[Submitted] Yellowed Journalism

[Minskiev]

so hard that cracks are beginning to form.

Possibly change this to:

so hard that cracks begin forming/begin to form/form/are forming.

[Cretox State]

I believe the rule is that you don't need a hyphen after adverbs ending in -ly. I'm not the best person to ask on these things, though.

Yeah, -ly already suggests that the adverb is modifying the verb following it.

[Cretox State]

Bumping this.

[Cretox State]

Moving to early last call. Might submit in a week or two.

[Daarwyrth]

the nation won three wars with Brancaland this weekend

Small nitpick, but perhaps you could consider changing this to "the nation won three wars with Brancaland over this weekend".

reintroducing privately operated media

Again, might be a nitpick, but would the word "privately" be appropriate in a nation with Socialism?

It might be that it was fully your intention to do this but simply didn't include it in the draft, but wouldn't options 4 and 5 need validities for Capitalism and Socialism? Or did you have another approach in mind there? Because option 5 comes across as socialist, but I could imagine a non-socialist dictatorships also try to fight against corporate influences.

[Cretox State]

Again, might be a nitpick, but would the word "privately" be appropriate in a nation with Socialism?

It might be that it was fully your intention to do this but simply didn't include it in the draft, but wouldn't options 4 and 5 need validities for Capitalism and Socialism? Or did you have another approach in mind there? Because option 5 comes across as socialist, but I could imagine a non-socialist dictatorships also try to fight against corporate influences.

I don't think "privately" would be an issue here, since the media would be private if it's no longer state-run (at least, this is my understanding of your concern). I removed any mention of "corporate" in option 5. The intention was to have the advisor be making a generic reference to the evils of capitalism and sensationalism, not making commentary on your nation's actual policies, but I think that phrase was starting to become more trouble than it's worth.

[Daarwyrth]

Again, might be a nitpick, but would the word "privately" be appropriate in a nation with Socialism?

It might be that it was fully your intention to do this but simply didn't include it in the draft, but wouldn't options 4 and 5 need validities for Capitalism and Socialism? Or did you have another approach in mind there? Because option 5 comes across as socialist, but I could imagine a non-socialist dictatorships also try to fight against corporate influences.

I don't think "privately" would be an issue here, since the media would be private if it's no longer state-run (at least, this is my understanding of your concern). I removed any mention of "corporate" in option 5. The intention was to have the advisor be making a generic reference to the evils of capitalism and sensationalism, not making commentary on your nation's actual policies, but I think that phrase was starting to become more trouble than it's worth.

Then all my concerns have been assuaged and dealt with! really well-written draft!