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[DRAFT] Commend Kowani

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 7:22 am
by The North Polish Union
Its been a while since I attempted a C&C, and based on my perusals of recent commendations, the way they're structured has changed in the last 5 years or so. Suggestions for improvements are welcome.

In particular, I'd like a ruling on the legality of the "APPLAUDING" clause. I did my best to keep it within SC rules, but from what I could find nothing like this has been seriously attempted before so there wasn't any precedent to work from.

The Security Council;

RECOGNIZING Kowani as a nation whose leadership has contributed at a high level to many areas, including both regional and broader international affairs;

GRATEFUL for Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL) and particularly for aiding alongside several other figures in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019, helping to successfully assist refugees from the former region and keeping the regions’ community alive despite the disaster through raising awareness of their own linguistic heritage and encouraging other nations to do the same;

NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as a Liberation Minister, and as such is responsible, with the other Liberation Ministers, for much of the administration and protection of the region as well as being the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

OBSERVING that Kowani has made a great commitment to furthering international diplomacy, doing such things as participating in both the International Socialist Congress, where they have worked to assist left-wing political parties and organizations that are persecuted in their nations of residence, and the International Senate, where they focused on improving international security and the prevention of smuggling and environmentally-destructive trade practices;

PLEASED by Kowani’s founding of the Romance Language Foundation, which provides a venue for nations in which unique Romance languages are spoken to cooperate on the preservation, classification, and spread of such languages;

ACKNOWLEDGING that Kowani is a significant contributor to those meeting-places where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse, and has been cited as notable for its acclaimed research- and data-driven contributions in those areas, thereby helping other national leaders to grow and their knowledge and understanding;

APPLAUDING Kowani’s leadership's further efforts to provide high-quality information to such discussions by providing services as a news aggregator, which has significantly and outstandingly helped enable leaders of other nations to keep well-informed;

BELIEVING that the nation of Kowani has contributed greatly to international affairs;

DOES HEREBY commend Kowani.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 7:23 am
by The North Polish Union
Resources:

Kowani in the GA

viewtopic.php?f=9&t=453979&sid=206f32941c0a29ded0e9cd9bef846976#p34924008

viewtopic.php?p=34871199#p34871199

viewtopic.php?f=9&t=452270

Praise for Kowani by other posters

viewtopic.php?p=39127335#p39127335

viewtopic.php?f=20&t=508905&p=38906781&hilit=kowani+news#p38906781

viewtopic.php?f=20&t=508905&p=38923007#p38923007

Kowani providing news examples

viewtopic.php?f=20&t=513453&p=39223440#p39223440

viewtopic.php?f=20&t=487095&p=39221007#p39221007

viewtopic.php?f=20&t=509600&p=39211915#p39211915

Effortposts by Kowani

https://www.nationstates.net/page=dispatch/id=1537423



Previous drafts:

The Security Council;

RECOGNIZING this body’s long tradition of commending exemplary nations for their contributions to international culture and stability;

NOTING Kowani as a nation that whose leadership contributed at a high level to many areas, including both regional affairs and broader international affairs;

PLEASED by Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL); and particularly

GRATEFUL that Kowani (among others) aided many of its fellow nations in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019; and

GLADDENED by the fact that CoCL managed to successfully integrate refugees from Council for Constructed Languages under the leadership of a group of nations that included Kowani;

NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as Liberation Minister and is the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

PLEASED that in spite of such a potential language barrier, Kowani has taken an important role in international affairs even outside its region;

OBSERVING that Kowani participation in the International Socialist Congress and the International Senate, its World Assembly delegation’s feedback to authors of numerous General Assembly proposals, and particularly its founding of the Romance Language Foundation are exemplary of Kowani’s commitment to furthering international diplomacy;

APPLAUDING Kowani’s significant contributions to NationStates General, where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse and where Kowani has been cited as notable for its research- and data-driven contributions to that institution;

BELIEVING that the Security Council ought to recognize nations such as Kowani that have contributed greatly to international affairs;

THIS BODY does hereby commend Kowani.


