[DRAFT] Got goods?

[Amberest]

Description: The black market sales have of up by a mile. Corrupt companies are mistreating there employees.

Option 1: “Let them do there thing, this is good right. I mean I don’t read the news to often, but how bad can this be?” Said some random man overhearing your conversation.

Effect: illegal fireworks are very common

Option 2: “What, first of all I’m not sure if you even know what the black market is” replied your secretary, while turning body to you to look you in the eyes.

“ I say we destroy the black market, send police and the FBI to find them and destroy them.”

Effect: saying FBI open up is very offensive

Option 3: “How about we supervise the black market... so that I... I mean we can get these goods for free.” Said your Ex

Effect: the supreme justice court gets free fireworks in Saturday

[The New California Republic]

Description: The black market sales have of up by a mile. Corrupt companies are mistreating there employees.

Needs more work, it doesn't really "set the scene" in any way, it's merely descriptive. It isn't clear how the latter statement relates to the former. The grammar also needs more work.

Option 1: “Let them do there thing, this is good right. I mean I don’t read the news to often, but how bad can this be?” Said some random man overhearing your conversation.

Doesn't really draw the reader in. It's just a basic "do nothing" option, which should really be avoided as the same thing is achieved by simply dismissing the issue. And why should the leader of the nation listen to a random man who gives no reasons to justify what he is saying?

Effect: illegal fireworks are very common

Fireworks? Where did this come from? This is the first mention of fireworks...

Option 2: “What, first of all I’m not sure if you even know what the black market is” replied your secretary, while turning body to you to look you in the eyes.

“ I say we destroy the black market, send police and the FBI to find them and destroy them.”

Mentioning the FBI is meta. In all likelihood the nation in question will not have an "FBI". And I don't understand why the secretary is accusing the leader of not knowing what a black market is; it seems out-of-place.

Effect: saying FBI open up is very offensive

Offensive? Why? This effect doesn't seem to follow from the option. What is offensive about it?

Option 3: “How about we supervise the black market... so that I... I mean we can get these goods for free.” Said your Ex

If the "black market" is supervised then it ceases to be a black market. And it doesn't follow that the government would get goods for free for aforementioned supervision...

Effect: the supreme justice court gets free fireworks in Saturday

Supreme justice court? Again this effect doesn't follow from the option, as there is no mention of this in the option. And again the fireworks thing is coming up out of nowhere. And I don't understand why you mention Saturday in particular; is something important about that day that hasn't been mentioned in the option?

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Overall it feels that this draft issue just exists solely to increase or decrease a specific stat, with the actual content of the issue being an afterthought, being written just to bring about the increase or decrease. As the Issues Editors have said many times: that's completely the wrong way to write an issue. The effects should emerge from the issue itself, rather than the issue emerging from the desired effects.

[Authoritaria-Imperia]

Description: The black market sales have of up by a mile. Corrupt companies are mistreating there employees.

Option 1: “Let them do there thing, this is good right. I mean I don’t read the news to often, but how bad can this be?” Said some random man overhearing your conversation.

Effect: illegal fireworks are very common

Option 2: “What, first of all I’m not sure if you even know what the black market is” replied your secretary, while turning body to you to look you in the eyes.

“ I say we destroy the black market, send police and the FBI to find them and destroy them.”

Effect: saying FBI open up is very offensive

Option 3: “How about we supervise the black market... so that I... I mean we can get these goods for free.” Said your Ex

Effect: the supreme justice court gets free fireworks in Saturday

Hi, and welcome to the Got Issues? forum!
I suggest you have a read through some of the pinned threads here, particularly this one if you haven't already. Unfortunately, your Issue has no clear premise, and having a clear one of those is crucial. What are you trying to write about — an out-of-control black market, or the prevalance of poor working conditions? Has your topic been written about before? (You can check that by doing a keyword search in the spoiler list or asking in The Writers' Block.)

Once you've got a clear, unique premise, you can start building your options. They need to have a lot more meat on the bones than your current ones do; for length reference points, check out some existing Issues. You'll want a mix of clear ideas, justified perspectives, and purposeful characterisation; single-sentence options are hardly ever going to have enough stuff.

Note the part about "justified perspectives". Generally speaking, for an Issue to be really compelling, your speakers should have some sort of reason for their beliefs. An activist seeking universal healthcare may suffer from a debilitating disease, while a pharmaceutical executive could cite the ways such a healthcare programme could be manipulated at the cost of taxpayer money. A simple suggestion of "this is what you should do" is rarely enough to convince someone — a strong argument would certainly not be structured that way in face-to-face conversation.

Also, using spellcheck will make your writing easier to read in your next draft; there're quite a few gramatical/spelling errors at present.

I hope this wasn't too much input here. Issues-writing is really fun, so I hope you stick with it — just make sure to start with a good premise and build meatier options from it. Good luck!

[Aredita]

The issue is confusing and quite hard to follow.

“Let them do there thing, this is good right. I mean I don’t read the news to often, but how bad can this be?” Said some random man overhearing your conversation.

The options don't have any real depth in them. Add some more detail.

A few spelling mistakes.

Needs marcos. It would make it more personalized and professional.

However, this is a start to an issue.

[Australian rePublic]

Why is this a matter for leader rather than the police?