Also granted, even within the scope of just those threads, you're making an essentially similar argument for commendation to any sort of "they were a great leader/delegate/founder for their region" commendation, but frankly, the world is more familiar with those and I think the SC is more willing to accept that notable Gameplayers and regionbuilders are notable. I think your case is strengthened here with those less familiar with P2TM by couching things in terms that explicitly describe the impact and benefit of these stories whenever feasible.
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Postby Thousand Branches » Tue Feb 22, 2022 6:36 am

Economa Incorporated wrote:Oh, sorry, I mean the parts the describe a clear benefit. For example:

> Two of the show's best epilogues, wherein Alastor and Lyra were visited in their old age and finally given the happy endings they both deserved, an incredibly emotional moment for not just those characters but the show’s entire fanbase;

This one describes the impact on a fanbase for the thread.

> The lively characters and their unforgettable adventures have become a cult hit throughout the entire multiverse;

As does this one.

> Their undeniable contributions to the battle aboard the Devil’s Luck, one of the most climactic and exciting scenes of the series and an excellent show of literary collaboration between several different authors and their subsequent characters and ideas;

Even this described a purportedly fairly unique and exemplary thread, with reasons why it is such.

On the other hand,

> Their first published comic in the series about a young alien from a faraway world who found themselves unceremoniously transported to Earth, where they had to learn to be more human than their alien nature might allow;
> Lyra Longshire, one of Zarkenis Ultima’s longest running characters, who kicked off the final standoff with one of the wildest twists of the show, unleashing the power of a nuclear missile onto the moon and effectively stopping Oberon in his tracks by destroying a key component of the faelord's plan to remake the universe;

These pretty purely just describe the plot/char and their importance to the story/thread, rather than the community.

Granted, those are in the contexts of the paragraphs above those lists, which apply a little more meta-level oomph, but...probably not enough?

While I agree, that P2TM work is valid cause for Commendation, you're going to be going up against the question "why should we care?" You can either beat that by meta politicking and getting WALL on your side and rendering questions moot, and/or have a good answer ready. I think the answer you're working towards here is, well, along these lines of:

> achieved a mastery of narrative arts seldom seen across the wide realm of NationStates;
> universally loved mythology
> single handedly introduced much of the early magic and combat and inspired incredible creativity for many years to come;
> The lively characters and their unforgettable adventures have become a cult hit throughout the entire multiverse;
> The series’ organization, writing, and story-building during two long periods of Elementals’ creation when the original authors were not able to continue writing, including during the finale of the second volume;

Or in other words, "you should care because their works have made a positive impact on the community and inspired others; he as a player has been instrumental in some of the best examples of P2TM writing and threadrunning. These stories have impacted many, and his leadership has lifted the works of many others up."

Also granted, even within the scope of just those threads, you're making an essentially similar argument for commendation to any sort of "they were a great leader/delegate/founder for their region" commendation, but frankly, the world is more familiar with those and I think the SC is more willing to accept that notable Gameplayers and regionbuilders are notable. I think your case is strengthened here with those less familiar with P2TM by couching things in terms that explicitly describe the impact and benefit of these stories whenever feasible.

Hmm, well for one I think that the modern Security Council is much more amenable to RP resolutions than in years past. This isn’t even the first P2TM commendation, as The Templar High Council has been previously commended in recent years for similar work. I think the content provided is really strong, and some of the clauses do just detail how certain things are really important to the story or the success of the rp. In some ways, the commendation isn't meant to highlight their relevancy to the SC, but rather to P2TM, since that’s where they’ve contributed all their time and I believe that all NS communities are deserving of commendation other than contributing something to the same old categories we always see resolutions in.

All this being said, I’ll see what I can do to make some of those clauses a little less bland and hopefully more relevant to the argument of the proposal
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Postby Thousand Branches » Wed Feb 23, 2022 7:52 am

Edited a couple of clauses to help with relevancy! Still under character count afaik

EDIT: As to Unibot III’s comment about connecting to 378, I believe that would belittle the incredible achievements of Zark by putting them in a weird light of “well since we want to diversify, I guess you’re up”. Zark’s achievements stand on their own without the knowledge that P2TM is an under-represented community
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Postby Utquiagvik » Wed Feb 23, 2022 12:54 pm

I'm in support. You did a pretty good job on this proposal, and i agree with you on commending Zarkenis Ultima.
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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Thu Feb 24, 2022 8:38 am

To me and well written C&C makes you want to support it from the first time you read it. This does that, in spades!

A very nice piece of work Ara - I have never in my NS career come across the nominee, but your draft makes me wish I had. Well done in navigating a very tricky area, would have been so easy to run afoul of the Fourth Wall.
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Postby Thousand Branches » Thu Feb 24, 2022 8:49 am

Thank you to BBD and Utquiagvik (definitely took me a sec to spell that right haha), I’m glad I could do some justice to the nominee ^-^

Also, on a second note, I forgot to do this earlier but I was asked before hitting the forums to request a legality check on the usage of “Hell” and “Earth”, two words that are equally theoretical rl references, but in this case refer to places irp, which is framed here as fictional stories being told. I do know that in the case of “Earth”’s usage within Infinite Justice, it does technically refer to actual Earth iirc. Is that still considered against the rules for rl references since it is framed as fictional?
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Postby Lenlyvit » Sat Feb 26, 2022 6:45 pm

Thousand Branches wrote:Thank you to BBD and Utquiagvik (definitely took me a sec to spell that right haha), I’m glad I could do some justice to the nominee ^-^

Also, on a second note, I forgot to do this earlier but I was asked before hitting the forums to request a legality check on the usage of “Hell” and “Earth”, two words that are equally theoretical rl references, but in this case refer to places irp, which is framed here as fictional stories being told. I do know that in the case of “Earth”’s usage within Infinite Justice, it does technically refer to actual Earth iirc. Is that still considered against the rules for rl references since it is framed as fictional?

