[DRAFT] Commend Libertanny

[Vamperiall]

HI! So this is my first submission to the SC, but it's for a good friend, and I think they deserve it.

The Security Council,

Identifying Libertanny’s long and prosperous reign as Delegate of The East Pacific for eight months,

Celebrating Libertanny’s part in restoring The East Pacific’s government under Delegate Marrabuk, after Fedele’s actions as a rogue Delegate,

Acknowledging Libertanny’s contributions to The East Pacific pre-Delegacy:

1. Foundation of Small Magisterium Cafeterium, a small bloc of nations that united to oppose then-Delegate Fedele and embody general apathy within The East Pacific. This body then played an important part in fighting the coup attempt and rebuilding The East Pacific post-coup, alongside with improving the laws of The East Pacific,
2. Streamlining The East Pacific's foreign affairs department by creating region spheres, and developing the Inner Circle of Foreign Affairs, which trained nations in foreign affairs, most notably Zukchiva, who succeeded Libertanny in the Delegacy, as well as allowed citizens to have a much bigger impact on deciding foreign affairs matters,
3. The development of UCR friendships through outreach programs, which has diminished the notion of GCR supremacy in The East Pacific,
4. The restructuring of the EPNS and repeal of the EPNS Act, which set the foundations for the success of the current Ministry of Information.

Appreciating Libertanny’s contribution to the internal affairs of The East Pacific during its Delegacy:

1. Coordinating the three Paradoxical games events, where each event gathered at least 200 nations and promoted regional activity,
2. The creation of the REWARD program, which boosted The East Pacific’s endorsement count to astronomical levels and increased overall interest and activity in the World Assembly within The East Pacific,
3. Creation of the first release of Valsora, official map of The East Pacific RMB, which developed the regional roleplay of The East Pacific,
4. The restructuring of the World Assembly Affairs branch, which allowed for East Pacifican citizens to vote and interact with the World Assembly Resolution voting processes.

Recognising Libertanny’s contribution to the foreign affairs of the East Pacific during its Delegacy:

1. The creation of the Consortium, an interregional coalition of Thaecia, Free Nations Region, The East Pacific, Alstroemerian Commonwealths, Force and the Kingdom of Great Britain, which has lead to diplomatic and cultural developments,
2. Assisting in the formation of the ATOMIC coalition for N-Day, including 21st Century Rome, Force, Alstroemerian Commonwealths, The Labyrinth, Laranium, Lorania, Southfield, Phoenix Partners, Thaecia, The Democratic Republic, The East Pacific, The Free Nations Region, The Kingdom of Great Britain, Wintercrest and Wintreath, which scored well on N-Day,
3. The strengthening of relations between The East Pacific with both 10000 Islands and Europeia simultaneously, further developing The East Pacific’s diplomatic ability,
4. The creation of treaties with the The Union of Democratic States, the Free Nations Region and Thaecia, drawing larger UCRs closer,
5. The improvement of diplomatic relations with the imperialist sphere, especially with Balder and The Land of Kings and Emperors, where with the latter Non-Aggression Pact and Diplomatic Recognition was signed,
6. The coordination of the Liberation of South Pacific with the Phoenix Flock Fleet, which involved one of the highest amounts of East Pacific troops in history, that being 51 nations.
7. The support of smaller allies, such as Warzone Asia, where Libertanny ordered EPSA to pile in the region to ensure that Jean Rowe holds the record of longest serving Delegate, as well as sending pilers to defend Warzone Asia after receiving threats from defender figure Tim Stark. This resulted in EPSA being voted in as ‘Friendly Military of 2020’ in the Warzone Awards,

Accrediting Libertanny’s help in co-organization of NationStates Great Exhibition by designing the most recent logo and colour pallete, developing the Discord server of NSGE, and giving a lecture on graphic design.

Hereby Commends Libertanny.

Co authored with FiHami

[Honeydewistania]

we out here commending every GCR delegate now

[Cormactopia Prime]

What about any of this goes beyond normal participation in a GCR and a normal term as a GCR Delegate?

[Great Algerstonia]

Valsora was created long before Libertanny's Delegacy. It was made while Fedele was Delegate.