The Security Council;

RECOGNIZING Kowani as a nation that whose leadership contributed at a high level to many areas, including both regional affairs and broader international affairs;

PLEASED by Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL); and particularly

GRATEFUL that Kowani (among others) aided many of its fellow nations in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019 that CoCL managed to successfully integrate refugees from Council for Constructed Languages under the leadership of a group of nations that included Kowani;

NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as Liberation Minister, and as such is responsible, with the other Liberation Ministers, for much of the administration and protection of the region as well as being the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

PLEASED that in spite of such a potential language barrier, Kowani has taken an important role in international affairs even outside its region;

OBSERVING that Kowani participation in the International Socialist Congress and the International Senate, its World Assembly delegation’s feedback to authors of numerous General Assembly proposals, and particularly its founding of the Romance Language Foundation are exemplary of Kowani’s commitment to furthering international diplomacy;

ACKNOWLEDGING that Kowani is a significant contributor to those meeting-places where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse, and has been cited as notable for its research- and data-driven contributions to that institution;

APPLAUDING Kowani’s further efforts to provide high-quality information to such discussions by acting in many ways as a de facto news service/aggregator, a service which enables other nations to keep well-informed;

BELIEVING that the Security Council ought to recognize nations such as Kowani that have contributed greatly to international affairs;

THIS BODY does hereby commend Kowani.


The Security Council;

RECOGNIZING Kowani as a nation whose leadership has contributed at a high level to many areas, including both regional and broader international affairs;

GRATEFUL for Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL) and particularly for aiding alongside several other figures in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019, helping to successfully integrate refugees from the former region, helping to keep the regions activity alive after a disaster;

NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as a Liberation Minister, and as such is responsible, with the other Liberation Ministers, for much of the administration and protection of the region as well as being the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

OBSERVING that Kowani has made a great commitment to furthering international diplomacy, doing such things as participating in both the International Socialist Congress and the International Senate; using their World Assembly delegation to give helpful feedback to authors of numerous General Assembly proposals; and particularly, founding the Romance Language Foundation;

ACKNOWLEDGING that Kowani is a significant contributor to those meeting-places where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse, and has been cited as notable for its research- and data-driven contributions in those areas;

APPLAUDING Kowani’s leadership's further efforts to provide high-quality information to such discussions by providing services as a sort of aggregator, which enables leaders of other nations to keep well-informed;

BELIEVING that the nation of Kowani has contributed greatly to international affairs;

THIS BODY does hereby commend Kowani.


The Security Council;

RECOGNIZING Kowani as a nation whose leadership has contributed at a high level to many areas, including both regional and broader international affairs;

GRATEFUL for Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL) and particularly for aiding alongside several other figures in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019, helping to successfully integrate refugees from the former region and keeping the region's activity alive despite the disaster;

NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as a Liberation Minister, and as such is responsible, with the other Liberation Ministers, for much of the administration and protection of the region as well as being the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

OBSERVING that Kowani has made a great commitment to furthering international diplomacy, doing such things as participating in both the International Socialist Congress and the International Senate; using their World Assembly delegation to give helpful feedback to authors of numerous General Assembly proposals; and particularly, founding the Romance Language Foundation, which provides a cooperative venue for nations in which unique Romance languages are spoken;

ACKNOWLEDGING that Kowani is a significant contributor to those meeting-places where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse, and has been cited as notable for its research- and data-driven contributions in those areas;

APPLAUDING Kowani’s leadership's further efforts to provide high-quality information to such discussions by providing services as a sort of aggregator, which has significantly and outstandingly helped enable leaders of other nations to keep well-informed;

BELIEVING that the nation of Kowani has contributed greatly to international affairs;

THIS BODY does hereby commend Kowani.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 3:57 pm
by Giovanniland
While there may be some commendable actions (such as their NSG comments; I don't look at those forums often, but they seem to always post useful links to news reports and such), I don't think they quite meet the level of a SC commendation. Nevertheless, here is some feedback if you continue to pursue it:

The North Polish Union wrote:RECOGNIZING this body’s long tradition of commending exemplary nations for their contributions to international culture and stability;

I don't think this clause is needed, the second one is a good enough introduction to the nominee's contributions.

The North Polish Union wrote:PLEASED by Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL); and particularly

What services? Examples of commendable actions should be given.

