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my dad never showed me how to do the sc thing but he is commended too and also thats why you can trust him and thats why i trust him (that and because hes my dad)

while looking for dad last time i met this nice fat man in lazarus and he wasnt raid point yet but he was becoming raid point and he was very nice to me and gave me a carpet to sleep on and some good (if cooked) food to eat and he was much nicer to me than all the meaniebutts and also birds (especially owls) that i saw all over the place and that was nice so i think the world assembly should say that treadwellia is really nice especially to wolves

this is my first try at this and im probably not good at this yet but i can learn (i raided 6 gcrs so im a quick learner) and also i think the sc will probably help me with this draft and also do these halls have food because im starving after writing so much

draft 2:

the world assembly,

observing that treadwellia has been led by the nice fat man tubbius and his nice fat lady wife for many years,

amazed at the massive amounts of tasty food (not just vegetarian) that treadwellia has in its storage and also amazed at just how much the nice fat man and the nice fat lady can eat (its impressive),

thankful for the inclusion of many dead animals in their cuisine which is very helpful for the development of small carnivores especially wolf cubs,

reminiscing over the rise of treadwellia as a paragon of being a lazarus native after much of lazarus was beaten up by a commie wolf raid,

noting how treadwellia took over being the celebrated raid point of lazarus after imkiville who took it from the commie wolves went away (the weird bird lady that was running imkiville is the least meaniebutt bird ever unlike all the stupid owls that live in altinsane),

impressed by how benevolent and wholesome treadwellia has been as raid point of lazarus and also allowed and encouraged democratic reforms in lazarus (something not all raid points allow but its because the nice fat man is so nice) and also an increase in activity especially in making food,

admiring how the nice fat man has always been very generous with giving the delicious food and also giving a carpet to sleep on especially to young impressionable canines looking for their parent,

impressed by treadwellia not being bothered too much by the sounds that some young animals make especially AROO*yelp*,

hereby commends treadwellia

Well, it looks legal to me, except for possibly being over the line on Rule 4 in the various places referring to Treadwellia by their leaders, and Imki and Altino as ladies.

I fully support

I support this one hundred and ten percent!

Evil Cub wrote:my dad never showed me how to do the sc thing but he is commended too and also thats why you can trust him and thats why i trust him (that and because hes my dad)

while looking for dad last time i met this nice fat man in lazarus and he wasnt raid point yet but he was becoming raid point and he was very nice to me and gave me a carpet to sleep on and some good (if cooked) food to eat and he was much nicer to me than all the meaniebutts and also birds (especially owls) that i saw all over the place and that was nice so i think the world assembly should say that treadwellia is really nice especially to wolves

this is my first try at this and im probably not good at this yet but i can learn (i raided 6 gcrs so im a quick learner) and also i think the sc will probably help me with this draft and also do these halls have food because im starving after writing so much

the world assembly,

observing that treadwellia has been led by the nice fat man tubbius and his nice fat lady wife for many years,

amazed at the massive amounts of tasty food (not just vegetarian) that treadwellia has in its storage and also amazed at just how much the nice fat man and the nice fat lady can eat (its impressive),

thankful for the inclusion of many dead animals in their cuisine which is very helpful for the development of small carnivores especially wolf cubs,

noting how treadwellia took over being the celebrated raid point of lazarus after the weird bird lady (the least meaniebutt bird ever unlike altinsane) who took it from the commie wolves went away,

impressed by how benevolent and wholesome treadwellia has been as raid point of lazarus and also allowed some democratic reforms in lazarus (something not all raid points allow but its because the nice fat man is so nice) and also an increase in activity especially in making food,

admiring how the nice fat man has always been very generous with giving the delicious food and also giving a carpet to sleep on especially to young impressionable canines looking for their parent,

impressed by treadwellia not being bothered too much by the sounds that some young animals make especially aroo*yelp*,

hereby commends treadwellia

ok. Good to finally meet you.
Offers lots of small dead animals and other wolf thigns that they might like
I will fully support this idea, nice writing. As was said above, line 4 may be illegal though

against, very grudgingly

notwithstanding the repeated lack of capital letters (:b), it would be unwarranted to claim that treadwellia has - apart from the citizens' legislative assembly - introduced any form of democracy into post-wolfist lazarus

Lord Dominator wrote:Well, it looks legal to me, except for possibly being over the line on Rule 4 in the various places referring to Treadwellia by their leaders, and Imki and Altino as ladies.

