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[Draft] Condemn Clavonian Empire

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[Draft] Condemn Clavonian Empire

Postby Neatlir » Fri Apr 26, 2019 3:59 pm

The Security Council,

Aware that during the Clavonian Empire's existence, it has provoked multiple inter-regional wars,

Recognizing that the Clavonian Empire has created puppet nations within its region, Salutations, in order to subvert democracy on numerous occasions and ensure its preferred election outcome,

Emphasizing that the Clavonian Empire deliberately refused to end a war (begun by several member nations of Salutations) between its region and a region with which it had an embassy and a previously long standing friendship, the Gordo Alliance of Got Beef in May of 2018,

Noting that during peace talks between Salutations and its victims, the Clavonian Empire and its ministers deliberately deceived and tricked delegates from the opposing regions into agreeing to vague terms and then lied about what those terms meant,

Revealing that after the first war had come to a peaceful end, the Clavonian Empire made its member nations suppress messages, and ejecting and banning the Gordo Embassy to Salutations, which had been allowed to stay in Salutations, re-igniting the conflict,

Understanding that it was the Clavonian Empire's blatant disregard for the say of Salutations' member nations (e.g. Pax Americanae, Anschlabaum, Mens Alveo) that resulted in 2 devastating civil wars within the region, leading to the formation of the region Rolling Thunder which was dedicated to opposing Salutations until it was raided in April 2018 at the hand of Salutations,

Appalled that the Clavonian Empire led an invasion of the Gordo Alliance of Got Beef in April of 2019 along with The Shadow Puppeteers after roughly a year of peace, with said invasion almost erasing of the Gordo Alliance's ~2 years of history,

Disgusted at the treatment of the inter-regional alliance composing the Yellow Empire and the New Yellow Empire by the Clavonian Empire (under the guise of Ambassador of Salutations) who lied as a means of ascending up the ranks of their government and proceeded to kick dissenters who had discovered the true nature of Ambassador of Salutations,

Objecting to the failure of the Clavonian Empire to quash divisive and hateful imagery in Salutations during the Gordo-Salutations war,

Reiterating that the Clavonian Empire has supported numerous calls for invasion by members of Salutations against other regions, including the Gordo Alliance, the Alliance of Gloria and the International Sovereignty Pact, and also supported an invasion of Rolling Thunder,

Hereby condemns the Clavonian Empire.
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I made some changes to the original, please add suggestions as to what to change.
Last edited by Neatlir on Mon Apr 29, 2019 8:10 am, edited 2 times in total.

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Postby Bormiar » Fri Apr 26, 2019 4:03 pm

Neatlir wrote:please add suggestions as to what to change.

Yeah, find a commendable candidate.

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Postby Neatlir » Fri Apr 26, 2019 4:06 pm

Bormiar wrote:
Neatlir wrote:please add suggestions as to what to change.

Yeah, find a commendable candidate.

This is a condemnation, not a commendation.

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Postby Nightkill » Fri Apr 26, 2019 4:08 pm

Really? Against after the last thread. What I said there still stands.
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Postby Bormiar » Fri Apr 26, 2019 4:11 pm

Neatlir wrote:
Bormiar wrote:Yeah, find a commendable candidate.

This is a condemnation, not a commendation.

*condemnable
One of those times when you think condemn but write commend :p .

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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Sat Apr 27, 2019 9:53 am

Neatlir wrote:The Security Council,

Aware that during the Clavonian Empire's existence, it has provoked multiple inter-regional wars,

Recognizing that the Clavonian Empire has created puppet nations within its region, Salutations, in order to subvert democracy on numerous occasions and ensure its preferred election outcome,

Emphasizing that the Clavonian Empire deliberately refused to end a war (begun by several member nations of Salutations) between its region and a region with which it had an embassy and a previously long standing friendship, the Gordo Alliance of Got Beef in May of 2018,

Noting that during peace talks between Salutations and its victims, the Clavonian Empire and its ministers deliberately deceived and tricked delegates from the opposing regions into agreeing to vague terms and then lied about what those terms meant,

Revealing that after the first war had come to a peaceful end, the Clavonian Empire made its member nations suppress messages, and ejecting and banning the Gordo Embassy to Salutations, which had been allowed to stay in Salutations, re-igniting the conflict,

Understanding that it was the Clavonian Empire's blatant disregard for the say of Salutations' member nations (e.g. Pax Americanae, Anschlabaum, Mens Alveo) that resulted in a 2 devastating civil wars within the region, leading to the formation of the region Rolling Thunder which was dedicated to opposing Salutations until it was raided in April 2018 at the hand of Salutations,

Appalled that the Clavonian Empire led an invasion of the Gordo Alliance of Got Beef in April of 2019 along with The Shadow Puppeteers after roughly a year of peace, with said invasion almost erasing of the Gordo Alliance's ~2 years of history,

