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by Nazi Flower Power » Thu Jan 16, 2014 2:09 am
by Forsher » Thu Jan 16, 2014 2:51 am
Nazi Flower Power wrote:Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Seven entries so far, eh?
At least I'm now a lot less likely to come in last than I was four entries ago. Hooray for statistics!
The lack of confidence in this thread is really something. I hope you people are just being too hard on yourselves and I won't have to read a bunch of schlock.
1 more day before entries are closed. If anyone else wants to enter, you better get crackin'!
by Nazi Flower Power » Thu Jan 16, 2014 3:09 am
Forsher wrote:I think it was because we allowed the thread to fall behind the first page. It's been around for a while. Don't worry, I'm sure there will be an autumn edition (except, maybe not, things have been erratic as NFP said). Wait, this is the winter version... make that spring (damn backwards Northern hemisphere).
The Terran Navy had accepted as a sort of friendly gesture, it would of taken a few weeks, but the Terran Navy had the ships, it would of taken time.
"How do you know they actually went there?" Sarah Wells, apprentice extraordinaire. Short or tall, depended on the company, but really 1.65 so kind of average and ready to take on the world. Or, at least, those parts that were relevant to Evil Wizarding.
by Forsher » Thu Jan 16, 2014 3:32 am
Nazi Flower Power wrote:
Forsher - Very Definitely Evil
Characters: 17/25
They’re amusingly warped. George is especially good. I don’t have as strong of a feel for the others’ personalities.
Plot: 3/25
Sorry, but it’s really hard to tell what is going on, and there’s not much of a story arc.
Setting: 7/15
I don’t really have a good feel for where George is based, but the stuff about other worlds works.
Creativity: 14/15
Very definitely unique.
Style: 7/15
I love the feeling you put into it and the sense of humor, but you jump around too much from one thing to another and it comes out very disjointed. You need to slow down and explain things a little more.
Grammar and Spelling: 3/5
There are some problems. This was especially ungrammatical and confusing:"How do you know they actually went there?" Sarah Wells, apprentice extraordinaire. Short or tall, depended on the company, but really 1.65 so kind of average and ready to take on the world. Or, at least, those parts that were relevant to Evil Wizarding.
Overall Score: 51/100
by Unitaristic Regions » Thu Jan 16, 2014 8:48 am
by Jenrak » Thu Jan 16, 2014 3:51 pm
by Ammar » Thu Jan 16, 2014 3:52 pm
Jenrak wrote:The Republic of Llamas wrote:Also, 6000 word limit? Just confirming that that's what you meant and not a typo, as when I think short story, I think closer to 4000.
CM's old limit was 7500. I bumped it down to 6000. People rarely hit anywhere close to that number.StellarGate wrote:I'll actually try this time.
Also, if I want to write a story about an OC which is in a certain universe (the Carsverse to be exact, I regret nothing) is it fine as long as it doesn't involve any of the regular characters like McQueen and Dusty?
Sure.
by Respubliko de Libereco » Thu Jan 16, 2014 8:01 pm
Nazi Flower Power wrote:IfKaraSteve ishumanmale and Francis isnotalso male, then why are they dating? I know sex is not always about reproduction, but wouldn’t pheromones be different from oneracesex to the next? Wouldn’t physiological difference be a problem?
by The New World Oceania » Thu Jan 16, 2014 8:16 pm
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Nazi Flower Power wrote:IfKaraSteve ishumanmale and Francis isnotalso male, then why are they dating? I know sex is not always about reproduction, but wouldn’t pheromones be different from oneracesex to the next? Wouldn’t physiological difference be a problem?
(changes mine, obviously)
Just noticed that your statement can sort of be used as an argument against homosexual relationships. Perhaps you should rethink it.
EDIT: In retrospect, perhaps criticizing you before you've marked my story isn't a great idea, but what's done is done.
by Nazi Flower Power » Thu Jan 16, 2014 10:04 pm
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Nazi Flower Power wrote:IfKaraSteve ishumanmale and Francis isnotalso male, then why are they dating? I know sex is not always about reproduction, but wouldn’t pheromones be different from oneracesex to the next? Wouldn’t physiological difference be a problem?
(changes mine, obviously)
Just noticed that your statement can sort of be used as an argument against homosexual relationships. Perhaps you should rethink it.
EDIT: In retrospect, perhaps criticizing you before you've marked my story isn't a great idea, but what's done is done.
by Respubliko de Libereco » Thu Jan 16, 2014 10:38 pm
Nazi Flower Power wrote:Respubliko de Libereco wrote:(changes mine, obviously)
Just noticed that your statement can sort of be used as an argument against homosexual relationships. Perhaps you should rethink it.
