NationStates

Posted: **Sat Jul 04, 2020 8:46 pm**

[title] A Day for @@NAME@@.

[validity] Large military or greater, Average Civil Rights or greater.

[description] It is @@DENONYM@@ Founding Day, and the voices are surging, fireworks are streaming through the air, and in the halls of the forefathers officials haven't a clue what they are celebrating.

[option] "It has come to my attention that we don't have a reason for celebrating this Founding Day," your estranged relative Kyss-Yoh Ross states. "So," he continues, "why shouldn't today be all about you, our beloved head of reason?"

[effect] The citizens of @@NAME@@ are willing to waltz to death every year for you.

[option] Shoving him aside, General Couper In'Sarge salutes, "Under your decree, Founding Day shall be a day for the @@DENONYMPLURAL@@ who serve and die to defend our great nation-state!"

[effect] Powerful parades prevent passerby passages perennially.

[option] Bleary-eyed, @@RANDOMNAME@@ interjects, "Why shouldn't Founding Day be about us, the people? We at home work hard day in and day out, and deserve a break from the world."

[effect] You stand with the people, waiting warmly for the future.

Posted: **Sat Jul 04, 2020 8:58 pm**

Alright, a few issues.

It’s @@DENONYM@@, not @@NAMEPOSSESSIVE@@.

And, not amd.

It’s effect, not fallout.

The first letter of effects are lowercase, not uppercase.

It should be @@DENONYMPLURAL@@, not @@DENONYM@@.

It’s @@RANDOMNAME@@, not @@randomname@@.

I also don’t know why the military requirement is necessary. Maybe a low pacifist score instead?

Posted: **Sat Jul 04, 2020 9:26 pm**

Minskiev wrote:Alright, a few issues.

It’s @@DENONYM@@, not @@NAMEPOSSESSIVE@@.

And, not amd.

It’s effect, not fallout.

The first letter of effects are lowercase, not uppercase.

It should be @@DENONYMPLURAL@@, not @@DENONYM@@.

It’s @@RANDOMNAME@@, not @@randomname@@.

I also don’t know why the military requirement is necessary. Maybe a low pacifist score instead?

Fixed the grammatical errors as well as the formatting errors. It's a large military on the basis that a nation would not wish to parade around a small military, showing the world it is weak.

Posted: **Sat Jul 04, 2020 9:43 pm**

Are you trying to imply that @@DEMONYMPLURAL@@ are sufficiently incapable of coming up with a good reason by themselves to celebrate @@NAME@@'s independence day that they need the @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@ government to tell them what they're supposed to be commemorating? Different people celebrate different holidays for different reasons; it is not the job of the government to tell people whether (for instance) Christmas is supposed to be about celebrating the birth of Jesus Christ or spending as much as you can on presents while eating as much roast turkey as you can.

Posted: **Sat Jul 04, 2020 9:51 pm**

Be careful of overlap with #831, which asks very similar questions about "how to go about a national celebration".

Posted: **Sat Jul 04, 2020 9:59 pm**

SherpDaWerp wrote:Be careful of overlap with #831, which asks very similar questions about "how to go about a national celebration".

Ah. Didnt know that existed. It basically is my draft but complete and better. On an unrelated note, do i just leave this post to drift, or is there a way to say, stop having it as a draft?

Posted: **Sat Jul 04, 2020 10:02 pm**

Hexus Manius wrote:
SherpDaWerp wrote:Be careful of overlap with #831, which asks very similar questions about "how to go about a national celebration".

Ah. Didnt know that existed. It basically is my draft but complete and better. On an unrelated note, do i just leave this post to drift, or is there a way to say, stop having it as a draft?

If you change [DRAFT] in the title to [ABANDONED] or something similar, that will let people know that you're no longer actively pursuing feedback on that draft. No need to delete it, it will just drift down into the depths of GI.

Posted: **Sat Jul 04, 2020 10:04 pm**

Hexus Manius wrote:
SherpDaWerp wrote:Be careful of overlap with #831, which asks very similar questions about "how to go about a national celebration".

Ah. Didnt know that existed. It basically is my draft but complete and better. On an unrelated note, do i just leave this post to drift, or is there a way to say, stop having it as a draft?

If you wish to let people know you're no longer working on a draft change "[DRAFT]" to "[ABANDONED]" in the title of the OP.

EDIT: Ninja'd by SherpDaWerp.

NationStates

[ABANDONED] A Day for @@NAME@@.

[ABANDONED] A Day for @@NAME@@.