Traveller's Cafe 3: Brainstorming, discussion, tea, advice

[Abserdia]

viewtopic.php?f=31&t=312835
This is an RP where you play as a monster trying to live with Hunters attempting to kill you!
You must first figure out WHAT monster you will be.
Then HOW you react to other Monsters and your same Species!
Then WHERE you live!
Signups open! Anybody welcome!

[The Empire of Pretantia]

http://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?f=31&t=312835
This is an RP where you play as a monster trying to live with Hunters attempting to kill you!
You must first figure out WHAT monster you will be.
Then HOW you react to other Monsters and your same Species!
Then WHERE you live!
Signups open! Anybody welcome!

I see you've immediately declared it a failure after only one hour. This is not a good attitude, at all.

[The Tiger Kingdom]

http://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?f=31&t=312835
This is an RP where you play as a monster trying to live with Hunters attempting to kill you!
You must first figure out WHAT monster you will be.
Then HOW you react to other Monsters and your same Species!
Then WHERE you live!
Signups open! Anybody welcome!

I see you've immediately declared it a failure after only one hour. This is not a good attitude, at all.

Hilariously, it was a self-fulfilled prophecy.

[Agritum]

I see you've immediately declared it a failure after only one hour. This is not a good attitude, at all.

Hilariously, it was a self-fulfilled prophecy.

Exactly one hour later.

Wow, just wow.

[Rupudska]

Hilariously, it was a self-fulfilled prophecy.

Exactly one hour later.

Wow, just wow.

Isn't it sad, Agri?

[The Empire of Pretantia]

Hilariously, it was a self-fulfilled prophecy.

Exactly one hour later.

Wow, just wow.

I think it's a new record.

[Agritum]

Exactly one hour later.

Wow, just wow.

Isn't it sad, Agri?

"Seeing people spend hours or days on queue for an iPhone and then see them fall into that Apple Wave joke" level of sadness.

[The Empire of Pretantia]

Isn't it sad, Agri?

"Seeing people spend hours or days on queue for an iPhone and then see them fall into that Apple Wave joke" level of sadness.

I believe he should come here so we can mercilessly pick apart his RP. I love picking apart RPs.

[Nightkill the Emperor]

"Seeing people spend hours or days on queue for an iPhone and then see them fall into that Apple Wave joke" level of sadness.

I believe he should come here so we can mercilessly pick apart his RP. I love picking apart RPs.

How about no?

[The Empire of Pretantia]

I believe he should come here so we can mercilessly pick apart his RP. I love picking apart RPs.

How about no?

That ended up sounding malicious, didn't it? Balls.

[Agritum]

I believe he should come here so we can mercilessly pick apart his RP. I love picking apart RPs.

How about no?

Yeah.

Rather....we could tell him to be a bit less defeatist and be prepared to wait more than hour for some apps.

[Abserdia]

How about no?

That ended up sounding malicious, didn't it? Balls.

First people hating on my signups now THAT!
Wow thanks NS!

[The Empire of Pretantia]

That ended up sounding malicious, didn't it? Balls.

First people hating on my signups now THAT!
Wow thanks NS!

I'm sorry for sounding like an ass, but I have to admit that your RP isn't really that well-written.

[Zarkenis Ultima]

I'll just point out, picking on a roleplay or its author instead of offering advice or helping isn't what this thread was made for.

HELP ME!

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Please provide as much detail as possible.
What do you need help with: To make the RP more interesting. I think its a great idea just boring, I would love for this to succeed as I have been planning this for some time now. Just look over the OOC and give some suggestions as to make it more appealing to the average man.

Links, if requesting someone to look into your RP's IC/OOC: [url]http://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?f=31&t=312434
[/url]

Please leave this hashtag in place: #Mentorhelp

Well, it does seem like an interesting idea, but perhaps there simply aren't enough people wanting to participate in a Legend of Zelda-based roleplay out there. However, if you want to give the RP some detail, you could describe how the different civilizations of Termina have developed between the game's events and the RP's present, for example. Maybe the world itself could have changed a fair bit as well.

HELP ME!

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Please provide as much detail as possible.
What do you need help with:Covering up plotholes.

The world of Residen, a world of complete peace. The world is a perfect utopia, with no one complaining at all. Crime is non-existent, no one has pain, and no one is ever sad. The people are completely contempt with life. This is because of a special task force known as "Destiny", who maintain the peace and order of the world. These agents are commissioned and ran by the head of the organization, Doublo Ross, a man obsessed with action. Doublo is believed to have Hero's Syndrome, a mental condition creating an intense desire to constantly "be the hero". The rumor emerged when a group of mercenaries set off a bomb that destroyed the largest tower on the planet, the Global Banking Tower, taking away the perfect utopia that Destiny created.