The North Polish Union wrote:GRATEFUL that Kowani (among others) aided many of its fellow nations in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019; and

GLADDENED by the fact that CoCL managed to successfully integrate refugees from Council for Constructed Languages under the leadership of a group of nations that included Kowani;

Since these clauses both talk about securing communities through regional moves, I think you could rewrite them as one.

The North Polish Union wrote:NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as Liberation Minister and is the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

Likewise, the role of the Liberation Minister should also be specified here (unless it is to greet new nations - and even then, almost all regions have a similar role, so you'd need to expand on what is unique about their actions).

The North Polish Union wrote:ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

PLEASED that in spite of such a potential language barrier, Kowani has taken an important role in international affairs even outside its region;

While constructed languages are often interesting, I don't think creating one would be particularly commendable since hundreds of nations have done that. Of course, since I don't know much about NS forum roleplay / regional roleplay outside my region, do feel free to point me to posts that would potentially prove that their conlang is particularly remarkable among the international roleplay community.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 3:59 pm
by Comfed
I don't really think Kowani meets SC commendation standards.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 4:06 pm
by Outer Sparta
Not a rather commendable nominee. Kowani's accomplishments aren't at that level.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 8:40 pm
by Life During Wartime
APPLAUDING Kowani’s significant contributions to NationStates General, where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse and where Kowani has been cited as notable for its research- and data-driven contributions to that institution;


Despite saying the events are hypothetical, this is probably still illegal. You should try to make it more ambiguous e.g. "Praising Kowani for their data-driven contributions to debates" or whatever

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 8:49 pm
by Outer Sparta
Life During Wartime wrote:
APPLAUDING Kowani’s significant contributions to NationStates General, where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse and where Kowani has been cited as notable for its research- and data-driven contributions to that institution;


Despite saying the events are hypothetical, this is probably still illegal. You should try to make it more ambiguous e.g. "Praising Kowani for their data-driven contributions to debates" or whatever

I don't view NSG contributions as rather commend-worthy. It's an OOC site of real-world commentary and debate, and those don't merit anything in terms of SC recognition.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 8:53 pm
by Sincluda
Whilst I'd argue that Kowani is the most commendable NSGer... Kowani isn't quite commendable imo.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 8:54 pm
by Outer Sparta
Sincluda wrote:Whilst I'd argue that Kowani is the most commendable NSGer... Kowani isn't quite commendable imo.

NSG is the least c/c area on the site other than stats. After all, the OOC parts of the forum do not pertain to any actual achievements for the nation itself.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 04, 2021 10:54 pm
by CoraSpia
The comments do make me wonder what an nsger would have to do to get commended, if Kowani doesn't make the grade. Seems far easier for a gameplayer or to a lesser extent a roleplayer to gain recognition before we even get into the matter of how difficult it is to phrase things to include nsg within the rules.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 7:43 am
by The North Polish Union
Re: Kowani not being a commendable nominee, I respectfully (and obviously) disagree. Kowani has contributed to many parts of the game, including both RP and regional development, both of which have seen C&Cs pass. His area of greatest activity is definitely NSG though. While I agree that most of NSG (and most NSGers) are not commendable, and the OOC nature of the forum makes commendation-worthiness difficult, Kowani appears to be an exception. I do not intend to ry to pass a C&C of any other NSGers, and were this to pass successfully I find it difficult to imagine future C&Cs would fare well given the nature of the forum.

Re: the legality of the NSG clause. I believe the clause as written is within SC rules. The clause avoids denying the reality of the NS multiverse from the SC's perspective and thus keeps the commendation entirely IC. The phrase "NationStates General" is one that may also be a cause for legality concerns. but since the resolution refers to it as a sort of meeting-place for national leaders I believe it falls within the rules and remains IC. In any case, if any part of this resolution is ruled illegal I would be happy to modify it to comply with SC reules.

Giovanniland wrote:While there may be some commendable actions (such as their NSG comments; I don't look at those forums often, but they seem to always post useful links to news reports and such), I don't think they quite meet the level of a SC commendation. Nevertheless, here is some feedback if you continue to pursue it:

The North Polish Union wrote:RECOGNIZING this body’s long tradition of commending exemplary nations for their contributions to international culture and stability;

I don't think this clause is needed, the second one is a good enough introduction to the nominee's contributions.

