Star Wars: This is The Way

[Imperial Rifta]

It’s pretty good. I liked what you did with them. That must have taken a lot of focus. How many hours was that in total?

[Christian Confederation]

Nice can't wait. You haven't become magnetic have you?

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I've been seeing videos of people who got the vaccine become magnetic. I don't trust most things people try to force pn me but I especially don't trust something the government tries to force on me. But all that doesn't matter here, here is for Star Wars.
Your rewrite was great.

[Lady Victory]

Decent enough stuff at least, can’t see I really see any improvements over the existing movies (other than coherent theming, though your’s seems principally in the lack of it).

Do you think you could elaborate on this a bit? I enjoy constructive criticism. It helps with future improvements.

I haven't had this fun thinking about Star Wars since the sequel trilogy came out! Thank you so much for this feeling of joy. : )

Thanks!

It’s pretty good. I liked what you did with them. That must have taken a lot of focus. How many hours was that in total?

Geez, I have no idea. Maybe 14 hours total?

Your rewrite was great.

Thank you!

[Ameriganastan]

Just a reminder that this thread isn't for plugging your Star Wars fanfiction.

[Andsed]

Just a reminder that this thread isn't for plugging your Star Wars fanfiction.

I mean it’s the Star Wars thread where we discuss Star Wars. I would say detailing the changes you would have made and what you wished a part of Star Wars fits into that. And since LV put it into the spoilers you can pretty easily ignore it.

[Lord Dominator]

Decent enough stuff at least, can’t see I really see any improvements over the existing movies (other than coherent theming, though your’s seems principally in the lack of it).

Do you think you could elaborate on this a bit? I enjoy constructive criticism. It helps with future improvements.

Much of it runs towards the combo between my not having many problems with the ST, so not seeing your fixes as needed + the general writing doesn’t appeal to me (ie, it’s entirely description without dialogue and such). Also, too much Phasma, not enough Rey

[Lady Victory]

Just a reminder that this thread isn't for plugging your Star Wars fanfiction.

Just a reminder to stay mad.

Do you think you could elaborate on this a bit? I enjoy constructive criticism. It helps with future improvements.

Much of it runs towards the combo between my not having many problems with the ST, so not seeing your fixes as needed + the general writing doesn’t appeal to me (ie, it’s entirely description without dialogue and such). Also, too much Phasma, not enough Rey

Look, if you actually like the Sequels as they are then there's just no hope for you. Sorry.

[Ameriganastan]

Just a reminder to stay mad.

Not mad. Annoyed. Annoyed that you've taken over the thread with this "I can write the movies better" nonsense.

[Sincluda]

To LV:

I loved it! I like the choice theme that played throughout Finn's narrative and that every character had their own story that taught its own lesson. I could criticize the fact that we only saw the villains when in conflict with the protagonists (only a matter of perspective really, so eh) and Rey's general absence, but I'm no film critic! Besides, all I care about is that you had fun doing it. Creative projects are awesome.

[Fedel]

Just a reminder that this thread isn't for plugging your Star Wars fanfiction.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13399666/1/Blackbird

[New haven america]

I now feel the sudden and unexplainable urge to post my Wookie/Hutt slash fiction.

[Fedel]

I now feel the sudden and unexplainable urge to post my Wookie/Hutt slash fiction.

Did you know Hutts are actually strong and decently fast. They can sweep away dozens of people with their tails.

[New haven america]

I now feel the sudden and unexplainable urge to post my Wookie/Hutt slash fiction.

Did you know Hutts are actually strong and decently fast. They can sweep away dozens of people with their tails.

That's not all they can do.

[Lord Dominator]

I now feel the sudden and unexplainable urge to post my Wookie/Hutt slash fiction.

Did you know Hutts are actually strong and decently fast. They can sweep away dozens of people with their tails.

This is honestly immersion breaking

[The Hazar Amisnery]

I now feel the sudden and unexplainable urge to post my Wookie/Hutt slash fiction.

Chewbacca and Jabba?

[Imperial Rifta]

I now feel the sudden and unexplainable urge to post my Wookie/Hutt slash fiction.

Chewbacca and Jabba?

No, it should be Tarfful and Ziro

[Fedel]

Did you know Hutts are actually strong and decently fast. They can sweep away dozens of people with their tails.

This is honestly immersion breaking

I just enjoy the minutia. :>

[Lord Dominator]

This is honestly immersion breaking

I just enjoy the minutia. :>

No, not anything like that, just that Hutts are capable of that kind of fast movement

[Fedel]

I just enjoy the minutia. :>

No, not anything like that, just that Hutts are capable of that kind of fast movement

Apparently they're more akin to snakes in that they're mostly coiled muscles as opposed to a more slug-like creature which they resemble.

[Lady Victory]

Just a reminder to stay mad.

Not mad. Annoyed. Annoyed that you've taken over the thread with this "I can write the movies better" nonsense.

So... mad, then. Gotcha.

To LV:

I loved it! I like the choice theme that played throughout Finn's narrative and that every character had their own story that taught its own lesson. I could criticize the fact that we only saw the villains when in conflict with the protagonists (only a matter of perspective really, so eh) and Rey's general absence, but I'm no film critic! Besides, all I care about is that you had fun doing it. Creative projects are awesome.

Tbh I didn't really know what to do with Rey and I guess it shows. There was too much focus on her in the ST that I needed to shift some of that focus to other people who didn't get enough spotlight. Frankly, Finn should've been the lead IMO which is why I tried to generally center the focus around him. But finding the right balance for Rey was difficult as several important characters were outright neglected in the Sequels just to give Rey more time to be spectacularly perfect and super important, which was just ridiculous.

Your critique that the villain's rarely appeared outside conflict/interaction with the protags is actually a good one. I'll try and take that into consideration for the future; I do like it when we get to see what the bad guys are up to.

[Lord Dominator]

No, not anything like that, just that Hutts are capable of that kind of fast movement

Apparently their more akin to snakes in that they're mostly coiled muscles as opposed to a more slug-like creature which they resemble.

See, I prefer my childhood musings of assuming they actually can’t move under their own power, which is clrly a much more reasonable take

[Fedel]

Apparently their more akin to snakes in that they're mostly coiled muscles as opposed to a more slug-like creature which they resemble.

See, I prefer my childhood musings of assuming they actually can’t move under their own power, which is clrly a much more reasonable take

And far less terrifying. : P

[Ameriganastan]

Apparently their more akin to snakes in that they're mostly coiled muscles as opposed to a more slug-like creature which they resemble.

See, I prefer my childhood musings of assuming they actually can’t move under their own power, which is clrly a much more reasonable take

I mean, I assume not all Hutts are lazy bastards like Jabba. They wouldn't be much of a crime empire if they were all too fat to move.

[Imperial Rifta]

I was watching ”Rising Malevolence”. CW Season 1, Episode 2 and a Droid was humming the Imperial March. The droid predicted the future. I just thought this was hilarious and you guys might want to know, even though I’m sure most of you have watched all of TCW before.

12:05 is the timestamp

[Tarsonis]

See, I prefer my childhood musings of assuming they actually can’t move under their own power, which is clrly a much more reasonable take

I mean, I assume not all Hutts are lazy bastards like Jabba. They wouldn't be much of a crime empire if they were all too fat to move.

Jabba was only too fat to move in rotj because of the limitations if the practical effects. In every other appearance he moves around just fine.