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Shwe Tu Colony wrote:

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:

Description: In an attempt to curb his city's rising debt, Mayor Bernie Craigen attempted to politically annex the neighboring unincorporated territory of "The Stripe," an area known for its economic prosperity .... However, the residents there are attempting to resist this annexation by applying for township,

Aight then. How would option 2 work, then?

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:It wouldn't, but for the same reason it doesn't really work as is.

"Economic prosperity" is too vague, and makes the current draft read like a national-level economic dispute transposed to the local/city level. You'll need to rework the premise to specify a dispute that makes sense at the local/city level. What specifically is it that being absorbed into Neighbor Town would do to ruin things?

Shwe Tu Colony wrote:

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:It wouldn't, but for the same reason it doesn't really work as is.

"Economic prosperity" is too vague, and makes the current draft read like a national-level economic dispute transposed to the local/city level. You'll need to rework the premise to specify a dispute that makes sense at the local/city level. What specifically is it that being absorbed into Neighbor Town would do to ruin things?

As the mayor says: "Yeah, it'll be a few taxes and a new politically-opposite government." If The Stripe was absorbed, they supposedly won't be able to do as well because of the mayor's decisions, which might revolve around paying off the debt to an extent. That could injure the businesses' profits, which is why they don't want to be absorbed.

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:Casinos on The Stripe being afraid they'll get taxed a bit, or something, doesn't really capture an interesting dispute since presumably a defensively-created township will need to raise taxes for funding too.

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:I'd recommend inverting the Good Guy/Bad Guy division. Make The Stripe a wealthy enclave of hedonistic anti-govenrment casino types freeloading on some public service of the nearby/surrounding City (fire protection, down-on-their-luck bum relocation, etc.). City argues for annexation so that The Stripe can be made to pay their fair share. The Stripe resists because FREEDOM! (to mooch!), etc.

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:Repost for "need to stop editing posts after posting:"

Shwe Tu Colony wrote:That does seem like an actual issue, yes, more than the Paradise-based one (plus I'd like to make the reference to Paradise, Nevada's history a bit less apparent, just to). I'll try to get that into use... soon. However, it does seem strangely normal or standard: "this private industry" is doing something vaguely unfair or undesirable, "someone" doesn't like it, which is what a few other issues have done, albeit with different topics (like profiteering drug companies in #107: Private Lab Holds @@NAME@@'s Sick To Ransom & antibiotics being given to chickens in #563: Resistance is Fertile)

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:
If we look at the full published issue space, I'd say we can fairly conclude that Evil Industry and Evil Government are both established and tired tropes.

What's new here is that the dynamic involves a local government vs. a (effectively) no government in a nation where devolution is an established policy. The player at some point will have made the assertion, through an option selection, that devolution is good. Your issue now presents the "yeah, but what about...?" This is a valid extension of this little corner of the issue space. It will be especially good if you make all your options cost something (that is, be "bad" in some reasonable way) rather than just have an obvious (and boring) good guy vs. evil guy.

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:As far as the title goes, do enough players know the ultra-minimal amount of Spanish needed to get the double meaning of Sin City?

Shwe Tu Colony wrote:

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:As far as the title goes, do enough players know the ultra-minimal amount of Spanish needed to get the double meaning of Sin City?

I don't know enough Spanish to know what that means, unfortunately, but I think it might work.

Shwe Tu Colony wrote:Description: For the last few decades, the famous unincorporated territory and tourist destination of "The Stripe" has used an adjacent city's services rather than make its own. After a major fight between one of the many gangs and the city's police officers, the mayor has decided to try to annex them.

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:Make the mooching more explicit -- specify which of the city's services are being stolen. City's recycling centers are overflowing with used casino chips, or City's homeless shelters are filled with bankrupt gambling addicts, or...something.

Also, "City" needs a proper name.

Chan Island wrote:I think after all of this time those brackets must stay in the actual submission. They have become time-honoured.

Shwe Tu Colony wrote:

Ab Humanitatis Scientiam wrote:Make the mooching more explicit -- specify which of the city's services are being stolen. City's recycling centers are overflowing with used casino chips, or City's homeless shelters are filled with bankrupt gambling addicts, or...something.

Also, "City" needs a proper name.

Specified emergency services & gave the city the name of Les Prés, which is based off of Las Vegas (both mean about the same thing, albeit in different languages).

Chan Island wrote:I think after all of this time those brackets must stay in the actual submission. They have become time-honoured.

Which brackets?

Shwe Tu Colony wrote:Bump.

Chan Island wrote:
Submit it already! It's fine!