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by Morover » Wed Aug 19, 2020 5:18 pm
by Praeceps » Thu Aug 20, 2020 12:15 am
by Wymondham » Thu Aug 20, 2020 3:50 pm
Praeceps wrote:Wymondham wrote:I've done the research, I'm pointing out to you people who can cross-reference what I said. Meritocracy was a new philosophy for Osiris when Alti introduced it
I'm taking your words at face value so there's no reason for me to be the one doing cross-referencing.
Can you specify what you mean by meritocracy? I see there was a whole debate on the matter but I want to know what you mean in this commendation.
by Bormiar » Thu Aug 20, 2020 5:23 pm
Wymondham wrote:Praeceps wrote:I'm taking your words at face value so there's no reason for me to be the one doing cross-referencing.
Can you specify what you mean by meritocracy? I see there was a whole debate on the matter but I want to know what you mean in this commendation.
A system of government where people are promoted based on their current, not historic, activity, ability and commitment to the region. Where long time members may be asked to step aside once someone better than them emerges, regardless of their historic work in the region and where every member of government is expected to train an individual to succeed them.
by Takura » Fri Aug 21, 2020 7:56 pm
Wymondham wrote:Lauding Altino’s efforts to foster inter-regional camaraderie helping, in various roles, to forge treaties between Karma and Caer Sidi, Anteria, and The West Pacific,, all of which cultivated strong relationships and broadened Karma’s diplomatic reach;
by Nieubasria » Sat Aug 22, 2020 3:04 pm
Morover wrote:I ran into the same thing with my Commendation of The Salaxalans, but awards aren't commendable - neither is them "being recognized" by regions for those rewards - the commendation is the recognition. Tell why they were recognized by the awards, without mentioning that the received an award for it.
by Honeydewistania » Tue Aug 25, 2020 7:09 am
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by A Bloodred Moon » Tue Aug 25, 2020 10:47 am
Believing that the accomplishments detailed above, have improved creative and productive participation in many communities and are worthy of recognition by this august body;
by Wymondham » Tue Aug 25, 2020 11:16 am
A Bloodred Moon wrote:I apologise for the terrible formatting, but there’s quite a couple things I noticed on a glance, and I’ve made a (chaotic) list of them. So, in no particular order:
- you need to fix your capitalisation in the list of TWPAF-related things. Some items are capitalised at the start, others aren’t, and it’s weird.
- in the NSLeaders clause, you write “share best practice”, and I don’t think that’s entirely grammatically correct.
- in your list of contributions to Karma, you mention their term as diplomacy officer, and in the clause after you mention what they achieved then. I’d advice to merge those two, either as part of the list or as a separate clause. Also, in the first thing on the list you need to add a comma.
- the “appreciating” clause spends more time and focus on specific awards and focus rather than actually mentioning what their community presence is supposed to mean, how it is commendable, etc.
- move the Osiris clause above the awards, perhaps? That way, you first introduce their work in Osiris and then mention their ‘community presence’ there.
- perhaps use a different word than “camaraderie” every time? I feel like it’s repeated a lot as it stands.
- not sure about this, but I think the NSLeaders clause could benefit from a re-read to check for grammatical errors.
- the believing clause:Believing that the accomplishments detailed above, have improved creative and productive participation in many communities and are worthy of recognition by this august body;
Overall, I think this is too early to last call yet and could use some more improvements.
Nieubasria wrote:It is not a function of "awards for awards', but are rather listed for supporting evidence that the commendable behaviour has been consistent throughout various regions.
I fully agree that awards themselves are not worthy of a commendation, but we feel these can serve as a great example of Altino's importance and community presence in the participating regions.
