CEO Melon Husk
Yaaasss!!! More Elon Musk caricatures!
With a little bit of creative tweaking, we could implement a suspended monorail system alongside the old public railway, which could streamline transportation routes and reduce environmental impact, while making smaller towns more accessible.
While a well-written, complex sentence, perhaps you could see if there is a way to split it in two. I love these kinds of sentences, but perhaps it will read a bit easier that way.
He promptly faints.
Does he faint because of the length of that long sentence, thus having a lack of oxygen? If so, then discard my earlier comment out the sentence length!
but now we know about the locusts beforehand!
Small nitpick, but this should be "but now we'll know about the locusts beforehand!", I believe
And I really don't think that thing with the milk is going to happen again.
I am not too sure about this sentence. Is it a specific reference or a clarification of why the prototype went boom? If the latter, then I admit it doesn't entirely land with me. Maybe it could be left out? The mentioning of the locusts seems enough!
Option 5: "Great SCOTT!" shouts Doc Maroon, falling through the ceiling. "@@LEADER@@, I've made a groundbreaking discovery that enables us to teleport molecules between two different points in space. If we can move a molecule, then surely we can move a traincar full of people, right?"
I love the inclusion of this option!
Overall, a great issue and I love that it is a joint project! Well done