Writing Discussion II

[Prusslandia]

I've been thinking on writing something from the perspective of a hannibal pecter esque murder, during the characters youth.

[Zeinbrad]

So I was at a writing group with a bunch of writers (including a handwriting analyst.), most of them seeming to be published writers. They said my writing style was lyrical and I want to know what you guys think.

Prompt-Favorite game to play.
The game changes, much like life, depending on mood and ability. A blind cannot play catch, the deaf cannon play Simon says. The legless cannot kick and the armless cannot throw, bound by a chain, natures chain. While the verbal scream and shot, the mute are left silent in their chase.

Prompt-Memories of a piece of furniture in your childhood home.
Comfort, that is what she felt in that old couch that she lied on in her final years. Her laying there, knitting or shaving, has been engraved in my memory since my first free thought. Hardly a day passed without her lying on that couch, sleeping or knitting, until she accepted his cold embrace and left one last time.

[Bezombia]

So I was at a writing group with a bunch of writers (including a handwriting analyst.), most of them seeming to be published writers. They said my writing style was lyrical and I want to know what you guys think.

Prompt-Favorite game to play.
The game changes, much like life, depending on mood and ability. A blind cannot play catch, the deaf cannon play Simon says. The legless cannot kick and the armless cannot throw, bound by a chain, natures chain. While the verbal scream and shot, the mute are left silent in their chase.

Prompt-Memories of a piece of furniture in your childhood home.
Comfort, that is what she felt in that old couch that she lied on in her final years. Her laying there, knitting or shaving, has been engraved in my memory since my first free thought. Hardly a day passed without her lying on that couch, sleeping or knitting, until she accepted his cold embrace and left one last time.

Only thing I see is grammatical errors.

[Claanyad]

So I was at a writing group with a bunch of writers (including a handwriting analyst.), most of them seeming to be published writers. They said my writing style was lyrical and I want to know what you guys think.

Prompt-Favorite game to play.
The game changes, much like life, depending on mood and ability. A blind cannot play catch, the deaf cannon play Simon says. The legless cannot kick and the armless cannot throw, bound by a chain, natures chain. While the verbal scream and shot, the mute are left silent in their chase.

Prompt-Memories of a piece of furniture in your childhood home.
Comfort, that is what she felt in that old couch that she lied on in her final years. Her laying there, knitting or shaving, has been engraved in my memory since my first free thought. Hardly a day passed without her lying on that couch, sleeping or knitting, until she accepted his cold embrace and left one last time.

While I will echo Bezombia's remark, I will add that the writing style does sound rhythmic. It flows easily from the page, and sort of seems a bit Tolkienesque. Lyrical - I'm not sure. Have you ever tried poetry?

[The New World Oceania]

So I was at a writing group with a bunch of writers (including a handwriting analyst.), most of them seeming to be published writers. They said my writing style was lyrical and I want to know what you guys think.

Prompt-Favorite game to play.
The game changes, much like life, depending on mood and ability. A blind cannot play catch, the deaf cannon play Simon says. The legless cannot kick and the armless cannot throw, bound by a chain, natures chain. While the verbal scream and shot, the mute are left silent in their chase.

Prompt-Memories of a piece of furniture in your childhood home.
Comfort, that is what she felt in that old couch that she lied on in her final years. Her laying there, knitting or shaving, has been engraved in my memory since my first free thought. Hardly a day passed without her lying on that couch, sleeping or knitting, until she accepted his cold embrace and left one last time.

I'm not in a critiquing state of mind right now, but I definitely want to put my hand out to you for going to a writing group. It's always extremely helpful to be physically around other writers. Hell, that's all an MFA is, if we're facing the truth.

[Conserative Morality]

I'm not in a critiquing state of mind right now, but I definitely want to put my hand out to you for going to a writing group. It's always extremely helpful to be physically around other writers. Hell, that's all an MFA is, if we're facing the truth.

I found every writing group I've been in too softball for my tastes.

[Luminesa]

I'm not in a critiquing state of mind right now, but I definitely want to put my hand out to you for going to a writing group. It's always extremely helpful to be physically around other writers. Hell, that's all an MFA is, if we're facing the truth.

I found every writing group I've been in too softball for my tastes.

I'm my hardest critic, most times.

[Serbian Orthodox Church]

I haven't expressed to my family my intention to write a book yet, because I've never really found a good subject. I need your help. Give me a helpful subject, I beg you.

