[SUBMITTED] A King of the People?

[Valrifell]

[name] A King of the People?
[validity] Only valid for non-capitalist nations with monarchs
[description] You are rudely awoken by the sounds of angry citizens in your front lawn. Apparently, they’ve caught on to the fact that several upper Party members live like kings. An emergency meeting is quickly called over breakfast.

[option] "What was the revolution even for?!" questions young activist @@RANDOMNAME@@ leading the protest from your priceless ancient Maxtopian statue garden. "You were supposed to destroy the elite, not join them! The traitorous pig-dogs in government have been tainted by their unquestioned power! You must remain true to the Revolution, abolish this embarrassment, and make everyone equal as was promised!"
[effect] @@LEADER@@'s collection of priceless golden scepters was reforged into hammers and sickles
(removes Monarchy policy)

[option] "You know, I was never fond of the color red." begins your Undersecretary of Securing the Revolution, @@RANDOMNAME(1)@@ shamelessly feasting on all of your imported Skandilunidan pastries so quickly your servants struggle to keep up. "It's high time we trade in 'Premier' and 'Undersecretary' for 'Duke' and 'Lord'. Imagine it now, Baron @@RANDOMFIRSTNAME(1)@@ and you as our glorious Emperor! Besides, that would make it easier for us to get some more of these delectable treats."
[effect] The nation's elite has traded in their red uniforms for purple robes
(removes Socialist policy)

[option] "I just want this whole thing to go away" remarks notably fatigued Minister of the Economy, @@RANDOMNAME@@, sipping on imported East Calypso coffee. "I mean, we've walked such the fine line thus far without major incident, can’t we just boost funding to some social programs, pay more lip service to Maxist-Lenyoist ideals and go back to bed?"
[effect] @@NAME@@’s school budget is directly linked to the expenses of @@LEADER@@'s feasts

[name] A King of the People?
[validity] Only valid for non-capitalist nations with monarchs
[description] You are rudely awoken by the sounds of angry citizens in your front lawn. Apparently, they’ve caught on to the fact that several upper Party members live like kings. An emergency meeting is quickly called over breakfast.

[option] "What was the revolution even for?!" questions young activist @@RANDOMNAME@@ leading the protest from your priceless ancient Maxtopian statue garden. "You were supposed to destroy the elite, not join them! The traitorous pig-dogs in government have been tainted by their unquestioned power and they need to give it all up to the glory of the working man!"
[effect] @@NAME@@’s politicians are truly one with their people
(removes Monarchy policy)

[option] "You know, I was never fond of the color red." begins your Undersecretary of Securing the Revolution, @@RANDOMNAME@@ shamelessly feasting on all of your imported Skandilunidan pastries. "I think it's high time we trade in 'Premier' and 'Undersecretary' for 'Duke' and 'Lord'. I think Emperor suits you better, don’t you think, @@LEADER@@? Besides, that would make it easier for us to get some more of these delectable treats"
[effect] The nation has sacrificed its revolutionary past for breakfast pastries
(removes Socialist policy)

[option] "I just want this whole thing to go away." remarks notably fatigued Minister of the Economy, @@RANDOMNAME@@, sipping on imported East Calypso coffee. "I mean, we've walked such the fine line thus far without major incident, can’t we just boost funding to some social programs, pay more lip service to Maxist-Lenyoist ideals and go back to bed?"
[effect] @@NAME@@’s elite build schools to distract from their opulent lifestyles

Changelog:
- Reworked effect lines, misc. grammar corrections, reworked some clunky phrasing
- Reworked some more phrasing, attempted to add humor.
- I used "think" too much in the second option.
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Critique welcome, but not too harsh. I have a fragile ego.

[The Galactic Liberal Democracy]

In NS, you are either socialist or capitalist. I doubt many people intend to run a ‘socialist’ monarchy in the first place, so the validity is a bit too strict.

