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Some of my lyrics...

Postby North Wiedna » Mon Oct 18, 2010 5:55 pm

ALL A PART OF THE GAME

Sometimes it's all just a part of the game,
Staying behind, it's all the same
Staying ahead, life will change
Staying in the pack, with smallpox and mange

Life will kill you, but life can't die
Nothing to stop you from getting that high
Nothing to burn and nothing to shed
Stop getting angry, and you'll end up dead

First got the job at thirty
Working man does it real dirty
Worked for the carman till sixtyfive
Gunned down at point blank so it could survive

Sometimes it's all just a part of the game,
Staying behind, it's all the same
Staying ahead, life will change
Staying in the pack, with smallpox and mange

Follow the leader is all very good,
But, soon, the engine shuts down under the hood
We'll pay you more for one more work hour
Instead of sitting at house, life devoured.

Black suits find out, put out the hit
Tired of all of this bullshit
Start up the rockets and light the fuse
They'll gladly take away your power to chose

Sometimes it's all just a part of the game,
Staying behind, it's all the same
Staying ahead, life will change
Staying in the pack, with smallpox and mange

Shoot up the neighborhood with complete disregard
Life in these times is too damn hard
Everyone's walking round battered and scarred
Gotta learn to play the right card


LOW WATER TIME

Low water time
when the plants show
when the fish sleep
where the sound runs

In the puddles
by the tidepools
in tidy rows
one by one

There's a shining sun in the distant sky
Sitting barefoot in the grass
Looking towards the open sea
Eternal peace at last

Feel the windblow
In your hair
In the air
Passing by

Low water time
when the plants show
when the fish sleep
where the sound runs

Sleeping under an oak tree
Beneath the starlit sky
But, no, this can't last forever
Time must sometimes die


I'm no good at writing music, but I'm good at lyrics, IMO. Thoughts?
I am not at all interested in immortality, only in the taste of tea.

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Postby Conoga » Tue Oct 19, 2010 12:52 pm

Better than mine.

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Postby Conserative Morality » Tue Oct 19, 2010 1:27 pm

Not bad at all.
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Postby North Wiedna » Tue Oct 19, 2010 2:40 pm

Conserative Morality wrote:Not bad at all.

Thanks.
Conoga wrote:Better than mine.

You write lyrics? :lol:
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Postby Conoga » Tue Oct 19, 2010 2:49 pm

North Wiedna wrote:
Conoga wrote:Better than mine.

You write lyrics? :lol:

Let me rephrase. Better than my non-existent lyrics.

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Postby North Wiedna » Tue Oct 19, 2010 2:52 pm

Conoga wrote:
North Wiedna wrote:
You write lyrics? :lol:

Let me rephrase. Better than my non-existent lyrics.

Okay, still better than something.
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Postby New new nebraska » Tue Oct 19, 2010 2:58 pm

Pretty good. Wish I knew how they were supposed to be sung but you really can't put that so...
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Postby North Wiedna » Tue Oct 19, 2010 3:00 pm

New new nebraska wrote:Pretty good. Wish I knew how they were supposed to be sung but you really can't put that so...

I wrote the first one in more a Roger Waters style, I was thinking of David Gilmour singing it.

Second one is meant to be a bit jazzier.
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Postby Unitopolis » Tue Oct 19, 2010 3:03 pm

Your first one is good, when you talk about a dead-end life
But the second put me too sleep like going under the knife
Low water time; Bad rhymes and words are rife
But the first left me speechless like it was Jay-Z's wife

But seriously who cares about plants and shit
I'd rather hear about a guy whose boss is a bitch
But he doesn't resort to my level and call him names
He knows how to play it's all just part of the game

Now I'm telling you to keep it up but drop the plants
Keep doing what you're doing and you'll be dropping your pants
For a stripper, gonna give you, a private dance
And when your rich and famous don't forget to shake my hand

My verdict: First is good, second is bad :)
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Postby Mad hatters in jeans » Tue Oct 19, 2010 3:09 pm

seems okay i guess, imho getting good drummer or singer is the real challange of a song.

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Postby North Wiedna » Tue Oct 19, 2010 3:17 pm

Mad hatters in jeans wrote:seems okay i guess, imho getting good drummer or singer is the real challange of a song.

I'm a good drummer...

