This is in a much better state than I last saw it. I'd go to say that the current draft is probably convincing enough to me, although I'm not sure if it's convincing enough to the general SC voter pool. I also feel like there's a lot that can be more specified, and this resolution can use some smoothing over to flow better.
So my feedback:
Recalling Joe Bobs' beginnings as a member of Q102, where it already garnered praise for its admirable government policies, especially:
Having one of the most exemplary historians in NationStates, whose works are best displayed through the incredibly well-detailed documentation of the Bobbian Civil War, even documenting foreign aid to the same level of detail,
Running an extremely reliable News Agency that has recorded much of the history of Joe Bobs in astonishing levels of detail, from the attempted invasion by the neighbouring nation of Mweeha to a failed military coup d’etat attempt, and
Showing dedication to utopian policies, notably through its universal healthcare, strong opposition to the death penalty, support of the environment and extensive protections of animal rights,
While I personally think the roleplay is fine, you're probably going to face some difficulty in getting people to see this clause as commendable, given this isn't coming from a person relatively well-known today as an RPer or one that has an extensive history of on-site RP.
I don't think there's a way to fix that, just something to be noted.
and its introduction of a formal alliance with Europa, which became a close ally of Q102 and was notable for its thriving community that encouraged international politics and scientific development,
Instead of detailing Europa was, it may be a better idea to focus on the two's relationship. How was it close? Did Europa end up helping out Q102 in certain situatiosn? Did they do anything together? etc.
Dignifying that Joe Bobs created the Q102 University, where national leaders in Q102 could learn about various subjects, then going on to teach various subjects there such as Philosophy, Literature and NationStates history, and was a central figure in the creation of the Q102 Hall of Fame, allowing the best contributors to Q102 to be officially recognised within the region,
Applauding Joe Bobs' founding of the Anti-Racism Coalition in 2006, once one of the largest inter-regional coalitions, that went on to aid in the fight against the reprehensible ideologies of Nazism and racism, and included over 500 individual members as well as noteworthy regions such as The New Meritocracy and Belgium,
These read a bit clunky and could use some rewording to flow better. "Dignifying" seems like a weird action choice here.
Also, did Joe Bobs actually do anything for the Anti-Racism Coalition? One can found something then let someone else do all the work (given everything in this thread that doesn't sound like Joe Bobs at all, but the resolution doesn't show that). It would be best to reword that clause to explain Joe's contribution the org.
Impressed by Joe Bobs' significant contributions to the Global Right Alliance (GRA), working tirelessly to build its community, most notably by:
Helping start the “rotatorship” in 2008, an innovative form of government where each week a ruler would be chosen to have absolute power, helping increase regional engagement in an entertaining way,
Also a bit clunky and can be reworded a bit better.
Building diplomatic relations with many significant regions as Minister of Foreign Affairs, such as The East Pacific, Europeia and 10000 Islands,
As I've said before, this doesn't really tell me anything. You need to explain why these relationships matter besides these relationships being significant. Did GRA do anything notable with these relations?
Alternatively, you could consider nixing this clause and dedicating the characters elsewhere.
Reorganising the Ministry of Internal Affairs as GRA President by dividing it into the Ministries of Culture and Activity, allowing for more focus on both departments and resulting in the creation of the GRA Economy program overseen by Joe Bobs, encouraging government participation by rewarding "cash" for participation, and
It may be a good idea to specify on the "more focus" part. Also IMO, the GRA Economy program sounds like a bit more noteworthy than a simple structural rehaul, so I'd personally replace this clause w/ a clause about the Economy program and specifying what Joe Bob did to create it, and how its success helped the region beyond government participation if anything.
Helping to rebuild the GRA Defence Forces from a relatively inactive state around 2010, making it a dominant force in defending again,
And how did they build up the GRA Defence Forces? Stating they helped isgreat but doesn't show the work the nominee put into making it happen.
Acclaiming Joe Bobs’ work in helping get the GRA's Foreign Affairs set up after the region was relaunched in 2014 as Minister of Foreign Affairs, building diplomatic relations with many significant regions such as Capitalist Paradise, Spiritus and the Rejected Realms,
Explain what happened between GRA and these relations. For all we know, relations led to absolutely nothing and were inactive the whole time.
I'd also point out that while I personally think creating embassies can be commendable, others very much disagree... and dedicating two clauses to embassy building is probably not a good idea because of that. Up to you if you wanna remove this clause or the other embassy clause or keep them both or remove them both or whatever, just saying.
Cognisant that Joe Bobs also helped rebuild much of the region's infrastructure following the relaunch as Speaker and First Minister, most notably the Judiciary, World Assembly Delegate elections and Speaker succession, as well as restarting the rotatorship,
This clause is confusing. It should be mentioned exactly how Joe Bobs "helped rebuild" the region's infrastructure. This seems like it was through legislation, but that remains very unclear.
Also, I have no clue what a First Minister is and I'm sure many others will not know as well. Needs some clarification or removal.
Celebrating Joe Bobs’ work within the Founderless Regions Alliance (FRA), participating in countless defensive operations abroad, and more notably holding a very successful term as Arch-Chancellor in 2014, during which it took action to encourage the FRA to further help in stabilising regions during the chaos following invasions and hosted the third iteration of FRAVision, a worldwide singing competition that was widely successful and helped promote the FRA,
I think this clause is pretty great, but I'd delete the part about "participating in countless defensive operations abroad" unless you can substantiate that with a numerical statistic, and focus more on their Arch-Chancellor term and specify on their actions to help FRA stabilization policies instead of their participation in ops.
Extolling Joe Bobs' compiling of the histories of various significant regions, notably by authoring the "General History of the GRA", an in-depth documentation of the history of the GRA, and creating a public library in the FRA of the history of multiple important regions such as United Kingdom while Arch-Chancellor, and
While the content seems good, this needs some rewording to flow a little bit better.
Believing that while Joe Bobs' flag and national symbol, the penguin, is known largely for being cute and fluffy, Joe Bobs' achievements in various regions and the defending cause should not go unrecognised,
It'd be better to set up a proper juxtaposition here IMO. So say something like "Believing that while Joe Bobs' flag and national symbol, the penguin, is known largely for [insert value of penguins anthetical to region building], Joe Bobs' achievements in various regions and the defending cause only serve as examples of [insert value opposite to the penguins] and deserve interregional recognition,"
Or something like that.