These mercenaries were clearly well-armed and well-funded, but no one in the organization could figure out how, but Doublo was completely enthusiastic about the arrival of a group destroying the perfect utopia. He seemed like it was a blessing, immediately being the first one to arrive at the scene of the crime. Once there, he gave nothing but implied praise to the terrorists. He seemed to know they were going to attack because he had a full report on the situation quickly also, recognizing them as the Ronnus Cunos.

Links, if requesting someone to look into your RP's IC/OOC:

Please leave this hashtag in place: #Mentorhelp

For what it's worth, I don't see any plotholes in those two paragraphs you posted. Many things are unexplained and ambiguous, but precisely because of this, nothing seems contradictory.

[Kernan]

I'll just point out, picking on a roleplay or its author instead of offering advice or helping isn't what this thread was made for.

HELP ME!

---

Please provide as much detail as possible.
What do you need help with: To make the RP more interesting. I think its a great idea just boring, I would love for this to succeed as I have been planning this for some time now. Just look over the OOC and give some suggestions as to make it more appealing to the average man.

Links, if requesting someone to look into your RP's IC/OOC: [url]http://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?f=31&t=312434
[/url]

Please leave this hashtag in place: #Mentorhelp

Well, it does seem like an interesting idea, but perhaps there simply aren't enough people wanting to participate in a Legend of Zelda-based roleplay out there. However, if you want to give the RP some detail, you could describe how the different civilizations of Termina have developed between the game's events and the RP's present, for example. Maybe the world itself could have changed a fair bit as well.

Thank you

[Zarkenis Ultima]

I'll just point out, picking on a roleplay or its author instead of offering advice or helping isn't what this thread was made for.



Well, it does seem like an interesting idea, but perhaps there simply aren't enough people wanting to participate in a Legend of Zelda-based roleplay out there. However, if you want to give the RP some detail, you could describe how the different civilizations of Termina have developed between the game's events and the RP's present, for example. Maybe the world itself could have changed a fair bit as well.

Thank you

No problem.

Since several centuries have passed, you could add some flavor describing some important figures of the RPs present. You could also vary the tech level, unless you want it to remain just the same as it was in the game, which isn't very hard to justify considering the whole thing seems to be in medieval stasis anyway.

In any case, good luck.

[Abserdia]

I'll just point out, picking on a roleplay or its author instead of offering advice or helping isn't what this thread was made for.



Well, it does seem like an interesting idea, but perhaps there simply aren't enough people wanting to participate in a Legend of Zelda-based roleplay out there. However, if you want to give the RP some detail, you could describe how the different civilizations of Termina have developed between the game's events and the RP's present, for example. Maybe the world itself could have changed a fair bit as well.

Thank you

I'm an LoZ fan so i'm definitely going to join!
LOZ GAMERS UNITE!

[Kernan]

Thank you

No problem.

Since several centuries have passed, you could add some flavor describing some important figures of the RPs present. You could also vary the tech level, unless you want it to remain just the same as it was in the game, which isn't very hard to justify considering the whole thing seems to be in medieval stasis anyway.

In any case, good luck.

http://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?f=31&t=312434&p=21746658#p21746658

There, done. Could you look it over once again?

[Zarkenis Ultima]

No problem.

Since several centuries have passed, you could add some flavor describing some important figures of the RPs present. You could also vary the tech level, unless you want it to remain just the same as it was in the game, which isn't very hard to justify considering the whole thing seems to be in medieval stasis anyway.

In any case, good luck.

http://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?f=31&t=312434&p=21746658#p21746658

There, done. Could you look it over once again?

It's improved quite a bit, and the story is better built and more interesting. I'd say you could organize your information better and further elaborate on the different areas and races (Some people might not know everything about Termina despite being familiar with TLoZ and Majora's Mask, not to mention it makes things look better if you go into detail), but you're doing well so far, I believe.

This thread might help you in regards to formatting and organization.

[Lavan Tiri]

RP INTEREST AND FEEDBACK REQUEST

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Please provide as much detail as possible.
RP's Overarching Concept: One year after what might be the most devastating event in the history of the multiverse, a group of "wizards" have to help rebuild what remains of the Earth.
Genre/s:Dystopia, Sci-Fan, Sci-Fi, urban fantasy
Character or Faction Based:Character.
Detailed Description:

(Image)

That, friends, is the defining trait of humanity. We keep fighting, even when there is no hope, when we know we cannot win, when our enemy is our inner self,

or a god.