This isn't something I'm going to change right away, but I'll definitely consider it going forward and see how it meshes with the rest of the resolution.

Giovanniland wrote:
The North Polish Union wrote:PLEASED by Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL); and particularly

What services? Examples of commendable actions should be given.

The North Polish Union wrote:GRATEFUL that Kowani (among others) aided many of its fellow nations in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019; and

GLADDENED by the fact that CoCL managed to successfully integrate refugees from Council for Constructed Languages under the leadership of a group of nations that included Kowani;

Since these clauses both talk about securing communities through regional moves, I think you could rewrite them as one.

The North Polish Union wrote:NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as Liberation Minister and is the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

Likewise, the role of the Liberation Minister should also be specified here (unless it is to greet new nations - and even then, almost all regions have a similar role, so you'd need to expand on what is unique about their actions).

I'm lumping these together because they all deal with similar things. last three clauses in this section are the support for the first once. I can agree that the second and third clauses are probably better combined. and will further clarify what the Liberation Minister's role is in the second draft.

Giovanniland wrote:
The North Polish Union wrote:ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

PLEASED that in spite of such a potential language barrier, Kowani has taken an important role in international affairs even outside its region;

While constructed languages are often interesting, I don't think creating one would be particularly commendable since hundreds of nations have done that. Of course, since I don't know much about NS forum roleplay / regional roleplay outside my region, do feel free to point me to posts that would potentially prove that their conlang is particularly remarkable among the international roleplay community.

I think that Kowani (and most of the other members of CoCL) have developed conlangs that are fleshed out to a degree that most others are not. I'm also not aware of conlangs (as in actually developed/utilized languages, not simply references to [insert national language here]) are as common on this site as you think.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 10:37 am
by Outer Sparta
The North Polish Union wrote:Re: Kowani not being a commendable nominee, I respectfully (and obviously) disagree. Kowani has contributed to many parts of the game, including both RP and regional development, both of which have seen C&Cs pass. His area of greatest activity is definitely NSG though. While I agree that most of NSG (and most NSGers) are not commendable, and the OOC nature of the forum makes commendation-worthiness difficult, Kowani appears to be an exception. I do not intend to ry to pass a C&C of any other NSGers, and were this to pass successfully I find it difficult to imagine future C&Cs would fare well given the nature of the forum.

Re: the legality of the NSG clause. I believe the clause as written is within SC rules. The clause avoids denying the reality of the NS multiverse from the SC's perspective and thus keeps the commendation entirely IC. The phrase "NationStates General" is one that may also be a cause for legality concerns. but since the resolution refers to it as a sort of meeting-place for national leaders I believe it falls within the rules and remains IC. In any case, if any part of this resolution is ruled illegal I would be happy to modify it to comply with SC reules.

NSG is only OOC commentary, it has nothing to do with national leaders. I would definitely keep the RP and regional development parts, but I still don't believe that NSG is a commendable area simply because it's OOC. If we're going to commend/condemn people based on OOC forum posts, then why not commend the largest posters on the site? Focus more on Kowani's gameplay achievements and cut out the NSG filler entirely.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 11:29 am
by The North Polish Union
Outer Sparta wrote:
The North Polish Union wrote:Re: Kowani not being a commendable nominee, I respectfully (and obviously) disagree. Kowani has contributed to many parts of the game, including both RP and regional development, both of which have seen C&Cs pass. His area of greatest activity is definitely NSG though. While I agree that most of NSG (and most NSGers) are not commendable, and the OOC nature of the forum makes commendation-worthiness difficult, Kowani appears to be an exception. I do not intend to ry to pass a C&C of any other NSGers, and were this to pass successfully I find it difficult to imagine future C&Cs would fare well given the nature of the forum.

Re: the legality of the NSG clause. I believe the clause as written is within SC rules. The clause avoids denying the reality of the NS multiverse from the SC's perspective and thus keeps the commendation entirely IC. The phrase "NationStates General" is one that may also be a cause for legality concerns. but since the resolution refers to it as a sort of meeting-place for national leaders I believe it falls within the rules and remains IC. In any case, if any part of this resolution is ruled illegal I would be happy to modify it to comply with SC reules.

