[SUBMITTED] Tell my Wifi Love Her

[Trotterdam]

I tried to reference the catalytic converter (short name of cat), but I'm not certain that that will be understood either.

I think the double entendre that's most relevant to this topic is Cat 3 through Cat 6 UTP cables (and Cat 7/8 not-so-U TP cables, apparently), commonly used for wired networks, but even that is still a little on the obscure side. Could be amusing to have cats ripping up Cat 5 cables, though.

[Shwe Tu Colony]

I think the double entendre that's most relevant to this topic is Cat 3 through Cat 6 UTP cables (and Cat 7/8 not-so-U TP cables, apparently), commonly used for wired networks, but even that is still a little on the obscure side. Could be amusing to have cats ripping up Cat 5 cables, though.

I could have the guy say:
"How did cables chew each other up? Aren't cats cables? Oh, wait wrong cats,"
Only problem is that it leaves the clear "ban cats" statement further down, so you'd have to read for a lil' while.

[Trotterdam]

Don't have the character get confused. It's confusing enough as it is. If you want to use the pun, just play it straight and use both meanings of the words in contexts where it makes sense to bring them up.

[Shwe Tu Colony]

Don't have the character get confused. It's confusing enough as it is. If you want to use the pun, just play it straight and use both meanings of the words in contexts where it makes sense to bring them up.

K I tried.

[Shwe Tu Colony]

You guys think this is ready for submission?

[Candlewhisper Archive]

I find the writing a little stilted in places, but some of that may be different writing styles. For example, I'd run the opening more like this:

In an attempt to create the ultimate Whotube cat video, an anonymous user created a massive garden of catnip, attracting thousands of cats, before playing the sound of hundreds of dogs barking through nearby loudspeakers. The horde of panicking cats have caused havoc across @@CAPITAL@@ and an hour ago, in a complex chain of events that technical staff are finding hard to explain, managed to ironically knock out the internet across all of @@NAME@@.

Likewise, some of the options don't seem to be proactively doing much. Option 1, for example. What exactly is the government action here?

[Shwe Tu Colony]

I find the writing a little stilted in places, but some of that may be different writing styles. For example, I'd run the opening more like this:

I'll use a bit of that, I think.

Likewise, some of the options don't seem to be proactively doing much. Option 1, for example. What exactly is the government action here?

Fair point. It can be seen as a dismissal option with text. I might remove it, but there's a few pieces of possible comedy I'd like to use somewhere.

[Shwe Tu Colony]

Made some small edits.

[Shwe Tu Colony]

Added another option.

[Annihilators of Chan Island]

Added another option.

Mate, you should have submitted this weeks ago. The draft is good and that last option simply isn't necessary.

[Shwe Tu Colony]

Mate, you should have submitted this weeks ago. The draft is good and that last option simply isn't necessary.

AIght then, I'll go submit this & delet the last option.

[Frieden-und Freudenland]

Mate, you should have submitted this weeks ago. The draft is good and that last option simply isn't necessary.

AIght then, I'll go submit this & delet the last option.

Good luck!

[Chan Island]

Mate, you should have submitted this weeks ago. The draft is good and that last option simply isn't necessary.

AIght then, I'll go submit this & delet the last option.

Good luck!