Thabo Addan, Councillor of the Metaphysical Guild, eighteen minutes before he died at the hand of Beelzebub.

At the Origin, there was only the Is. The Is was and is and will be the collective energies of the Multiverse, an omnipotent, omniscient spirit. From Itself, the Is created the Universe, stars and planets and galaxies. It created many other spirits and gods, but those which were most important and dear to Its heart were Jehovah and His brother, Satan, Personifications of Good Order and Good Chaos. For millennia, the Brothers reigned over the world of Earth, watching and guarding its people, the Human race. And they made some of these humans special, given powers over Chaos and order, over reality itself. These people were known as gods and sorcerers and spirits over the years, but we know them as Metaphysiks.


And there was peace.

But this peace did not last, for into a poor farming village was born a healthy, robust boy, named Beelzebub. Beelzebub was a Metaphysik, with unprecedented control over Chaos, and he joined the Order at a young age. But Beelzebub's heart was dark, and he was not like his father, Satan, who was Good, for he had a dark, evil soul. As he grew, so did his powers, until the lad could manipulate the Earthfiber itself.


And, guided by his black heart, he attacked, rending Pangea into seven continents, and killing many Metaphysiks, before the Is intervened and banished him to wander the Multiverse.

Beelzebub, though, did not see this as a punishment. For aeons, the Render stalked the Multiverse, devouring worlds and their energy, giving himself more power, and by December 13, 2014, he'd whittled down the Multiverse to one world.

Our world.

The Destroyer attacked Earth, as nations and armies fell before it, only the Metaphysiks resisted, the whole Guild coming together, in the Amazonian jungle, to battle Beelzebub. Over a million Metas took the field that day, and only six hundred lived. We stood, in the wet heat, for only a few minutes. Then, the swirling red storm that heralded Beelzebub's approach came upon us, parting to reveal....

A boy. About sixteen, with long, dyed-green-and-purple hair, pale skin, and wearing a black hoodie. But it was the eyes. They were blue, and danced with madness, as this boy spread his hands, and the storm rushed forth, and the slaughter began. Screams and shouts rent the jungle, as each of us battled a duplicate of Beelzebub. I don't know how long we fought, screaming and shouting and dying, until the storm subsided. Beelzebub simply stood there, looking behind us. As one, the Metaphysiks turned, and saw Them. Satan and Jehovah, with a young woman standing between them. I knew her: Ellis, a young German lawyer, from Frankfurt. As we watched, the Devil and God became pillars of blue and gold light, respectively. These pillars swirled into Ellis, who glowed with white light for a moment, then she attacked the Breaker, flinging him into deep space, slowly becoming the avatar of Balance. While they fought, the sky glowed white and red, blocking out the stars. None of us saw the fight, but the Is granted us a vision of the end.

Ellis, battered and bruised, faced Beelzebub, floating in the void. The Evil One lunged at her, but Ellis caught him, and with a blaze of white light, flung him away. While Beelzebub raced at her, the brave, brave woman found a way to end him for good.

She turned a nearby planet into antimatter. With another blast, they collided, Ellis forcing Beelzebub and herself to crash into the sphere. For a moment, the sky on Earth went dark, before blazing with white light.

.

Now? The fuck-uppage of the Earth is immense, and guess who gets to fix it? That's right, the characters!

Need Help With: Interest, any suggestions are welcome.

Please leave this hashtag in place: #Mentorhelp

[Zarkenis Ultima]

RP INTEREST AND FEEDBACK REQUEST

---

Please provide as much detail as possible.
RP's Overarching Concept: One year after what might be the most devastating event in the history of the multiverse, a group of "wizards" have to help rebuild what remains of the Earth.
Genre/s:Dystopia, Sci-Fan, Sci-Fi, urban fantasy
Character or Faction Based:Character.
Detailed Description:

(Image)

That, friends, is the defining trait of humanity. We keep fighting, even when there is no hope, when we know we cannot win, when our enemy is our inner self,

or a god.

Thabo Addan, Councillor of the Metaphysical Guild, eighteen minutes before he died at the hand of Beelzebub.

At the Origin, there was only the Is. The Is was and is and will be the collective energies of the Multiverse, an omnipotent, omniscient spirit. From Itself, the Is created the Universe, stars and planets and galaxies. It created many other spirits and gods, but those which were most important and dear to Its heart were Jehovah and His brother, Satan, Personifications of Good Order and Good Chaos. For millennia, the Brothers reigned over the world of Earth, watching and guarding its people, the Human race. And they made some of these humans special, given powers over Chaos and order, over reality itself. These people were known as gods and sorcerers and spirits over the years, but we know them as Metaphysiks.


