The Fall of Gods (OOC: Character RP)

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:04 am

Jean's big fight is about to start :twisted:

by **Warhaven** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:11 am

Looks good so far.

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:19 am

Sweet! I'm glad I'm here for it!
Anyway... I'm REALLY waiting for Rupudska to show herself.

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:26 am

African-Union wrote:I'll continue later on today after I do some schoolwork.

I'll be saying that frequently today...

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:29 am

Arcad wrote:
African-Union wrote:I'll continue later on today after I do some schoolwork.

I'll be saying that frequently today...

Haha, when ever I can sneak on and get enough time to write out the fight, I'll be able to.

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:30 am

African-Union wrote:
Arcad wrote:
I'll be saying that frequently today...

Haha, when ever I can sneak on and get enough time to write out the fight, I'll be able to.

Yep. Do you want me to show up immediately after, or...? Because I'm definitely posting soon.

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:31 am

Arcad wrote:
African-Union wrote:
Haha, when ever I can sneak on and get enough time to write out the fight, I'll be able to.

Yep. Do you want me to show up immediately after, or...? Because I'm definitely posting soon.

Just post as if you have no knowledge of the fight that's commencing. Jean's store is about 4 miles from the house, so no one in the group is there right now. Once I post the fight you should show up after you hear the explosion.

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:34 am

African-Union wrote:
Arcad wrote:
Yep. Do you want me to show up immediately after, or...? Because I'm definitely posting soon.

Just post as if you have no knowledge of the fight that's commencing. Jean's store is about 4 miles from the house, so no one in the group is there right now. Once I post the fight you should show up after you hear the explosion.

I was going to say that I could be at work or driving to work; the auto shop is in the same part of town.

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:39 am

Arcad wrote:
African-Union wrote:
Just post as if you have no knowledge of the fight that's commencing. Jean's store is about 4 miles from the house, so no one in the group is there right now. Once I post the fight you should show up after you hear the explosion.

I was going to say that I could be at work or driving to work; the auto shop is in the same part of town.

Well the general store is sort of out in the middle of nowhere, but yeah you could be driving to work and see the explosion. You would come and see what happened, Jean would be collapsed on the ground and everything within 400 yards is completely incinerated. I was thinking we blame it on a gas leak to townsfolk don't get suspicious.

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:40 am

I'm also gonna wait til someone posts until I post as well, cause I don't want 2 of my posts backto back lol.

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:43 am

African-Union wrote:I'm also gonna wait til someone posts until I post as well, cause I don't want 2 of my posts backto back lol.

Yep. I think I'll post about getting up, eating breakfast, and driving through the woods, as it begins to rain.

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:48 am

Arcad wrote:
African-Union wrote:I'm also gonna wait til someone posts until I post as well, cause I don't want 2 of my posts backto back lol.

Yep. I think I'll post about getting up, eating breakfast, and driving through the woods, as it begins to rain.

Sounds good my friend.

by **Warhaven** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:48 am

Arcad wrote:
African-Union wrote:I'm also gonna wait til someone posts until I post as well, cause I don't want 2 of my posts backto back lol.

Yep. I think I'll post about getting up, eating breakfast, and driving through the woods, as it begins to rain.

I could be in your head, messing with your thoughts...

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 7:59 am

Warhaven wrote:
Arcad wrote:
Yep. I think I'll post about getting up, eating breakfast, and driving through the woods, as it begins to rain.

I could be in your head, messing with your thoughts...

IT'S YOUR FAULT I SLEPT IN!!!!!! :eek:

by **Jedi8246** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:05 am

cant wait for the fight to begin. I am at school right now though.

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:08 am

Jedi8246 wrote:cant wait for the fight to begin. I am at school right now though.

*looks around for teachers*
Me too.

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:31 am

Shouldn't he be, like... dead? And he's going to bleed all over the nice, clean seats... ok, ok. But I think that you're going to need Lisa here.

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:33 am

Arcad wrote:Shouldn't he be, like... dead? And he's going to bleed all over the nice, clean seats... ok, ok. But I think that you're going to need Lisa here.

He should be very dead but his powers are keeping him alive. Right now after the fight, he is barely alive, bleeding out, and yeah he could use Lisa right about now.

How did the fight scene work out? Did everyone like it? Thoughts? Ridicule?

by **Warhaven** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:35 am

*alerts the teachers!*

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:37 am

African-Union wrote:
Arcad wrote:Shouldn't he be, like... dead? And he's going to bleed all over the nice, clean seats... ok, ok. But I think that you're going to need Lisa here.