NSG is only OOC commentary, it has nothing to do with national leaders. I would definitely keep the RP and regional development parts, but I still don't believe that NSG is a commendable area simply because it's OOC. If we're going to commend/condemn people based on OOC forum posts, then why not commend the largest posters on the site? Focus more on Kowani's gameplay achievements and cut out the NSG filler entirely.

For many years, the prevailing attitude towards NSGP and the Gameplay forum was that it was OOC, although attitudes towards that appear to be changing in recent years. Nonetheless, many GPers were C&Ced for actions that would've been considered OOC at the time, given the community paradigm. Likewise, the GA used to be almost exclusively IC and now tends to lean much more heavily towards OOC (at least among regulars), yet GA authors still receive C&Cs.

Just as OOC GP achievements had to be 'translated' (for lack of a better term) into IC vocabulary for SC resolutions I am attempting (I believe for the first time in SC history) to do the same for NSG. As I said above, "most of NSG (and most NSGers) are not commendable, and the OOC nature of the forum makes commendation-worthiness difficult", but I do not believe it is impossible. Rather than commending for number of posts, Kowani is unique for providing a high quality of commentary rather than simple OOC opinions

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 11:56 am
by Outer Sparta
The North Polish Union wrote:
Outer Sparta wrote:NSG is only OOC commentary, it has nothing to do with national leaders. I would definitely keep the RP and regional development parts, but I still don't believe that NSG is a commendable area simply because it's OOC. If we're going to commend/condemn people based on OOC forum posts, then why not commend the largest posters on the site? Focus more on Kowani's gameplay achievements and cut out the NSG filler entirely.

For many years, the prevailing attitude towards NSGP and the Gameplay forum was that it was OOC, although attitudes towards that appear to be changing in recent years. Nonetheless, many GPers were C&Ced for actions that would've been considered OOC at the time, given the community paradigm. Likewise, the GA used to be almost exclusively IC and now tends to lean much more heavily towards OOC (at least among regulars), yet GA authors still receive C&Cs.

Just as OOC GP achievements had to be 'translated' (for lack of a better term) into IC vocabulary for SC resolutions I am attempting (I believe for the first time in SC history) to do the same for NSG. As I said above, "most of NSG (and most NSGers) are not commendable, and the OOC nature of the forum makes commendation-worthiness difficult", but I do not believe it is impossible. Rather than commending for number of posts, Kowani is unique for providing a high quality of commentary rather than simple OOC opinions

If you're going to include OOC NSG, then make that less filler. It shouldn't comprise the majority of Kowani's achievements.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 12:19 pm
by Sedgistan
I think your wording in the "Applauding" clause is awkward - I'd prefer to see some more work put into that (can others provide suggestions?) before providing a ruling.

I don't have an encyclopaedic knowledge of SC resolutions, but Commend The Cat-Tribe is the one of an NSGer that sticks in my mind - it could be worth reviewing that for how it presented NSG contributions. There are definitely legal ways of covering that.

As a general point, I'm fully supportive of the principle of recognising more achievements of NS tribes outside what the SC usually covers.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 1:35 pm
by The North Polish Union
I'll definitely look at ways or suggestions to improve that clause and also look at SCR № 46, which I was not aware of. Thanks.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 1:38 pm
by Sincluda
Sedgistan wrote:I think your wording in the "Applauding" clause is awkward - I'd prefer to see some more work put into that (can others provide suggestions?) before providing a ruling.

I don't have an encyclopaedic knowledge of SC resolutions, but Commend The Cat-Tribe is the one of an NSGer that sticks in my mind - it could be worth reviewing that for how it presented NSG contributions. There are definitely legal ways of covering that.

As a general point, I'm fully supportive of the principle of recognising more achievements of NS tribes outside what the SC usually covers.

Thanks for bringing that up, Sedge. I vaguely remembered it, but mostly forgot it.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 3:06 pm
by Outer Sparta
The North Polish Union wrote:I'll definitely look at ways or suggestions to improve that clause and also look at SCR № 46, which I was not aware of. Thanks.

That one is quite an old one, and I am not sure of what the old ruleset was back then mentioning NSG stuff.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2021 8:18 pm
by Lord Dominator
I’ll have better thoughts later, but if any NSGer is commendable Kowani is - and their contributions there are certainly something that’d be cool to commend.

