[ACCEPTED; #1167] - Another Brick in the Wall

by **Sacara** » Mon Nov 12, 2018 1:51 pm

Thanks, Jutsa.

Still, I would like a little more feedback, if possible.

by **USS Monitor** » Mon Nov 12, 2018 1:57 pm

Sacara wrote:Not sure how much I love the title -- would love to hear more about it.

I think there's room for improvement, but I don't have any brilliant ideas at the moment.

by **Candensia** » Mon Nov 12, 2018 2:05 pm

So basically, this issue is “what to do now that we have a hole in a concrete wall.” Although the topic is, truthfully, boring on first glance, you have made it a compelling discussion.

Some thoughts I’d like to send your way. You mention masked protestors near/on the destroyed section of the border wall in the premise, yet I don’t believe we hear from them specifically in the options. A group willing to do such a thing would likely be quite motivated and/or radical. If it were me, I’d definitely have one of my options coming from them explicitly.

by **Sacara** » Mon Nov 12, 2018 3:17 pm

Thanks to the two comments above me; I went ahead and changed the speaker in option three to be a demonstrator.

Also, I would love to hear title suggestions. Personally, I can't seem to think of one. Usually, I'm decent at these. :blink:

by **Hediacrana** » Mon Nov 12, 2018 3:56 pm

Sacara wrote:Also, I would love to hear title suggestions. Personally, I can't seem to think of one. Usually, I'm decent at these.

Maybe a reference to another brick in the wall?

by **Sacara** » Tue Jan 15, 2019 9:59 pm

Bringing this one back, with an updated title.

by **Hediacrana** » Tue Jan 15, 2019 10:01 pm

Looks good to me!

by **Sacara** » Wed Jan 16, 2019 10:29 pm

Thanks, Hediacrana.

Probably will leave this one up for a few days to see if there are anymore comments, then I will submit it.

by **Sacara** » Fri Jan 18, 2019 11:33 pm

Putting this on last call.

by **Baggieland** » Sat Jan 19, 2019 3:26 am

I feel that either in the intro or in option 3, you need to mention why the protesters don't want the wall rebuilt. I'm assuming they're pro-unchecked immigration. You don't need a full on explanation, but I feel a quick mention is needed.

by **Sacara** » Sat Jan 19, 2019 12:19 pm

Baggieland wrote:I feel that either in the intro or in option 3, you need to mention why the protesters don't want the wall rebuilt. I'm assuming they're pro-unchecked immigration. You don't need a full on explanation, but I feel a quick mention is needed.

Thanks, Baggieland. I've gone ahead and adjusted option three a tad.

by **Sacara** » Sun Jan 20, 2019 5:44 pm

Submitted.

Thanks to everyone who helped along the (long) process.

by **United States of Natan** » Sun Jan 20, 2019 5:47 pm

I have to bring up the fact that not every nation will have had a border wall to begin with, nor would they want one. Instead, you should write an issue proposing the construction of an initial border wall.

by **Sacara** » Sun Jan 20, 2019 5:49 pm

United States of Natan wrote:I have to bring up the fact that not every nation will have had a border wall to begin with, nor would they want one. Instead, you should write an issue proposing the construction of an initial border wall.

Er, I just submitted this. However, the validity on the draft is that the nation previously answered option one of issue forty-seven, which does construct a border wall.

by **United States of Natan** » Sun Jan 20, 2019 5:52 pm

Sacara wrote:
United States of Natan wrote:I have to bring up the fact that not every nation will have had a border wall to begin with, nor would they want one. Instead, you should write an issue proposing the construction of an initial border wall.
Er, I just submitted this. However, the validity on the draft is that the nation previously answered option one of issue forty-seven, which does construct a border wall.

Ah, ok. That's fine then.

by **Australian rePublic** » Mon Jan 21, 2019 1:24 am

Good Luck!

[ACCEPTED; #1167] - Another Brick in the Wall

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