Why do you want to write if you have nothing to say?

I feel the need to write since 3 years ago, but my life didn't allow me finding a good subject. Alas, I could find a good and realistic alternative ancient story.

[Serbian Orthodox Church]

Why do you want to write if you have nothing to say?

Writing isn't always about the content. Some people, myself included, care more about the actual writing (choosing words and imagery, adhering to formal constraints, producing a particular emotional effect, etc.) than about the ideas expressed. If it weren't for us, there would be far fewer poetic translations, retellings, and the like.

That being said, I think the attraction of "writing a book," as opposed to just writing in general, is more likely to be content-centric, so your question still makes sense.

Give me a helpful subject, I beg you.

Have you considered doing a retelling of one of your favourite mythological/folkloric stories?

Heracles, Iliad or Odyssey. I haven't thought of it.

[Vozt Yurkova]

Have you considered doing a retelling of one of your favourite mythological/folkloric stories?

Heracles, Iliad or Odyssey. I haven't thought of it.

I still have the treatment for a street racing film based on the Quest for the Golden Fleece lying around somewhere. It's working title?

Jason and the Cargonauts

[Serbian Orthodox Church]

Heracles, Iliad or Odyssey. I haven't thought of it.

I still have the treatment for a street racing film based on the Quest for the Golden Fleece lying around somewhere. It's working title?

Jason and the Cargonauts

That's an lol from me. I can still make imaginary worlds, but imaginary world's names sound ridiculous in Greek.

[Nazi Flower Power]

It seems like once I get going on a story I just can't stop... A story that I thought was going to be 2000 or 3000 words is now up to 4800. It's a back-up for the short story contest because my first attempt went over 6000 words, and I'm starting to worry that this one might also run too long, at least in the first draft. I wasn't worrying about length when I wrote the earlier parts, so there is probably some fluff that I can cut if needed. I just don't know how it got to be this long...

I also realized that my original plan for the ending doesn't make any historical sense. For some reason I thought the USS Monitor sank before the CSS Virginia got burned, but it is actually the other way. Derp.

[Armeia]

*sigh*

The Armeia novel isn't really going as planned, it's turning out more to be short stories connected to a story with a central plot, I don't think it'll be very successful. I still have some ideas though, but a problem is that in Armeia the canon can change quickly and mess things up. I'm considering making a novel about a country that's fictional and sort of the same, but it would be easier to write because of non fluid canon. Would anyone even want to read a story about life in a fictional country though? It's kind of a strange idea.

[Nordengrund]

*sigh*

The Armeia novel isn't really going as planned, it's turning out more to be short stories connected to a story with a central plot, I don't think it'll be very successful. I still have some ideas though, but a problem is that in Armeia the canon can change quickly and mess things up. I'm considering making a novel about a country that's fictional and sort of the same, but it would be easier to write because of non fluid canon. Would anyone even want to read a story about life in a fictional country though? It's kind of a strange idea.

A lot of stories go in a different direction than planned. Don't be afraid of it, let it do its own thing. The new path may end up being better than what you originally intended.

I have similar ideas with a story where each chapter are shorter stories that are connected to one larger story.

As for the fictional country, I am planning a slice of life fantasy story that just explores the daily life of its inhabitants.

[Nazi Flower Power]

Why am I having so much trouble writing anything shorter than 6000 words? Dammit!

*sigh*

The Armeia novel isn't really going as planned, it's turning out more to be short stories connected to a story with a central plot, I don't think it'll be very successful. I still have some ideas though, but a problem is that in Armeia the canon can change quickly and mess things up. I'm considering making a novel about a country that's fictional and sort of the same, but it would be easier to write because of non fluid canon. Would anyone even want to read a story about life in a fictional country though? It's kind of a strange idea.

There are lots of novels about life in fictional countries.

[Serbian Orthodox Church]

Why am I having so much trouble writing anything shorter than 6000 words? Dammit!

Because you are an upcoming successfull novelist. The ideas flow from your mind, you are a genius. Help me now.

[Respubliko de Libereco]

Why am I having so much trouble writing anything shorter than 6000 words? Dammit!

Is there a single scene within your story that could, with a little tweaking and expansion, stand on its own?

[The New World Oceania]

Omit needless words, NFP.