No, I thought about it and homosexuality is not comparable at all. There is a reason I included the part that says, "I know sex is not always about reproduction."
If you think it's an argument against bestiality, then OK.
EDIT: In retrospect, perhaps criticizing you before you've marked my story isn't a great idea, but what's done is done.
Nah, I'm not going to go on some kind of weird vendetta.
by Nazi Flower Power » Thu Jan 16, 2014 11:30 pm
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Nazi Flower Power wrote:
No, I thought about it and homosexuality is not comparable at all. There is a reason I included the part that says, "I know sex is not always about reproduction."
If you think it's an argument against bestiality, then OK.
What I meant is that, presumably, there are differences between male and female pheromones as well (though obviously not as big as the difference between species), and saying "they don't have compatible pheromones, and therefore can't be in love" makes about as much sense in either case*.
Love is about more than just pheromones or sex, and I think it's perfectly reasonable for two physically different but mentally similar beings to fall in love (especially in fiction, where anything is possible). Of course, as a poet and a bit of a romantic, I am a tad biased.
*Unless, of course, the different human sexes don't actually have different pheromones, in which case your statement can't really be used as an argument against homosexuality, but my opinion of its veracity still stands.
by Respubliko de Libereco » Thu Jan 16, 2014 11:49 pm
Nazi Flower Power wrote:Respubliko de Libereco wrote:What I meant is that, presumably, there are differences between male and female pheromones as well (though obviously not as big as the difference between species), and saying "they don't have compatible pheromones, and therefore can't be in love" makes about as much sense in either case*.
Love is about more than just pheromones or sex, and I think it's perfectly reasonable for two physically different but mentally similar beings to fall in love (especially in fiction, where anything is possible). Of course, as a poet and a bit of a romantic, I am a tad biased.
*Unless, of course, the different human sexes don't actually have different pheromones, in which case your statement can't really be used as an argument against homosexuality, but my opinion of its veracity still stands.
If we're talking about dating, that implies a sexual relationship. Especially with such emotionally flat characters.
I might not have complained (or even thought about it) if the bond between the characters had been more convincing, if the interspecies aspect of the relationship was dealt with in some manner, or if the story had been more clearly intended as fantasy. It really is stupid and unrealistic the amount of sci-fi that has people boffing aliens. This story seemed like it wanted us to just ignore biology and see them as a normal couple, not a bizarre case of love beating the odds.
by Nazi Flower Power » Fri Jan 17, 2014 12:43 am
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Honestly, I think a more topic of discussion might be "do aliens even have sex for pleasure?", but we're getting really off topic as-is, so I'm just going to stop talking now.
by Respubliko de Libereco » Fri Jan 17, 2014 8:35 am
by Jenrak » Fri Jan 17, 2014 3:37 pm
by The New World Oceania » Fri Jan 17, 2014 7:22 pm
Jenrak wrote:Creativity: It’s really, really pretentious. 15/15
by Respubliko de Libereco » Fri Jan 17, 2014 11:25 pm
Jenrak wrote:I thought the attempt to craft a semi-colonial, pre-World War 2 war was very interesting. It did its best, I’ll give it that, and I can’t really say whether anything was historically accurate or not – that’s up to people more qualified than I to judge
by Seljuq Kyiv » Fri Jan 17, 2014 11:29 pm
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Jenrak wrote:I thought the attempt to craft a semi-colonial, pre-World War 2 war was very interesting. It did its best, I’ll give it that, and I can’t really say whether anything was historically accurate or not – that’s up to people more qualified than I to judge
Am I completely wrong in thinking that it was just set during WWI? I know there were no trenches mentioned, but not every WWI battle involved trench warfare, and I'm pretty sure that the Maxim gun was still in use by then.*
*From Wikipedia: "The German Army's Maschinengewehr 08 [was] more or less [a] direct cop[y] of the Maxim." Assuming that the dialogue in the story is German "translated" into English, it would make sense for the imaginary translator to have translated "Maschinengewehr 08" as "Maxim".
by Jamessonia » Sat Jan 18, 2014 6:11 am
Respubliko de Libereco wrote:Jenrak wrote:I thought the attempt to craft a semi-colonial, pre-World War 2 war was very interesting. It did its best, I’ll give it that, and I can’t really say whether anything was historically accurate or not – that’s up to people more qualified than I to judge
Am I completely wrong in thinking that it was just set during WWI? I know there were no trenches mentioned, but not every WWI battle involved trench warfare, and I'm pretty sure that the Maxim gun was still in use by then.*
*From Wikipedia: "The German Army's Maschinengewehr 08 [was] more or less [a] direct cop[y] of the Maxim." Assuming that the dialogue in the story is German "translated" into English, it would make sense for the imaginary translator to have translated "Maschinengewehr 08" as "Maxim".
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