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Akkoro
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[DRAFT] Triple Bypass

Postby Akkoro » Wed Oct 27, 2021 7:04 pm

The framing is a bit clumsy for my liking, but it gets the job done.

Triple Bypass

Validity: Has internet, private industry, and no universal healthcare.

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After your Health Minister ate one too many Bigly Burgers during a photo op and went into cardiac arrest, her temporary replacement has been hard at work trying to prove himself as a good choice for a future cabinet position. His core proposal so far is to set up a single government health portal for all patients in @@NAME@@, to avoid redundancy and security vulnerabilities in sharing medical information.

Option 1
"It seems my predecessor was more interested in vapid publicity stunts than improving the lives of hardworking @@DEMONYMPLURAL@@," sneers your Acting Health Minister, fresh from a meeting with a private investigator. "Right now, every time someone wants to see a new doctor, they have to set up a new account in a new service and fill out a bunch of sensitive information. It's tedious and unsecure, and a single government health portal would fix all that. And don't worry about the cost- my cousin runs a marketing firm that would pay a fortune for access to all that data. For 'billing purposes' or whatever, we could even ask for people's credit card and other information. It’s a safe bet- just like permanently appointing me to this position.

Effect: visitors to the government’s new website are immediately put on a government watchlist

Option 2
"That's a great idea… if you want to look like a corrupt coward," says your niece's boyfriend, who heads the government's new anti-nepotism taskforce. "People don't want a slick website that scams them out of their personal data. They want free universal healthcare! I know that's what they want because that's what all my friends keep talking about. Nevermind that they're all unemployed. If you give every @@DEMONYM@@ free health coverage for any ailment, I guarantee that your popularity will never be higher. And maybe your niece will finally start talking to me again."

Effect: @@LEADER@@'s healthcare policy decisions are described as a randomized double-blind trial

Option 3
"All this 'internet' rubbish does is destroy your eyes!" yells your ophthalmologist at a nearby potted plant. "And don't get me started over this newfangled obsession with 'universal healthcare'! Back in my day, a patient would walk into the office and fill out their information on paper. All medical records should be kept on paper! It's simple, it's intuitive, and you don't have to call over your grandkids to show you how the dang thing works! If you're really desperate to change something, how about something feel-good like promoting more diversity in medicine? I, for one, don't see color- or shape or size or age or height. Figuratively, of course."

Effect: arthritics are told to describe their condition in clear handwriting

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Postby Akkoro » Wed Oct 27, 2021 7:06 pm

Reserved for drafts.

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Postby Candensia » Thu Oct 28, 2021 6:16 pm

Is there any inspiration or source behind the idea? To me, it just seems a bit muted as a national issue.
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Postby Johill » Thu Oct 28, 2021 6:26 pm

Not bad lmao

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Postby Akkoro » Thu Oct 28, 2021 8:27 pm

Candensia wrote:Is there any inspiration or source behind the idea? To me, it just seems a bit muted as a national issue.

Conversation I had some time back. The muted aspect is why I went with the framing I did; do you think it's workable?

Johill wrote:Not bad lmao

Thanks!
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Postby SherpDaWerp » Fri Oct 29, 2021 10:51 pm

First, I think it's a bit unlikely that a temporary replacement would jump headfirst into sweeping changes, and I find it even less likely that in a democratic government (which we're still supposed to pretend @@name@@ is, despite @@leader@@ making all the decisions), the rest of cabinet & etc. has immediately jumped on this bandwagon.

Second, I think the issue is a bit of a mish-mash of different ideas; "should we do a new healthcare app", "should this guy be the new minister", "how should we store healthcare records"... I would try to pick one central theme, and stick with it. I'd probably go with the new healthcare system side of things, but on it's own, that's not a particularly compelling premise, so it would be tricky to keep it interesting without branching out.

Idk what to recommend, to be honest. The issue feels a little... odd, at present.
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Postby Daarwyrth » Sat Oct 30, 2021 5:57 am

After your Health Minister ate one too many Bigly Burgers during a photo op and went into cardiac arrest

It would seem odd for this to happen for a photo op. An eating contest would make more sense, or if they went to one of those restaurants that market themselves as places where people get heart attacks from eating their food.

her temporary replacement has been hard at work trying to prove himself as a good choice for a future cabinet position. His core proposal so far is to set up a single government health portal for all patients in @@NAME@@, to avoid redundancy and security vulnerabilities in sharing medical information.[/box}
Is there a particular reason why it's a he? If not, I would suggest to change it to a random one. So @@HE@@ or @@HIM@@. That way it can be both male or female. The same goes for the previous minister, unless there is a specific reason why they need to have an assigned gender, I would advice to change it to a random one.

[box]visitors to the government’s new website are immediately put on a government watchlist

I feel the humour in this effect line could be a little sharper.

@@LEADER@@'s healthcare policy decisions are described as a randomized double-blind trial

Is this a particular reference to something? Because the line feels at odds with what the option is presenting.

arthritics are told to describe their condition in clear handwriting

Yes, this is what I mean with sharper humour! This one made me chuckle when reading it.

Overall, you present an interesting issue idea in my opinion, but the draft needs a little polishing still. And as SherpDaWerp said, the options feel a bit like a mish-mash of ideas. Try to refocus the idea from the premise a little, and have it be reflected in the options.
Last edited by Daarwyrth on Sat Oct 30, 2021 5:58 am, edited 2 times in total.
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