[SUBMITTED] Fish Out Of Water

[Westinor]

Option 4 needs a religion validity watch.

Good issue, I like the puns and references very much.

Thanks, added that!

[Westinor]

Bringing this back up! Edited option 2 a bit, but the wording still feels a bit off. Feedback and comments are appreciated!

[Daarwyrth]

The plans have met significant opposition

Consider changing this to "The plans have been met with significant opposition".

high trout-fishing industry(?)

Perhaps not a high trout-fishing industry. Maybe you could put it down like "must not have below moderate trout-fishing industry" or even more simply "must not have low trout-fishing industry".

A Tuna' Salmon CEO Mac R. El as he leads you

Small nitpick, but I think you can replace he with @@HE@@. "Mac" could be short for "Macrina" or "Mackenzy", so the name could also fit a woman. Especially since you make speaker 2 a man, I think speaker 1's gender can be randomised.

will enjoy these cheaper and delicious meals

Consider changing this to "will enjoy these cheap and delicious meals".

the aquaculture industry is dead in the water

Consider changing this effect line to "the aquaculture industry sunk like a rock".

you don't want beef with me!

Small nitpick but consider adding "any" between "want" and "beef".

threateningly

Consider changing this to "menacingly".

I really love the addition of options 3 and 4! I really think they fit the entirety of issue draft, and add good flavouring! Especially the validity in the last option is a nice touch

[Westinor]

high trout-fishing industry(?)

Perhaps not a high trout-fishing industry. Maybe you could put it down like "must not have below moderate trout-fishing industry" or even more simply "must not have low trout-fishing industry".

Changed validity to 'large discrepancy between agriculture and trout fishing industries, above average trout fishing industry'.

the aquaculture industry is dead in the water

Consider changing this effect line to "the aquaculture industry sunk like a rock".

The aquaculture industry actually hasn't gone anywhere yet (or at least no farther than it already has gone), so for exact purposes it can't exactly sink. I think "dead in the water" is more succinct.

Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated!

[Daarwyrth]

high trout-fishing industry(?)

Perhaps not a high trout-fishing industry. Maybe you could put it down like "must not have below moderate trout-fishing industry" or even more simply "must not have low trout-fishing industry".

Changed validity to 'large discrepancy between agriculture and trout fishing industries, above average trout fishing industry'.

That should fit with what you're going for in the premise, so yes, those would be solid validities for this issue

[Fauxia]

The description and options are quite fat right now. I didn’t know fish was so filling, but perhaps you could get them liposuction.

[Westinor]

The description and options are quite fat right now. I didn’t know fish was so filling, but perhaps you could get them liposuction.

Cut it down a bit - let me know if it looks better!

[Westinor]

Updated the first option - the wording still feels a bit strange. I'll probably take a look at that later - otherwise, barring any other concerns, I'm looking to move this up to last call soon!

[Westinor]

Made very tiny wording changes, and bumping up this draft. Comments and suggestions would be greatly appreciated!

[Fauxia]

Looks pretty good to me.

[Westinor]

Looks pretty good to me.

Thanks! I'll leave this up for a little bit longer before moving it up to last call. Personally, something feels not quite right here, so I'll be looking into that.

[Westinor]

Going to move this up to Last Call. Any last feedbacks and suggestions would be appreciated - even anything that bumps it back down I'm not sure, but the draft feels somewhat shallow to me. It'd be great if anyone could identify whether that's just me or not

[Westinor]

This has been submitted with a few minor wording changes! Thanks to everybody that helped out