International Factbook Raters (OPEN)

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:29 am

everyone so far has been added to the backlog. I will try to get through all 4 applications today, but no promises have been made

by **Beiluxia** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:29 am

Rhodevus wrote:
Beiluxia wrote:APPLICATION
Nation Name: The Eternal Serene Republic of Beiluxia, commonly known as Beiluxia
Factbook Link: http://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?f=23&t=146523
Factbook Category: Overview (layout based on Wikipedia)
Factbook Name: Factbook of Beiluxia
Would you like to have any suggestions? My factbook has been a continuous under-construction piece of work since I've started playing NS. Any helpful tips on improving my factbook will be appreciated.

Spelling Are there any spelling mistakes? 6/10
Grammar Is everything grammatically correct? 8/10
Layout Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow? 26/30
Topic Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray? 18/20
Extra Information Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic? 5/5
Updates Is the factbook updated occasionally? 3/5
Overall Quality Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured? 18/20
Details Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook? 10/10

Overall ranking: 94

Thoughts on the Factbook
Very nice and organized with great amounts of pictures. There are many links to Wikipedia entries, that really add to the factbook. There are quite a few spelling mistakes, but luckily only minor grammatical mistakes.

Next Step
Firstly, try reading through parts of the factbook out loud. It may help to find the grammatical mistakes much easier. Also, in accounts to spelling, try carefully going through each section. Words such as "forces" and "provinces" (written in factbook as forses and provinses) need to be fixed. For the geography section, try bolding or underlining the names of provinces (while in the spoilers). And finally, something that I am sure you already know, please finish up the history section.

If it changes anything, I'm using British English spelling rules. In addition, I forgot to point out that there are some words in Beiluxia that are spelt differently (among them include "forses" and "provinses"). They are relics of Beiluxian Standard English, a quasi-archaic variation originating from the late 1800s that tried to standardise English pronunciation and spelling but was ultimately abandoned in favour of Received Pronunciation & British/International English as the standard Beiluxian English pronunciation and spelling conventions, respectively. Some words, especially proper nouns, remain under the prior spelling norms, such as "National Polise", "His Eternal Elite Forses", and more rarely the "Republik of Baaluuksya". Note that in most cases, the proper noun with the archaic spelling is spelt under British English norms in the common noun version. When referring to the "National Polise" generally, they are called the "police", and when referring to "His Eternal Elite Forses" generally, they are called the "elite forces". This is why all of Beiluxia's ten provinses are not spelt "province". In this case, the term "province" has a completely different terminology in Beiluxia than "provinse", since "province" refers to the "Haven Province" ceremoniously under the British monarch's reign rather than Beiluxia's "Haven Provinse". Sorry for the extremely long explanation; I guess what I'm trying to say is my spelling is technically correct in regards to how I RP my nation, in the same way that American English spelling is correct in the US but not in the UK.

by **Zorbae** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:32 am

Rhodevus wrote:
Zorbae wrote:APPLICATION
Nation Name: Zorbae
Factbook Link: Overview
Factbook Category: Overview
Factbook Name: The Kingdom of Zorbae
Would you like to have any suggestions? Have fun.

is that a yes or no to suggestions about your factbook?

Go for yes.

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:36 am

Spelling	Are there any spelling mistakes?	10/10
Grammar	Is everything grammatically correct?	5/10
Layout	Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow?	25/30
Topic	Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray?	13/20
Extra Information	Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic?	3/5
Updates	Is the factbook updated occasionally?	5/5
Overall Quality	Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured?	9/20
Details	Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook?	0/10

Overall ranking: 70

Thoughts on the factbook
Good start so far. Everything is in place for links to be added in later. It does look a bit dull.

Next Step
Add links to the NS calculators. Try adding in some more links all over the dispatch, and try adding in some colour/pictures. Maybe add in some basic information about the country, so that others will have a reason to continue looking through the factbook.

by **Cyprevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:38 am

Rhodevus wrote:
Cyprevus wrote:APPLICATION
Nation Name:Cyprevus
Factbook Link: http://www.nationstates.net/page=dispatch/id=265976
Factbook Category:Meta Sources
Factbook Name:Cyprevean Directory Page
Would you like to have any suggestions? Sure

Spelling Are there any spelling mistakes? 10/10
Grammar Is everything grammatically correct? 5/10
Layout Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow? 25/30
Topic Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray? 13/20
Extra Information Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic? 3/5
Updates Is the factbook updated occasionally? 5/5
Overall Quality Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured? 9/20
Details Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook? 0/10

Overall ranking: 70

Thoughts on the factbook
Good start so far. Everything is in place for links to be added in later. It does look a bit dull.

Next Step
Add links to the NS calculators. Try adding in some more links all over the dispatch, and try adding in some colour/pictures. Maybe add in some basic information about the country, so that others will have a reason to continue looking through the factbook.

