[ACCEPTED] Cuy Bono?

[Bears Armed]

Perhaps just a simple trim, then?

A morning meeting with some of your ministers is just starting when your sister @@RANDOMFORENAMEFEMALE@@ bursts into the room, complaining about how, when her family went out to dinner at a fashionable new Titicacan restaurant yesterday evening, her young daughter was brought to tears by finding guinea-pig on the menu.

So that would be replacing

bursts into the room and into an angry complaint about how,

with

bursts into the room, complaining about how,

? Hr'rmm, I still think that my wording is better: It makes it clearer that she begins the complaint after entering the room, instead of being already part-way into it by that point, and I think that the inclusion of "angry" helps to justify the fact of her intrusion... Still, this is a detail that an editor editing this draft after its submission could change easily enough if they felt like doing so: I think that I'll leave it for whichever editor picks this project up at that stage (assuming that one does do so, of course...) to make the change if they prefer the slightly shortened version.

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[Bears Armed]

Resumes countdown: "Three..."

"Two..."

[Dabarastan]

First, people eat the flesh of ‘domestic livestock’, then they eat the flesh of animals traditionally been kept just as pets…

This is a bit pedantic and I assume it would be picked up in editing anyway, but I think this should be replaced with one of the following:

First, people eat the flesh of ‘domestic livestock’, then they eat the flesh of animals who have traditionally been kept just as pets…

First, people eat the flesh of ‘domestic livestock’, then they eat the flesh of animals traditionally kept just as pets...

[Bears Armed]

First, people eat the flesh of ‘domestic livestock’, then they eat the flesh of animals traditionally been kept just as pets…

This is a bit pedantic and I assume it would be picked up in editing anyway, but I think this should be replaced with one of the following:

First, people eat the flesh of ‘domestic livestock’, then they eat the flesh of animals who have traditionally been kept just as pets…

First, people eat the flesh of ‘domestic livestock’, then they eat the flesh of animals traditionally kept just as pets...

I'm thinking about this.

EDIT: dropping the word "been", which probably was left in there until now only by accident anyway, from the bit about "kept just as pets".

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[Bears Armed]

And...
Submitted, with the two small modifications already mentioned, as my Contest Entry.

[Dabarastan]

And...
Submitted, with the two small modifications already mentioned, as my Contest Entry.

Best of luck.

[Bears Armed]

And...
Submitted, with the two small modifications already mentioned, as my Contest Entry.

Best of luck.

Thank you.

[Australian rePublic]

YEA YOU!!!

[The Marsupial Illuminati]

YEA YOU!!!

[Australian rePublic]

YEA YOU!!!

What? He/she said that it was accepted