Also, there is no official RMB map for The East Pacific RMB Roleplay, iirc. We're quite decentralized. Theres multiple maps people play on. Valsora is considered the main map, however

[Minskiev]

I'm not very read up on the Consortium but isn't that in sort of a poor state now? Did it ever do anything?

Also,

The strengthening of relations between The East Pacific with both 10000 Islands and Europeia simultaneously, further developing The East Pacific’s diplomatic ability,

seems very fluffy. Wow! Simultaneously?! Maybe elaborate on this or remove it entirely, this doesn't seem too notable to me.

[Great Algerstonia]

Additionally I would recommend changing "Tim" to the nation name "Tim Stark".

[Refuge Isle]

Construction aside, the target is not commendable at this time.

[Varanius]

I can’t believe I’m saying this but I think I’d honestly prefer another defender commendation. Anyways, let’s go down the list!

1. Foundation of Small Magisterium Cafeterium, a small bloc of nations that united to oppose then-Delegate Fedele and embody general apathy within The East Pacific. This body then played an important part in fighting the coup attempt and rebuilding The East Pacific post-coup, alongside with improving the laws of The East Pacific,

Cool, I’m not much familiar with TEP at the time, what contributions were those?

The development of UCR friendships through outreach programs, which has diminished the notion of GCR supremacy in The East Pacific,

Wow, UCR relations. I didn’t even know those were possible.

Appreciating Libertanny’s contribution to the internal affairs of The East Pacific during its Delegacy:

1. Coordinating the three Paradoxical games events, where each event gathered at least 200 nations and promoted regional activity,

Culture. Hey cool! When is Bran getting commended by chance?

The creation of the REWARD program, which boosted The East Pacific’s endorsement count to astronomical levels and increased overall interest and activity in the World Assembly within The East Pacific,

I mean…sure endorsements are nice I guess?

Creation of the first release of Valsora, official map of The East Pacific RMB, which developed the regional roleplay of The East Pacific,

Alger’s already gotten to this.

The restructuring of the World Assembly Affairs branch, which allowed for East Pacifican citizens to vote and interact with the World Assembly Resolution voting processes.

A WA affairs branch? I’m glad he brought TEP into the 21st century!

1. The creation of the Consortium, an interregional coalition of Thaecia, Free Nations Region, The East Pacific, Alstroemerian Commonwealths, Force and the Kingdom of Great Britain, which has lead to diplomatic and cultural developments,

A coalition that has done what exactly? Certainly nothing where I can see.

Assisting in the formation of the ATOMIC coalition for N-Day, including 21st Century Rome, Force, Alstroemerian Commonwealths, The Labyrinth, Laranium, Lorania, Southfield, Phoenix Partners, Thaecia, The Democratic Republic, The East Pacific, The Free Nations Region, The Kingdom of Great Britain, Wintercrest and Wintreath, which scored well on N-Day,

N-Day alliance? Even better, one that notably got absolutely crushed while Potato came back.

The strengthening of relations between The East Pacific with both 10000 Islands and Europeia simultaneously, further developing The East Pacific’s diplomatic ability,

I’m unaware, were they not already allies? If not, seems like something that should be added yeah?

The creation of treaties with the The Union of Democratic States, the Free Nations Region and Thaecia, drawing larger UCRs closer,

Should I just start linking UCR/GCR treaties or can I save myself the time?

The improvement of diplomatic relations with the imperialist sphere, especially with Balder and The Land of Kings and Emperors, where with the latter Non-Aggression Pact and Diplomatic Recognition was signed,

Now this is actually almost something. Can we commend Kaz for the Euro/NPO NAP too?

The coordination of the Liberation of South Pacific with the Phoenix Flock Fleet, which involved one of the highest amounts of East Pacific troops in history, that being 51 nations.

Sorry, wasn’t this mainly Atlae and Phoenix? Do correct me if I’m wrong.

The support of smaller allies, such as Warzone Asia, where Libertanny ordered EPSA to pile in the region to ensure that Jean Rowe holds the record of longest serving Delegate, as well as sending pilers to defend Warzone Asia after receiving threats from defender figure Tim. This resulted in EPSA being voted in as ‘Friendly Military of 2020’ in the Warzone Awards,

Piling on a Warzone. At the same time as UCR treaties and losing at N-Day? What a busy schedule.