by Makdon » Tue Aug 25, 2020 11:43 am
by Eumaeus » Tue Aug 25, 2020 1:07 pm
Observing Altino’s work in connecting regional leaders and founders by inviting them to and hosting “NationStates Leaders”, where nations can discuss and debate the principles of regional leadership, share leadership techniques, and learn from experienced nation’s wisdom;
Applauding the usefulness of “NationStates Leaders”in providing access to resources allowing participants to learn how to build regional communities, recruit new nations and protect their community, facilitating the development of strong and successful regional communities;
Acknowledging Altino's service to the region of Karma, in the following capacities, among others:
- as the region’s founder, thanks to their steady hand, it has grown into a vibrant and prosperous community, achieved partially through the unique “enlightenment” process that all nations must undergo to serve in senior government positions and to vote in the regional legislature;
- as Editor of “the Augury” - the region’s newspaper, through which they ensured the nations of Karma were kept well informed and up to date about regional events; and
- as a member of the Council of Sages, where they assisted their fellow sages in guiding the region on matters ranging from legislation to the appointment of new members of government, thus ensuring that it was governed competently and fairly;
Lauding Altino’s efforts to foster inter-regional relations, helping, in various roles, to forge treaties between Karma and Caer Sidi, Anteria, and The West Pacific, all of which cultivated strong relationships and broadened Karma’s diplomatic reach;
Honouring Altino’s service to The West Pacific as Commander of The West Pacific Armed Forces for 5 months from October 2017 to February 2018, which under their leadership:
- developed innovative recruitment methods which drove membership and activity to unprecedented levels in a short space of time;
- adopted the iconic West Pacific Pirate theme, allowing for purveyors of cutlasses and swillers of rum to be put into the spotlight;
- expanded the officer corps fivefold, while also improving training standards;
- integrated the Armed Forces with the wider regional community, enabling several recruits to transfer their skills to the government of The West Pacific;
- authored articles for “The West Pacifican”, the regional newspaper, detailing the Armed Forces’ work and helping to improve regional understanding of the Armed Forces’ efforts;
- trained several talented officers and future Commanders, including Overthinkers - the current commander of The West Pacific Armed Forces;
Praising Altino’s work in [region[Osiris[/region], as both its longest serving Pharaoh and as Chief Vizier, where they ushered in a new philosophy of government, leading to the emergence of a new generation of Osiran leaders and serving as the region’s guiding philosophy to this day, alongside transforming the region’s sense of community, and increasing activity and governmental participation to a level that, due to their stellar leadership, became both unprecedented and sustainable;
Appreciating the significance of Altino’s continued community presence in The West Pacific and Osiris as recognized by the awards granted to them, such as the first ever award of The West Pacific Medal of Honor, a Regional Commendation for services to The West Pacific Armed Forces, and the honorary title of “Soul Sista” as granted by Delegate [nationBran Astor[/nation], alongside Osiris’ highest honor, the Violet Jewel of Atum, awarded for their work to “cultivate meritocracy” and status as a “beloved pillar” of the region’s community;
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by Amerion » Fri Aug 28, 2020 8:48 am
Recognizing that the nation of Altino,founded four years ago, has made many exceptional contributions worthy of commendation by this council, through their work to develop regional communities and leaders, as well as to build inter-regional camaraderie;
by Wymondham » Fri Aug 28, 2020 11:53 am
Amerion wrote:Minor quibble:Recognizing that the nation of Altino,founded four years ago, has made many exceptional contributions worthy of commendation by this council, through their work to develop regional communities and leaders, as well as to build inter-regional camaraderie;
Insert a space between "Altino," and "founded".
by Bhang Bhang Duc » Mon Aug 31, 2020 8:59 am
Applauding the usefulness of “NationStates Leaders”in providing access to resources allowing participants to learn how to build regional communities, recruit new nations and protect their community, facilitating the development of strong and successful regional communities;
Observing Altino’s work in connecting regional leaders and founders by hosting, constantly improving and inviting them to “NationStates Leaders”, where nations can discuss and debate the principles of regional leadership, access resources to improve regional government, share leadership techniques, and learn from experienced nation’s wisdom;
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by Wymondham » Thu Sep 03, 2020 3:29 am
Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:Applauding the usefulness of “NationStates Leaders”in providing access to resources allowing participants to learn how to build regional communities, recruit new nations and protect their community, facilitating the development of strong and successful regional communities;
Observing Altino’s work in connecting regional leaders and founders by hosting, constantly improving and inviting them to “NationStates Leaders”, where nations can discuss and debate the principles of regional leadership, access resources to improve regional government, share leadership techniques, and learn from experienced nation’s wisdom;
The first clause feels like filler, because you’re saying almost exactly the same things in the second clause, only attributing them to Altino.
If you decide to keep the first clause then you need a space between the closing quotation marks and “in” (highlighted).
by Tinhampton » Thu Sep 03, 2020 3:58 am
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