[SUBMITTED] Commend Brutland and Norden

[Darwinish Brentsylvania]

Description: The Security Council,

Acknowledging The United Kingdom of Brutland and Norden's achievements since its founding that affected both the South Pacific and the world.

Observing Brutland and Norden was the main nation that liberated The South Pacific when The Committee of Public Safety of Milograd started a 16 day coup in the region, Brutland and Norden successfully managed to reclaim the delegacy in The South Pacific.

Pleased at Brutland and Norden's ideas and achievements during their final 57 day reign as delegate of the South Pacific, these achievements include:

•Rewarding the nations and regions who assisted or tried to help by using their World Assembly Membership to endorse them during the coup or helped gain assistance for them.

•Constructing embassies between The South Pacific and many smaller regions, helping foreign relations with the world and The South Pacific.

•Reorganizing the South Pacific and getting it's mind off of the recent raid and helping The South Pacific look towards the future.

Hereby;
Commends The United Kingdom of Brutland and Norden
Approvals: 3 (Milograd, Leningrad Union, Hombertoland)

Status: Lacking Support (requires 80 more approvals)

Voting Ends: in 3 days

[Inventio]

Here we go. I know this is submitted, but still..

Description: The Security Council,

Acknowledging The United Kingdom ofNot really needed. Plus it may change its pretitle in the future. Brutland and Norden's achievements since its founding that have affected both the South Pacific and the world.

Observing Brutland and Norden was the main nation that liberated The South Pacific when The Committee of Public Safety of Milograd started a 16 day coup in the region, Brutland and Norden successfully managed to reclaim the delegacy in The South Pacific.Cool. Most nations aren't in the South Pacific. Tell them why they should care.

Pleased at Brutland and Norden's ideas and achievements during their final 57 day reign as delegate of the South Pacific, these achievements includeWordy. Try something like "including" or "namely":
We like lists. Show us a little indent so it is clearly part of the above clause.
•Rewarding the nations and regions who assisted or tried to help by using their World Assembly Membership to endorse them during the coup or helped gain assistance for them.It's kind of hard to see how this is an achievement. Also, the phrase is confusing. If you must put it in, maybe try "Rewarding the nations that used World Assembly membership or other means to assist them," I would leave it out.
•Constructing embassies between The South Pacific and many smaller regions, helping foreign relations with the world and The South Pacific. Good. Maybe reword as "Spreading multi-regional diplomacy by constructing embassies between the South Pacific and numerous smaller regions,"

•Reorganizing the South Pacific and getting it'sits mind off of the recent raid and helping The South Pacific look towards the future.This is a lot for one little bullet. Right now, I'm looking at three operative verbs. Maybe try "Reorganizing the South Pacific, (new bullet) Helping the region look toward the future by getting its mind off the recent raid"? Or try "(new clause) Demonstrating exceptional leadership by (insert the two bullets here)." This shows how the nation's actions relate to the rest of the world.

Hereby;
Commends The United Kingdom of Brutland and NordenA little convoluted. Maybe "The World Assembly hereby commends Brutland and Norden."

Approvals: 3 (Milograd, Leningrad Union, Hombertoland)

Status: Lacking Support (requires 80 more approvals)

Voting Ends: in 3 days

Just to clarify, this is what I would put instead (roughly). It seems quite short; is there anything else you can unearth to boost your argument?

The Security Council,

Acknowledging Brutland and Norden's achievements since its founding that have affected both the South Pacific and the world;

Highlighting Brutland and Norden's determination and perseverance in liberating the South Pacific when Milograd started a coup in the region;

Applauding Brutland and Norden's efforts to spread diplomacy by constructing embassies between the South Pacific and numerous small regions;

Pleased with their exceptional leadership, exhibited by:

• Reorganizing the South Pacific to better the region,
• Helping the region look toward the future by getting its mind off the recent raid;

The World Assembly hereby commends the nation of Brutland and Norden.

[Milograd]

Well, I approved it as a gesture, but the resolution needs work like what was described above, as a start.

[Charax]

I wanted to write this at one point, and I applaud the intent of the author, but its really a poor attempt at a Commend. Inventio nailed it with the minimum improvements to make this even presentable, IMHO.