I'm not a moderator, far from it, but I believe that your use of "Hell" and "Earth" would not be a rules violation in this context. They're obviously established as RP context in your draft, and also in the RP itself. Not only that, but if you look around NS there are quite a few regions that not only use earth as a role play map but also call their RP world "Earth". Similarly, I'm sure there may be regions or nations throughout NS that use "Hell" as a real place. If the nation is christian, or similar, you get what I'm saying. But still, I'm not a mod.
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Postby Thousand Branches » Sun Feb 27, 2022 5:20 pm

Lenlyvit wrote:
Thousand Branches wrote:Thank you to BBD and Utquiagvik (definitely took me a sec to spell that right haha), I’m glad I could do some justice to the nominee ^-^

Also, on a second note, I forgot to do this earlier but I was asked before hitting the forums to request a legality check on the usage of “Hell” and “Earth”, two words that are equally theoretical rl references, but in this case refer to places irp, which is framed here as fictional stories being told. I do know that in the case of “Earth”’s usage within Infinite Justice, it does technically refer to actual Earth iirc. Is that still considered against the rules for rl references since it is framed as fictional?

I'm not a moderator, far from it, but I believe that your use of "Hell" and "Earth" would not be a rules violation in this context. They're obviously established as RP context in your draft, and also in the RP itself. Not only that, but if you look around NS there are quite a few regions that not only use earth as a role play map but also call their RP world "Earth". Similarly, I'm sure there may be regions or nations throughout NS that use "Hell" as a real place. If the nation is christian, or similar, you get what I'm saying. But still, I'm not a mod.

This has now been confirmed by Sedge, so with that I'll be moving this towards submission around early to mid March!
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Postby Thousand Branches » Tue Mar 01, 2022 9:18 am

Thousand Branches wrote:This has now been confirmed by Sedge, so with that I'll be moving this towards submission around early to mid March!

After working up a more solid timeline, I’m thinking this will be submitted around March the 7th without any huge problems that come up!

EDIT: Actually the 6th, I lied :ppp
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Postby Unibot III » Tue Mar 01, 2022 8:48 pm

Thousand Branches wrote:Edited a couple of clauses to help with relevancy! Still under character count afaik

EDIT: As to Unibot III’s comment about connecting to 378, I believe that would belittle the incredible achievements of Zark by putting them in a weird light of “well since we want to diversify, I guess you’re up”. Zark’s achievements stand on their own without the knowledge that P2TM is an under-represented community


EDIT: Fair point, and it takes away from Zark specifically.

I assume you know, but Zark at one time was a Merryman in the UDL. He attended a lot of liberations back in the day. This page shows some of his mission ribbons and his UDL decorations:

https://www.tapatalk.com/groups/udl/mem ... file&u=350

I forgot he did ITALIA with us! Good times! :)
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Postby Thousand Branches » Tue Mar 01, 2022 9:04 pm

Unibot III wrote:
Thousand Branches wrote:Edited a couple of clauses to help with relevancy! Still under character count afaik

EDIT: As to Unibot III’s comment about connecting to 378, I believe that would belittle the incredible achievements of Zark by putting them in a weird light of “well since we want to diversify, I guess you’re up”. Zark’s achievements stand on their own without the knowledge that P2TM is an under-represented community


EDIT: Fair point, and it takes away from Zark specifically.

I assume you know, but Zark at one time was a Merryman in the UDL. He attended a lot of liberations back in the day. This page shows some of his mission ribbons and his UDL decorations:

https://www.tapatalk.com/groups/udl/mem ... file&u=350

I forgot he did ITALIA with us! Good times! :)

Mhm, had origins there as well as in madhouse. I felt that his contributions specifically to RP and the thriving state of P2TM were the most important things to include with a limit of only 5000 characters. It’s one of those situations were somebody has just done too many dang things to fit in one place, so I chose a theme thag I thought best suited him :)
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Postby Thousand Branches » Sat Mar 05, 2022 7:25 am

Decided to submit a day early since I dropped RtSI out of the running in the GA :p
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Postby Fachumonn » Sat Mar 05, 2022 7:29 am

Approved!
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Postby Wallenburg » Sun Mar 06, 2022 10:14 pm

Lovely work. I'm happy to see such a longstanding RPer with a history of valued participation be recognized by this body.
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Ex-Nation

Postby FNR WA Office » Sun Mar 06, 2022 10:26 pm

The Free Nations Region has voted FOR this proposal:
Zarkenis Ultima is undoubtedly one of the most proficient and skilled members of the PTTM community. They have engaged in numerous high-quality and creative roleplays, and have also helped new players get involved in the PTTM community. The proposal's method of citing roleplays as TV shows, comic books, etc. is also very creative. As such, we believe that this proposal highlights the achievements of the nominee thoroughly and well, combined with the fact that PTTM is an underrepresented community in a Gameplay-dominated Security Council.
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Civil Rights Lovefest

Postby Gemeinschaftsland » Mon Mar 07, 2022 2:09 am

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