[Valrifell]

In NS, you are either socialist or capitalist. I doubt many people intend to run a ‘socialist’ monarchy in the first place, so the validity is a bit too strict.

*coughs*

Candlewhisper seemed to be on board with the concept of a monarchist socialist issue, at least.

[Sanctaria]

Without commenting on this particular issue's quality or anything, we've said in the past that, with the number of issues we now have, we're ok with particularly niche issues like this would be.

[Trotterdam]

I feel that this draft doesn't really explore any interesting consequences from this combination of having A and B. It's just "ditch A, ditch B, or sweep the whole thing under the carpet without doing anything significant".

It's also assuming that the nation identifies as primarily socialist and the existence of something resembling monarchy is incidental ("several upper Party members live like kings"), as opposed to there being an official monarch who somehow attempts to support socialism, or who banned private enterprise for reasons other than worker equality.

[Valrifell]

I feel that this draft doesn't really explore any interesting consequences from this combination of having A and B. It's just "ditch A, ditch B, or sweep the whole thing under the carpet without doing anything significant".

It's also assuming that the nation identifies as primarily socialist and the existence of something resembling monarchy is incidental ("several upper Party members live like kings"), as opposed to there being an official monarch who somehow attempts to support socialism, or who banned private enterprise for reasons other than worker equality.

I don't think there's a whole lot that could reasonably be done with the way I have it presented, that might just be the limits of my imagination and willingness to experiment, though.

I will admit that this was essentially the first scenario that popped in my head and the one I thought was easiest to explore, a North Korean-like monarchist state with the veneer of socialism. The "monarch supporting socialism" and "monarch banning private enterprise for non-equality reasons" are both interesting avenues to explore as well.

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Critique welcome, but not too harsh. I have a fragile ego.

*removes gloves, cracks knuckles, puts on butt-kicking boots*

...aaaaand...

Actually, I really like it. It's simple and to the point, and it covers the bases it needs to.

Effect lines are all a little on the nose, and there's a few errors in capitalisation and the like, but nothing unfixable.

[Valrifell]

Critique welcome, but not too harsh. I have a fragile ego.

*removes gloves, cracks knuckles, puts on butt-kicking boots*

...aaaaand...

Actually, I really like it. It's simple and to the point, and it covers the bases it needs to.

Effect lines are all a little on the nose, and there's a few errors in capitalisation and the like, but nothing unfixable.

Any suggestions in particular with the effect lines? It's always been the part of a draft that I have the hardest time coming up with.

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Sure.

One way to approach it is to think about what else might happen in consequence to a decision. So, to take option 1 as an example, you've got rid of monarchy in favour of a purer socialism. So what else might happen?

Top of my head, I'm thinking that the crown jewels or some other accoutrements of royalty might get repurposed in some way. Royal folk might find they have to get their hands dirty.

Then, we can smoosh around with ideas around stereotypes or recognisable ideas. Part of humour is in setting up an expectation then subverting it. So let's think of stuff like the communist hammer and sickle, of workmen being archetypal workmen and...

Okay, so here's where my headspace landed for option 1. Some thoughts:

[effect] orbs and sceptres are being reforged into hammers and sickles
[effect] a builder yelling "oi, princess!" on site may just be calling to his work colleague

Feel free to use either, but mostly I was just trying to show how thought processes might lead to effect lines.

[Australian rePublic]

Are there any other rich people in @@NAME@@, or is it just the government?

[Valrifell]

Are there any other rich people in @@NAME@@, or is it just the government?

That is up to the player of @@NAME@@ and their income equality stat.

Monarchy implies the status of a "royal family" is enshrined in law, I've taken a few liberties with the phrasing of that policy and the implications of "royalty"

[Valrifell]

Bumping this for more critique

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Looking better, for sure.

[Valrifell]

Kicking this back up (possibly for the last time)

[Valrifell]

Shifting this over to last call if there are no objections.

[Valrifell]

Final alterations were made and the draft was sent out.

[Jutsa]

Good luck