Accrediting Libertanny’s help in co-organization of NationStates Great Exhibition by designing the most recent logo and colour pallete, developing the Discord server of NSGE, and giving a lecture on graphic design.

Uhh cool I guess. Glad he likes art?
All in all, I really don’t think this is the best target to pursue a commendation for. I definitely didn’t address every line, but I really don’t see how he stands out compared to other GCR delegates? He did some things sure, but he was hardly record-breaking.

[Outer Sparta]

If you're going for a GCR delegate commendation, they have to do above and beyond. Currently, I don't see enough commendable qualities from Libertanny, but it is a well-written draft.

Elaborate on why Libertanny's achievements justify a commendation, especially their contributions to TEP society.

[Comfed]

Well written unlike some of the trash we've had, but not commendable.

[Altmoras]

I'm not well versed in Libertanny's accomplishments or TEP in general so I'm not going to comment on most of the clauses. That said.

Nobody should be getting commended for ATOMIC, it disbanded and merged into the AA within hours. It's remarkable only for the magnitude of its failure. The only productive thing it accomplished was giving Horsemen a little too much confidence in how easy it was to break factions with shock and awe.

[Noble Titans]

I like Libertanny for sure! Would I approve this to be pushed for a vote? No mainly because GCRs are cutting out some of the delegates work already with recruitment, and fresh faces. Give me more than they were Delegate of TEP. If that’s the case we should just give every GCR Delegate a commendation, including the Warzone ones to! To be fair though; One Small Island deserves a commendation more if we talking about GCR or any kind of Delegate!

[Tinhampton]

Are references to "Discord server[s]" any more legal than references to (offsite) forums are?

[Cormactopia Prime]

All of the above doesn't seem to be an auspicious beginning for this proposal.

[Moonfungus]

Hello, got some things here;

Identifying Libertanny’s long and prosperous reign as Delegate of The East Pacific for eight months,

I'm not exactly a fan of using this line as the framing device for the proposal, partly because it seems like a narrow point-of-view to me and diminishes the other things Libertanny might've done during their time in TEP.

Celebrating Libertanny’s part in restoring The East Pacific’s government under Delegate Marrabuk, after Fedele’s actions as a rogue Delegate,

Seems really vague to me, maybe expand on this part a bit? Like what did they do, how did they do it, what were the effects of it and such.

Acknowledging Libertanny’s contributions to The East Pacific pre-Delegacy:

This clause's point doesn't really match each other in terms of beginnings. For example, you've started with "Foundation of" and "Development of" in the first and third point respectively, while using "Streamlining" and "Restructuring" in the second and fourth point respectively. You should be consistent here about your point beginnings.

he development of UCR friendships through outreach programs, which has diminished the notion of GCR supremacy in The East Pacific,

Can you give some examples here? Also the way this is termed doesn't really sit well with me, but that's probably a me thing.

Appreciating Libertanny’s contribution to the internal affairs of The East Pacific during its Delegacy:

Same thing as the "Acknowledging" clause here, try to be consistent at the start of the points.

The restructuring of the World Assembly Affairs branch, which allowed for East Pacifican citizens to vote and interact with the World Assembly Resolution voting processes.

Nice clause, but maybe describe the effects this action had? Like increase of WA participation and stuffs?

Recognising Libertanny’s contribution to the foreign affairs of the East Pacific during its Delegacy:

Same criticism as the "Acknowledging" and "Appreciating" clause, be consistent at the start of the points.

The creation of the Consortium, an interregional coalition of Thaecia, Free Nations Region, The East Pacific, Alstroemerian Commonwealths, Force and the Kingdom of Great Britain, which has lead to diplomatic and cultural developments,

If I'm not wrong (correct me if I am please), Consortium hasn't done anything major worth mentioning, iirc?

Assisting in the formation of the ATOMIC coalition for N-Day, including 21st Century Rome, Force, Alstroemerian Commonwealths, The Labyrinth, Laranium, Lorania, Southfield, Phoenix Partners, Thaecia, The Democratic Republic, The East Pacific, The Free Nations Region, The Kingdom of Great Britain, Wintercrest and Wintreath, which scored well on N-Day,

Can you be specific when you mean "which scored well on N-Day"? By specific, I mean give us its position and stats relating to its performance in N-Day.