Disgusted at the treatment of the regions composing the Yellow Empire and the New Yellow Empire by the Clavonian Empire (under the guise of Ambassador of Salutations) who lied his way into their government and proceeded to kick dissenters who had discovered his goals,

Objecting to the failure of the Clavonian Empire to quash hateful imagery in Salutations,

Reiterating that the Clavonian Empire has supported numerous calls for invasion by members of Salutations against other regions, including the Gordo Alliance, the Alliance of Gloria and the International Sovereignty Pact, and also supported an invasion of Rolling Thunder,

Hereby condemns the Clavonian Empire.
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I made some changes to the original, please add suggestions as to what to change.


Those clauses highlighted in red are either direct copy/paste or nearly the same as clauses in the proposal submitted by The Henry Empire. I would suggest that you get their explicit permission to use theses clauses (by explicit I mean posted in this thread) or run the risk of submitting this and having it declared illegal for plagiarism. That would also mean that you would get booted from the WA.

There are also a couple of Rule 4(b) illegalities in the text, but I'm not going to tell you where they are because like the previous attempt this is a crap proposal solely designed to try and advertise your tiny region.
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Postby Wrapper » Sat Apr 27, 2019 10:06 am

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:Those clauses highlighted in red are either direct copy/paste or nearly the same as clauses in the proposal submitted by The Henry Empire. I would suggest that you get their explicit permission to use theses clauses (by explicit I mean posted in this thread) or run the risk of submitting this and having it declared illegal for plagiarism. That would also mean that you would get booted from the WA.

No plagiarism. Here's the explicit permission:

https://www.nationstates.net/page=rmb/postid=35228197

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Postby Bhang Bhang Duc » Sat Apr 27, 2019 10:12 am

Wrapper wrote:
Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:Those clauses highlighted in red are either direct copy/paste or nearly the same as clauses in the proposal submitted by The Henry Empire. I would suggest that you get their explicit permission to use theses clauses (by explicit I mean posted in this thread) or run the risk of submitting this and having it declared illegal for plagiarism. That would also mean that you would get booted from the WA.

No plagiarism. Here's the explicit permission:

https://www.nationstates.net/page=rmb/postid=35228197

Thanks Wrapper.
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Postby Eumaeus » Sat Apr 27, 2019 12:09 pm

Neatlir wrote:Understanding that it was the Clavonian Empire's blatant disregard for the say of Salutations' member nations (e.g. Pax Americanae, Anschlabaum, Mens Alveo) that resulted in a 2 devastating civil wars within the region, leading to the formation of the region Rolling Thunder which was dedicated to opposing Salutations until it was raided in April 2018 at the hand of Salutations,

I found a typo.
Appalled that the Clavonian Empire led an invasion of the Gordo Alliance of Got Beef in April of 2019 along with The Shadow Puppeteers after roughly a year of peace, with said invasion almost erasing of the Gordo Alliance's ~2 years of history,

Disgusted at the treatment of the regions composing the Yellow Empire and the New Yellow Empire by the Clavonian Empire (under the guise of Ambassador of Salutations) who lied his way into their government and proceeded to kick dissenters who had discovered his goals,

I think you either meant to say "nations" instead of the underlined regions, or you should replace "composing" with "of". Two Rule 4b violations are highlighted in red.
Objecting to the failure of the Clavonian Empire to quash hateful imagery in Salutations,

This needs a more explanation.
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Postby Neatlir » Mon Apr 29, 2019 8:10 am

Eumaeus wrote:
Neatlir wrote:Understanding that it was the Clavonian Empire's blatant disregard for the say of Salutations' member nations (e.g. Pax Americanae, Anschlabaum, Mens Alveo) that resulted in a 2 devastating civil wars within the region, leading to the formation of the region Rolling Thunder which was dedicated to opposing Salutations until it was raided in April 2018 at the hand of Salutations,

I found a typo.
Appalled that the Clavonian Empire led an invasion of the Gordo Alliance of Got Beef in April of 2019 along with The Shadow Puppeteers after roughly a year of peace, with said invasion almost erasing of the Gordo Alliance's ~2 years of history,

Disgusted at the treatment of the regions composing the Yellow Empire and the New Yellow Empire by the Clavonian Empire (under the guise of Ambassador of Salutations) who lied his way into their government and proceeded to kick dissenters who had discovered his goals,

I think you either meant to say "nations" instead of the underlined regions, or you should replace "composing" with "of". Two Rule 4b violations are highlighted in red.
Objecting to the failure of the Clavonian Empire to quash hateful imagery in Salutations,

This needs a more explanation.

Thanks for the feedback, fixed


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