I believe referring to the leader of Treadwellia by his name is R4 compliant, but saying Imki and Altino are ladies is definitely illegal.

Apart from that the title should be changed from [draft] to [joke] and the cub should learn the correct use of apostrophes. Also capitalisation.

This may sound harsh but if a puppy comes and widdles on your floor you rub their nose in it so they don’t do it again.

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:

Lord Dominator wrote:Well, it looks legal to me, except for possibly being over the line on Rule 4 in the various places referring to Treadwellia by their leaders, and Imki and Altino as ladies.

I believe referring to the leader of Treadwellia by his name is R4 compliant, but saying Imki and Altino are ladies is definitely illegal.

Apart from that the title should be changed from [draft] to [joke] and the cub should learn the correct use of apostrophes. Also capitalisation.

This may sound harsh but if a puppy comes and widdles on your floor you rub their nose in it so they don’t do it again.

Have to agree with BBD on this, the entirety of the post.

thank you to everyone you are nice (not as nice as tubbius but thats hard)

Tinhampton wrote:notwithstanding the repeated lack of capital letters

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:the cub should learn the correct use of apostrophes. Also capitalisation.

i am a small wolf so i use small letters unless i need to be loud like this AROO*yelp* also why are they called capital letters are there countries that just have one letter as the main city and also what are apostrophes i only know catastrophes (which is what dad causes with natives when he raids)

Tinhampton wrote:it would be unwarranted to claim that treadwellia has - apart from the citizens' legislative assembly - introduced any form of democracy into post-wolfist lazarus

ok but he is the raid point and could just not allow it to happen quod erad demonstrandum (i just learned that today its latin) and also dad told me that the nice fat man voted for it so thats double quod erad demonstrandum and also he talked about it and encouraged it so thats triple the latin thing (i wish it was pig latin because pigs are tasty but its the boring dusty real latin made from humans in smelly sandals)

but maybe i can write more about that (i learned another new word today maybe you can find it)

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:This may sound harsh but if a puppy comes and widdles on your floor you rub their nose in it so they don’t do it again.

maybe that works with dogs but im a real wolf not one of those human made pretend wolves also i never did it again and i really really had to pee also wolves pee when they are sad and i was sad because i didnt find dad (kinda like now but im getting used to it and hes busy so i dont want to complain i just want to make him proud)

Lord Dominator wrote:Well, it looks legal to me, except for possibly being over the line on Rule 4 in the various places referring to Treadwellia by their leaders, and Imki and Altino as ladies.

okay i will make them seem less like ladies in my next draft but altinsane will still be called a meaniebutt because she is

the world assembly,

observing that treadwellia has been led by the nice fat man tubbius and his nice fat lady wife for many years,

amazed at the massive amounts of tasty food (not just vegetarian) that treadwellia has in its storage and also amazed at just how much the nice fat man and the nice fat lady can eat (its impressive),

thankful for the inclusion of many dead animals in their cuisine which is very helpful for the development of small carnivores especially wolf cubs,

reminiscing over the rise of treadwellia as a paragon of being a lazarus native after much of lazarus was beaten up by a commie wolf raid,

noting how treadwellia took over being the celebrated raid point of lazarus after imkiville who took it from the commie wolves went away (the weird bird lady that was running imkiville is the least meaniebutt bird ever unlike all the stupid owls that live in altinsane),

impressed by how benevolent and wholesome treadwellia has been as raid point of lazarus and also allowed and encouraged democratic reforms in lazarus (something not all raid points allow but its because the nice fat man is so nice) and also an increase in activity especially in making food,

admiring how the nice fat man has always been very generous with giving the delicious food and also giving a carpet to sleep on especially to young impressionable canines looking for their parent,

impressed by treadwellia not being bothered too much by the sounds that some young animals make especially AROO*yelp*,

hereby commends treadwellia

One day, I might get a serious commendation. :-)

If you're not going to take suggestions seriously, stop wasting people's time.