The strengthening of relations between The East Pacific with both 10000 Islands and Europeia simultaneously, further developing The East Pacific’s diplomatic ability,

I have a problem with the word "simultaneously" here, though that's probably a personal preference. Maybe remove it entirely?

The creation of treaties with the The Union of Democratic States, the Free Nations Region and Thaecia, drawing larger UCRs closer,

I would suggest that you drop "larger" entirely and replace with something else. Or just don't replace it at all. Also, isn't using the term "UCR" in SC proposals illegal?

The support of smaller allies, such as Warzone Asia, where Libertanny ordered EPSA to pile in the region to ensure that Jean Rowe holds the record of longest serving Delegate, as well as sending pilers to defend Warzone Asia after receiving threats from defender figure Tim Stark. This resulted in EPSA being voted in as ‘Friendly Military of 2020’ in the Warzone Awards,

Oh dear. Uhh no comment, although this line might be considered too controversial by some.

Accrediting Libertanny’s help in co-organization of NationStates Great Exhibition by designing the most recent logo and colour pallete, developing the Discord server of NSGE, and giving a lecture on graphic design.

If I remember correctly, the term "Discord server" is illegal. Maybe use "methods of communications" or something to that degree?

I see Phoenix has co-authored with you Good luck with this!

Edit: I see Vara ninja'd me about some points.

[Bhang Bhang Duc]

Are references to "Discord server[s]" any more legal than references to (offsite) forums are?

No, they’re illegal (clearly the electronic entity) as is the mention of roleplay.

Edit: I suspect UCR may be illegal as well seeing as it stands for User Created Region. However, you would need a Mod ruling on that.

Overall the writing for a first time draft is of good quality. The content, on the other hand, is not so good. There are lots of areas, already pointed out, that need to be addressed if this is going to be submitted.

[Bears Armed]

I'm fairly sure that the reference to "roleplay" is also illegal, and have doubts about the "to pile in" as well.

[Zukchiva]

A lot of people said what needs to be said.

I do think there's a case for Libertanny here, but obviously I'm biased. Regardless, some comments:

Streamlining The East Pacific's foreign affairs department by creating region spheres, and developing the Inner Circle of Foreign Affairs, which trained nations in foreign affairs, most notably Zukchiva, who succeeded Libertanny in the Delegacy, as well as allowed citizens to have a much bigger impact on deciding foreign affairs matters,

I get the intent on this clause, but I would personally focus less on the impacts on the IC-FA and more about the structure itself, and how it allows for more collective decisions and puts much less a burden on the Minister.

I definetly feel it should be mentioned.

The restructuring of the EPNS and repeal of the EPNS Act, which set the foundations for the success of the current Ministry of Information.

Libertanny did a bit more than this, so I would say this should be more descriptive. How did Libertanny restructure EPNS (as a rhetorical question)?

Could add something about how the EPNS Act's restrictiveness, and Lib's repeal of it, helped make EPNS more flexible. Doesn't warrant its own clause but can be included in this EPNS clause itself.

Coordinating the three Paradoxical games events, where each event gathered at least 200 nations and promoted regional activity,

I do not believe this does Paradoxical justice.

Paradoxical is a pretty large festival open to all, and I know that all three iterations have been astoundingly popular with around a week of events celebrating Paradoxical's games. Additionally, while sometimes TEP hosted it, it is in reality not something ran by TEP but ran by Libertanny independently of the region. Lib is basically the head organizer. I would thus make Paradoxical its own clause, separate from any of the lists. Paradoxical is definetly a unique venture and would be noteworthy in any commend.

Creation of the first release of Valsora, official map of The East Pacific RMB, which developed the regional roleplay of The East Pacific,

As Alger said, Valsora is one of many maps. The de facto main map indeed, but one of many.

Also, while it is true that Libertanny created the map itself, and worked with the Map Council to develop a lot of its initial concepts, it was eventually taken over (with the Council's permission) by Nova-Columbia (another Councillor), who has owned the map for around two years now and is really the sole person responsible for a lot of its development following its initial stages in the Council.

