Some feedback for a peace treaty I wrote for the canon war?

[Nacrad]

It's in my factbook, but I suppose I'll copy it here

Treaty of Peace among the Republic of Turkey, the Republic of Bulgaria, the Hellenic Republic, the Republic of Georgia, the Republic of Armenia, the Lebanese Republic, the Syrian Democratic Forces, Iraqi Resistance, the Federal Republic of Nacrad, the Kurdish People's Army and all other related nations and states

Drafted on 26 Jun 2020

THIS TREATY NON-CANON AS OF RIGHT NOW

1. The Republic of Turkey shall be declared as the defeated nation in the Middle Eastern War of 2020.

2. The Constitution of the Republic of Turkey shall be declared null and void, and a new constitution shall be drafted under the supervision of the Federal Republic of Nacrad, the Syrian Democratic Forces, the Kurdish People's Army and and the Republic of Armenia.

3. The government of the Republic of Turkey shall be dissolved, and a new government shall be formed under the mandate of the people with fair and open elections.

A. Any and all parties that aims to violate the Treaty of Peace among the Republic of Turkey, the Republic of Bulgaria, etc. shall be immediately dissolved, and its members banned from running for office in perpetuity.
B. The Republic of Turkey shall be ruled by an interim government, led by the Republican People's Party under its leader Kemal Kilicdaroglu, until it is able to carry out the elections, the votes counted, and a new government formed.
C. Recep Tayyip Erdogan shall be banned from running for the post of President in perpetuity.

4. The Republic of Turkey shall dismantle and discard safely any and all weapons of mass destruction, as well as any and all facilities capable of producing such weapons, under international supervision.

5. The Republic of Turkey shall repay reparations totaling equal to five hundred billion, eight-hundred fifty million, nine-hundred and ninety-five thousand United Standard Dollars (500,850,995,000 USD) to the other beligrants of this war.

6. The Republic of Turkey shall make the following amendments.

A. Armed Forces to no more than five hundred thousand (500,000) active service personnel
B. Its Navy to no more than fifty ships
C. Its Air Force to no more than two hundred aircrafts
D. Its blue-water navy, if any, auctioned to other nations.
E. Conscription to be abolished

7. The Republic of Turkey shall cede its Territories as follows (Province names written in plain Latin alphabet due to technical limitations):

A. The Provinces of Edirne, Kirklareli, Tekirdag and Istanbul to the Republic of Bulgaria.
B. The Provinces of Canassakale and Izmir to the Hellenic Republic.
C. The Provinces of Kars, Igdir and Agri to the Republic of Armenia
D. The Provinces of Artvin and Rize to the Republic of Georgia
E. The territories south of Kizilirmak River and 39°5'0"N, whichever is further north, east of 34°23'47.8"E, along with any and all towns, cities and villages located on this line, to the Syrian Democratic Forces, Kurdish People's Army and Iraqi Resistance, to be re-partitioned in a later treaty

8. The Armed Forces of Turkey shall withdraw from the Island of Cyprus, and to recognise the Republic of Cyprus as the sole legitimate regime on the island.

9. The Republic of Turkey shall be made to issue a formal apology, and to offer compensation, for the Armenian Genocide

10. The Republic of Turkey shall promise to desist from any offensive action in the future.

[Hansdeltania]

First of all, this would go better under either Technical or Gameplay.

Secondly, if this is your first time drafting a treaty, I'm impressed.

Now, to business:

Clause 6, subclause C: the plural of "aircraft" is, surprisingly, "aircraft."

Clause 6, "The Republic of Turkey...": there needs to be a colon instead of a period/full-stop because a list follows. You managed to get it right for Clause 7 though.

[Borovan entered the region as he]

First of all, this would go better under either Technical or Gameplay.

Secondly, if this is your first time drafting a treaty, I'm impressed.

Now, to business:

Clause 6, subclause C: the plural of "aircraft" is, surprisingly, "aircraft."

Clause 6, "The Republic of Turkey...": there needs to be a colon instead of a period/full-stop because a list follows. You managed to get it right for Clause 7 though.

Nah it's fine here, it's not about his region. The treaty looks fine.

[Eothasia]

Hey! Beyond what Hansdeltania already mentioned (the colon and the aircraft), I found a couple of things of note.

Any and all parties that aims to violate the Treaty of Peace among the Republic of Turkey, the Republic of Bulgaria, etc. shall be immediately dissolved, and its members banned from running for office in perpetuity.

This is a bit rough, especially since the treaty doesn't specify if the country can, for instance, supersede the number of 500.000 active personnel in the event of a war or an attack (or threats of attack). Not that 500.000 is a small army by any sense of the word, but still. Also, just saying it doesn't mean they'll actually do it, and I find it a bit rough to do a wipe of the entire party because of potentially populist rhetoric.

The Republic of Turkey shall repay reparations totaling equal to five hundred billion, eight-hundred fifty million, nine-hundred and ninety-five thousand United Standard Dollars (500,850,995,000 USD) to the other beligrants of this war.

Totaling and equal are (in this case, at least) synonyms. Also, you misspelled belligerents at the end of that clause. Although apparently "beligrant" is slang in Ohio (and other places) to mean drunk. The things you learn on Google these days. Lastly, for USD it's either (in my experience) Universal Standard Dollar or United States Dollar.

A. Armed Forces to no more than five hundred thousand (500,000) active service personnel

Going out on a limb because I'm not fully sure this is how this works, but I believe something like the National Guard in the U.S. is a reservist force. Specifying active service personnel could lead a loophole where they keep them as reserve personnel and then activate if and when ready to break the treaty (assuming someone wants to break the treaty because this is a bit too Treaty of Versailles for it to not happen, I think).