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The Security Council,

NOTING the long-term contribution and presence of the delegation of Grays Harbor since December 2002,

OBSERVING that as Delegate of The Heartland, Grays Harbor served the longest tenure in that region’s history for a period of 885 days, and that during Grays Harbor’s delegacy The Heartland enjoyed its highest historical population level,

COGNIZANT that Grays Harbor served as Delegate four separate times while residing in The Heartland, and that during its delegacy The Heartland enjoyed strong diplomatic ties with Wysteria and Texas, fostering the longest continuous inter-regional relationship in the world known as the Triumvate since before official embassies were introduced in 2003,

RECOGNIZING the delegation of Grays Harbor for their seasoned authorship, which includes:

• GA Resolution 71 Repeal: “Protection Of Monuments,” repealing a flawed GA resolution with numerous errors including that personal property was not listed as a protected class of property for historical monuments and that monuments could not be owned privately or by non-profits,
  
• GA resolution 73 International Postal Union, creating an international postal system for member states to ensure the safe delivery of parcels, and
  
• GA resolution 101 Repeal: “The Clean Water Resolution,” revoking a resolution to create a universal water system which denied compensation to member states and gave agencies unchecked power,

PLEASED that the delegation of Grays Harbor has consistently tried to improve the quality of General Assembly proposals by helping other member states’ delegations choose the right criteria for their proposed resolutions,

RECALLING that Grays Harbor is a seasoned Defender and was one of the first defenders involved in the First Defense of Japan and the First Defense of Ireland, and that as a member of the Texas Defense Force, Grays Harbor has held the rank of Senior Non-Commissioned Officer since 2004,

AWARE that Grays Harbor played an instrumental role in the survival of The Heartland in 2003, cementing a coalition with Texas and Wysteria to protect The Heartland from invasion by the Farkers and liberating the region to preserve it for future generations,

INSPIRED by the 15 years of dedication and skills displayed by the artists of Grays Harbor in the creation of military decorations for the governments of Texas and The Heartland, including a world map created for Texas by the Grays Harbor Design Bureau,

SEEKING to record this legacy as an example for future generations,

HEREBY commends Grays Harbor.

This looks quite well-written, but I have to ask: shouldn't it be written as "the First Defense of Japan" rather then "the First Invasion of Japan"? Because that sorta reads like they participated in the invasion.

Armaros wrote:This looks quite well-written, but I have to ask: shouldn't it be written as "the First Defense of Japan" rather then "the First Invasion of Japan"? Because that sorta reads like they participated in the invasion.

I have revised this accordingly.

Out of curiosity what does everyone think about this? GH was made a member of GenSec a few months ago.

OOC: I like GH, and this seems well written. Support.

Sargon Reman wrote:Out of curiosity what does everyone think about this? GH was made a member of GenSec a few months ago.

Just a note about this - you can’t commend GH for being a member of GenSec or their work in GenSec as this would contravene Rule 1.

Bhang Bhang Duc wrote:

Sargon Reman wrote:Out of curiosity what does everyone think about this? GH was made a member of GenSec a few months ago.

Just a note about this - you can’t commend GH for being a member of GenSec or their work in GenSec as this would contravene Rule 1.

Thank you, I was aware of this.

Does GH want a commendation?

Imperium Anglorum wrote:Does GH want a commendation?

Yes. I wouldn't be proposing a Commendation if I didn't have the nominees permission.

Full Support.

While GH's GenSec stuff and the legality checking that led to it can not be mentioned, I believe it wouldn't be difficult to frame the latter as a form of community contribution & proposal help.

Regardless, support.

Sargon Reman wrote:OBSERVING that as Delegate of The Heartland, Grays Harbor served the longest tenure in that regions history for a period of 885 days and that The Heartland enjoyed its highest historical population level,

Looking at the region now, and this history of the region it is a dead region. I can't tell how large the region used to be. Can you include some information on the population levels here? Additionally, any information on The Heartland's historical importance would be appreciated (either here, in the clause below, or in a new clause).

COGNIZANT that Grays Harbor served as Delegate four separate times while residing in The Heartland and that while Delegate The Heartland enjoyed strong diplomatic relationships with Wysteria and Texas,

I think you need to elaborate more on why this is impactful. Why were strong relationships with Wysteria and Texas commendable?

RECALLING that Grays Harbor is a seasoned Defender and was one of the first defenders that took part in the First Defense of Japan, the First Defense of Ireland, has been a member of the Texas Defense Forces since 2004 and has the rank of Senior Non-Commissioned Officer,

I think there could be more elaboration on this point if GH has been defending since 2004.

INSPIRED by the years of dedication and skill displayed by Grays Harbor in cartography and the creation of military decorations for Texas and The Heartland,

How many years are we talking here?

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Overall, I do think this nominee is commendable but I think you could do a better job of putting forward a case of why the nominee should be commended. Additionally, I recall it being mentioned somewhere that prior to GenSec that GH was quite active in reporting GA resolutions that broke the rules—this is information that could be included in the commendation if you find a R4 compliant way to bring it in.