I do think Valsora's creation deserves a mention as it probably wouldn't exist the way it does if Libertanny didn't play a strong role in it as Councillor, but the history of the map should be kept in mind.

The restructuring of the World Assembly Affairs branch, which allowed for East Pacifican citizens to vote and interact with the World Assembly Resolution voting processes.

This should mention more about Libertanny giving MoWAA more due importance in the regional government compared to past Delegates. Both by making it its own Chief Ministry (and thus splitting it from the portfolio of the Chief Minister of Regional Affairs), and by following the Ministry's vote and thus voting in a more informed manner.

Honestly not sure if this should be included. Maybe combine this clause with the REWARD clause and state that Libertanny helped modernize TEP's WA practices from the archaic methods of old, allowing for heightened WA participation in the region. Then you can mention the restructuring of MoWAA and the creation of REWARD as examples.

The creation of the Consortium, an interregional coalition of Thaecia, Free Nations Region, The East Pacific, Alstroemerian Commonwealths, Force and the Kingdom of Great Britain, which has lead to diplomatic and cultural developments,

As others have said I wouldn't include this. Not because the Consortium hasn't done anything (it has hosted a few festivals and heightened cooperation between individual member regions for sure), but because it's still being set-up.

The strengthening of relations between The East Pacific with both 10000 Islands and Europeia simultaneously, further developing The East Pacific’s diplomatic ability,
The creation of treaties with the The Union of Democratic States, the Free Nations Region and Thaecia, drawing larger UCRs closer,
The improvement of diplomatic relations with the imperialist sphere, especially with Balder and The Land of Kings and Emperors, where with the latter Non-Aggression Pact and Diplomatic Recognition was signed,

I feel like this can be combined into one "this nation helped form fruitful alliances with [insert region examples]"

That being said, I see no reason not to mention this. It's pretty standard for most commended GCR & UCR Delegates to discuss this type of stuff, and Libertanny really helped TEP form a network of allies it can rely on and cooperate with.

The coordination of the Liberation of South Pacific with the Phoenix Flock Fleet, which involved one of the highest amounts of East Pacific troops in history, that being 51 nations.

Would be more specific here. It is true that Libertanny, along with Atlae, helped garner a bunch of troops for the liberation attempt. I remember specifically Libertanny making a whole bunch of announcements and promising ranks to incentive people to come to the region's defense.

Should be noted that this is an attempted liberation. It didn't succeed and that's important to note regardless.

The support of smaller allies, such as Warzone Asia, where Libertanny ordered EPSA to pile in the region to ensure that Jean Rowe holds the record of longest serving Delegate, as well as sending pilers to defend Warzone Asia after receiving threats from defender figure Tim Stark. This resulted in EPSA being voted in as ‘Friendly Military of 2020’ in the Warzone Awards,

Not commendable, IMO. You would expect allies to defend allies.

[Nova Vandalia]

Recognising Libertanny’s contribution to the foreign affairs of the East Pacific during its Delegacy:
The creation of the Consortium, an interregional coalition of Thaecia, Free Nations Region, The East Pacific, Alstroemerian Commonwealths, Force and the Kingdom of Great Britain, which has lead to diplomatic and cultural developments,

Just noticed a minor link error that needs corrected, I think you meant for it to link you to The Kingdom of Great Britain and not Kingdom of Great Britain same thing with The Free Nations Region and Free Nations Region

[Groot]

Edit: I suspect UCR may be illegal as well seeing as it stands for User Created Region. However, you would need a Mod ruling on that.

Not legal.

[Bhang Bhang Duc]

Edit: I suspect UCR may be illegal as well seeing as it stands for User Created Region. However, you would need a Mod ruling on that.

Not legal.

Ah, thank you Groot.

[Hulldom]

Almost certainly not good enough in its present form, but you could uhh at least mention Serge’s authorship of Commend Bachtendekuppen?