Okay, I kinda suck, but it's not my fault...
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Postby Meryuma » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:08 pm

North Wiedna, I like both your songs. Don't listen to that guy attacking the second one.
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Postby North Wiedna » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:12 pm

Can I ask you all to refrain posting your lyrics? I kinda wanted this to be my personal thread... :/
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Postby Conoga » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:15 pm

North Wiedna wrote:Can I ask you all to refrain posting your lyrics? I kinda wanted this to be my personal thread... :/


I find it a bit rude. Considering it says 'my lyrics' and not 'your lyrics'..

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Postby Meryuma » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:17 pm

Sorry. I was just trying to broaden the focus of the thread if you want. I'll take down my lyrics and start my own thread for "post your song lyrics".
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Potarius wrote:
Neo Arcad wrote:Gravity is a natural phenomenon by which physical bodies attract with a force proportional to their mass.


In layman's terms, orgy time.


Niur wrote: my soul has no soul.


Saint Clair Island wrote:The English language sucks. From now on, I will refer to the second definition of sexual as "fucktacular."


Trotskylvania wrote:Alternatively, we could go on an epic quest to Plato's Cave to find the legendary artifact, Ockham's Razor.



Norstal wrote:Gunpowder Plot: America.

Meryuma: "Well, I just hope these hyperboles don't...

*puts on sunglasses*

blow out of proportions."

YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

...so here's your future

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Postby North Wiedna » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:19 pm

Conoga wrote:
North Wiedna wrote:Can I ask you all to refrain posting your lyrics? I kinda wanted this to be my personal thread... :/


I find it a bit rude. Considering it says 'my lyrics' and not 'your lyrics'..

Yeah. A bit. Though, I must say, you're all very good.

Here's one that's not quite done, and I don't quite like the way it's turning out, but I'd like some creative input on the song. It's a ballad, supposed to be backed by a psychedelic rock or an acid rock band.

The Strawman looks up
At the purple sky
Everyone knows
He's the stupidest guy

"If rainy days were relevant
The famine would pass
And all of this torture
Would be in our past"

The people stared at Strawman,
A look on their face,
Of disgust, and anger,
At his stupid race.

"You idiot, we know.
We've known for a while,
that if the rain comes,
the people shall smile!"

The Strawman was crushed,
His dreams went astray,
"If I can't have their audience,
They won't survive next day!"
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Postby United Gackle » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:19 pm

Would be better if it was Metal style xD
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Postby Conoga » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:20 pm

United Gackle wrote:Would be better if it was Metal style xD

Or Psychedelic Rock.

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Postby South Waxhaw » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:20 pm

Great songs. You don't seem to have a place you're trying to go however, so the lyrics don't mean a whole lot.

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Postby Conoga » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:22 pm

South Waxhaw wrote:Great songs. You don't seem to have a place you're trying to go however, so the lyrics don't mean a whole lot.

Yet "Bad Romance" does?

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Postby Meryuma » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:22 pm

Conoga wrote: Or Psychedelic Rock.


North Wiedna wrote: supposed to be backed by a psychedelic rock or an acid rock band.


Read closer next time.
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Potarius wrote:
Neo Arcad wrote:Gravity is a natural phenomenon by which physical bodies attract with a force proportional to their mass.


In layman's terms, orgy time.


Niur wrote: my soul has no soul.


Saint Clair Island wrote:The English language sucks. From now on, I will refer to the second definition of sexual as "fucktacular."


Trotskylvania wrote:Alternatively, we could go on an epic quest to Plato's Cave to find the legendary artifact, Ockham's Razor.



Norstal wrote:Gunpowder Plot: America.

Meryuma: "Well, I just hope these hyperboles don't...

*puts on sunglasses*

blow out of proportions."

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Postby North Wiedna » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:23 pm

Conoga wrote:
South Waxhaw wrote:Great songs. You don't seem to have a place you're trying to go however, so the lyrics don't mean a whole lot.

Yet "Bad Romance" does?

oh snap.
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Postby Conoga » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:23 pm

Meryuma wrote:
Conoga wrote: Or Psychedelic Rock.


North Wiedna wrote: supposed to be backed by a psychedelic rock or an acid rock band.


Read closer next time.

Meh. Ninja'd.

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Postby South Waxhaw » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:26 pm

Conoga wrote:
South Waxhaw wrote:Great songs. You don't seem to have a place you're trying to go however, so the lyrics don't mean a whole lot.

Yet "Bad Romance" does?

I don't think I said that... :unsure:

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Postby Conoga » Tue Oct 19, 2010 5:27 pm

South Waxhaw wrote:
Conoga wrote:Yet "Bad Romance" does?

I don't think I said that... :unsure:

Just saying. If "Bad Romance" can reach the top 10 internationally, I'm sure he could sell that song.

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