I will eventually but it is a WIP. How do you add links. I try to but it won't work.

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:39 am

Beiluxia wrote:
Rhodevus wrote:

Spelling Are there any spelling mistakes? 6/10
Grammar Is everything grammatically correct? 8/10
Layout Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow? 26/30
Topic Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray? 18/20
Extra Information Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic? 5/5
Updates Is the factbook updated occasionally? 3/5
Overall Quality Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured? 18/20
Details Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook? 10/10

Overall ranking: 94

Thoughts on the Factbook
Very nice and organized with great amounts of pictures. There are many links to Wikipedia entries, that really add to the factbook. There are quite a few spelling mistakes, but luckily only minor grammatical mistakes.

Next Step
Firstly, try reading through parts of the factbook out loud. It may help to find the grammatical mistakes much easier. Also, in accounts to spelling, try carefully going through each section. Words such as "forces" and "provinces" (written in factbook as forses and provinses) need to be fixed. For the geography section, try bolding or underlining the names of provinces (while in the spoilers). And finally, something that I am sure you already know, please finish up the history section.

If it changes anything, I'm using British English spelling rules. In addition, I forgot to point out that there are some words in Beiluxia that are spelt differently (among them include "forses" and "provinses"). They are relics of Beiluxian Standard English, a quasi-archaic variation originating from the late 1800s that tried to standardise English pronunciation and spelling but was ultimately abandoned in favour of Received Pronunciation & British/International English as the standard Beiluxian English pronunciation and spelling conventions, respectively. Some words, especially proper nouns, remain under the prior spelling norms, such as "National Polise", "His Eternal Elite Forses", and more rarely the "Republik of Baaluuksya". Note that in most cases, the proper noun with the archaic spelling is spelt under British English norms in the common noun version. When referring to the "National Polise" generally, they are called the "police", and when referring to "His Eternal Elite Forses" generally, they are called the "elite forces". This is why all of Beiluxia's ten provinses are not spelt "province". In this case, the term "province" has a completely different terminology in Beiluxia than "provinse", since "province" refers to the "Haven Province" ceremoniously under the British monarch's reign rather than Beiluxia's "Haven Provinse". Sorry for the extremely long explanation; I guess what I'm trying to say is my spelling is technically correct in regards to how I RP my nation, in the same way that American English spelling is correct in the US but not in the UK.

This makes perfect sense. I am Canadian, so I use British spelling as well. In this case, your spelling mark increases to 8/10 leaving you with an overall ranking of 96

congratulations

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:41 am

Cyprevus wrote:
Rhodevus wrote:

Spelling Are there any spelling mistakes? 10/10
Grammar Is everything grammatically correct? 5/10
Layout Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow? 25/30
Topic Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray? 13/20
Extra Information Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic? 3/5
Updates Is the factbook updated occasionally? 5/5
Overall Quality Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured? 9/20
Details Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook? 0/10

Overall ranking: 70

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Thoughts on the factbook
Good start so far. Everything is in place for links to be added in later. It does look a bit dull.

Next Step
Add links to the NS calculators. Try adding in some more links all over the dispatch, and try adding in some colour/pictures. Maybe add in some basic information about the country, so that others will have a reason to continue looking through the factbook.

I will eventually but it is a WIP. How do you add links. I try to but it won't work.

[url=put link here]put name of where it is going over here[/url]

by **Cyprevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:42 am

Rhodevus wrote:
Cyprevus wrote:I will eventually but it is a WIP. How do you add links. I try to but it won't work.

[url=put link here]put name of where it is going over here[/url]

Thank you. I will re summit it when it is completely done.

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:54 am

Spelling	Are there any spelling mistakes?	10/10
Grammar	Is everything grammatically correct?	10/10
Layout	Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow?	24/30
Topic	Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray?	19/20
Extra Information	Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic?	5/5
Updates	Is the factbook updated occasionally?	4/5
Overall Quality	Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured?	15/20
Details	Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook?	10/10

Overall ranking: 97

Thoughts on the Factbook
Exquisite factbook. Large amounts of pictures and links to wikipedia. Sections are a little small, but all the necessary information is present.The rotating view of the mountain is quite original.

Next Step
Firstly, try adding some more information into the history section. It begins in 103 and ends in the present day, so there should definitely be some more information. Truthfully, there really is not too much to add, since all sections link up with other factbooks on those specific sections and in more detail.

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:56 am

Bulgar Rouge wrote:APPLICATION
Nation Name: Democratic Republic of Bulgar Rouge
Factbook Link: click
Factbook Category: Pick any entry other than Introduction (didn't finish it due to ongoing thesis/graduation).
Factbook Name: Bulgar Rouge
Would you like to have any suggestions? Nope.

can you please specify which topic you would like me to look at? I just rate the factbooks, not choose which ones to rate.