Have you asked them if they’d like one?

PostPosted: Wed Oct 06, 2021 12:02 am
by Kowani
Lord Dominator wrote:I’ll have better thoughts later, but if any NSGer is commendable Kowani is - and their contributions there are certainly something that’d be cool to commend.

Have you asked them if they’d like one?

waves

I haven't really participated in this debate because I didn't feel like it was proper to try and argue about a commendation of myself :lol2:
but I can confirm that TNPU reached out to me and asked my permission before going ahead with this

PostPosted: Wed Oct 06, 2021 12:38 am
by The Sherpa Empire
CoraSpia wrote:The comments do make me wonder what an nsger would have to do to get commended, if Kowani doesn't make the grade. Seems far easier for a gameplayer or to a lesser extent a roleplayer to gain recognition before we even get into the matter of how difficult it is to phrase things to include nsg within the rules.


So much this.^

Kowani's effortposts are interesting, informative, well-sourced, and even when I don't 100% agree with them, it is still clear that he put some thought into them. They are a valuable contribution to the site.

NS is both an IC and OOC community. If people can be commended for writing issues, I don't see why not for NSG content.

PostPosted: Wed Oct 06, 2021 6:23 pm
by Lord Dominator
Kowani wrote:
Lord Dominator wrote:I’ll have better thoughts later, but if any NSGer is commendable Kowani is - and their contributions there are certainly something that’d be cool to commend.

Have you asked them if they’d like one?

waves

I haven't really participated in this debate because I didn't feel like it was proper to try and argue about a commendation of myself :lol2:
but I can confirm that TNPU reached out to me and asked my permission before going ahead with this

Wonderful

(Your instincts on being in thread are generally accurate, it’s considered a bit gauche to comment on your own C&C. I personally draw a difference about commenting on your own record vs about the C&C itself, but your mileage may vary.)

PostPosted: Thu Oct 07, 2021 2:01 pm
by The North Polish Union
A second draft is up and the OP is updated. I believe this addresses most of the feedback brought up so far, and the clause (now clauses) relating to NSG have been significantly reworked. Further suggestions for improvements are appreciated.

The Security Council;

RECOGNIZING Kowani as a nation that whose leadership contributed at a high level to many areas, including both regional affairs and broader international affairs;

PLEASED by Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL); and particularly

GRATEFUL that Kowani (among others) aided many of its fellow nations in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019 that CoCL managed to successfully integrate refugees from Council for Constructed Languages under the leadership of a group of nations that included Kowani;

NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as Liberation Minister, and as such is responsible, with the other Liberation Ministers, for much of the administration and protection of the region as well as being the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

PLEASED that in spite of such a potential language barrier, Kowani has taken an important role in international affairs even outside its region;

OBSERVING that Kowani participation in the International Socialist Congress and the International Senate, its World Assembly delegation’s feedback to authors of numerous General Assembly proposals, and particularly its founding of the Romance Language Foundation are exemplary of Kowani’s commitment to furthering international diplomacy;

ACKNOWLEDGING that Kowani is a significant contributor to those meeting-places where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse, and has been cited as notable for its research- and data-driven contributions to that institution;

APPLAUDING Kowani’s further efforts to provide high-quality information to such discussions by acting in many ways as a de facto news service/aggregator, a service which enables other nations to keep well-informed;

BELIEVING that the Security Council ought to recognize nations such as Kowani that have contributed greatly to international affairs;

THIS BODY does hereby commend Kowani.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 11, 2021 8:39 pm
by Sincluda
I said earlier that Kowani wasn't commendable, but I'm certainly having second thoughts on that.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 12, 2021 10:21 am
by Thousand Branches
The usual edits, you know how it is :p

The North Polish Union wrote:RECOGNIZING Kowani as a nation that whose leadership contributed at a high level to many areas, including both regional affairs and broader international affairs;

First of all, delete “that”. Second of all, “contributed” should be “has contributed”. Also delete the first “affairs” (after “regional”).

