NationStates

[TITLE] Kicking Back

[VALIDITY] Has private prisons, has a judicial system

[DESCRIPTION] A months-long investigation has revealed that an alarming number of judges across @@NAME@@ have been accepting kickbacks from private prisons in exchange for sending inmates their way. In many cases, the perpetrators would normally have been let off with a warning or fine, but it appears they have been sent to prison strictly to line the pockets of the parties in question.


[OPTION 1] "The problem is clear as day – these judges are corrupt and must be punished!" roars the warden of @@NAMEINITIALS@@CI Inc., a private prison near @@CAPITAL@@. "As soon as private prisons like ours were introduced, they came sniffing around demanding payouts, and threatening to bankrupt us if we didn't play ball. We're the real victims here! Get rid of the bad judges, and I promise things will go much more smoothly. Here, I'll even chip in to your slush fund as a sign of good faith!"

[EFFECT 1] orange is the new black for judicial robes


[OPTION 2] "The problem is clear as day – these private prison companies are corrupt and must be shut down!" hollers judge @@RANDOMNAME@@, banging @@HIS@@ gavel authoritatively. "As soon as private prisons were authorized, they came around with envelopes full of money, slipping bribes everywhere they could, trying to corrupt the course of justice! I saw many of my colleagues tempted by that cash, and I suspect some of them gave in… but not me, of course. Now, would you like a glass of this Chateau @@ANIMAL@@ '59?"

[EFFECT 2] private prison executives find themselves guests in their own former facilities


[OPTION 3] [VALIDITY: No Corporal Punishment] "Prison shouldn't even be an option for minor criminals" suggests @@RANDOMNAME@@, the minister responsible for the investigation in the first place. "It takes them out of the work force, and really isn't proportionate to the crime. What happened to the good old days of delivering public shaming and a good beating? Keep these prisons for the big stuff, but if they do something minor, just slap them in the stocks and give them a whipping! Then there's no question the folks behind bars deserve it, and everyone else is back to the work force, paying their taxes like good little citizens."

[EFFECT 3] minor infractions can lead to major infections



[OPTION 4] "Man, like, the whole system is rotten to the core!" comes the staticky voice of @@RANDOMNAME@@ from a payphone in prison, where @@HE@@ is serving a 30 day sentence for aggravated jaywalking and 'giving sass' to the judge. "You've gotta get rid of prisons, get rid of judges, get rid of this whole stinking system and just let people be! Where I come from, jaywalking is how we…" click "Please insert 10 @@CURRENCYPLURAL@@ for another minute."

[EFFECT 4] criminals are asked politely to stop being criminals

Verdant Haven wrote:Months of investigation by the relevant departments has led to a disturbing report being written

Verdant Haven wrote:just slap them in the stocks and give them a whipping

Baggieland wrote:Why not just throw rotten fruit at them while they're in the stocks?

Baggieland wrote:

Verdant Haven wrote:Months of investigation by the relevant departments has led to a disturbing report being written

I would say 'released' rather than 'written'.

What exactly is option 2 proposing? A bit more information please.

Verdant Haven wrote:just slap them in the stocks and give them a whipping

This requires the corporal punishment validity. Why not just throw rotten fruit at them while they're in the stocks?

Australian rePublic wrote:Option 3, Isn't that the entire problem in the first place?

Verdant Haven wrote:The idea was that this one adds the corporal punishment policy to those who don't already have it.

Baggieland wrote:

Verdant Haven wrote:The idea was that this one adds the corporal punishment policy to those who don't already have it.

You should put this in your draft:

[FLAG] enacts corporal punishment

Then we know your intentions!

I guess putting people in stocks is corporal punishment in itself, regardless if they're whipped or have fruit thrown at them. It's a physical punishment.

Verdant Haven wrote:I've always seen it said that we should not include stat and flag changes in our drafts, as the Editors handle them, and it's up to us to make it clear in the writing what occurs. Is that not accurate?

Baggieland wrote:Would you like to take the scissors out and give the description a bit of a trim?

Months of investigation by the relevant departments has led to a disturbing report being released – an alarming number of judges across @@NAME@@ have been accepting kickbacks from private prison operators in exchange for sending inmates their way. In many cases, their crimes were so minor that the prisoners would normally have been let off with a warning or a fine, but it appears they have been sent to prison strictly to line the pockets of the parties in question.

A months-long of investigation by the relevant departments has revealed that led to a disturbing report being released – an alarming number of judges across @@NAME@@ have been accepting kickbacks from private prisons operators in exchange for sending inmates their way. In many cases, their crimes were so minor that the perpetrators would normally have been let off with a warning or a fine, but it appears they have been sent to prison strictly to line the pockets of the parties in question.

A months-long investigation has revealed that an alarming number of judges across @@NAME@@ have been accepting kickbacks from private prisons in exchange for sending inmates their way. In many cases, the perpetrators would normally have been let off with a warning or fine, but it appears they have been sent to prison strictly to line the pockets of the parties in question.

Baggieland wrote:

Verdant Haven wrote:
I've always seen it said that we should not include stat and flag changes in our drafts, as the Editors handle them, and it's up to us to make it clear in the writing what occurs. Is that not accurate?

Definitely true for stats. Flags are ok though. I always make note of flag changes when I draft in GI.

Candlewhisper Archive wrote:
Please take out flag change suggestions - if the options tell the story properly it'll be obvious to us which policies need changing. If they don't, then the changes won't be indicated.

Baggieland wrote:

Verdant Haven wrote:just slap them in the stocks and give them a whipping

This requires the corporal punishment validity. Why not just throw rotten fruit at them while they're in the stocks?

Australian rePublic wrote:And as an effect line, fruit companies can bribe judges to help them sell excess stock

Trotterdam wrote:

Australian rePublic wrote:And as an effect line, fruit companies can bribe judges to help them sell excess stock

We already have that one. Almost.

Verdant Haven wrote:

Baggieland wrote:
Definitely true for stats. Flags are ok though. I always make note of flag changes when I draft in GI.

Candlewhisper Archive wrote:
Please take out flag change suggestions - if the options tell the story properly it'll be obvious to us which policies need changing. If they don't, then the changes won't be indicated.

Aaaah! I hate it when mommy and daddy fight!

Seriously, I'm fine going either way :-P Just need to know what's official!

(Flag changes taken back out)

Candlewhisper Archive wrote:Wait, which of us is mommy?

Baggieland wrote:

Candlewhisper Archive wrote:Wait, which of us is mommy?

You can be mum. I'll leave you to deal with the kids!

Candlewhisper Archive wrote:Eh, I'm modern and open minded, I'll be mum then. Still in charge though, heh heh. *thwacks Baggie round the head with a rolling pin*

Baggieland wrote:Seriously though, VH, good issue, I can't see anything major that needs changing. Probably good to go now. But I'd leave it in GI for a tad longer in case some eagle-eyed person spots something!

Candlewhisper Archive wrote:Yep, looks good to mum too.