Praeceps wrote:

Sargon Reman wrote:OBSERVING that as Delegate of The Heartland, Grays Harbor served the longest tenure in that regions history for a period of 885 days and that The Heartland enjoyed its highest historical population level,

Looking at the region now, and this history of the region it is a dead region. I can't tell how large the region used to be. Can you include some information on the population levels here? Additionally, any information on The Heartland's historical importance would be appreciated (either here, in the clause below, or in a new clause).

COGNIZANT that Grays Harbor served as Delegate four separate times while residing in The Heartland and that while Delegate The Heartland enjoyed strong diplomatic relationships with Wysteria and Texas,

I think you need to elaborate more on why this is impactful. Why were strong relationships with Wysteria and Texas commendable?

RECALLING that Grays Harbor is a seasoned Defender and was one of the first defenders that took part in the First Defense of Japan, the First Defense of Ireland, has been a member of the Texas Defense Forces since 2004 and has the rank of Senior Non-Commissioned Officer,

I think there could be more elaboration on this point if GH has been defending since 2004.

INSPIRED by the years of dedication and skill displayed by Grays Harbor in cartography and the creation of military decorations for Texas and The Heartland,

How many years are we talking here?

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Overall, I do think this nominee is commendable but I think you could do a better job of putting forward a case of why the nominee should be commended. Additionally, I recall it being mentioned somewhere that prior to GenSec that GH was quite active in reporting GA resolutions that broke the rules—this is information that could be included in the commendation if you find a R4 compliant way to bring it in.

Thank you for your input. I don't think people realize just how hard it was just finding half the info in this draft certainly when compared to other resolutions I have completed. I will look into it more though.

Draft updated with defending history, General Assembly work, and the amount of years of GHs work in design with their own design bureau.

INSPIRED by the 15 years of dedication and skill displayed by Grays Harbor in cartography and the creation of military decorations for Texas and The Heartland, including an RP map which they created for Texas with a regional bureaucracy dubbed the Grays Harbor Design Bureau,

I'm fairly sure that you can't refer to "RP" as such.

Bears Armed wrote:

INSPIRED by the 15 years of dedication and skill displayed by Grays Harbor in cartography and the creation of military decorations for Texas and The Heartland, including an RP map which they created for Texas with a regional bureaucracy dubbed the Grays Harbor Design Bureau,

I'm fairly sure that you can't refer to "RP" as such.

He can't, RP is an R4(c) violation. Might want to fix it Sargon.

Kuriko wrote:

Bears Armed wrote:

INSPIRED by the 15 years of dedication and skill displayed by Grays Harbor in cartography and the creation of military decorations for Texas and The Heartland, including an RP map which they created for Texas with a regional bureaucracy dubbed the Grays Harbor Design Bureau,

I'm fairly sure that you can't refer to "RP" as such.

He can't, RP is an R4(c) violation. Might want to fix it Sargon.

This has been fixed.

Sargon Reman wrote:PLEASED that the delegation of Grays Harbor has consistently been an advocate for the legality of proposals in the General Assembly and the belief that the quality of proposals is something which should concern member states, including the regular reporting of illegal proposals which may harm member states,

While it is possible to discuss legality/illegality when talking about law with the the SC rules, this doesn't cut it for me. I can only read this to be an R4c violation. My suggestion would be to focus more on quality of legislation.

INSPIRED by the 15 years of dedication and skill displayed by Grays Harbor in cartography and the creation of military decorations for Texas and The Heartland, including an RP map which they created for Texas with a regional bureaucracy dubbed the Grays Harbor Design Bureau,

RP is an R4(c) violation as others have mentioned. Also a nation cannot have dedication and skill in cartography and design (R4b), although members of the nation could.

Ransium wrote:

Sargon Reman wrote:PLEASED that the delegation of Grays Harbor has consistently been an advocate for the legality of proposals in the General Assembly and the belief that the quality of proposals is something which should concern member states, including the regular reporting of illegal proposals which may harm member states,

While it is possible to discuss legality/illegality when talking about law with the the SC rules, this doesn't cut it for me. I can only read this to be an R4c violation. My suggestion would be to focus more on quality of legislation.

INSPIRED by the 15 years of dedication and skill displayed by Grays Harbor in cartography and the creation of military decorations for Texas and The Heartland, including an RP map which they created for Texas with a regional bureaucracy dubbed the Grays Harbor Design Bureau,

RP is an R4(c) violation as others have mentioned. Also a nation cannot have dedication and skill in cartography and design (R4b), although members of the nation could.

So I could say something along the lines of "the leader of Grays Harbor..." and be able to mention cartography and design?

Ok I have updated the draft. Maybe that will solve the potential rule violations.

I think it would be better to attribute the cartography and design advances to the cartographers and designers in GH rather than to its leader.

Ransium wrote:I think it would be better to attribute the cartography and design advances to the cartographers and designers in GH rather than to its leader.

I have edited this to "artists".

Maybe

"INSPIRED by the 15 years of government support for the dedication and skill displayed by the artists of Grays Harbor in"

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Bears Armed wrote:Maybe

"INSPIRED by the 15 years of government support for the dedication and skill displayed by the artists of Grays Harbor in"

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This has been added.

If there are no further comments I will put this before the full WA next week.