Sorry

by **Beiluxia** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:57 am

Rhodevus wrote:
Beiluxia wrote:If it changes anything, I'm using British English spelling rules. In addition, I forgot to point out that there are some words in Beiluxia that are spelt differently (among them include "forses" and "provinses"). They are relics of Beiluxian Standard English, a quasi-archaic variation originating from the late 1800s that tried to standardise English pronunciation and spelling but was ultimately abandoned in favour of Received Pronunciation & British/International English as the standard Beiluxian English pronunciation and spelling conventions, respectively. Some words, especially proper nouns, remain under the prior spelling norms, such as "National Polise", "His Eternal Elite Forses", and more rarely the "Republik of Baaluuksya". Note that in most cases, the proper noun with the archaic spelling is spelt under British English norms in the common noun version. When referring to the "National Polise" generally, they are called the "police", and when referring to "His Eternal Elite Forses" generally, they are called the "elite forces". This is why all of Beiluxia's ten provinses are not spelt "province". In this case, the term "province" has a completely different terminology in Beiluxia than "provinse", since "province" refers to the "Haven Province" ceremoniously under the British monarch's reign rather than Beiluxia's "Haven Provinse". Sorry for the extremely long explanation; I guess what I'm trying to say is my spelling is technically correct in regards to how I RP my nation, in the same way that American English spelling is correct in the US but not in the UK.

This makes perfect sense. I am Canadian, so I use British spelling as well. In this case, your spelling mark increases to 8/10 leaving you with an overall ranking of 96

congratulations

Thanks a bunch for the rating!

by **Bulgar Rouge** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:58 am

Rhodevus wrote:
Bulgar Rouge wrote:APPLICATION
Nation Name: Democratic Republic of Bulgar Rouge
Factbook Link: click
Factbook Category: Pick any entry other than Introduction (didn't finish it due to ongoing thesis/graduation).
Factbook Name: Bulgar Rouge
Would you like to have any suggestions? Nope.

can you please specify which topic you would like me to look at? I just rate the factbooks, not choose which ones to rate.

Sorry

Alright, take Air Force.

by **Zorbae** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 12:01 pm

Rhodevus wrote:
Zorbae wrote:APPLICATION
Nation Name: Zorbae
Factbook Link: Overview
Factbook Category: Overview
Factbook Name: The Kingdom of Zorbae
Would you like to have any suggestions? Have fun.

Spelling Are there any spelling mistakes? 10/10
Grammar Is everything grammatically correct? 10/10
Layout Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow? 24/30
Topic Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray? 19/20
Extra Information Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic? 5/5
Updates Is the factbook updated occasionally? 4/5
Overall Quality Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured? 15/20
Details Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook? 10/10

Overall ranking: 97

Thoughts on the Factbook
Exquisite factbook. Large amounts of pictures and links to wikipedia. Sections are a little small, but all the necessary information is present.The rotating view of the mountain is quite original.

Next Step
Firstly, try adding some more information into the history section. It begins in 103 and ends in the present day, so there should definitely be some more information. Truthfully, there really is not too much to add, since all sections link up with other factbooks on those specific sections and in more detail.

Thank you very much for your time! 5 stars!

by **Aristotlic** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 1:42 pm

Um, could you look through my factbook, and give me any tips on how to make it better?

Nation Name: Aristotlic
Factbook Link: http://www.nationstates.net/nation=aristotlic/detail=factbook/id=263886
Factbook Category: Overview
Factbook Name: The United States of Aristotlic
Would you like to have any suggestions? Yes

by **Blakullar** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 1:50 pm

APPLICATION
Nation Name: The Mechanocracy
Factbook Link: http://www.nationstates.net/nation=blak ... /id=128452
Factbook Category: Military
Factbook Name: Heavy Metal - Official Armoured Warfare Database
Would you like to have any suggestions? Yes.

The factbook is currently being revamped, so apologies if it's a bit sloppy.

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 5:04 pm

Spelling	Are there any spelling mistakes?	6/10
Grammar	Is everything grammatically correct?	4/10
Layout	Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow?	20/30
Topic	Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray?	15/20
Extra Information	Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic?	3/5
Updates	Is the factbook updated occasionally?	3/5
Overall Quality	Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured?	12/20
Details	Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook?	5/10

Overall ranking: 68

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 5:12 pm

Spelling	Are there any spelling mistakes?	10/10
Grammar	Is everything grammatically correct?	9/10
Layout	Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow?	26/30
Topic	Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray?	19/20
Extra Information	Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic?	3/5
Updates	Is the factbook updated occasionally?	3/5
Overall Quality	Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured?	18/20
Details	Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook?	7/10

Overall ranking: 95

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jun 07, 2014 5:44 pm

Spelling	Are there any spelling mistakes?	7/10
Grammar	Is everything grammatically correct?	6/10
Layout	Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow?	23/30
Topic	Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray?	17/20
Extra Information	Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic?	4/5
Updates	Is the factbook updated occasionally?	5/5
Overall Quality	Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured?	13/20
Details	Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook?	4/10

Overall ranking: 79

Thoughts on the Factbook
Great Start to the factbook! It has all the key concepts needed to become a great factbook. It does have some spelling and grammar mistakes, but none hinder the reading of the factbook. It does look quite bland though.