The North Polish Union wrote:PLEASED by Kowani’s services to League of Constructed Languages (LoCL) and its successor, Council of Constructed Languages (CoCL); and particularly

This clause ain’t commending nothing. If you want to change this and make all the LoCL/CoCL clauses a list, that works. Otherwise, this clause does absolutely nothing except introduce the regions they worked in, which to be frank, is not a clause commending anything and so wouldn’t belong in this proposal.

Especially considering the next two clauses, this might work better as a list. Use an edited version of this clause to introduce the region and then the next two clauses are both bullets on it.

The North Polish Union wrote:GRATEFUL that Kowani (among others) aided many of its fellow nations in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019 that CoCL managed to successfully integrate refugees from Council for Constructed Languages under the leadership of a group of nations that included Kowani;

Huhhh? The grammar on this bad boy is a mess. I have so many edits on this that I’m just gonna suggest a rewrite:

GRATEFUL for Kowani’s aid in the relocation from LoCL to CoCL after the former region’s security was compromised in 2019, helping to successfully integrate refugees from the former region (optional add-on: , helping to keep the regions activity alive after a disaster)”

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The North Polish Union wrote:NOTING that Kowani continues to serve CoCL as Liberation Minister, and as such is responsible, with the other Liberation Ministers, for much of the administration and protection of the region as well as being the first point of greeting for new nations joining the region;

“as Liberation Minister” should be “as a Liberation Minister”. Otherwise, it suggests of a singular which is directly opposed if you continue reading the sentence.

The North Polish Union wrote:ASTOUNDED at the beauty and high degree of lexical development found in the Kowani language, a linguistically sophisticated Romance language unique to the nation;

Admittedly this is worded just a little bit weird. Firstly, you say both “high degree of lexical development” and “linguistically sophisticated” which mean preeeetty much the exact same thing. Also this doesn’t feel like it’s commending Kowani and rather their language? That’s probably totally on opinion but I just think this clause could generally be re-worded. I will leave that up to you as to how though.

The North Polish Union wrote:PLEASED that in spite of such a potential language barrier, Kowani has taken an important role in international affairs even outside its region;

Delete “such”. Actually just delete this clause? It doesn’t mean anything and since the Kowani language is entirely rp, commending them for… not having a language barrier is really weird. Unless there’s some genuinely amazing reason this matters (and if so, please do provide that in the clause), I’d just yeet the whole clause.

The North Polish Union wrote:OBSERVING that Kowani participation in the International Socialist Congress and the International Senate, its World Assembly delegation’s feedback to authors of numerous General Assembly proposals, and particularly its founding of the Romance Language Foundation are exemplary of Kowani’s commitment to furthering international diplomacy;

This is not readable if I’m honest. Too many long edits so here’s a rewrite that fixed your problems:

OBSERVING that Kowani has made a great commitment to furthering international diplomacy, doing such things as participating in both the International Socialist Congress and the International Senate; using their World Assembly delegation to give helpful feedback to authors of numerous General Assembly proposals; and particularly, founding the Romance Language Foundation;”

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The North Polish Union wrote:ACKNOWLEDGING that Kowani is a significant contributor to those meeting-places where world leaders come together to discuss and debate hypothetical events outside the multiverse, and has been cited as notable for its research- and data-driven contributions to that institution;

Delete the dashes, they don’t need to be there and they look weird as heck. Otherwise looks great!

The North Polish Union wrote:APPLAUDING Kowani’s further efforts to provide high-quality information to such discussions by acting in many ways as a de facto news service/aggregator, a service which enables other nations to keep well-informed;

The nation acts as a news service? Maybe the nation publishes a news service? As it is, this suggests that the nation as a whole is a news service which from an outside perspective is very wrong. I’d reword this clause a bit.

The North Polish Union wrote:BELIEVING that the Security Council ought to recognize nations such as Kowani that have contributed greatly to international affairs;

“ought to” is weird. Like I said on somebody else’s resolution a while back, writing that the security council ought to do something is the wrong way to go about this. Rather it should be saying that this person’s achievements are what makes them worthy of commendation, not some idea of what the SC should or shouldn’t be doing. As much as this sounds arrogant as hell, a commendation or condemnation, in every case, is a privilege, not a right. God I sound like my mother but you get the gist, right? I hope so :p

I know these are a lot of edits and I apologize for that, but I hope they’ve been helpful.

Have a great day!

-A