You add in at the end here "Moral principles come into question", yet none of the options even touches upon morals, really. Maybe instead you should end it with "...tours, the question of whether safety outweighs the need for excitement arises" or something of the sort.Socio Polor wrote:Description: Extreme haunted houses have become a thrill-seekers joy ride throughout @@name@@. However, when multiple reports come in of people experiencing heart attacks, physical injuries, mental impairment, and even death through these amusement tours, moral principles come into question.
This might be just a personal preference for myself here, but I think the word contends sounds a bit too formal in regards to who is speaking. I dunno, maybe it's just me, but I'd rather just see the word "says" instead. Make tv -> TV.Socio Polor wrote:Option 1: “Woah there bro!" shouts @@randommalename@@, a famous Whotuber known for his wacky daredevil stunts. "No one has the right to tell me what's good. My life, my way of living it. If anything there should be more support and understanding of what we do, that's the problem," he contends while doing his famous one-handed wheelie across your office. "Why don't we run a tv series on extreme haunted houses with me as host? We'll call it, '@@name@@s Got Horror!'"
I'm confused about why the speaker is a horror enthusiast. You'd think someone who likes horror would like this, and I think you did it so you could say "I like thrills as much as the next guy", but you could also say that about anyone. I think it would be beneficial to change his title to something else, maybe like a concerned parent or something.Socio Polor wrote:Option 2: “A TV series? What so our kids can copy what they see and wind up in the ER?” questions @@randomname@@, a horror enthusiast. “I like thrills as much as the next guy but dying over it, getting beaten and forced to consume undrinkable liquids like @@animal@@ urine pushes the boundary. Torture houses are what they are and must be shut down accordingly.”
Umm... Not really convinced about this option, to be honest. Maybe discuss more all the regulations you'd put on these haunted houses. Also not sold on the effect line.Socio Polor wrote:Option 3: “I agree this is insane, but with so many people waiting to get into these places, it wouldn’t be right to shut them down,” reasons @@randomname@@, former owner of the park shutdown across from your office. “As long as these places have ‘safe words’ entrants can use to quit, I see no reason to pull the plug here.”
Effect: extreme haunted house "safewords" are inaudible in all the screams
This just seems like option two but instead of shutting it down you're suggesting we shut it down AND burn it. Not sure it's needed.Socio Polor wrote:Option 4: "None of y'all truly comprehend how dangerous this is," comments @@randomname@@ who was injured from a carousel. "Amusement my behind! There's nothin' amusin' 'bout fallin' off a pony and breakin' your tailbone! Think of the youth and BURN ALL AMUSEMENT PARKS, EXTREME OR NOT, TO THE FUC-to the ground, just... do it."
Effect: angry mobs have to be yay tall to burn the ultimate coaster