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Commend Klorgia1

Postby Rebels and Saints » Sun Jun 02, 2019 9:53 pm

https://www.nationstates.net/page=UN_vi ... 1559537134

I just recently submitted this proposal to the Security Council for the commendation of Klorgia1.

I'm just looking for general thoughts here. I don't necessarily expect this to succeed, though I would be more than thrilled if it did, but I'm wondering what people think about it.
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Postby Kuriko » Sun Jun 02, 2019 10:23 pm

R4(b) illegal is what I think.
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Postby Rebels and Saints » Sun Jun 02, 2019 10:40 pm

Kuriko wrote:R4(b) illegal is what I think.


Noted, edited, and resubmitted.
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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Sun Jun 02, 2019 10:54 pm

Sorry, but I don’t see anything exceptional about the nominee. There is nothing in your proposal that makes me think they deserve a Commendation.

Edit: as it is written at the moment I think it’s illegal for R3. You didn’t leave a space between Klorgia1 and “for”, so the nominee reads as Klorgia1for.
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Postby East Meranopirus » Sun Jun 02, 2019 11:41 pm

Plenty of people have built up a region from scratch, and plenty of people have done so more successfully than your nominee. And none of them were commended. The threshold for commendation is much higher than that - you need to have contributed in an exceptional way to NS as a whole, not just some small region, which you also happen to be in.

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Postby Eumaeus » Mon Jun 03, 2019 6:02 am

Noting that Klorgia1 has brought the region of The united nations of liberalia to its current position,

Understanding the difficulty that accompanies the process of taking a region from a population of zero to a population of 30,

Feeling strongly that 3 years of effort is worth recognition,

Meh
Acknowledging that, while Klorgia1's story is not unique, it is no less worthy of the same,

This clause is definitely working against the proposal, not for it.
Realizing that Klorgia1 has formed long lasting, good-natured, mutually beneficial friendships between regions,

Knowing that Klorgia1 has led their region to aid and defend numerous allies and puppet regions from invasion and occupation,

Examples would be helpful.
Noticing that Klorgia1 has stood by their fundamental values of democracy and peace,

Understanding that Klorgia1 has kept their region's spirit alive through difficult trials,

Again, examples would help get this point across.
Acknowledging that Klorgia1 has been one of the strongest advocates of creativity,

Realizing the work that goes into consistently administrating a region, and organizing elections for the same,

The latter half of this clause is kind of awkward, so I tried changing it up a bit.
The Security Council hereby commends Klorgia1 for their virtue, patience, and efforts.

This has been ruled illegal as a Rule 3 violation because you forgot a space between "Klorgia1" and "for" thus changing the nominee.

Overall, as BBD and East Meranopirus already commented, this individual (holy shit a bird just flew into my window) does not seem to be particularly exceptional.
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Postby Lord Dominator » Mon Jun 03, 2019 7:49 am

Have to agree with the others, I'm not seeing anything here that allows your nominee to rise to the level of Commendable, especially without examples.

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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Mon Jun 03, 2019 1:07 pm

One sees you have corrected the illegalities in this proposal. It’s still pretty crap though.

Chances of success - 1/10.
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Postby Latrovia » Mon Jun 03, 2019 1:59 pm

Ah above me you can see the examples of a valuable feedback. My personal opinion is : Tell us why do you find special about this fella and we can certainly help you create a presentable WA Proposal :hug:
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Postby Borovan entered the region as he » Mon Jun 03, 2019 4:24 pm

I don't think this is grounds for a commendation

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Postby Latrovia » Mon Jun 03, 2019 4:28 pm

All I get is: Proposal Not Found
This proposal no longer exists.
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Postby Rebels and Saints » Mon Jun 03, 2019 9:19 pm

Latrovia wrote:All I get is: Proposal Not Found
This proposal no longer exists.


My apologies. The link in the original post was to the original proposal. Since the two edits I made to make the proposal legal, the link has changed. Here is the updated version:

https://www.nationstates.net/page=UN_vi ... 1559579824
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Postby Frisbeeteria » Tue Jun 04, 2019 6:30 am

Rebels and Saints wrote:Since the two edits I made to make the proposal legal, the link has changed

Do your draft versions here on the forums before submitting. By constantly making changes to the live version, you're making the Security Council mods work much harder than necessary.

Get it right, get it legal, get it good, and THEN submit.


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