And there was peace.

But this peace did not last, for into a poor farming village was born a healthy, robust boy, named Beelzebub. Beelzebub was a Metaphysik, with unprecedented control over Chaos, and he joined the Order at a young age. But Beelzebub's heart was dark, and he was not like his father, Satan, who was Good, for he had a dark, evil soul. As he grew, so did his powers, until the lad could manipulate the Earthfiber itself.


And, guided by his black heart, he attacked, rending Pangea into seven continents, and killing many Metaphysiks, before the Is intervened and banished him to wander the Multiverse.

Beelzebub, though, did not see this as a punishment. For aeons, the Render stalked the Multiverse, devouring worlds and their energy, giving himself more power, and by December 13, 2014, he'd whittled down the Multiverse to one world.

Our world.

The Destroyer attacked Earth, as nations and armies fell before it, only the Metaphysiks resisted, the whole Guild coming together, in the Amazonian jungle, to battle Beelzebub. Over a million Metas took the field that day, and only six hundred lived. We stood, in the wet heat, for only a few minutes. Then, the swirling red storm that heralded Beelzebub's approach came upon us, parting to reveal....

A boy. About sixteen, with long, dyed-green-and-purple hair, pale skin, and wearing a black hoodie. But it was the eyes. They were blue, and danced with madness, as this boy spread his hands, and the storm rushed forth, and the slaughter began. Screams and shouts rent the jungle, as each of us battled a duplicate of Beelzebub. I don't know how long we fought, screaming and shouting and dying, until the storm subsided. Beelzebub simply stood there, looking behind us. As one, the Metaphysiks turned, and saw Them. Satan and Jehovah, with a young woman standing between them. I knew her: Ellis, a young German lawyer, from Frankfurt. As we watched, the Devil and God became pillars of blue and gold light, respectively. These pillars swirled into Ellis, who glowed with white light for a moment, then she attacked the Breaker, flinging him into deep space, slowly becoming the avatar of Balance. While they fought, the sky glowed white and red, blocking out the stars. None of us saw the fight, but the Is granted us a vision of the end.

Ellis, battered and bruised, faced Beelzebub, floating in the void. The Evil One lunged at her, but Ellis caught him, and with a blaze of white light, flung him away. While Beelzebub raced at her, the brave, brave woman found a way to end him for good.

She turned a nearby planet into antimatter. With another blast, they collided, Ellis forcing Beelzebub and herself to crash into the sphere. For a moment, the sky on Earth went dark, before blazing with white light.

.

Now? The fuck-uppage of the Earth is immense, and guess who gets to fix it? That's right, the characters!

Need Help With: Interest, any suggestions are welcome.

Please leave this hashtag in place: #Mentorhelp

Well, that is definitely an interesting backstory you have there, but you don't seem to have much more than that. You could add some information to answer some questions. What will the characters be doing? How would they come together, if they will? What is Earth like one year after Beelzebub's attack (nations, geography, etc)? What's the Guild like? What kind of powers can the characters have?

Hopefully that helps.

[Lavan Tiri]

Well, that is definitely an interesting backstory you have there, but you don't seem to have much more than that. You could add some information to answer some questions. What will the characters be doing? How would they come together, if they will? What is Earth like one year after Beelzebub's attack (nations, geography, etc)? What's the Guild like? What kind of powers can the characters have?

Hopefully that helps.

The OOC is actually in progress now. It'll be up by Monday.

[Zarkenis Ultima]

Well, that is definitely an interesting backstory you have there, but you don't seem to have much more than that. You could add some information to answer some questions. What will the characters be doing? How would they come together, if they will? What is Earth like one year after Beelzebub's attack (nations, geography, etc)? What's the Guild like? What kind of powers can the characters have?

Hopefully that helps.

The OOC is actually in progress now. It'll be up by Monday.

Ah.

Well then. Good luck.

[Alleniana]

huh, movie?

King Kong (2005)

oh, sorry, wrong conversation

[Zeinbrad]

Well, I'm in a dilemma.

I have an idea, that I believe some people (Const and Zark for example) would enjoy and I think the chances of it succeeding here would be better than the guild.

Thing is, it's in the Gaiaverse, specifically the supernatural part of it and it goes with the mortal part of it to the point I can't make an new world without it being the Gaiaverse with a name change.

God dammit.