[Nazi Flower Power]

Why am I having so much trouble writing anything shorter than 6000 words? Dammit!

Is there a single scene within your story that could, with a little tweaking and expansion, stand on its own?

There are two different stories. Both can be cut down to less than 6000 words and still have a coherent story. It's just a question of doing it and still having something I am happy with.

You know, I had started to type up a rambling post about this, but I just had an idea. You might be getting a serious story to judge rather than the CSS Virginia's love life.

[Respubliko de Libereco]

Is there a single scene within your story that could, with a little tweaking and expansion, stand on its own?

There are two different stories. Both can be cut down to less than 6000 words and still have a coherent story. It's just a question of doing it and still having something I am happy with.

You know, I had started to type up a rambling post about this, but I just had an idea. You might be getting a serious story to judge rather than the CSS Virginia's love life.

But now we won't get to make "shipping" puns.

[Nazi Flower Power]

There are two different stories. Both can be cut down to less than 6000 words and still have a coherent story. It's just a question of doing it and still having something I am happy with.

You know, I had started to type up a rambling post about this, but I just had an idea. You might be getting a serious story to judge rather than the CSS Virginia's love life.

But now we won't get to make "shipping" puns.

Well, I have not decided for sure.

[Nazi Flower Power]

I just found out I got the order of events on the first day of the Battle of Hampton Roads entirely wrong in my story, so I need to rewrite that...

Doing research for art or writing is really hard sometimes because you need to find out stupid little details that you wouldn't normally care about.

[Laerod]

I just found out I got the order of events on the first day of the Battle of Hampton Roads entirely wrong in my story, so I need to rewrite that...

Doing research for art or writing is really hard sometimes because you need to find out stupid little details that you wouldn't normally care about.

This is why I prefer fictional history to historical fiction =D

[Armeia]

Here's a preview of what I'm working on... Anyone have critiques? Also I have somewhat of a idea to fix the problems with this story, I might merge the idea I posted about before with this idea, basically replacing Armeia with a monarchist Sweden.

THE NATO WAR: Preview

The lights flickered on in the news studio as the crew walked in and set up for their next show. The newscaster stood in front of the green screen, before speaking. "It appears the worst has happened... War has broken out between Armeia and France, and after decades of tension, and hate between the two countries, stemming from harsh French treaties after World War Two, push has finally came to shove. It appears our ground reporter in Terrum has more info about this war."

Across the Atlantic Ocean, the CNN reporter was on the ground in Armeia's capital, looking for more information. "Yes, it appears that war has already been declared officially. Armeia will also be joined by their allies in the Northern Pact, the revived version of the warsaw pact. As of now, Hungary, Bulgaria, Romania, Poland, the Czech Republic, Slovakia, Albania, Belarus, Estonia, Lithuania, and Latvia have declared war on France, with Russia expected to align itself towards Armeia in the coming months. We've also heard of a massive Armeian mobilization in the Baltics, prepping for war with Germany. The cause of war is unknown right now, but we think it has to do with France attempting to seize Armeia's massive stockpile of nuclear weapons, many being stored in neighboring Luxembourg."
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Jordan Holjmark, Armeian Secretary of State and future President, walked the halls of the Defense Building in Terrum, North Armeia. "Have we got the new nuke defenses set up?" he asked, speaking to one of the higher ranking officials.

The official nodded. "Of course, any missiles they send at us, nuclear or otherwise, aren't coming anywhere near us. If they send bombers, we can shoot those down easily."

"Good," said Jordan. "Tell your superiors we're nuking Paris, Marseille, Lyons, Toulouse, and Berlin. It may cost many lives but fascism will be restored in Germany and the French shall be subjugated once and for all. Am I understood?"

"Yes sir," said the officer, wiping nervous sweat from his forehead. His voice was shaking but he knew better than to not go through with the order. Jordan smiled, just slightly, as the officer left to order the nuclear strikes.

"Revenge is a dish best served cold," he muttered to himself. "Nuclear cold."

[Conserative Morality]

I just found out I got the order of events on the first day of the Battle of Hampton Roads entirely wrong in my story, so I need to rewrite that...

Doing research for art or writing is really hard sometimes because you need to find out stupid little details that you wouldn't normally care about.

Ugh, I know. I've learned more about the hard sciences than I ever cared to know.

This is why I prefer fictional history to historical fiction =D

That didn't save me. DX