[Darwinish Brentsylvania]

First, how or can I delete it and replace it with what you said.
Plus Frattanstan II says I should add more detail, but thanks Inventio

[Darwinish Brentsylvania]

Also am I allowed to send the second, revised proposal with the other proposal or should I wait

[Inventio]

I've never actually done this, but I believe you should have an option when you view the submitted proposal that says something like "withdraw from the floor."

[Kringalia]

I really want to vote in favour of this, and I know if anyone deserves a commendation it's B&N, but I find the arguments in the commendation unconvicing. If you take Inventio's advice you could do a fine job with the proposal though. Good luck!

[Darwinish Brentsylvania]

I really want to vote in favour of this, and I know if anyone deserves a commendation it's B&N, but I find the arguments in the commendation unconvicing. If you take Inventio's advice you could do a fine job with the proposal though. Good luck!

Thank you, I was frankly surprised that nobody already attempted to

[Bears Armed]

I've never actually done this, but I believe you should have an option when you view the submitted proposal that says something like "withdraw from the floor."

You can post in the Moderation asking the Mods to remove it.

[Mahaj]

I've never actually done this, but I believe you should have an option when you view the submitted proposal that says something like "withdraw from the floor."

You can post in the Moderation asking the Mods to remove it.

Actually, I believe the correct procedure is to submit a Getting Help Report to get it removed.

[South Pacific Belschaft]

Like Kris, I'd love to see B&N Commended but this resolution isn't the commendation he deserves. It's light on content, inaccurate in a number of areas, completely omits his RPing (which is what he mainly does in NS; he's not a GPer by choice, and really didn't want to be TSP Delegate for a second longer than he had to) and badly written.

[New Charlzilla]

Wait why did Milograd approve this if it places him in a negative light? And what exactly happened?

[Milo grad]

Wait why did Milograd approve this if it places him in a negative light? And what exactly happened?

I don't condone my coup and B&N also did me a huge favor when I needed to step out of TSP's delegacy due to RL issues in March. He's a standup player and I have a lot of respect for him.

[Bears Armed]

You can post in the Moderation asking the Mods to remove it.

Actually, I believe the correct procedure is to submit a Getting Help Report to get it removed.

Okay, that probably is a better idea... but I've seen forum posts work at least sometimes too.

[Darwinish Brentsylvania]

same responses from everyone, Brut and Nord deserves to be commended, but the format and proposal itself stunk Ill fix that up by friday and resubmit it

[Super-Llamaland]

Wait why did Milograd approve this if it places him in a negative light? And what exactly happened?

I don't condone my coup and B&N also did me a huge favor when I needed to step out of TSP's delegacy due to RL issues in March. He's a standup player and I have a lot of respect for him.

Bad impersonation is bad.

[Milograd]

I don't condone my coup and B&N also did me a huge favor when I needed to step out of TSP's delegacy due to RL issues in March. He's a standup player and I have a lot of respect for him.

Bad impersonation is bad.

That's my puppet.

[New Charlzilla]

Bad impersonation is bad.

That's my puppet.

You need to be impeached Milograd, impeached for your actions of April 2013.

[SFBA wabbitslayah]

That's my puppet.

You need to be impeached Milograd, impeached for your actions of April 2013.

Dude, knock it off. It's really annoying.

[Sedgistan]

That's my puppet.

You need to be impeached Milograd, impeached for your actions of April 2013.

*** 1 day ban *** since the warning didn't work. Quit spamming off-topic posts.

[Super-Llamaland]

Bad impersonation is bad.

That's my puppet.

Oh. Whoops. Sorry.

[New Charlzilla]

You need to be impeached Milograd, impeached for your actions of April 2013.

*** 1 day ban *** since the warning didn't work. Quit spamming off-topic posts.

I'm back Sedgistan. You shall not destroy me.

[Liberatia]

This has the full support of the government of Liberatia. I commend the fact that B&N ended the coup, and restored peace and stability to the region.

Though, I have to say, I am a bit surprised that Milograd approved it, seeing as how it was his coup that B&N ended.

[Milograd]

This has the full support of the government of Liberatia. I commend the fact that B&N ended the coup, and restored peace and stability to the region.

Though, I have to say, I am a bit surprised that Milograd approved it, seeing as how it was his coup that B&N ended.

Most people know that I, in fact, do not condone what I did in April. It was destructive and senseless and I've apologize for that.

I wasn't acting quite like myself when it happened, and there are a lot of NSers that can relate to incidents like so.