He should be very dead but his powers are keeping him alive. Right now after the fight, he is barely alive, bleeding out, and yeah he could use Lisa right about now.

How did the fight scene work out? Did everyone like it? Thoughts? Ridicule?

Meh, I'd say it was damn good for a first try. I've seen fight scenes that were merely 3 lines long, so length is no issue. You described everything very well, using poignant imagery and all that; and you did the action parts very well, too.

by **Warhaven** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:39 am

African-Union wrote:
Arcad wrote:Shouldn't he be, like... dead? And he's going to bleed all over the nice, clean seats... ok, ok. But I think that you're going to need Lisa here.

He should be very dead but his powers are keeping him alive. Right now after the fight, he is barely alive, bleeding out, and yeah he could use Lisa right about now.

How did the fight scene work out? Did everyone like it? Thoughts? Ridicule?

For what it was, it was alright. It felt like a throwaway post to quickly introduce a power. There was little build up, and very little action over all. For a first time effort, it was pretty good.

I advise building up to the finally. All great stories do, and the events within that story, even they build up.

Become as the stalking predator. Wait, develop patience, follow your elusive goal, and when the timing is perfect, when the prey is about to get away, strike, swiftly, and effeciently.

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:40 am

Arcad wrote:
African-Union wrote:
He should be very dead but his powers are keeping him alive. Right now after the fight, he is barely alive, bleeding out, and yeah he could use Lisa right about now.

How did the fight scene work out? Did everyone like it? Thoughts? Ridicule?

Meh, I'd say it was damn good for a first try. I've seen fight scenes that were merely 3 lines long, so length is no issue. You described everything very well, using poignant imagery and all that; and you did the action parts very well, too.

Yeah I didn't wanna make it some crappy short fight. I wanted to make sure it had imagery, details, etc. And I know there's grammar mistakes, and I'll get to editing that eventually. As this RP progresses I hope to get better constructed battles, conversations, etc.

So now here's where Card gets Jean, and brings him back. (I feel like a total dick for this but who plays Lisa again?)

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:42 am

Warhaven wrote:
African-Union wrote:
He should be very dead but his powers are keeping him alive. Right now after the fight, he is barely alive, bleeding out, and yeah he could use Lisa right about now.

How did the fight scene work out? Did everyone like it? Thoughts? Ridicule?

For what it was, it was alright. It felt like a throwaway post to quickly introduce a power. There was little build up, and very little action over all. For a first time effort, it was pretty good.

I advise building up to the finally. All great stories do, and the events within that story, even they build up.

Become as the stalking predator. Wait, develop patience, follow your elusive goal, and when the timing is perfect, when the prey is about to get away, strike, swiftly, and effeciently.

Well I wanted to introduce it fairly quickly, because that power is pretty much gone now. The thing about Jean is his powers come and go at random, and they are always different each time he regains them. Usually the powers are pretty crappy, but sometimes he will get great powers such as that demonstrated. However, they never last very long and they seem to have a "mind" of their own. Think Ben-10 type of situation, only minus the watch thing.

by **Arcad** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:49 am

African-Union wrote:
Arcad wrote:
Meh, I'd say it was damn good for a first try. I've seen fight scenes that were merely 3 lines long, so length is no issue. You described everything very well, using poignant imagery and all that; and you did the action parts very well, too.

Yeah I didn't wanna make it some crappy short fight. I wanted to make sure it had imagery, details, etc. And I know there's grammar mistakes, and I'll get to editing that eventually. As this RP progresses I hope to get better constructed battles, conversations, etc.

So now here's where Card gets Jean, and brings him back. (I feel like a total dick for this but who plays Lisa again?)

Quid does. She does Jimmy too, so there's the source of the confusion.

by **African-Union** » Thu Jan 13, 2011 8:51 am

Arcad wrote:
African-Union wrote:
Yeah I didn't wanna make it some crappy short fight. I wanted to make sure it had imagery, details, etc. And I know there's grammar mistakes, and I'll get to editing that eventually. As this RP progresses I hope to get better constructed battles, conversations, etc.

So now here's where Card gets Jean, and brings him back. (I feel like a total dick for this but who plays Lisa again?)

Quid does. She does Jimmy too, so there's the source of the confusion.

Oh, okay well i hope Quid comes on soon so we don't have to wait too long for Lisa to heal him.

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