[SUBMITTED] More Food than We Know What to Do With

[Chan Island]

I could also do "converts × time" since he's kinda part of a cult, although I did kinda want to make him break from the theme.

It doesn't matter how good or bad your food is; there'll surely be nations that throw it away if they don't trust it being shipped for how long.

Admittedly, if your food is literally garbage, 3's effect line is a little odd... but that does open up the imagination as to what exactly could be "worse".

I won't make any adjustments right away; I'd like your thoughts on my thoughts first. If you still disagree with my thoughts, I'll change the things said thoughts address.
I think.

They are all valid arguments, though I still think my points stand.

Can anyone else please weigh in?

[Trotterdam]

It doesn't matter how good or bad your food is; there'll surely be nations that throw it away if they don't trust it being shipped for how long.

The thing is that, as I said, starving third-world nations - the ones that actually need your charity - aren't likely to throw food away unless it's really, really bad.

If the joke is that you're sending the food to the wrong nations, then you should make the effect line build more directly on that.

However, if you can, it would be better to find something funny that would be happening in the actual poor nations.

[Jutsa]

Something like the food being used for food fights?

[Trotterdam]

Something like the food being used for food fights?

Funnily enough, I could see that happening both if your send the food to first-world nations that don't need it, and if you send it to war-torn third-world nations...

[Australian rePublic]

Assuming by "ugly" you mean fruits that can vary in shape from individual to individual within the species and where some just happen to turn out weirdly-shaped, that's covered by my mention of throwing out fruit with minor cosmetic flaws.

Fruits which are always ugly aren't an issue, if people don't like 'em then they won't grow 'em.

No one intentionally grows ugly fruit and veg. It's an unwanted biproduct. There are retailers in Australia, (for example Woolworths' odd bunch) which sells ugly food at a discounted price. I've also seen it myself with my grandfather's lemon tree, where we occassionally get lemons that were so mishapen, you could barely tell that they were lemons. Apparently, they are shaved down, juiced, grated, etc. and added as part of pre-paid meals and snaks. However, as much as 40-60% of food in the west is wasted, because no matter what, you will still end up with fruit that looks like this:

[Jutsa]

Eh, changed option 2's effect line and the thing 6's speaker reads, but I have no idea what else I could do for 3/4.

[Jutsa]

Bump! Got anything else for me? ('specially where effect lines are concerned)

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Title: You Got Piles

One of the last two options should be cut, in my opinion, to bring issue to a better length.

[Jutsa]

Not familiar with the reference you're getting at, but then again it took me forever to figure out what Got X? was.
I do know my title isn't the greatest, but I'd prefer a little bit of a foodier title, if you've got anything.
(unless You Got Piles is something I absolutely must do)

Also, of the two options... mmh, idk. 5* kinda makes sense but 6 is so good for truly psychotic nations that wanna push obesity.
That said, it's also really unrealistic...

Probably, of the two of them, I'd cut six. Still, I wouldn't mind submitting this with the sixth option just in case an editor does want to keep it,
unless you strongly advise against it.

[Jutsa]

Eh, bumping again. Probably will only keep this one up for another week or so unless a major change is proposed.

Anyone else think You Got Piles is a better title than the current one, or have their own to propose?

Or... well, any other suggestions, for that matter?

[Jutsa]

Submitted! I changed "petroleum" to "gasoline" in option 5's effect line.

[Australian rePublic]

Good luck