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"How dare they do this to @@DEMONYMPLURAL@@" in Option 1 doesn't sound like something a person would say

Also a bit strange how the Option 1 solution of "cheaper, more accessible repairs" has the effect line of "no repairs, oh and also things become less cheap". And I don't see why the status quo would make e-waste...explode, literally or figuratively. You could probably somewhat switch these effect lines, like:

Option 1: "The market for electronic repairs is e-xploding"

Option 2: "recently bought-out electronic repair shops now charge exorbitant prices for 'making' your phone look brand-new"

Minskiev wrote:"How dare they do this to @@DEMONYMPLURAL@@" in Option 1 doesn't sound like something a person would say

Also a bit strange how the Option 1 solution of "cheaper, more accessible repairs" has the effect line of "no repairs, oh and also things become less cheap". And I don't see why the status quo would make e-waste...explode, literally or figuratively. You could probably somewhat switch these effect lines, like:

Option 1: "The market for electronic repairs is e-xploding"

Option 2: "recently bought-out electronic repair shops now charge exorbitant prices for 'making' your phone look brand-new"

Thx, next draft up

I have dug this out of the grave in time for the issues contest. All feedback appreciated!

"Dear @@LEADER@@,
While what happened to your niece is unfortunate, you must understand, @@NAME@@ Electronics and our competitors simply cannot make our electronics more easily repairable. First of all, such a thing would necessarily mean sacrificing user safety, as our phones have sharp and combustible materials inside them. Next, making a device easily repairable would make it less efficient, as there is only so much space in a modern phone, and there must be room for any repairs. Finally, this would destroy innovation and progress in the electronics industry, as no new phones wuld ever be bought. Companies must be able to do any safe thing with their products which they wish."

Sincerely yours,
@@RANDOMNAME_1@@"

I'd write this option as a voicemail if you're not going to have the speaker present. That way, you don't have to split the option up into different lines, which typically doesn't happen.

In jurisdictions without a Right to Repair law, it is not the case that devices cannot be repaired to any degree by anybody. Your entire draft hinges around the contrary assumption that this is, in fact, the case.

The description needs work. It doesn't explain why the 'best repair shop' can't repair the phone. It doesn't set up the fact the issue is about right to repair. For that to happen you need to mention that the phone manufacturer doesn't make parts available.

Option 2 - you should know by now that we don't write issue options in this way. Rewrite it so that it's in one paragraph. It also seems a bit like a 'do nothing' option. No active choice is being done other than continuing to allow companies not allow their users to repair their phones.

Option 3 - a bit meh. We don't need an 'implement communism' option for this issue. I suggest finding something else. Maybe talking about the broader trend of planned obsolescence and forcing companies to make sure that their products last a long time. Like phones used to last so long, and now their battery sucks after just a few years. Something like that.