[WAS IN QUEUE, RE-DRAFT] Commend Aumeltopia

[North Prarie]

Co-founding the United Task Force in 2017, which served as a vehicle for joint
military operations for defender militaries,

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I'm Last Call-ing this, now. Any final comments or critiques, please post.

[A Bloodred Moon]

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I'm Last Call-ing this, now. Any final comments or critiques, please post.

I gave thoughts and comments here: viewtopic.php?p=37431687#p37431687

Either they were missed or ignored. In case of the former, perhaps they come in useful, in case of the latter, well, might as well try and get a response.

[North Prarie]

Fixed.
I'm Last Call-ing this, now. Any final comments or critiques, please post.

I gave thoughts and comments here: viewtopic.php?p=37431687#p37431687

Either they were missed or ignored. In case of the former, perhaps they come in useful, in case of the latter, well, might as well try and get a response.

Yeah, I saw that/ I wasn't sure how impactful UTF was, for MoMA it was pretty impactful, which I think I conveyed. I expanded on Governor of NST. As for Laz - I did some research, and it was largely a figurehead position.

[North Prarie]

Super last call to submit comments and criticism!

[North Prarie]

Changed my WA back to my main to submit, will do so once I get two endos

EDIT: Submitted!

[Tinhampton]

50 minutes ago: The Cherry Blossom Commonwealth of North Prarie withdrew a proposal from the WA Security Council titled "Commend Aumeltopia".

It had obtained about 83 approvals of the 63 required. Prarie is currently redrafting this proposal elsewhere and will resubmit Soon - if you have any questions about this, talk to him, not me

[North Prarie]

I've consulted with some people, and come back with a better draft. I'd still like comments and criticism
Here it is:

Commend Aumeltopia
Category: Commend | Nominee: Aumeltopia

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The Security Council,
Praising [nation=noflag]Aumeltopia[/nation]’s service as World Assembly Delegate of the South Pacific for almost a year from August 2019, overseeing at one stage a doubling in their endorsement tally from their inauguration as Delegate through active participation in the Southern World Assembly Initiative (SWAN), and the institution of Endorsement Days, where nations were urged to endorse as many other South Pacifican WA members as possible, and development of OWL, the South Pacific's World Assembly department, into an active and efficient organization that increased participation, comprehension, and authorship in the World Assembly among nations in the South Pacific,

Applauding Aumeltopia’s service as Celestial Being of Lazarus, a position they used to protect the region from internal and external threats while serving as a strong leader of the region, as well as serving as the Commander of the Lazarene Celestial Armada, a position they used to protect small regions from outside threats,

Recalling Aumeltopia’s work in defending natives nations and small regions from hostile invasions, including:

• their founding of an interregional defender alliance called Solidarity (Solidarian Fleet) at the end of 2016, where their courageous leadership helped restore regions destroyed by raiders,
• Co-founding the United Task Force in 2017, which served as a vehicle for joint military operations for defender militaries,
• Serving as the Minister of Military Affairs for the South Pacific, where they revamped the organizational and graphical style of the South Pacific Special Forces, crafting it into the military organization it is today,
• Establishing, as the Minister of Military Affairs, the SPSF Reserve, an organization that enabled citizens to help with military efforts without liberating or defending,

Appreciating Aumeltopia's service to Forest through the puppet nation of [nation=noflag] Mount Seymour[/nation], including:

• Administering and establishing the regional gathering places and forums,
• Leading the region as Forest Keeper, the chief executive of Forest, from January to September 2017,
• Organizing and leading the Forest Photo Contest, a photography event that is internationally recognized for its quality,
• Serving as Foreign Minister of Forest from November of 2016 to January of 2017, where they established embassies with five new partners,
• Serving as Culture Minister of Forest from September 2017 to January 2018,
• Leading Forest's effort to create the nuclear alliances of Forest and Canopy, factions that finished top 3 in 2017, 2018, and 2019, which protected nations from radiation and eliminated outside threats,

Observing Aumeltopia's work for one of the premier news publications in NationStates, NationStates Today, such as:

• Serving as a Director of Graphics and Publishing, a position where they curated the graphics and style of the organization and newspaper,
• Serving multiple terms as Governor of NationStates Today, an administrative position of the organization, a position they used to consult the Board and represent NationStates Today’s readership,

Grateful for Aumeltopia's authorship of SC #212 'Repeal "Liberate Kingdom of Ireland'", which ensured natives could protect their region from invasions via a password, and SC #307 "Condemn Auphelia", which condemned an extraordinarily evil nation notorious for terrorizing the South Pacific and her allies,

Admiring Aumeltopia’s extensive graphic design portfolio that has stood the test of time, including the flags of the Free Nations Region, the Union of Democratic States, and Forest, the graphics for one of the largest inter-regional festivals in history, PacificCon, as well as the universal design code for the South Pacific,

Honoring Aumeltopia's leadership, community, military, and graphical contributions to regions and organizations across NationStates,

Hereby Commends Aumeltopia.

Co-authored by The Noble Thatcherites and Tinhampton.

[Imperial Dodo]

Full Support!

[Fauxia]

Looks better, can you edit that into the OP?

[North Prarie]

Looks better, can you edit that into the OP?

Done

[Philippinia]

Updated draft looks perfect. When do you plan to put it in queue?

[Wymondham]

Still Full support on this!

[North Prarie]

Updated draft looks perfect. When do you plan to put it in queue?

Once we have a concrete plan for Warzone Australia

Still Full support on this!

Thanks, Wym!

[Big Bad Badger]

Two words: hell no!

[North Prarie]

Two words: hell no!

TWP's delegate seemed to think differently when I submitted it

[Honeydewistania]

Leading the region as Forest Keeper, the chief executive of Forest, from January to September 2017,
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Serving as Culture Minister of Forest from September 2017 to January 2018,

Elaborate more

[Bhang Bhang Duc]

While it is a nicely written draft it still has huge flaws. The whole first clause is a load of guff. Pretty much every GCR Delegate hugely increased their endo count during the period mentioned - Drewpocalypse anyone? SWAN is not a particularly original initiative, similar things have been carried out elsewhere.

The second clause is inoffensive - I know you wished to avoid causing possible controversy by detailing Aumeltopia’s time in Lazarus, but it’s really, really bland.

Yes there are some solid achievements in Forest and elsewhere, but overall not worthy of a Commendation.

[Honeydewistania]

I think the portions on TSP can be expanded upon - ditch SWAN and replace it with something more unique or something really beneficial to the region

[Praeceps]

I might as well reiterate that I don't think my prior criticisms of this draft have been addressed.

[South Asians]

the Free Nations Region, the Union of Democratic States, and Forest, the graphics for one of the largest inter-regional festivals in history, PacificCon, as well as the universal design code for the South Pacific,

They were also the first Chief Justice of the Free Nations Region. They have drafted the original constitution of the Free Nations Region. Also could you change "Free Nations Region" to "The Free Nations Region". Free Nations Region opens our back-up region which is kinda misleading. Full support!

[Daytime to Night]

Yo Prarie, I'm really happy for you and imma let you finish but Somy led an Alliance of Potatoes to one of the greatest NationStates moments of all time

As chief strategist and one of our finest leaders and foot soldiers all at once I want that getting a big fat reference in this Commendation