Next Step
To begin with, the overall format of the factbook is a great start at becoming a wiki-style factbook. Try checking out this link for help. next, I suggest you try and get your links from the contents section to work with the rest of the titles around the factbook. After all this is done, try reading over the factbook out loud to check for any grammatical mistakes. Now, in terms of actual writing, try adding:
-city/capitol names. Just because you cannot choose a capitol in the settings menu of NS, does not mean you do not have a capitol
-sidenote: pictures
-more about history and military
-add some more facts about foreign policy, and maybe names of some allies you have and how they became allies

by **Rhodevus** » Tue Jun 10, 2014 7:50 am

Spelling	Are there any spelling mistakes?	10/10
Grammar	Is everything grammatically correct?	9/10
Layout	Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow?	26/30
Topic	Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray?	18/20
Extra Information	Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic?	4/5
Updates	Is the factbook updated occasionally?	3/5
Overall Quality	Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured?	15/20
Details	Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook?	6/10

Overall ranking: 91

Thoughts on the Factbook
Nice layout! There are very few grammatical mistakes that do not hinder the factbook's reading. There are nice little blurbs about each armoured vehicle, as well as a picture of it.

Next Step
Since I know that these should not have too much writing in them, try adding the date that they were commissioned to join the main army. Maybe add in a little paragraph or two of victories where these vehicles were used in achieving it.

by **Rhodevus** » Thu Jul 24, 2014 9:42 am

The International Factbook Raters has re-opened!

by **Padnak** » Thu Jul 24, 2014 9:47 am

APPLICATION
Nation Name: Republic of Padnak
Factbook Link: http://www.nationstates.net/nation=padn ... /id=221316
Factbook Category: Military
Factbook Name: Padnaki Army
Would you like to have any suggestions? Yes

Its a semi work in progress, (Its almost finished, but because I like messing around with stuff it will probably never be done-

by **Rhodevus** » Thu Jul 24, 2014 10:10 am

Spelling	Are there any spelling mistakes?	10/10
Grammar	Is everything grammatically correct?	6/10
Layout	Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow?	26/30
Topic	Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray?	18/20
Extra Information	Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic?	5/5
Updates	Is the factbook updated occasionally?	5/5
Overall Quality	Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured?	18/20
Details	Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook?	10/10

Overall ranking: 98

Thoughts on the Factbook
The factbook is extremely well put together. The information is very concise, which is very appropriate for a factbook with this particular layout. The extra links for the various weapons are a great add-on. One big thing that needs to be worked on is the overall grammar.

Next Step
Make sure that your demonym is the same throughout the factbook, since at present it switches between "Padnaki" and "Padnakian". Also, a few subheadings are bold while others are not. It would be best to keep everything the same throughout the factbook.

by **Pavonistade** » Fri Jul 25, 2014 3:50 pm

APPLICATION
Nation Name: Pavonistade
Factbook Link: http://iiwiki.com/wiki/Pavonistade
Factbook Category: General/Overview
Factbook Name: Pavonistade
Would you like to have any suggestions? Sure

by **Rhodevus** » Fri Jul 25, 2014 4:22 pm

Spelling	Are there any spelling mistakes?	10/10
Grammar	Is everything grammatically correct?	9/10
Layout	Does the factbook have a nice layout? Is it easy to follow?	28/30
Topic	Does the factbook stay on topic or does it stray?	18/20
Extra Information	Is there any extra info that may add to the original topic?	5/5
Updates	Is the factbook updated occasionally?	3/5
Overall Quality	Overall, is the factbook pleasant to read? Is everything well structured?	18/20
Details	Does the factbook have pictures to add to the understanding of the factbook? Are there any side-links to other factbooks or anything else that may help the reader to understand the factbook?	10/10

Overall ranking: 101

Thoughts on the Factbook
Very well put together and nice and long. It has a great amount of pictures and the links to foreign relations is a nice boost to an already good factbook. The wiki style factbook is great for expressing all the information about the country and the headings and subheadings are well organized.

Next Step
Try moving around pictures. Try not having 3-4 consecutive pictures in a row, on the far right. Move one to the the left to give the factbook some dimension. Add on some information about each state in Pavonistade. That can include when it was recognized as a state, as well as some general history about it.

by **Rhodevus** » Sat Jul 26, 2014 9:13 pm

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