[Tinhampton]

Here's how I've attempted to make your current draft flow more smoothly - and yes, [region=The East Pacific] will look like The East Pacific once you submit it:

The Security Council,

Congratulating Libertanny on its long and prosperous reign as Delegate of [region=The East Pacific] (TEP) between June 2020 until February 2021,

Acknowledging that, before becoming its Delegate, Libertanny worked in TEP to:

1. Found the Small Magisterium Cafeterium, a small bloc of nations that united to oppose then-Delegate Fedele and embody general apathy within TEP. The Cafeterium then played an important part in fighting Fedele's failed coup, restoring TEP's government under Delegate Marrabuk after the coup, and improving TEP's laws,
2. Streamline TEP's foreign affairs department by creating region spheres, and developing the Inner Circle of Foreign Affairs, which trained nations in foreign affairs, most notably Zukchiva (Libertanny's successor as Delegate), as well as allowed citizens to have a much bigger impact on deciding foreign affairs matters,
3. Develop friendships and outreach programs between TEP and non-feeder, non-sinker regions, helping to diminish the notion of feeder supremacy in TEP in the process, and
4. Restructure the Eastern Pacific News Service and repeal the EPNS Act, which set the foundations for the current Ministry of Information and its success,

Appreciating Libertanny’s contribution to TEP's internal affairs during its Delegacy, where it:

1. Coordinated the three Paradoxical games events, each of which gathered at least 200 nations and promoted regional activity,
2. Set up the REWARD program, which boosted TEP’s endorsement count to astronomical levels and increased regional interest and activity in the World Assembly,
3. Boosted TEP's creative community by charting the first map of Valsora, which tracked the location of those nations choosing to negotiate international affairs on TEP's Regional Message Board, and
4. Restructed the World Assembly Affairs branch, which allowed for citizens of TEP to vote and interact with TEP's internal WA voting processes,

Recognising that Libertanny also developed TEP's foreign relations during its Delegacy, where it:

1. Helped create the Consortium - an interregional coalition comprised of TEP, [region=Thaecia], [region=The Free Nations Region], [region=Force], [region=The Kingdom of Great Britain], and what are now known as the Alstroemerian Commonwealths - and its associated diplomatic and cultural developments,
2. Assisted in the formation of the relatively successful A.T.O.M.I.C coalition for the fifth annual nuclear apocalypse - which included all aforementioned members of the Consortium as well as [region=21st Century Rome], [region=The Labyrinth], [region=Laranium], [region=Lorania], [region=Southfield], [region=Phoenix Partners], [region=The Democratic Republic], [region=Wintercrest] and [region=Wintreath],
3. Strengthened TEP's diplomatic relations with renowned defender region [region=10000 Islands] and independent stalwart [region=Europeia] simultaneously,
4. Negotiated treaties with large non-feeders such as [region=The Union of Democratic States], Thaecia, and The Free Nations Region,
5. Improved TEP's relations with imperialist regions such as [region=The Land of Kings and Emperors] - with which TEP agreed a non-aggression pact - and [region=Balder],
6. Co-ordinated the Phoenix Flock Fleet, which drew an impressive 51 members of TEP towards a sadly unsuccessful attempt to liberate [region=South Pacific], and
7. Supported smaller allies such as [region=Warzone Asia], where Libertanny ordered the Eastern Pacific Sovereign Army to protect Jean Rowe's status as the Warzone's longest-tenured delegate of all time, and defend the Warzone on at least one other occasion after receiving threats from defenders representing the nation of Tim Stark - acts for which the Army was voted the most ‘Friendly Military of 2020’ in the Warzone Awards,

Saluting Libertanny's work in helping to ensure that the NationStates Great Exhibition ran smoothly by designing its most recent logo and colour scheme, developing additional meeting venues for the convenience of delegates to the Exhibition, and giving a lecture on graphic design, and

Believing that Libertanny's work to develop TEP, both domestically and abroad, deserves official recognition:

Hereby Commends Libertanny.

Co authored with FiHami

props for the lorania shoutout tho

[Varanius]

Edit: I see Vara ninja'd me about some points.

Happy to help

[Honeydewistania]

Almost certainly not good enough in its present form, but you could uhh at least mention Serge’s authorship of Commend Bachtendekuppen?

Why? It wasn’t even a good resolution. I don’t think adding a resolution in just because is a good idea